#3 - Char Kadam: IshRa FF (Note on 24, Epiogue on 26) - Page 9

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Posted: 10 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: .Harshita.

Manny...next I want u to write a Dark story...(not missing out romance and love stuff)...😳

#GreedyMe#BiggestFan#LoveUrWork#WannaReadMore&More...



DARK????

Will i be able to do it?

PS: Define DARK...I mean wat kind of DARK story
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Posted: 10 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: maanvir




DARK????

Will i be able to do it?

PS: Define DARK...I mean wat kind of DARK story


U'll definitely be able to do it...
Dark means something realted with back story...rude arrogance, passion romance, everything quite extreme...
Don't believe in love n all, trust issues yet binded to each other...etc etc...
Jab start karoge aur ideas de dungi!! 😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
#83
Mano di...even I have a story for u...remember...jaldi Bataungi aapko usske baare me...can't say if it will b dark or anything but wid lots of drama...
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Posted: 10 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: maanvir



Ayyyo!!! Sorry sush! Nanu skip maadi bitte nin cmnt...

Ella cmnts new windownalli open maadidde...

Gadibidiyalli martu hode nin cmnt reply maadoke...

Ningaagi spcl kannadadalli reply maadiddeeni...

Hope u vl forgive me

aweee
it's okay nanage bejaar agalilla...
neevu eetara treat kodo Hagi iddare
I suggest always skip my comments haha ..
thank u .. *BIG HUG AND A KISS*
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Posted: 10 years ago
#85
hello Mano di...i m spriha..n i have become a really great fan of your work...😳
Mera CPT exam sunday ko hai...fir bhi maine saare 65 parts 2 days mein padh daale...Main khogyi thi story mein❤️
plz di jldi continue karo...issse khatam mat karna..😭
n plzz mjhe bhi PM bhejna...hope i m welcomed😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: sonuluvsmayur

hello Mano di...i m spriha..n i have become a really great fan of your work...😳

Mera CPT exam sunday ko hai...fir bhi maine saare 65 parts 2 days mein padh daale...Main khogyi thi story mein❤️
plz di jldi continue karo...issse khatam mat karna..😭
n plzz mjhe bhi PM bhejna...hope i m welcomed😳


OMG! 65 parts do din me padh diye tumne????

CPT exam hai yaar CK (char kadam) exam nahi...

Hmmm...is bat pe mujhe ek dimag ke keede ne kaata...

CK exam rakhun to kaisa rahega???

Isse patha chalega ke who is a real CK fan😆

PS: Just kidding

PSS: thnk u fr reading and liking my work...Welcome to the CK gang...PM pakka😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#87
Hi All!
A lot to say but no time to write...

So skipping the note...

PS: Lyrics of two songs added in this update...
Blue is Dekho Na from Fanaa
Pink is Kabhi jo badal barse from Jackpot (reminiscing IshRa Kuch Kuch Hotha Hai moment)


Part 66 (Mr.CK was supposed to retire at 65...ab fine lagegi tum logon ko illegal extension ka...Khoob sare cmnts karne padenge😉 #GreedyMe)


"Baarish"


Did I just feel that!?


"Ishita ghar chalo. Barish ho rahi hai" I heard him say


"Ye barish nahi. Dil ki sifarish pe, meri khwahish poori karne ki, saazish hai" I said in a trance


"Kya?" he asked confused


"Yeh saajish hain boondon ki
Koi khwaahish hain chup chup si"
I sang playing with the tine drops of mercy that showered from the heavens above


I gathered some raindrops in one of my palms and showed him pleadingly "Dekho na Dekho na
Dekho na Dekho na"


He did not pay heed to my plea and began to walk away towards the car, a frown began to form on my face.

Just then strong wind blew from the opposite direction pushing him back, forcing him to halt.
Thank you God I said with a huge smile and started singing
"Hawa kuch haule haule
Zuban se kya kuch bole"


I closed the gap between us and extended my hand saying
"Kyun doori hai ab darmiyaan"

The wind seemed to be satisfied at the accomplishment of its task as it stopped. I tried to convey the same to him saying
"Dekho na Dekho na
Dekho na Dekho na"


"Barish tez honewali hai. Humein chalna chahye" he said without accepting my hand beginning to leave

I went ahead of him and blocked his way by spreading my hands on either side
Dear Wind! Come back please! Your task is still incomplete!


And lo! The wind came back singing tumne bulaya aur humein chale aye...

Ummuah! Love you! I said to the wind


Pehle usko to I love you bol jo kabse intezar me khada hai the wind scolded


Wo ruke to bataun na! Wo to isi zid pe ade hain ke ghar jana hai! Kuch karo na please! I requested


Hmmm...tu ruk...aur dekh mera kamal the wind assured and I waited


The wind blew taking away my dupatta with it. I immediately covered my bosom with my hands and lowered my gaze feeling self-conscious and shy at the same time

Are aise kya khadi hai? Mujhe jo karna tha maine kardiya...Ab aage tumhe sambhalna hai the wind instructed


"Phir na hawayein hongi itni besharam"

I slowly lifted my gaze to see that he was gaping at me. My heart started to beat rapidly and knees felt weak. I stumbled saying
"Phir na dagmag dagmag honge ye kadam"


He came immediately to steady me holding my upper arms and that very moment thick raindrops graced us
"Haa saawan yeh seedha nahi khufia bada
Kuchh toh baraste hue keh raha"


I gripped his shirt for support while he still held my upper hands. This was the closest we had ever been. Our eyes met and I pleaded again
"Samjho na Samjho na
Samjho na Samjho na"


But this adamant Ravan Kumar of mine was still miffed. His attempts to extricated himself from me was stopped (paused?) by another blow of wind that brought back my dupatta from wherever it had been flying freely that now safely landed on our heads

Ye meri akhri koshish thi, ab isse aage mai kuch nahi kar sakta the wind whispered to me going away
After a brief pause he carried on with his job of pushing me away and I tightened the hold on his shirt saying
"Hawa kuch haule haule
Zuban se kya kuch bole
Kyun doori hai ab darmiyaan
Dekho na Dekho na
Dekho na Dekho na"


I looked at him with expectant eyes
"Ab kis baat ki guilt hai? Yahi ke tumne mera mood kharab kiya? As I said tumhe guilt ki wajah se kuch karne ki zaroorat nahi"


My heart begin to break into pieces and I did not realise when my fingers left his shirt. The dupatta that was covering our heads was now hanging off my shoulder and he had almost reached the car.


Mr.Wind had also gone away, while the teardrop like rain continued to pour mixing with the fresh tears that flowed on my cheeks.

I could not help but remember our journey together in which at every step he looked for my happiness. But today when my happiness lies with him he was walking away.
"Pehle kabhi na tune mujhe gham diya
Phir mujhe kyun tanha kar diya"


Our backs were facing each other. I turned around hoping that he turns back too. Seeing him halt in his steps gave me a slight hope and i waited for him to face me.
When he didn't, I felt an urgent need to tell him that what I did for him was not out of guilt but my love for him.
"Guzaare thhe jo lamhe pyaar ke
Hamesha tujhe apna maan ke"


I did not have the strength to take it anymore. I crumpled to the wet floor breaking down choking while saying
"Toh phir tune badli kyun ada
Ye kyun kiya?"


I took my face in my palms and sobbed uncontrollably at the blunder I had created and the totally unexpected behaviour of my husband.
Now I knew what he must have gone through in the period of our courtship when I continuously kept ignoring his feelings for me.
The realisation of his sufferings seemed to hurt me more and cried loudly.


Raman's POV

I was broken to know that everything she did was out of guilt. Now every attempt of hers to stop me seemed like some guilt to me.

I did not want to expect anything anymore and face more disappointments. I have had enough for the day. So I kept ignoring her pleas to stop me.


It was difficult for me to distance herself from me when she was in my arms. But the drizzle was slowly converting into a heavy rain and I was concerned for her health. So I had to push her away and also push aside the hopes that had started to form in my heart seeing her gripping onto myshirt like her life depended on the one who was wearing it, which is me.


So I said the harshest of words I had ever used for her
"Ab kis baat ki guilt hai? Yahi ke tumne mera mood kharab kiya? As I said tumhe guilt ki wajah se kuch karne ki zaroorat nahi"


Her hold loosened and I guessed my assumption was right. It was out of guilt, else why would she leave me so soon.

It was chilling and my wet clothes were not helping either. She must be feeling cold too. Unfortunately I had left my jacket in the car.
So before walking away, I draped the dupatta around her shoulders as the dress she was wearing was almost sleeveless.
And then I hurried towards the car to get my jacket to cover her.


But then I heard her voice.
"Pehle kabhi na tune mujhe gham diya
Phir mujhe kyun tanha kar diya"

Was it shaky because of the chilly weather or the pain that the words carried?

"Guzaare thhe jo lamhe pyaar ke
Hamesha tujhe apna maan ke"

Was she referring to the moments we spent together today? Did she mean that she did it for me because I belong to her?
No Raman! You are expecting again. Didn't you just realise that it was too early to expect her to love you back? How can her feelings change in instant?


The sound of something heavy falling on the water brought me back from my thoughts and then I heard the most painful cry
"Toh phir tune badli kyun ada
Ye kyun kiya?"



The sight that awaited me broke my heart completely. I couldn't see her in this state.


Her cries got louder with every second and I reached her in lightning's speed
"Ishitaaa" I called out holding her in my arms and making her stand up.



"Ishitaa...I am here" I felt the need to say that to assure her that I was not walking away from her life


She slowly lifted her head to see me
"Ishitaa mai kahin nahi ja raha" I said looking into her eyes


She relaxed a little and brought her hands up to my face, holding them as if to make sure that I was actually there. I blinked my eyes sofly reassuring her that I was here with her


A thick shower of love poured on us and she smiled weakly looking into my eyes saying
"Kabhi jo badal barse
Mai dekhun tujhe ankhein bharke
Tu lage mujhe pehli barish ki duaa"


I smiled at her and in instant I went against my own decision of not expecting love from her so soon as I saw a genuine emotion in her eyes.
She hugged me tightly without warning
"Teri pehlu me rehlun
Mai khudko pagal kehlun"


Her fear that I would leave her was clearly evident in the way she hugged me. I wanted to convince her that I was not leaving so I gently pushed her with the help of her forearms and cupped her face in my hands making her look at me.

A fresh pair of tears flowed through her eyes and I wiped them off with my thumb pad. She smiled through her tears saying
"Tu gham de ya khushiyaan sehlun
Saathiyaa"


"Shhh...shhh" I cooed wiping off her tears.

She gave a huge smile and I relaxed at finally being able to convince her.

To lighten her mood I joked around
"Ab ye kis galti ki payback hai?" I asked winking


Quite similar to my expectation, she pushed me away, her nose flared and I closed my eyes in a reflex tilting my head sideways expecting a sharp blow on the very cheek where her right hand had landed 2 days ago.


I waited for her hand to land hard on my cheek. It did land on my cheek not hard but softly and then I felt a soft peck at the very spot where her hand landed a while ago.


I was confused if I was hallucinating or it really did happen.

I was still not out of my reverie when I felt a tug at my shirt and a warm breath on my earlobe


"I Love You Raman"


Did she just say that!?


-----------------------To be continued------------------------


Did I just say that!?

So am I going to write more???

I will/might on one condition.


And the condition is...ab ye bhi batana padega...

66 chapters se mere sath ho ab tak to samajh hi gaye hoge na ke mai kya chahti hun😉









Edited by maanvir - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#88
Res

Edited...

This time I really expected myself to be the first one to comment but as u say expectations lead to disappointments, so here I am...the LAST...(Note to self: Stop expectingg...😡😡😆😆)

Comingg to the Update...Part 66...😳

"
Love like rain, can nourish from above, drenching couples with a soaking joy. But sometimes under the angry heat of life, love dries on the surface and must nourish from below, tending to its roots keeping itself alive."


"Yeh saajish hain boondon ki
Koi khwaahish hain chup chup si"

Yet another beautiful song...U truly added to the beauty of this song...I mean to say the way u described IshRa's emotions nd actions with this song...u just stole my heart Manny ❤️ and I just felll in loveee with this song although I had heard it infinite times before...

And then whatever followed was just adorable...Ishita aur hawaon ki guftgu is something only u can think...How do u get such beautiful ideas yaar...Matlab seriously...Ishita nd winds team up in manofying Raman...😳...really cute yaar...

And look at Raman...abhi kuch der pehle tak toh itna beqrar tha and now bhaav khayinggg...😳😳...iss baar expect na karne ka resolution jyada hi strong ho gaya shayad...🤣🤣

"Pehle kabhi na tune mujhe gham diya
Phir mujhe kyun tanha kar diya"

Kuch kuch hota hai Manny...aap nahi samjhogi...😳😳😳
This song is something Mesmerizing...I just get lost in the lyrics...

and then Ishita and Raman's POV...u described their emotions wonderfully di...👏👏

I waited for her hand to land hard on my cheek. It did land on my cheek not hard but softly and then I felt a soft peck at the very spot where her hand landed a while ago.

Raman ka kuch nahi ho sakta...😆😆

"I Love You Raman"

Did she just say that!?

Yipee...finally...Ishita ne bol diya...
.

"I confess that I love him, I rejoice that I love him, I thank the Maker of Heaven and Earth that gave him to me, and the exultation floods me..."

Love u Manny...🤗
Sorry for being so late...😳
Reply if time permits!!





Edited by .Harshita. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#89
Wonderful,beautifully written ...I really liked the way u expressed ishita's feelings for every move and the songs was really matching...even Raman was right on his way but still felt bad for ishita...but happy at least she said I love u to Raman...when kabhi Jo badal barse song she started to sing no wonder was remembering the dance of serial and was enjoying the flow ...and I did remember how many times i watched the dance 😊 😊 do continue to give updates...thanks for pm
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Posted: 10 years ago
#90
yayayay! Awesumm updateee!!! Fianllyyy MU cleared..atleast partially! She confessed? OMG OMG! I loveeedd ittt!! He expected thapad aur mila pappi! How cute! <3
Cont soon!

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