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shravani_2311

@shravani_2311

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Posted: 10 years ago

#221

piyu its awesome...

i dnt ahv wrds to describe this updtae...

the convo between ishra is suprb...

the way raman dealing in wrkshp with evryone is sweet nd nice...

waiting fr bala to open up...

want to see ishra meeting and convo's more...

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Shravs

@shravsss

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Posted: 10 years ago

#222

Babu...

Superb update...

Lighter side of life... This name says it all...

Ishita and raman... Their budding friendship / relationship seems positive... Sometimes somethings just happens and you don't even understand... How to move ahead... Though raman was moving ahead of him... But certainly he was still the same inside deeply hurt man...

Ishita's past may help him I think so... Raman Ishita scene at hospital was very superbly described... That awkwardness... Was so cute...

Raman and his game kinda had a negative impact on me... I couldn't relate to it... Yes he was right that to overcome fear is one of the most important thing... But the game he chose was something I couldn't think of... That kinda didn't give me a positive feeling... Anyways... I liked Ishita's reaction n hope to hear her say something on these notes...

Hurting others is mistake but hurting urself is a sin... Life is beyond all of these... I hope ishita helps him out of his past soon...

I kinda love bala here... Shravan... Feeling bad about that... Ishita's past is something I'm looking forward to now... Because I think that will be something which will give him... The much needed solace that he isn't the only one in this world enduring such feelings n loneliness...

P. S love you babu... Awesomely written...

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Piyu Ray

@Piyu97

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Posted: 10 years ago

#223

Originally posted by: -Pankhuri-
RES
unres with a short comment for a short update

You call that a short comment 😲😆😛

the first thing i loved about this part was transformation of Mr Bhalla into Raman and Miss Iyyer into Ishita for both of them...it is just a small thing but such small gestures only take the relation ahead

Yes! No doubt, this is how a relationship evolves from nothing to everything.
So I personally enjoy their relationship while penning it down.

she is nowhere was so painful to read...u r just making me weak with this story Piyu...you know i am not able to take in such things

Now the story evolves around misery and figuring out love amidst that, bear me for the same Di. 😳

slippery mysterious 😆😆😆

This is why I love you so much.
You're the only one who could figure out the meaning behind these two words.
That's how the sharp minds work. 😆😆😆

i liked how Ishita opened her past struggle to him and he is such a dhakkan to not connect that she is the same psychiatrist sister about whom photographer aka Mihika mentioned

Lol sahi mein Dhakkan, though I decided to make him Dhakkan 😆

aww she understood how tough it was for him to speak so she told him not to push and hurt himself allover again

Psychologist right!

pain late night 😳😳😳

I,couldn't let go of my typical way of writing romance. So I decided to add these bold and indirect stuffs.

i am really liking their indirect come direct bold conversations Ishita is no less here

I enjoyed writing too xD

baat karte karte close aa jaana was too real...it happens usually that you dont realize your position when you are actually enjoying a conversation

Ji! This toh I totally agree.. Kabhi kabhi itna Doob Jaate hai that we actually don't get to know our physical position nor emotional stability.

and she told him too...though not completely but atleast they gained a certain lever already to reveal their past relationship status

Yeah! Somehow she could relate to him. Because she thinks that Raman is divorced.

and he is already ready to be that shoulder on which she can shed her tears and her pain...so cute

they already have that spark in them

Yeah! Cause they're sailing in the same boat.
So I guess, they're able to connect to each other.
I'm not telling from a writers point of view, rather placing myself in their position.

button 😳

Button wala idea idk kahan se pop out huya. And I'm like, yeah likh sakte hai 😆

ok yahan tak elaborate tha comment now i ll rush jaldi jaldi

Bala's past was too painful for me to absorb...anything related to kids i cannot bear and here his son died i actually rushed that particular part and didnt read properly because i seriously cannot so i am not sure how i have to comment for that whole part

but it has come from you so it has to be nice

Ab yeah toh blind faith ho Gaya ki I write well. Lol. Koyi nahi, I'm happy that you liked the previous part.

Fear is just a state of mind i totally agree but then i dont agree with the activity he did...i dont even have knowledge about all that so wont say much but again as a writer you wrote it brilliantly and her heart aching for him was the attraction here...that awkwardness and that feeling of not having any right on him to stop him was 👏

Eesshh! Why doesn't india forum have the monkey in this smile list . Urgh xD

finally she will read his book

aiyo his feet 😭😭😭

but that voice mail 😳😳😳

you stopped at a wrong point idiot...eager to know what wonders voice mail does

Voice mail is gonna do a lot. Wait kar liyo do chaar din, I'm sure that you'll like the next part :D

Piyu again a brilliant part...i had thought of keeping it short but i ended up writing this long comment

continue soon

Now this is why I say that you're my best critic.

Love you for such a detailed and beautiful comment.

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Piyu Ray

@Piyu97

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Posted: 10 years ago

#224

Originally posted by: shravsss
Babu...
Superb update...
Lighter side of life... This name says it all...

And this is the reason I selected this name.
Something that describes the entire story in just few words.

Ishita and raman... Their budding friendship / relationship seems positive... Sometimes somethings just happens and you don't even understand... How to move ahead... Though raman was moving ahead of him... But certainly he was still the same inside deeply hurt man...

This was something that I wrote out of personal experience. It's likes, outwardly your a complete different person. You're strong enough, but deep,inside you're sulking down.
And this is the reason, why I'm actually bake to write such a complex character like Raman in the story,

Ishita's past may help him I think so... Raman Ishita scene at hospital was very superbly described... That awkwardness... Was so cute...

It will definitely help him. Cause there will come a time when Raman figures out that they both are sailing together, if not the same boat, but in a similar one.

Raman and his game kinda had a negative impact on me... I couldn't relate to it... Yes he was right that to overcome fear is one of the most important thing... But the game he chose was something I couldn't think of... That kinda didn't give me a positive feeling... Anyways... I liked Ishita's reaction n hope to hear her say something on these notes...

The original story was like that. I'm just adding charm to it.
Personally, I don't like it either.

Hurting others is mistake but hurting urself is a sin... Life is beyond all of these... I hope ishita helps him out of his past soon...

Ishita will definitely, cause I'm gonna make her do so xD

I kinda love bala here... Shravan... Feeling bad about that... Ishita's past is something I'm looking forward to now... Because I think that will be something which will give him... The much needed solace that he isn't the only one in this world enduring such feelings n loneliness...

Yes! Exactly, something that I've just mentioned Above. He's not the only one.

P. S love you babu... Awesomely written...

I love you too Didu.

I'm glad that you liked it.

@bold.

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Piyu Ray

@Piyu97

Voyager

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Posted: 10 years ago

#225

HI MY BEAUTIFUL FRIENDS!

This one's for all those who wanted a special and romantic chapter, exclusively on Raman and Ishita.

And I'm sorry about the length. I know it's a short one. But couldn't help it cause I'm out for a week.

Enjoy reading.

PART 5

It was a beautiful bright morning, after the rain had drenched the entire city last night.

They drove all the way from highway to downtown, while Raman kept wondering where exactly Ishita was taking him. Excitement filled in his nerves, and he kept tapping his feet, sitting on the passanger seat of Ishita's car.

Ishita looked at him and smiled from the edge of her lips and said, "looks like it's been three years since you've travelled with a woman on her car. If I'm not wrong."

Raman grinned and said, " umm.. well, kind of"

After few minutes of silence, when Raman could no longer store the suspense inside him, he landed up asking, "so, where are we going?"

Ishita looked at the lines forming in between his finely painted eyebrows and she could actually guess his curiosity.

She smiled and replied, "It's all good. You'll see"

Raman grinned again and let her be.

After a driving for half an hour more or so, they were finally there. It was a beautiful colony in Delhi and looked like it was occupied by private residences. There were beautifully painted independent houses. The weather made it more romantic for them to roam around here and there. Since there was no much of romance in between them, they enjoyed the view of the peaceful and clear view.

Ishita turned her car towards a double stored house, that apparently looked older than the others. The the letter box on the entrance red, 'IYERS' and Raman exactly knew where he was.

He turned to her with a huge confusion on his face. She smiled back.

In return he landed up questioning her, "is that.. is That your house?"

She turned to him and said, " No, that's my mom's house."

Raman looked even more confused.

Raman - Isn't it supposed to be yours as well?

Ishita smiled and said, "not necesarilly. The clinic is quite far from this place. So I live in my own apartment."

Raman swinged his head up and down, with his mouth left open, and said, " I see"

Ishita delicately held the clutch and pushed it down to open the door. Raman nudged her and said, "should't we ring the bell?"

Ishita almost burst out. She somehow gulped in her laugh and whispered, "we ain't stealling anything Raman. Don't worry, that's how I walk in generally."

Raman gave her a peculiar look which was Ishita apparently couldn't follow and hence she decided to let go.

Madhavi Vishwanathan Iyer, typically looking south Indian woman, self made running in her mid fifties. She was in her brown and golden bordered cotton saari, typical from Southern side of India. She was busy on phone, probably something concerned with her boutique, when Ishita walked in.

She called out for her, "Hi Amma"

She didn't bother to pick her head up and instantly replied, "hi Ishu"

Mrs. Iyer was finaly done with her call, when Ishita arranged certain things to make a suitable environment for Raman.

Madhu was still working on something then she suddenly said, "Bunty left the keys on counter"

Ishita replied back, "oh great"

Madhu - How was your day?

Ishita - Fine. I had lots of appointments.

Madhu - Oh! so that was busy huh?

Ishita gulped in a sip of orange juice left on the glass over the table and fumbled, "hmm"

Ishita - Amma, I got you some flowers to decorate.

Madhu - Oh nice

Ishita - Well, I'd like you to meet a friend of mine.

Madhu raised her head up and looked at Ishita, "Oh! I wasn't expecting a company. I haven't even changed."

And then Raman walked in from behind with a beaming smile up on his face. He walked to Mrs. Iyer and extended his hand, "Hi. this is Raman"

Madhu's eyes widened while Raman shaked his hands with her. She was nervous and her hands were shivering.

She took his name, "Raman Bhalla?"

Raman smiled at her.

Madhu looked at Ishita and said, "Ishu, you didn't tell me that you were dating a celebrity?"

Ishita grinned and said, "well we're not dating"

Madhu didn't bother to listen to what Ishita was saying and she rushed, "I wish you would have told me. I look like hell"

Raman - Not at all. It's just the opposite. I see where Ishita gets her looks

Excited Madhu replied back, "Let me show you her pictures."

Ishita - You know! I don't think so...

Cutting in between Raman squeezed his sentence, "I'd love to"

Ishita punched him on his arms and stared. Raman looked back and said, " No I'm serious"

Ishita gave up on her mothers fantacy and said, " I'll go get the keys"

Madhu and Raman walked to the photos hung on the wall. Raman touched one of them and said, "My words, you have pocahontus here"

Madhu smiled and replied back, "Ishita was state athlete champion two years in a row"

Ishita came back, "No! oh God Amma."

Madhu - Don't be modest. This is Raman Bhalla here"

Raman went to another one and asked, " now how old is she here?"

Before Madhu could reply, Ishita rushed, " Okay I got those keys, so let's leave."

Raman held Ishita's wrist and said, " look how cute you look here."

Ishita stared at him for couple of seconds and then called out his name. Madhu enjoyed watching them.

Ishita, freeing her hands from his grip and said, "we should leave."

Madhu - Okay bye. It was nice meeting you

Raman replied back, " it was nice meeting you too."

While leaving, Madhu nudged Ishita and said, "I'm glad you're not dating that doctor anymore."

Ishita pressed her jaws and managed a smile out.

In the car, Raman stared at Ishita while she drove around the colony.

Ishita noticed him doing so and asked out, "what?"

Raman - she's really sweet.

Ishita - She loves you.

Raman - where are we going now?

Ishita - It's fun not knowing, isn't it?

Raman groaned, "ah"

Ishita wore a naughty smile on her face and said, "you'll see"

Raman - What are you trying to avoid? the CBI?

Ishita - Shut up! Just enjoy the ride.

Ishita drove around the city on a construction truck.

Finally after half an hour, she parked the truck near a highly constructed wall.

She walked up the truck and pulled open the door of the lifting bucket. She gestured her hand and said, "your chariot awaits."

Raman looked at it for a while and said, "seriously? me? in bucket?"

Ishita smiled and shouted, "yes. trust me"

Raman teased her while he climbed up, "did you have any cold medicines today?"

Ishita hit him again and said, "not today"

Raman walked on the bucket and shut the small door. It being small they stood tight against each other, fighting for place.

Ishita - okay now watch this.

She started functioning the mechism and slowly the bucket started rising up.

Raman crossed his fingers yelled out, "alright! here lies Raman Bhalla, dead"

Ishita - Oh stop it. I had a crash course this morning with Bunty.

Raman - Who's Bunty? And why is my life in his hand?

Ishita - My neighbour.

Finally when they were at the highest point, till where the truck could lift the bucket up. Ishita explained her action to Raman, "I wanted to pick up from last night. And I wanted to get you tickets for Arijit Singh's concert. But they have been sold out for weeks. So I figured, where there is a will, there is a way."

And there they were, at the highest point. The clear view of the concert visible. She got him binoculars as well.

While Ishita enjoyed the intro music, Ramans stared at her.

Ishita caught him again asked out, "do you like staring at people this way or it's just me?"

Raman smiled from the edge of his lips and put his hand around her shoulder. Ishita rested her head on her chest and said, "this is strange"

Raman looked down and said, "I know it is. But it somehow feels good"

Ishita could hear his heart beat getting faster with every passing second. He rubbed his hand along her spine giving her a shiver all through her body.

After few seconds, Ishita spoke up, "your heart is beating really fast."

Raman - yeah I know. I'm sorry about that.

He was about to free her form his hold, but ishita held his hand on her shoulder and said, "let that be. It feels good too"

He gently dropped a kiss on her forehead and she closed her eyes, feeling his soft and pulpy lips touching her skin. She slide her fingers into his and clutched them. Raman reacted accordingly.

The music in the background continued..

"Dil, Sambhal jaa zara, phir mohabbat karne chala hai tu..

Dil, yehi ruk jaa zara, phir mohabbat karne chala hai tu..."

Edited by Piyu97 - 10 years ago

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Pankhuri

@DivanIsh

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#226

*RES*

huhhh finally unres...dont blame me for the delay...you keep me busy on watsapp what do i do

where do i start from...i loved every bit of it and i don't say it for the sake of saying but i mean it and you know it

looks like it's been three years since you've travelled with a woman on her car. If I'm not wrong

lolll 😆...i love the way she answers him back...saamne wala goes completely speechless

but i have my sympathies with Raman...i too hate it when i am being driven somewhere without telling the exact place and being told to just wait...that is the worst feeling i tell you...so his eagerness and impatience was genuine and i feel for him

the description of the colony was nice

Since there was no much of romance in between them, they enjoyed the view of the peaceful and clear view. 🤣🤣🤣

you mean to say romance destroys peaceful sightseeing...no re...if you have romance then also you can have a clear view 😉😉😉

oh so she brought him to her Mother's house...badi fast hai bandi...i liked Raman's reaction when she chose to not ring the bell...he is too sophisticated

lo Amma is another unique piece pata hi nahi ghar mein koi aaya hai...busy in her own world 😆😆😆

their casual conversation was nice

lolll amma ki complain hai ki she didnt change 😆 as if woh yahan amma ki saree dekhne aaya hai...amma samjho yaar it is time when people will see your daughter and not you

Ishu, you didn't tell me that you were dating a celebrity?"🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

you better start issuing warnings before such parts...i was sipping coffee while reading and i was about to ...yun hi bezzati ho jaati

lo beti ne kaha we are not dating and she is not bothered...apni hi looks ki padi hai...kahan se dhundi antique maa tune 😆

I see where Ishita gets her looks 😳😳😳

chalu ho gayi flirting already...such a common pick up line...used in personal experience as well 🤣🤣🤣

lo amma ab photo dikhayegi...such a typical motherly thing...i dont know mummyon ko kya maza aata hai photos dikhane mein...they end up making their daughters a laughing stock for their spouses

pocahontas 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣...i am still laughing like anything...how that word suddenly strike him...he could have randomly said naughty but no...pocahontas

i will give the credit to you here because ultimate Raman as a character or i should better say all these characters and their dialogs are written by you so it is you who decided to write things this way...i am really impressed here

Don't be modest. This is Raman Bhalla here 😆

lo childhood kisse batana chalu...so mummyish kinda...and moreover he is so interested to know...how old is she here and stuff and she obviously is embarrassed

lolll i liked how she rushed with him warna aaj toh amma puri pol khol daalti

but really liked Amma and Raman ki bonding...bade kam log itni jaldi aise comfortable ho paate hain

I'm glad you're not dating that doctor anymore."

not just you Amma we all are glad...warna Ishra kaise possible hota

It's fun not knowing, isn't it?

no it isn't fun...we should know it before hand...i am with you Raman Bhalla...i and Raman will open an anti-Piyu club

aiyo construction truck...bucket mein baithne bol rahi hai...what is she upto

but that line trust me and he was ready was cute

did you have cold medicines today...😆😆😆...he and his humorous one liners 👏

fighting for place ahem ahem...hottt line

woahhh what an idea i was happily surprised 👏

didnt have a slightest idea ki aisa kuch karegi concert dekhne ke liye...like seriously unique...well done girl 👏👏👏

do you like staring at people this way or it's just me 😆😆😆

it is just you Ishita Iyyer

and the ending 😳

sabse pehle toh u turned a rough tough construction site into no less than a romantic place and then that closeness...first he felt that right and kept his hand on her shoulder...and then she owned that right to stop him from taking off his hand

kiss 😳😳😳

let that be. It feels good too

yes it feels good...too good to read your story and i curse myself for delaying it this much

Piyu i dont know how many times will i change my choice in future bcoz i am sure more and more good parts are coming up but this one was my favorite till now...it it not that it was all lovey dovey and sort but it was just too nicely written

a good progression in their relation...you rocked it 👏

keep up the good work and u better continue soon

Edited by -Pankhuri- - 10 years ago

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Aarohi Talegoankar

@Albeli26

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#227

hi piyu tu soch rahi hogi na ki main kaise friend hoon. tune mujhe yeh story dedicate ki par Maine tujhe koi review nahi bheja. sorry behna but kya karoon was stuck with college and various stuffs and now busy with trending and tweeting to save our show but I promise you I will back soon and complete my remaining 3 parts and then comment. abhi busy hoon but sacchi tujhse bohot baatein karni hai but samjh mein nahi aata kab karoon. meet with u soon dear and sorry again

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Anamika

@Impossible.Girl

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Posted: 10 years ago

#228

~Res~

Unres

umm... this update was good 👏

Voicemail main yeh tha??

Aww...Ishita's mom 😆

She's so funny

"Ishu, you didn't tell me that you were dating a celebrity?" 🤣

IshRa all the way were cute 😃

I'm glad you're not dating that doctor anymore.

Same here even I'm glad 😳

Arijit singh's concert...

Ishita resting on his chest,Kiss on forehead and holding hands... So sweet 😃

You know how much I love this story and why... hoping to get more reasons

but for that ,Update it needed na? 😛

So continue soon

P.S - Love you 🤗

Edited by vidya_prasad - 10 years ago

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janani

@janani_divan

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

#229

Wow fabulous and brilliant update piyu:-)
fantastic is a small word to equalise this update..:-)
i enjoy every moment of ishra..:-)

when ishita is not telling raman where she taking him..i also feel narvous;-);-)

ishita is very well open up to raman:-)

Amma asking about their dating ..its hilarious part:-).Amma is happy to see raman:-)

o ishita is a athletic player great:-)

To suprise raman ,she did a lovely plan ...:-)

lovely suprise...both are comfortable with each other;-);-);-)

concert suprise and their journey in bucket AWWE ..im imaging this scene..;-);-)

thanks for pm:-)

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..TeriDeewani..

@..TeriDeewani..

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#230

Wow...di it was superb..
Thanks for the romance..
Ishita resting her head over Raman's chest n the other actions...wow I jst luv such kind of gestures...
U alwaz keep it simple but its alwaz beautiful...I really liked the scene in which IshRa were njoyin the concert..
Raman n Madhu's intro was really cute..

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