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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#51

Edited.

First post was half the intended part. More paragraphs added.

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dsgirl

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Posted: 10 years ago

#52

Another update kiara...kya time pe aai main aaj...loved the update...it was adorable [8->]

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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: dsgirl

Ohh kiara..I missed u too 😉 was waiting eagerly for ur updates...and i loved what I read..now update soon 😃

Updates.

I confess, I don't remember your name. Long time. Meherbaani. Phir se bata do.

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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: dsgirl
Another update kiara...kya time pe aai main aaj...loved the update...it was adorable

The timing though!!

Anu's spot. 😆

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Posted: 10 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: AraBearxx

Updates.

I confess, I don't remember your name. Long time. Meherbaani. Phir se bata do.

Haha..dhara..tum mujhe kaise bhul sakti ho :(

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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: dsgirl

Haha..dhara..tum mujhe kaise bhul sakti ho :(

I studied 6 3500-4000 pages books in the span of one month. #meherbaani

My Dharu.

Ooh. Dharu. 😆

Waiting for a comment then I can get back to work. 🥱

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Shravs

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Posted: 10 years ago

#57

Yeipppyyy...

Yu updated...

Loved it...

Again a long update...

In Love with this update...

Superb...

Now waiting for next..

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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: shravsss
Yeipppyyy...
Yu updated...
Loved it...
Again a long update...
In Love with this update...

Superb...

Now waiting for next..

Updated.

😆

Thank you. I'm taking your word and reading it. Though I'm pulling an Amir Khan these days.

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Kiara

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Posted: 10 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: daisydee425
Lovely update

Thank you. 😳 Not for the compliment but for taking the time to reply. Really appreciate it. ❤️

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Anu

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Posted: 10 years ago

#60

My game didn't slip... it didn't! These are the perils of living in a different continent... sooo REEES!

---EDIT-----
Wow girl, I wake up to this? You know the best part? Like the best, best part? The length...🤣 And not one word wasted, terrific job!👍🏼

What an update, the snark from Subbu's friends, perfection... I like his friends. I don't like Subbu- but I like his friends... they should be even snarkier... oooh I wonder what they think about his mommy!😆

I resent Subbu. There, I said it. I can kind of see the pitiful man in him , but still can't bring myself to feel anything but resentment. He's lusting after another man's wife and begrudging their happiness...

And his father, introduction I believe. Again, un-named? But that's OK. For him, that's okay. And his views too... so similar to his son's... 'stole his son's place'? Really? Reeeally? 🤪 Whatever. But his observations were nice, a different viewpoint and still the same old look of love between the Bhallas . Love the noticing of the unconscious moments of togetherness and being in sync, the happiness they find in their little ordinary moments, the unassuming nature of the love- so clean and innocent despite all the complications... beautiful.

And the date, he asked her out ... so sweet. Can't wait. Romance. I insist. Has to be there on a date. And you can do it. I'm not asking for sappy, but the subtle kind you write... that works. That really works. Especially for this ISHRA.

Ed Sheeran- every emo girl's geeky voice crush... love . Beautiful song, beautiful lyrics.. beautiful moment. And ofcourse Shravu, my little rock star.. 'self proclaimed best friend'... I saw that, don't think i didn't... 😉

In conclusion- a beautiful update, subtle romance and a overwhelming sense of calm and sweetness in the eye of bitterness and resentment- well done. Well written, the extreme effort and time is very obvious and appreciated. And you are loved for it. Will await the translations , whenever you can is cool.. no matter. Studying is always more important. But I still selfishly want to say I look forward to the next update. Because I do. 😛

PS: Beintehaa... read and commented previously ...Thankyouverymuch!😳...but no response from you...😭

PPS: Ofcourse we are in sync- was wonderfing how my game was so off despite the continental difefrence... and you showed me that I wasn't really. Love. True stalkerdom. *sigh*

Edited by RomComFan - 10 years ago