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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: peace..

@vidya_prasad: dis is d first tym i read ur OS. you write well yaar! 👏👏

i was laughing like crazy on dese lines:

Yeh kya hogaya.Pichli baar maiyya-biwi kaha to daant padi.Ab padosi bola to bhi daant padi. Beta idhar se katle warna ye dono tumara keema banakar tera jeena haram kar denge 😆😆

"Baaki lecture tumhare khatare ko suna dena.I'll leave 😆

Yes,Guilty kumar accha tha 😆
I found d OS really really cute. Well done yaar!


Thanks a lot Pallavi di
This comment means a great deal to me.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: darlingpinks

vidya di
It was amazing!!!
Enjoyed throughout the os
Loved how you used Raman's tiredness
A lighthearted os with all elements of a story in it- comedy, romance, guilt, fight, drama, everything
Loved the divider scene- the license fight and the bechara policeman

Loved these lines:
"Yeh kya hogaya.Pichli baar maiyya-biwi kaha to daant padi.Ab padosi bola to bhi daant padi. Beta idhar se katle warna ye dono tumara keema banakar tera jeena haram kar denge"

"Baaki lecture tumhare khatare ko suna dena.I'll leave"

"Jhooti. Compensation needed"

Awesome yaar.
Keep writing


Thanks dear.Glad you liked it
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: peace..

@DipaRB6.. firstly let me confess I was really excited for this second OS of urs on the thread. Ek to d pic was brilliant, plus u r soo soo creative.👏Infact I am so glad to hv met u on the thread.😊

Kudos again for choosing d pic..i thought a 100 times bfor putting the pic in the list..infact i never thought anybody wud voluteer to take it! And you did such a brilliant job with the pic.. i mean u even encorporated the media bit n him touching her blouse/saree part in an altogether different scenario!👏👏hatsoff! Shashtang Dandwat Pranam to you maate!👏👏

Coming to the story..i loved the whole concept. Her not saying the i love you.. then regretting it later wen she fears loosing her life..n later the i love you and d love making😊
I found d catty part..n her eyes looking like Ruhi really cute.😊😊N the media bit and then encorporating d towel around her n him touching her for confusing d saree as kanjeevaram!😆Super creative..I mean I cud hv never been able to think of such a concept.

Plus the writing was as elegant as always.

Again, thank you for participating here. I am indebted to you for dis. Really.😊



Thanks so much Pallavi!! Your kind words mean a lot! Also thanks for creating this awesomely unique OSathon...it really challenged the amateur writer in me and was tons of fun. Looking forward to continue reading the remaining entries and definitely yours! 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
@Dipa
Very well written. Loved it.
Confession and the way you used the picture was very good
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Posted: 10 years ago
vidya Prasad
cute os
totally loved it...
thanks for the PM
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: lazeema

vidya Prasad

cute os
totally loved it...
thanks for the PM

Thanks a lot
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Posted: 10 years ago
Thanks for PM.
It was So Lovely Part.😳
Ishra Love Moments were so Beautifully explained.😳
The Whole Os was SO lovely explained.😊
Please Write like this On Ishra and Pm to me.😊
PriyaCherry.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: PriyaCherry

Thanks for PM.

It was So Lovely Part.😳
Ishra Love Moments were so Beautifully explained.😳
The Whole Os was SO lovely explained.😊
Please Write like this On Ishra and Pm to me.😊
PriyaCherry.

Thanks dear.
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Posted: 10 years ago
dipa reading ur OS first time...
really superb...
never think the pic can be written like this
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Posted: 10 years ago
TS: Phir le Aaya Dil - Part 2

(I have added some more lyrics of the song and another pic to part 1, do check it out)



As the adorable couple of Mani and Simmi took their wedding pheras in the first South-Indian style wedding, Ishita could not escape the memories of her own wedding with Raman. Moreover her man was sitting right opposite to her in the Mandap, his eyes remained unwavered as he stared at her emotionlessly...




Her eyes were watery, both because of the smoke of the fire in front of her eyes and the smoke of the fire with which she had herself burnt her relationship.
She was controlling the hardest to avoid a break down. Still she could not resist looking back into those eyes..the eyes of her beloved..the eyes which encapsulated her entire world...

Karte hain hum aaj qabool kya keeje
Ho gayi thi jo humse bhool kya keeje
Dil keh raha
usse mayassar
kar bhi aao
Wo jo dabi si aas baaki hai
Wo jo dabi si aanch baaki hai
Wo jo dabi si aanch baaki hai
Wo jo dabi si... aanch baaki hai


***

"Suraj, mera haath chodo"

[Suraj, leave my hand]

"Chup chaap..haath pakad ke chalo darling. Sabko pata to chale ki tum THE Suraj Khanna ki biwi ho"

[Shut up..and keep walking holding my hand darling. Everybody should know that you are the wife of THE Suraj Khanna]

Since Raman was the bride's brother, Ishita was sure he would be there on the main entrance to welcome the guests. She made another attempt to pull her hand away, but Suraj grabbed hold of her hand even more tighly.

Raman was standing at the entrance, and Suraj made all the effort to tease him by flashing his hold of Ishita's hand. But Raman did not react, he chose to ignore him and continued welcoming the rest of the guests.

Raman's ignorance was undeniably hurting Ishita.

Ishita went upto the stage to congratulate the couple. Simmi was dressed in a typical red-color punjabi suit, and Mani in a beige Sherwani. Ofcourse the fact that Simmi was getting married again to a lovely man after her a disasterous first experience with the institution, was deeply gladdening for the entire family.

Toshiji was the mother of the bride and hence was surrounded by guests and well- wishers. Ishita wanted to meet her too, she waited for her to be left alone.

"Mummiji"

Toshiji turned on feeling Ishita's touch on her shoulder.

"Ishita.." Toshiji hugged her, and gave her her blessings.

"Jeendi reh Puttar"

Ishita: "Mummyji ye shagun dena tha aapko"

[Ishita: Mummyji I wanted to give you this shagun]

Toshiji: "Oye apno mein shagun kaisa puttar"

[Toshiji: Arey we dont need to give shagun to each other in the family]

Ishiji: " Koi baat nahin mummiji, pls aap rakh lijiye na"

[Ishita: So what mummyji, pls take it]

She handed over the shagun ka lifafa (envelope containing money) to Toshiji.

Toshiji: "Puttar bahut changa laga aaj tujhe itne dino ke baad dekh kar. Chahe
kuch bhi ho jaaye, tera mera pyaar hamesha bana rahega. Chahe to dasse ya na dasse, mainu pata hai tu kabhi koi galat kaam nahin kar sakti. Koi bahut badi vajah rahi hogi jo tune itna bada kadam uthaya. Chahe Raman jo bhi samjhe, mujhe tujhpe pura bharosa hai..tu hamesha humara bhala hi sochegi Ishita"

[Toshiji: I am so happy to see you today Ishita. No matter what happens, I will always love you. You might not tell us the truth, but I know you will never do anything wrong. There must be a very strong reason for you to do this. No matter what Raman thinks, I trust you, you our well wisher]

She kissed Ishita on the forehead.

Ishita: "Mummyji aapko meri koi bhi help chahiye aaj to pls mujhe batayiye naa..aap aaj aise hi itni busy lag rahi hain subah se"

[Ishita: Mummyji in case you need any help pls let me know..U hv been keeping so busy since morning]

"Help sirf apno se li jaati hai, mehmaano se nahin. Aap mehmaan hain to sirf mehmaan banke rahiye"

[ "We take help only from within the family, not guests. You are a guest here, you better remain one"]

It was Raman's voice. Ishita turned to look at him, his feelingless glare made her break into tears.

But suddenly, Suraj came out of nowhere and grabbed Ishita's hand.

Suraj: "Oye Raman Bhalla! khabardar tune meri biwi se battameezi se baat ki to..chodun ka nahi tujhe!"

[Suraj: "Oye Raman Bhalla! Dont you dare talk like that with my wife..I wont leave you"]

"Chalo yahan se darling" [lets go from here darling] Suraj pulled Ishita and took her away from the spot.

The entire wedding Raman seemed to ignore her presence. And after a point he seemed to have vanished.

Her eyes searched for him, but he was nowhere to be seen.

Kya hogaya hai Raman ko..Kya unhe sach me meri koi parwah nahi hai...
[What has happened to Raman..Does he really not care about me anymore?]
Ok she had left him, but the thought of him forgetting her and his love for her vanishing from his heart was shattering. Was there nothing left in his heart for her? Werent dere any feelings left?

And then she noticed him sitting in the drinks corner drowned in alcohol.

She moved upto him.

"Raman"

"Hmmm" he growled.

He looked to be heavily drunk.

Ishita: "Raman please chodo isse. Ye aapke liye theek nahi hai"

[Ishita: "Raman please leave it. Its not good for you"]

Raman: "Tum hoti kaun ho mujhe lecture dene wali. Tum meri biwi nahi ho"

[Raman: " Who are you to lecture me? You are not my wife!]

She tried to pull the glass away from his hand, but he pushed her hand. In the process the wine spilt on Ishita's white saree.

Rinki came running to Ishita.

Rinki: "Bhai aap pls sambhaliye apne aap ko. Aur Ishita bhabhi aap pls mere saath chaliye, humne ek room book kiya hua hai is hotel mein. Main aapko change karne ke liye ek saree de deti hoon. Aap pls aayiye mere saath."

[Rinki: "Bhai pls take charge of yourself. And Ishita bhabhi pls come with me, we have booked a room in this hotel. Let me give you a saree to change. Pls come with me]

Ishita went ahead with Rinki to the hotel room. Rinki gave her the saree and left her inside the room.

Ishita went to the washroom. She cried loud, really loud. The day had been exhausting and painful, she had to face certain realities she had been running away for the longest time. She felt helpless, she felt agonised.

She washed her face, but her sobs were still not controlling. She stayed in the washroom for sometime until she calmed.

As she came out of the washroom, the sight of a male sitting on the sofa made her almost scream.

It was Raman. She noticed he had latched the room door from inside.

"Raman aap yahan kya kar raho ho"

["Raman what are you doing here"]

He got up.

Raman: "Tum aaj subah se yahaan kya kar rahi ho!"

[Raman: "What are you doing here since morning!"]

Ishita: "Main sirf Simmi ke kehne pe aayi thi Raman"

[Ishita: "I came only for Simmi"]

" Aur wo Ashok ka langoor bhai Suraj! Wo kya kar raha tha!" [" And that monkey-like brother of Ashok-Suraj! What was he doing here!]
he shouted.

Raman was moving close to her..

Ishita: "Raman Suraj mera pati hai!"

[Ishita: "Raman Suraj is my husband!"]

That made Raman grab hold of her jaw.

"Us kutte ka naam bhi mat lena apni zubaan se mere saamne!" he growled

["Dont you dare take the name of that dog from you mouth in front of me! he growled]

He let go of his hold on her, but did not increase the distance between them.

"Aur kya kaha tumne? PATI! Arey tumhara pati main tha..kuch yaad hai"

["And what did you say? Husband! I was your husband..remember anything?"]

His eyes were reddening, his sight was scaring her.

"Kitna pyaar kiya maine tumse..aur tumne kya kiya!" he continued

[" How much did I love you..and what did you do!]

He grabbed hold of her shoulders and pulled her close forcefully.

" Kya..kya sochke tumne usse shaadi ki haan! Bolo!" he shouted.

[" Why did you marry him? What were u thinking? Say!]

Ishita looked away.

"Bolti kyun band hai haan! Kyun uske paas zyaada paise hain! [ Why are you dumbstruck! Does he have more money?]

"Or you were disturbed that i did not make an attempt to satisfy your sexual urges!?"

"Raman!" she shouted

She pushed him apart.

He pulled open his white coat and loosened his white tie.

He grabbed hold of her wrists.

" Let me fulfill your wishes now. You are mine Ishita. Infact I will make you mine. Here. Right now!"

(ok this is my challenge pic )

"Raman chodo mujhe..chodo!"
[Raman leave me..leave ME!]

He pushed her on the bed.

He got on top of her and pinned both her arms on the bed mattress.

Ishita struggled to let go of his grip, but he pushed her back with all the force, tightening his grip on her further..

She was breathing very heavily.
He controlled her non-stop movement with his weight and finally pressed his lips against hers.

He broke apart, and looked into her eyes for sometime.

Both their eyes were wet. It was almost unavoidable for her to control the flush of feelings and hormones. It was him afterall. She wanted him to take charge of her, to absorb her in him.. suck out all her pain..

But she knew she could not do it. She couldnt mess it up, it would be wrong for both of them. Plus he wasnt in the right state now.

She somehow gained control on him and pushed him apart.

There was a big glass window on the right side of the room.

She got up from the bed and tried to run to the corner of the room close to the window.

But then before she could reach dere, Raman grabbed hold of her from the back.

She turned and pushed him away with all the force in her.

Her push had been so hard that Raman flew to the glass window, the glass broke, his shirt staining in blood in an instant..
She ran to try grabbing hold of him somehow..but he fell out of the window..

Ishita screamed uncontrollably as she saw him fall from the 10th floor of the hotel ..down..down..down..

RAMAAANNN!!!!...

***



"RAMAAANNN!!..." "RAMAAANNN!!..."

"Kya..kyaa hua Ishita!"

[What..what happened Ishita!]

Raman ran upto Ishita and sat next to her on the bed.

Ishita sat up..she was sweating profusely..

"Ishita..pls pls paani piyo..Kya hua..koi bura sapna dekha? Mera naam kyun chilla rahi thi aise?"

["Ishita..pls pls drink some water..What happened? Why were you shouting my name like that?"]

"Raman wo..Raman wo"

She wrapped her arms around him and started crying.

He ran his hand over her hair to calm her down.
She narrated the entire nightmare to him.

He couldnt control his laughs in between as she narrated.

Raman: " Wo che-foot-Do (Cockroach) ka langoor bhai meri biwi ko bhaga ke le jaayega! Hahahahaha!"

[Raman: "That che-foot-Do (Cockroach) ka monkey-like brother will run away with my wife! Hahahahaha!"]

"Aur tum" he continued.."Ye Ekta Kapoor ke serial dekhna band karo tum! Unhe dekh dekh kar tumhara dimaag kharaab hua pada hai! Especially wo Yeh Hai Mohabbatein..Arey 11 baje wala repeat bhi dekhti ho tum uska! Us serial mein kuch bhi hota rehta hai.. Kisi ki shaadi kissi se bhi..sab aapas mein hi shaadi karte rehte hain! Dekho tumne sapne mein Simmi ki shaadi Mani se aur khudki Suraj se karwa di...Suraj..bandar kahin ka..hahahhahaha!"

["And you" he continued.."You pls stop watching Ekta Kapoor shows! U r loosing ur mind! Especially that Yeh Hai Mohabbatein..Arey u watch even its 11 o clock repeat ! Anything can happen on that show! Anybody can marry anybody else..they keep marrying amongst themselves! See you got Simmi n Mani also yourself and Suraj married in ur dream..Suraj..that monkey..hahahhahaha!"]

" Ek minute ek minute.. Shaadi kyun ki tumne Suraj se vaise? Kahin wi dumbMI (Mihika) ki tarah tum bhi...kya Ashok ka Sir phoda tha kya maine?"

["One minute one minute.. Y did u marry Suraj btw? like DumbMI (Mihika) u also.. did i hit Ashok on the head?]

He laughed clenching his stomach on this one. "Chalo kahin to us kamine ka sir phodne kaa mauka mila! Saala suar ki aulad" [ " Atleast i got the chance to hit that bas***d on his head. Son of a pig!"]

Ishita: " Hass lo hass lo.. vaise mujhe bhi nahin pata ki kyaa reason tha ki maine Suraj se se shaadi ki"

[Ishita: "U can laugh! But i donno for wat reason I married Suraj..]


Raman: " Kya? Kahin sachme tumne mujhe wo na dene ki wajah se to nahin choda? Vaise isme kya hai, hum abhi karte hain na! Kahin tum sach me bhaag gayi to!"

[Raman: " What? Is it bcos I havent done IT so far with you? So what..we can do it now! What if u run away in real too!]

Ishita: "Raman! Aap bhul gaye meri taang tooti hui hai! Aur aise to main bhaag bhi nahin sakti"

["Ishita: Raman I have a broken leg remember? And anyway I cannot run either bcos of that"]

Raman: "Oho! Koi baat nahin. Atleast kiss to kar hi sakte haina..Sapne mein you wanted to kiss me back dint you"

[Raman: "Ok..Not a problem. Atleast we can kiss..In your dream you wanted to kiss me back dint you"]

Ishita gave him a shy look.

He moved closer, cupped her face, closed his eyes..bent forward to capture her lips with his..

"Paaapaa!" Ruhi barged into the room.

***
~End of TS~

And I hope this Part is clear:

Raman guesses that Ishita married suraj bcos suraj fooled Ishita that Ashok went to coma bcos Raman beat him up (Like Mihika marries Ashok bcos he fooled her that Suraj went to coma bcos Mihir beat him up) And so he is happy that atleast he got a chance to beat up Ashok in the dream.
Edited by peace.. - 10 years ago

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