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HE is a mess! It's no secret anymore. He has no idea how he got here. But somewhere he is aware, painfully. Long brutal hours are one reason he thinks. That's his physical mess, sunken eyes, four day pls stubble which is trimmed by the make up guy, unfocused eyes during some shots and generally sleepless nights.
His mental mess how about that? He has made such an effort to stay away from press and suddenly everyone around him uses the press to give him a headache. Why can't friends leave it alone? He should get away, he types over the phone, let's the world know he wants to get away. All the love and adulation in response does not make it any less messier, his mind is still restless.

When the shot is called, he can't keep his hands still, he turns and fidgets with the car keys, misses his cues and messes his words in the lines a bit. The director calls for pack up and he cannot wait to leave. His head is beginning to ache, he decides to grab a smoke before he leaves. He watches her get into her car with a phone to her ear, fling the phone on the side seat and look up at him. They stare for a second before waving small smiles. She drives off. He throws his cigarette and drives away himself, her frustrated face in his mind, masking his frustrated feelings,

He drives and calls, she picks up on the second ring
Don't you ever want to get away?
Hmm
He can hear her pressing her lips
But not to London
He smiles at her attempt to tease him.
Then where?
He waits for her to say something, her silence stays on for a minute
Hello?
Almost at the same time her soft voice comes into his ear
Bhopal, kabhi lagta hai main Bhopal apne parents ke ghar jake mere maa ki godh mei sarr rakh ke ro lu, just to get away.
He breaks the car. She has hung up before he can say anything. He steps on the sidewalk, walks around.

Some youngsters are on the sidewalk. Chatting loudly.
God this city is such a mess! Chal yaar let's go abroad iss gandagi se chutkara. Vaapas to Yehi aana hai, issi mess mei.

He sighs and gets back into the car. Stares at his phone, wonders..
She turns the car into the BCL practice area, watches all the cameras and press and sighs. Her phone rings, she picks up on the second ring
Tumhare Bhopal mei kya har galli mei kachori miltey hai?



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NOTE::: THIS is purely fiction. FUN fiction. this may be interpreted as an RPF and then again may not. If it has offended anyone please forgive, must be taken in good fun and no offense is meant to any fan base.
Just wanted to scribble something that is Diffy from the track thank you for reading. Press like & write comment if you enjoyed.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mrs. Sir -- I don't think this is what you had in mind, hope you like it, thank you for your request 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I am in awe of your talent, your story telling sounds way to real. Keep up the great work.
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I have been a silent reader of your posts... Dunno how you do it... its very unique and leaves me with a smile at the end of it...😛
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C you did it again😃..These small conversations between him and her are enough to create havoc in my fantasy world😳☺️..You hvae voiced it so perfectly..👏

His messed up state😊..Yes he is a hardworker..He doesn't care about his disheveled appearance⭐️..No matter how tired he is he always manages to give a good shot..😊

His mental stress and mess..Well the press might not be the only reason😉..Or even the over adulation he receives from his fans😊..There are other reasons- just needs to reflect within himself to realize what it might be😃..And you are perfectly rights about the frustrations👍🏼..The origin for the frustrated feeelings- well again.. that's for him to figure out..😉😃

He wants to get away from this monotonous life😊..My interpretation: And that he chooses to do it with her, because she is the only friend who understands what he needs so well..😊

"Bhopal, kabhi lagta hai main Bhopal apne parents ke ghar jake mere maa ki godh mei sarr rakh ke ro lu, just to get away." -My interpretation: She wants to get away from the daily grind and the torment surrounding her about her feelings for him..😊

The last lines in your story are always so simple, yet powerful Colu😃.."Tumhare Bhopal mei kya har galli mei kachori miltey hai? "..Such an adorable and comforting line😳😊..She could regain her lost solace just in his words⭐️..I just love the cute convos you create between them😊..They are short, but have such a deep impact..😳😃

As always you nailed it again👍🏼..This was short but yet so lovely😳.The way you write it is so convincing.😃.Seems like as though you know her and him so well.😊.So beautiful and so subtle☺️..Hats off to that incredible imagination of yours👏..Thanks a ton🤗..
Edited by aishu_divan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Yay..Another one!
Back to back..3 of your works..An evening treat for me!! 😆😳

Someone was frustrated on not being able to talk to her eh.? LOL! The way he called her up instantly to just get rid of it was so cute! ❤️ The concern in that braking the car part on hearing her words was so evident. He just couldn't bear it and ended up calling her again and tried to lift her mood. The way they subtly tease each other is just so THEM, you make them more and more real with every new one of yours C! ⭐️

I really adore this unsaid concern they share for each other in your stories. It just makes their bond look so real even though it's hidden and unsaid 😳 It's one of the most prominent and lovable part of your stories!

Lovely one like always C! ❤️ Thank you so much..Will be waiting for the next one! :D
Edited by -IshRaDivAn- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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please write in the heading that it is a OS.
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Originally posted by: unknownknown11

please write in the heading that it is a OS.

Hey thanks for the suggestion
The thing is I like to topic it this way
The intrigue is part of the charm of the story
As a reader you may treat it however you want
OS,or a continuum - pls see index and enjoy!
Thx again
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I always love off screen ones than the one screen ones more of any couple...
and ur ones makes us feel it so real and happening... love reading about DivAn.. just a scene and a small one from you always makes us smile, blush and grin...

just an amazing writer u are... keep writing them frequently :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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C..another brilliant piece 🤗
I like how they're so tuned to each other in your fics.. In spite of the fact that they lead separate lives, they seem to share this amazing bond which is so much more than friendship, but has not yet bloomed into full fledged love.
He sulks, she comforts; she distresses, he consoles...

Tumhare Bhopal mei kya har galli mei kachori miltey hai?

Its all sweet and dreamy and I love it😳

Sigh.. if only!!


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