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Posted: 10 years ago

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OMG such a wonderful post 👏 no words swaram u know i have not experienced this in my life i know my friends on FB and can connect but this SoSy world honestly totally gets some amazing people in here and makes our journey so much fun...every comment is so insightful and so perfect..

Oh totally agree. This is the first time I feel I am amidst a group of people whom I can speak my mind out unabashedly and make sense. We all seem to have this common wavelength , and as you say, each and every one gives an amazing insight, a different perspective, makes it so much more fun to be around here.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Insomnia Relay

She paced her room after she changed into night clothes a tye and dye kaftan, she was bruised and wanted something cool and airy
Appa paused by the half door that was shut, "Dinner nanna irunduda?" (did u enjoy dinner?)
She smiled startled "Yes Pa, she had made your favorite karhi, and jeere waale aloo and baingan bharta" II smiled happily

"Nice nice ummm..." he almost wanted to say "kanna" it seemed like but stopped...
"Good night Pa" she said as he walked away with veshti folded mid way over his knees

He returned "Do u want to sleep by Amma?" he asked

She felt her chest tighten, a strange ache envelop her

"Innikka?" like a fool she asked "tonite?"
"Dino, until" he stopped HE WAS JUST UNABLE TO ACK OR ADMIT OR ALLOW THE FACT THAT SHE WAS GOING TO BE GONE
R&B WAITED FOR HER.

She smiled big and wide, if things were OK or if it was the night she had returned from Atlanta or if it was summer from IIM she would have jumped up got out and hugged him
"Appa Appa appa appa appa I LOVE YOU SO MUCH PA" and shook him and pulled his cheek
He would be startled and he would stumble but would smile

Amma would have a face palm moment passing by

II would go tell periappa even "I am sleeping by Amma tonite, if you need me just call out loud seriya/ok?"
She immediately picked up her phone and walked out

Amma was already in bed

She joined her there

Appa lay in II's bed staring at the ceiling
The first of family, his not so well to do sister and her kids were coming over Tuesday followed by the Tanjore brother and then the other wealthy sister was arriving Thursday
He had heard a ear full from everyone except Janaki, Jaya and Mani had all sorts of questions... and sneering and sniggering all under the cloak of "Youngsters looking for happiness"

He felt his heart strings tug when he saw his daughter but R&B's face appeared in his vision he didnt feel a thing for Ishita
"Rich boy that pretends to have values" "Brainwashing my innocent kind daughter to get his way"
"Punjabi boy's first Iyer conquest"
It made him angry to even imagine his daughter be the wife of such a man... he was not a "good Iyer boy"

He had mischief written all over him... "What CMU? he looks like a movie star and acts like a mute" "Ishita has truly lost her mind"
"Krishna" he invoked the Lord "Why must my daughter be subject to such experience in life? What punishment is this?" "she has not harmed a fly"
"She only loves and cares" "Why did you bring a charming but clever boy such as R&B in into her life?"

"Pretty things must be evil" shastras say that "they are pretty for a reason they have to attract attention, my innocent daughter has been trapped"

Appa demanded answers from Krishna
He turned and started at her bag and purse on the divan her pictures on the digital frame... her suit cases, all three new ones were packed, he brought the keys off the wall nail and opened the Godrej it was almost empty

His tears flowed "What was the hurry to pack so early, Malcha Marg is right here, I mean is she impatient to leave me and Madhu and go away?" Appa demanded childishly
"How can he be so attractive to her?"

"Bala is effervescent and talkative and open and cheerful even Vandu wasnt so carried away, this boy is brooding and quiet and inscrutable and Ishita is so desperate?"

He claims he was not married before, but having affairs
like rich boys who knows what emotional damage has been caused in him... young boy less than 30 has so many affairs?"

Ayyo then Ranjan... Appa wearily went back to bed and lay awake... checked his phone for list of things to do in the weekend, invite people in the D II area, talk to Sastrigal (pandits)
Talk to the florist guy about garlands... Sam had called today about blending Punjabi rituals, the bangles and henna and a pooja at home he had to ask Madhu to return her call

Barely a week and so much to do

Starting March 9th she will come here as a guest and leave as a stranger... he will have all her attention and care. he doesnt deserve my golden girl, he closed his eyes and sleep took over
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II woke startled from the first sleep session... panicked and checked her phone, it was past midnite...got off the bed and paced the floor,
Amma was fast asleep, she went to the bathroom and dialled Ranjan's number " Dad have you eaten?" she asked worried
"Yes betaji" he said shocked unable to understand what was going on

"OH GOOD!" II smiled finally after an hour on the topic "Did I wake u up, I am sorry I was supposed to call but slept unknowingly"

"No no, I ate 20 minutes ago, like I said now I can sleep all I want but am just unable to I sleep for two or three hours mostly...(he sighed audibly)
I ate khichri, dahi, achaar, pudina chutney" "When u come here we should do khichri night" Ranjan laughed

"That would be nice. R&B khaate hain khichri?"
"Nahi WOH NAHI KHAATE" Ranjan teased her sudden respect for the dude
"I dont usually" she became defensive immediately

"Koi baat nahi beta it sounds good Sam addressed Tan like that your Mom would be very proud to hear you talk like that"Ranjan displayed his conservative upbringing
II squirmed embarrassed AYYYO II STICK TO ENGLISH
THE MOMENT HE HANGS UP HE WILL CALL SAM AND SAM WILL TELL THE DUDE AND THE NEXT TIME HE IS GOING TO SHRED YOU...
AYYOO

"What is his favorite food?" II asked
DOES HE HAVE A RASAM AND ALOO CURRY TYPE FAVE?

"Ummm... umm... beta... ummm he mainly eats non veg, teekha murgh, kadhai chicken, Rogan Josh, Dhaabe ka keema, Bhindiwaala Lamb" Ranjan sounded apologetic
"Oh" II said

"He likes bhindi a lot, baingan bharta" Ranjan said as an afterthought

"Oh" tried to cheer up

There was no similarity, no rasam and aloo curry or vethakozhambu (dal-less sambar) no avial, they were as different as night and day
Her stomach churned, she leaned on the wash basin...

"U should go to sleep now, ek hafte mein aapki shaadi hai betaji (u are getting married in a week) he said cheerfully

"OK Good night" II said softly
"Did R&B say something? Why were u crying?" he enquired

"Oh no... he didnt, no he didnt, he doesnt make me cry" she said just the very thought of him making her woozy and light headed

"Agar aapko rulaye u must come to me IMMEDIATELY" he said ferociously

"I will" she nodded child like

"I will take care of punishing him" R&B promised

"Long and hard punsihment Dad" II giggled

"Yes yes betaji" he promised

II hung up and stood leaning on the washbasin staring at the blue red and green buckets,
her bathroom was pink purple and orange, she was possessive about her buckets if Selvi mixed up the order she would hear a earful, if Amma didnt detect and switch before II's return
The bathroom was tiny and functional and smelled like Appa's Cinthol and Amma's Mysore Sandal
Amma's big round bindis lined the mirror like a border, she only were crimson, no other other no other shape
She recorded every detail in memory... like she was being sent on a one way mission to Mars
Amma's towel had red border Appa's had black or navy border both South Indian, she smelled it and her tears flowed

She cried until 1, and returned to bed...
"Pretend I have tattoos he said Pretend I kissed them she had spat back... she blushed smiling

He had tasted like he smelled... manly and arousing, she felt him on her lips when she shut her eyes, she heard his groan vividly as he buckled on her
in unbridled passion, her innocence sending him over the edge, she had looked at him tentatively "Is this what u meant?" like asking a craft teacher
"U have to be kidding me U DONT KNOW ANYTHING DO YOU?" his stunned stare told her
Her tongue tip bruised and sore... from its journey on his torso check and chin,
she was totally OK going up with him tonight to his room and not returning until morning
She wanted to, she wanted him by her side in bed, she ached for his hard firm bruising crush... she had not known SUCH agony before
A helpless sob escaped her lips as she lay there aching to be loved. "I will go back to Malcha Marg for the night I cant stay away from him at night this will kill me
I can check on Amma Appa anD periappa all I want during the day, nights? I am HIS"

"Will we make love every night?" she texted as if she wanted to know the answer to that question right now, she wanted to hear what she felt like right now

"Yes, yes we will" he texted immediately


She quivered audibly and texted "Good"


"Thank you" she texted

He sent back a half smile.

"If I say I want to stay over at Appa's will you take me home anyway?" she asked

"Yep!" he said
She gasped and moaned though it was exactly what she wanted to hear

"I want you right now" she texted as she shook physically

"Likewise" he said
She crushed those words under her knocking the breath out of her phone, shutting her eyes imagining him doing the most erotic things possible, and shut her eyes...


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Amma woke at 2 AM ish unable to sleep... she tossed and turned... sat up in bed finally staring at her sleeping daughter

Peacful and smiling... the night light made her look prettier... her skin glowing... she bent down to smooth her hair around her face,
the loose locks gently shook with each breath
Noticed bruises around her ear and chin, she immediately withdrew her hand

She wondered if R&B went to Bally's... she wanted to talk with Vandu.. this boy was not like Bala "I must ask Vandu to "talk" with Ishita"
"Sisters are best friends they should share, Vandu should reassure her that she can share freely with her"

The relatives were arriving soon, she has to arrange food to be sent to both apartments when it fills up, some people were going to Haridwar and Agra and Mathura etc

She has to talk with Bala to make sure he doesnt spend his own money on everything, Ishita was picking up Janaki Athai's tab fully, tickets, everything
Everyone elese was wealthy Bala shouldnt be paying for them... she had heard sniggers on the phone but not much.
Vandu said Sam wanted a chooda ceremony at the wedding hall the day before the wedding since Iyer wedding was in the morning, on Saturday they wanted to do the Punjabi ceremony of sargi and chunri and chooda
Amma smiled imagining II's hands filled with them, she would see young girls on buses and in markets wearing those she would wonder when her daughter would be married
more after Subbu dumped her heartlessly.

A fusion wedding, she had read so much these days about such weddings, on her side there were three and Appa's side there were two weddings Iyer Iyengar ; Iyer Telugu;
No Iyer Punjabi though

"These days girls are so modern they dont listen to their parents"
"Did she not tell u anything? do u not keep an eye on her? How can a boy she works with come inside ur house and propose like that? Has she gone on trips with him?
"Did they work together? Dont they know how traditional Iyers are?" "wont she sing any more? "Will begin to eat meat?" "Their kids will not grow up Iyer, are u OK with that Madhu?"


Amma got a million questions...

In a week she will be gone... and will only visit when they invite her, he wont even bring her over like Bala does voluntarily.

He is a Punjabi but he must like Ishita A LOT" Amma concluded with pride

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: swaram

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It surprises me how much the Dude can talk when it comes to proving a point to II.😲 And she for one would never take it lying low.😡 They argue with vengeance and they make up with even more vengeance. 😆It is as though their passion in love making is fueled by the duel! 😆

As long as this is the case, who's complaining? What I like about your writing is you never make it just a puppy love story, even though he follows her like a puppy. He maintains his ground and so does she!

The Monet, their sanctum of love!❤️ This will be sorely missed in Paris,😭 unless there is one there too. He wants no competition, even in II's imagination.😳 Sam tho badi badmaash nikli. Evil Sam!😈

Forgotten

By far, the most heart wrenching and touching part till now. It is in such parts you even outshine yourself Nisha. You are the most consistent writer I have seen in terms of the quality of each part, a slice of their life (I don't even want to call it an update anymore), still, there are some moments which you bring out with such depth, honesty and realism, they are testimony to your immense talent as an outstanding writer, one who can delve deep into the psyche of each character, into each context and surrounding , make it their own before orchestrating them to your tune like a masterful conductor. Superb !👏👏👏

We know of II as a very kind hearted person, who would not think twice to thank minion or write a note of gratitude to Mrs.Sagar but what she felt for Ranjan was more than just compassion. She felt care, duty and love as for her own family member. Ranjan has found someone probably only after Savita, who is going to look after him and care for him genuinely without any strings attached. From the time she runs back to check on Rajan till she comes back home thinking still about his khichdi was totally awesome. Loved each and every line and can totally connect to it like Amma and Appa were my parents. Now ,after this part I am sure Ranjan is everybody's pet, not just Anu's. 😆Everyone is going to gush over him and pester you till you vindicate him.😃


THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU
SO VERY TOUCHED😳

I am so glad you loved it so much. Makes it worth my while to write😃
Your analysis sounds like poetry WOWW!!👏👏
I cant come up with any words other than Thank you.. strangely Swara😲
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Posted: 10 years ago
Ek aur senti aur emotional update🤗😭
Loved every word of it...II's mixed feelings purrfectly depicted...she wants him nd hv her parents too .I think most of us desire this..y do v hv to leave the house nd ppl v spent all the lovely years of r life😕go stay with strangers in a diff house just fr that one man v leave the entire family , home,

And my my the irritating relatives hv started arriving already...ppl ready to screw the happiness. .especially during weddings I hate these aunties commenting nd criticising stuff nd trying to show off😡


Thx again nisha for giving us the lovely story. ..love u🤗
Edited by sarsyed - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Insomnia

loved appa letting her sleep with amma and the description and his fears 👏
loved ammas reaction,her concern about having to talk to vandu,how she is having to face the brunt of questions 👏
sabko bolne doh this fusion wedding is going to be like no other ,dekthe rah jayenge log.. and all the iyer mami's are going to be looking for punjabi boys in the wedding 😃

Nice to see her call Ranjan and that conversation was lovely
this bit
That would be nice. R&B khaate hain khichri?"
"Nahi WOH NAHI KHAATE" Ranjan teased her sudden respect for the dude
"I dont usually" she became defensive immediately
so so so cute!!! he ,Sam dont leave a single opportunity to tease her 😳

and like a real true bride prior to wedding she can only think of him so realistic , wants to be with him , only his thoughts put her to a blissful sleep 😳😳👏
OMG 7 days for the wedding 🥳

P.S - me off from 1EST to tomorrow nite ,skiing will be back on sunday afternoon of course will check updates but wont be able to comment as much will try..its going to be a test for me 😆


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Posted: 10 years ago
Anu U did not apply for vacation a month in advance so unfortunately it stands declined, we dont have a back up for you we hope you can cancel and show up for work
Its unacceptable to be gone like this arbitrarily

People depend on YOU, and its very unethical to be gone without notice.

Poruma? Innum konjam venuma?

Podi! I cannot allow this ski trip unless u promise to come online from the ski lift or from a snowy slope.

This causes a major catastrophe on this topic, I am already dealing with Ashu being gone suddenly cant take your absence
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Posted: 10 years ago
Came back home ...went through two lovely updates 😊
Nisha...suddenly a question popped up in my mind as to why Ranjan speaks of his wife in present tense ...as if she's around...why is that??
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Nisha0604

Anu U did not apply for vacation a month in advance so unfortunately it stands declined, we dont have a back up for you we hope you can cancel and show up for work

Its unacceptable to be gone like this arbitrarily

People depend on YOU, and its very unethical to be gone without notice.

Poruma? Innum konjam venuma?

Podi! I cannot allow this ski trip unless u promise to come online from the ski lift or from a snowy slope.

This causes a major catastrophe on this topic, I am already dealing with Ashu being gone suddenly cant take your absence




aaaw meri jaan of course i will login in the night and during the day except long comments nahi de paaoongi...
ghar ki shaadi how can i miss ;-)
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Posted: 10 years ago
A yet another beautiful update. Even as I write this, my heart is going thump thump with the onslaught of emotions that I feel. You have brought out II's predicament with such finesse that it simply tugs at your heartstrings. Have been a literature student and have read quite a bit, but the simplicity with which you are spinning the tale, the way it is simply flowing without having to use unnecessary flowery language is what makes SOSY so special. II's predicament, she almost feeling as if she has betrayed herself and her own by choosing someone like R&B but unable to do anything about it and you bringing out those emotions, exploring the psyche of a middle class principled girl who has been possessed by the devil is carving a niche is everyone's hearts...thanks Nisha After so many years living away from parents in a foreign land, away from the smells and sounds of Delhi, even though I am surrounded by desis...I am actually feeling and living my Delhi dream again. THANKS.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Nish I am very happy that u brought appa in this chapter...I missed him..But I donno why all appa's are like this... They can never see the good things in other caste guys !!!! It will be always Iyer boys only !! Bala can drink...Other iyer boys can eat meat...He will send II to bay area but not paris...I am sure even if R&B was in US, the reaction would be same... Now he being handsome is also an issue...even his daughter is pretty...does that mean she is evil ? People in our father's generation are narrowminded...you could argue ranjan's scandal and R&B's affairs...But I bet that eve if those were not there Appa cannot accept a non-iyer..He will definitely find some other flaws.

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