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Azraa

@Azraa01

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#81

Awesome update. . Sameer is already on his missiom to win Naina back.

Thank you for the pm

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suhaaniladki

@suhaaniladki

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#82

It was beautiful dear i like ur writing style simple yet impactful

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braveheartdoc

@braveheartdoc

Alumni

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#83

Read all the parts in one go😃

A brilliant work from you dear...i loved the 7th-9th parts the most😃

i always wanted to see a strong Naina which i presented in my fiction and here too...i saw the same😃👏

The vows in temple were so beautifully written... Finally the bet revelation...quite similar to that shown in the show and surprisingly...she told him about Arjun's truth😃👏

Swati as always is a true friend to her... and same are Mundit👏

The idea of the gift for Preeti was brilliant😃👏

I loved this ...please send me pm when you update the next part😊

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MSK04

@MSK04

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#84

Hey Radhika - wonderful update once again..! 😳

I loved how Naina took the decision to confess her truth... When Sameer told her everything about the bet, she realized what was at the crux of it... Courageous girl... I like this Naina... 😊

Also, liked the background you set about Naina knowing how those incidents before she actually met Sameer was also related to him... I so wish to see them discussing those incidents on the show...

It was really sad that she thought she couldn't accept his love anymore... that it is not true or pure as she believed it to be... but I totally loved the way Sameer stopped her... he knew how important that chain was to her, and that she wouldn't be able to throw it... that is like his mark on her... she is forever his and will remain so... completely loved his idea to test waters...

And one suggestion - while updating the next part, can you try to keep a space of a line in between dialogues and continuing stanzas... You don't use inverted commas in dialogues, so if you start the explanation / the subsequent stanza in the same line then it gets merged to be a part of dialogue...

Hope I was able to explain properly.

Eager to read the next part...! Please update soon!

Love,

Mou

Edited by moumita04 - 7 years ago

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Radkam

@Radkam

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: braveheartdoc
Read all the parts in one go😃
A brilliant work from you dear...i loved the 7th-9th parts the most😃
i always wanted to see a strong Naina which i presented in my fiction and here too...i saw the same😃👏
The vows in temple were so beautifully written... Finally the bet revelation...quite similar to that shown in the show and surprisingly...she told him about Arjun's truth😃👏
Swati as always is a true friend to her... and same are Mundit👏

The idea of the gift for Preeti was brilliant😃👏

I loved this ...please send me pm when you update the next part😊

Thanks! I vl surely PM u.. plz add me to the buddy list!

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Radkam

@Radkam

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: moumita04
Hey Radhika - wonderful update once again..!😳

I loved how Naina took the decision to confess her truth... When Sameer told her everything about the bet, she realized what was at the crux of it... Courageous girl... I like this Naina...😊
Also, liked the background you set about Naina knowing how those incidents before she actually met Sameer was also related to him... I so wish to see them discussing those incidents on the show...

It was really sad that she thought she couldn't accept his love anymore... that it is not true or pure as she believed it to be... but I totally loved the way Sameer stopped her... he knew how important that chain was to her, and that she wouldn't be able to throw it... that is like his mark on her... she is forever his and will remain so... completely loved his idea to test waters...

And one suggestion - while updating the next part, can you try to keep a space of a line in between dialogues and continuing stanzas... You don't use inverted commas in dialogues, so if you start the explanation / the subsequent stanza in the same line then it gets merged to be a part of dialogue...
Hope I was able to explain properly.

Eager to read the next part...! Please update soon!

Love,
Mou

Thanks Mou... these were encouraging comments that I am on the right track...
I will try to follow your feedback too! It definitely vl help me polish my amateur writing skills.

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Sona../PJ

@Sona07

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#87

It was an amazing update dear 👍🏼.. Loved it

The cliff part was very emotional.. Naina's confession was written very well 👏

Felt very bad for Sameer and Naina.. now let's see how will he get her back?

Eagerly waiting for the next part.. update soon

Next time please do PM me.. I don't want to miss the next part

I am sending buddy request to you.. accept it

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Anjali33

@Anjali33

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#88

That was too heartbreaking but was needed too

Awesome update

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#89

Lovely update!

Preeti being aware of her love life fully at this point of time was a nice move. She needs a support system in the home and we all know, her entertaining self will surely help Naina come out of this betrayal.

Nanu's scene was really pleasing to read. I miss him so much. More than being a grandfather, he was Sam's saathi.😳

What's cooking in Sam's mind? I am so eager to know what is his 'badla'😉

Do update soon Radhika! It's getting more and more exciting.

Love,

Shreya

Edited by Mayashika - 7 years ago

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MSK04

@MSK04

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#90

Oh goody... this is getting exciting now..

You took a lot of time to update, but loved reading it... 😳

The subtle gesture of sharing was well done using the open window... I want to read more of these gestures... 😊

So Preeti now knows everything... and she would blast Sam I hope... but then just like the perfect saali she would understand that Sameer is really in love with Naina... looking forward to it...!! 😛

Naina couldn't stop thinking about him as expected.. .and she jumped on the correct point... why didn't Sameer react... and now slowly she will realize that he forgave because she was more important to him than everything else... 😳

I had been wondering about how she would hide the gold chain... glad that you took care of it and didn't leave it unattended... I want to see her wear it again the day she forgives Sameer... 😃

You cleaned up your writing style... great to see that.. 👍🏼

It is painful to read of the separation... but your ending lifted my spirits... does this mean Sameer will have some naughty ideas to help her out of depression and make her smile...?

I am eager to know and read more... I don't ask usually but I will this time - when will you update next? 😳

And I am early to comment this time... hahaa... 😆

Edited by moumita04 - 7 years ago