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Posted: 10 years ago
My thoughts on Chapter 2

Yaar, what is this Subbu's problem? He's reminding me of Shagun! Both of them chose other life partners, but are still so fixated on the person they left behind, and can't bear seeing their exes being happy with someone else! And WHAT?! He was planning on marrying Ishita after he wed someone else for just a baby! What was he planning on doing with the mother of his child? This Subbu and his mum are really disgusting! Thank God Bala isn't like them!

OMG, what a hilarious scene between the cousins! The way Raman shouted 'Oye Madrasan' while on speaker phone! LOOOL, Ishita was very quick to snatch the phone and turn the speaker off! Hahaha, such a Ravan Kumar he is! And awww, their conversation! Raman called Ishita up to tattle on Ruhi, while Ruhi's acting all innocent! I love how Raman said 'your daughter...'! Even while being Ravan Kumar he is such a sweetheart! Both mother-daughter ganging up on him when he was actually expecting Ruhi to get a scolding - such a cute family moment! And the father-daughter conversation - OMG sooo adorable! Especially the cooties, I actually laughed out loud and aww'd at the same time when Raman said this to Ishita: "Boys have cooties, Ishita. Papa's don't have cooties but boys have cooties. Bhagwan bheje dete waqt kya tum jagga jasoosi kar rahi thi?" How sweet that Raman called Ishita to actually talk to her and not just talk about Ruhi. Such a beautiful relation these two share now! They spent hours talking on the phone and even while being away from her husband and daughter, she managed to keep herself a part of their daily routine such as putting Ruhi to bed, TOGETHER! And Raman admiring pictures of his Jhansi ki Rani, who he missed dearly, but wouldn't admit it, was a perfect touch to the already mega adorable scene!

The morning embarassment for Ishita - LOOOL she's fit herself so well into the Bhalla residence that even when she isn't there she thinks she is! And the things she was saying, hahaha so funny! And Raman's phone call again?! I'm loving their separation simply because Raman keeps finding ways to BE with her when she isn't near him! His call - he can't find Ruhi's project, Ruhi needs convincing for breakfast - why can't he just tell her outright that HE needs to hear her voice first thing in the morning and last thing before bed! Ruhi and Ishita's conversation- I love how Raman told her to go get her hair made and she's like 'Nope, I wanna talk to IshiMa'! And Raman telling her bring her back, and that too 'uthake'! Eeek! *Squealing* Oh these two, Ishita is truly blessed!

Oh this Nalini, I hope she doesn't hurt Ishita! Ishita's two guardians - RuMan - need to come quickly!
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Arooj.M

My thoughts on Chapter 1

Very beautiful recollection of the initial episodes of YHM, loved reading the start of it all! And what's this?! Subbu's back in Ishita's life and that too because her elder cousin brother, Vishwa, is getting married to Subbu's sister-in-law, AFTER beating up Subbu for hurting Ishita. LOL he must have had a hard time convincing his in-laws after he beat up their son-in-law! I love Ishita's chitti. She is very daring and protective of Ishita, very sweet!

How funny it was that Subbu was asked to handover the phone to Ishita while her 'Ravan Kumar' was calling. And she has a picture on the phone too! What a picture - Raman has his arm wrapped around her while his elbow touched her bosom, he's trying to smear cake on her, they're both holding hands AND they're both smiling, his dimples are out! Someone send me this picture too!

Excuse Me! What did this Subbu say? HIS Ishita?! Hold on while I call Raman and let him know there's a vile creature hovering near HIS wife! Bloody Subbu! Let him come near Ishita, I'll release my pet lion on him!



When you wake up to this. Wow. Just wow. You made me fall in love with my own first chapter and not to forget worry about the updates that remain.

I too wish I had that picture at hand. How I wish I had that picture.



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Posted: 10 years ago
You said Monday, it's tuesday. Update :(
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I will be breaking the chapter up into parts. All of them will be updated today. The parts.

Should I do that or pot it all at once? I haven't written it all out but I guess it will be too long to be posted in one post.

Or should I just wait it o it to post?
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Posted: 10 years ago
If it's long, put it up in parts, I guess.
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Posted: 10 years ago
In parts I think..but pls post it today..waiting to read..
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This chapter has been split into parts. They will be updated back to back and today (I'll try my level best to). Please excuse the errors as I haven't read though this in a hurry to get to the next part. Secondly, I read and love every comment. As self centred as this sounds, they really do motivate me to write further. The likes on each comment serve as a marker to me so that I know which comment has been replied to and which hasn't.

CHAPTER 14 B H A A G E R E M A N N

P A R T A

Chapter Edited by Dhara (@dsgirl)

To those moments which reimburse your belief in love and life.

I never knew how much you'd want

To live again with innocence

Like the good old days, our glory years

When you still were here

You would promise me we wouldn't change

Though we were young we'd stay the same

That I'd always be in your life

But we soon move on

And we can make promises

Forget the way we live

- Promises, The Boxer Rebellion

Raman Kumar Bhalla was in awe. He was in awe of his wife. Her innocence. Her naivete. Her beauty. Her kindness. Her warmth. Her love. Her relationships. Her care. Her faith. Her motherhood. The way she carried her out duties. Her charisma. Her. If heavens were to open up and ask him on his guardian angel, who would have undoubtedly called out to her. His wife.

She flicked away a stray lock of hair as she giggled along with her cousins. And then she pouted. So, that was how their daughter learn to pout. The pout had turned into a smile which then turned into fits of giggles of pure mirth. She moved in circles along with the other girls. The shirt she now wore hitching up with every twirl and jump, unknowingly gaining unwanted attention towards her.

He didn't like their gazes. He didn't like their talks. He didn't like the way they stared at her. He didn't like them.

She had looked angelic. Her smile radiating eons of happiness. She looked like a grown up version of their daughter - who danced away at a tiny gesture made by her parents towards each other, like the holi celebration. She looked towards him. Her head moving into a questioning nod, a smile gracing her face, her hair all over face. He had just shaken his head in response, hinting to her shirt to which she paid no heed to. Rolling his eyes he turned to walk towards her direction. She now held a questioning glance.

Standing right in front her, he had held her by her or rather, his shirt and pulled her towards him. Shielding her from any unwanted viewers, he had taken the two ends of the shirt she wore and knotted them together, securing the short at her navel. She lifted her arms on either side - as if meaning to say that she had nothing to do with whatever that he was upto - an enchanting grin was something her face has chosen to flaunt now. He had taken a step back, grinning at the chance to be so close to her. His fingers motioned her to turn around, which she obediently did. She had let out a chuckle in pure mirth. He had collected the strands of hair that escaped her messy hair do, untied her locks and had then proceeded to tie them up all over again - all whilst shaking his head at her ignorance.

With his job done, he turned to leave only to be stopped by her soft hands.

"We have to practice, Raman," she had said

"I don't do practices," he had stoutly.

"Mere liye? Izzat ka savaal hai yaar."

He couldn't refuse her and her izzat. Thinking of all the lectures that would follow his denial, gave him mental shudders.

"Kya kya karwati ho yaar, Madrasan." He had muttered feigning annoyance. Truth be told, he would love to be close to his wife. The thoughts of all the proximity to come gave him a sense of, oh, he didn't know. It had just felt real good.

"Okay. Ishita. Follow the choreographer. He's your partner isn't he. You follow the steps we practiced earlier."

Ishita smiled at the person as she dragged Raman to center stage and moved herself, practicing the dance moves in question. As the beat came one, Ishita just shook her head to the song being played the first time with the choreographers and back up dancers moving to it - putting on a show for Ishita and Raman.

Raman tried his level best not to burst out laughing at the song and situation. This song totally didn't suit them. With Ishita batting eyelashes at him, totally reading his mood, he mentally vowed to control himself. He would not burst out laughing.

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Dhir Na Dhir Na (x2)

This is just the classical Indian beat which is used as a chorus to this song.

It is encouraging everyone to dance. It does not have a specific meaning.

Kaise, Naino Se Nain Milao Sajna

How, should I meet my gaze with Yours, My lover

Kaise, Mein Aise Na Ghabrao Sajna

How, should I not fear You this way, My lover

Kaise, Aaye Na Kaise Mohe Laaj Sajna

How, should I not feel bashful, My lover

Choona Na Dekho Mohe Aaj Sajna

Look, Don't touch me today, My lover

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Dhir Na Dhir Na

Mrs. Raman Kumar Bhalla has tapped her feet to the music - like a typical classical Indian dancer, so much for being a Salsa pro. Her faced was ducked under a borrowed dupatta.

She walked in front of him and like a shy bride she took a step towards him and two steps away from him.

Raman chuckled at his wife, grinning a one sided grin. This was fun, he decided.

She lifted the dupatta, batted her eyelashes and then proceeded to cover her face all over again - turning away like a newly wed bride.

She had then proceeded to calm her rapidly beating heart' by clenching her dupatta over her chest.

She had taken yet another step towards him. Her face to his, the dupatta as the only barrier between them. She had stepped back in less than a second.

She had then run away from his side, giggling with back up dancers at her back. All under that God damn dupatta that covered her face, hiding away the expression he was dying to see.

Raman chocked on his laughter. Ishita, his Ishita and blushing like a typical bride. The woman who was ferocious as a tiger, fast as a lion, cunning as fox, as loving as an elephant and protective as a lioness. That was his wife. Not this. Without holding himself back he burst into fits of laughter, leaning on one of her cousins for support as he laughed away.

Ishita was furious, Raavan Kumar had laughed. Not only had he laughed at her he had also leaned on her cousin for support. And he repeated his act. She wasn't funny. She was anything but funny. Other husbands, boyfriends or counterparts had found it really endearing when their other half performed something this adorable. But no, he had to go and laugh at her.

"Kis ke barein mein soch rahi ho Ishita? Yeh to paidaish Ravan Kumar hai." she muttered, furiously stripping her face off the darn dupatta. She would set him right on track, that khadoos.

She grabbed him off her cousin. Mental, he called her mental. Any psychiatrist would gladly take this personality as his/her new case, she mused.

"Raman ji, aapka turn hai. Music ab bhi play kar raha hai, " she spoke extra sweetly which did nothing but send the loon she called her husband into another fit of laughter. He tapped on her shoulder, thrice, as he wiped away a non existent tear.

"Kya gaana that yaar, Madrasan." He replied between bouts of laughter. This time, she held her foot on his, forcing all her weight on that foot, all with a bright forced smile on her face.

He just pulled his foot away from hers. Then the moron in question placed an arm on her shoulder. He dared to.

"Tum na, tum aisi ho. Jhansi ki Rani. Yeh excessive sharmana tumhe bilkul suit nahi karta. Tum toh daayan ho. Galli ka har gunda darta hai tumse. Aashiq toh door ki baat hai. Chood do. Nahi hoga tumse."

Ishita had just stared at him - her eyes narrowed into slits, her mouth slightly open. He bloody dared to.

With his gaze on her lips, he had bent a bit as he whispered, "Par on second thoughts, before we change the song teri fantasy toh puri karle."

Like a scratched CD on repeat, her heart had skipped a beat. Like, that was even possible.

She bit into thin air and towards him as he bent away a way - her fingers bent into something that resembled a claw

Raman bent back wards before she could bite his lip, half wishing that he should've stood still and let her have her unintended moment and then watch her flush red. His Jungly Billi... She had then fluttered her eyelashes and had started moving to the verse that followed.

Jhalki Jhalki Phirthi Hun, Chalki Chalki Se Phirthi Hun

I move with staggering walk, I move with a swaying body

Jisme Hai Mere Koi Jaam Hai Jaise

My body is like a kind of liquor

Nazar Milati Hun Khwaab Mein Sama Jati Hun

When I meet my gaze with Yours, then I immerse in Your dreams

Dil Mein Bas Jana Mera Kaam Hai Jaise

To settle into people's heart seems like my only job

She had pulled him towards her and then pushed him away. Using her right hand as a temporary fan she had walked around him in an anti clockwise motion, tracing her way around his shoulder with her free arm. She had then proceeded to back hug him and then place her can on his shoulder, turn his face towards her and sweetly look into his eyes. Turning his face away from her she shook her head - from left to right- his head still in her grasp as she forced him to look forward. He had given whoever was looking a bewildered look.

Arre Dil Mein Mere Bas Ja Mein Ne Roka Kab Hai

Come and settle into My heart, When have I stopped You

Lekin Kya Aarman Hai Mera Yeh Tho Samjhane De

But what are the desires of mine, let me try and make You understand first

Sajna Se Kahe Aaye Laaj Sahni

Why are You bashful around Your Love, My love

Choone De Aang Mohe Aaj Sajni

Let me touch Your body today, My love

He had forced himself out of her grip. And rescued his poor handsome face to. Pulling her away from his side and in front of him he had danced like a bloody hero, all attitude long gone for this was her moment. His moved made her squirm on stage. She felt her body heat up as he traced her fingers along her wrist and towards her shoulders. She had grinned like a fool when she realised that he was dancing for her and not with her. She had blushed beet red when he had whispered 'sajni' and in that moment had she subconsciously realised that she was falling in love all over again, she was falling in love with her Raavan Kumar. It was her conscious mind that hadn't gripped on to that fact just yet, it hadn't.

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Ta Dum Ta Na Na Na

Dhoom Taana Dhir Na Dhir Na

"Par Shah Rukh Khan ka gaana tha," she had whispered into his chest.

"Uske itne filmein na dekha karo, Madrasan. Mein tumhara Rahul nahi ban ne wala."

"Banna bhi nahi chahiye, tum Raavan Kumar hi accha lagte ho."

"Kuch bhi,"

He had then just smiled at her words. A bright smile that lit up his world and if given to, at that moment had the ability to illuminate any word they were thrown together into - along with their daughter.



I had planned another sequence on Gandi Baat soon after this. Now I'm wondering if I should with that...



Please leave behind your views. They really do help me out.

Next is the pace of the story. Let me know if it's too slow. I think I like it this way. The pace. And yes, I do realise that I've cut out the external world and focussed only IshRa for several updates. Bah.

Lastly, yes today I confessed to my best friend that I was penning down a fanfiction, she doesn't know where or on what but I made sure that my best friend actually sat down with me (gladly ignoring the fact that she totally dislike whatever I write and Indian dramas just make it worse 😆and the fact that she is better than Ishita when it comes to patience and tolerance and wouldn't even hurt a fly,
despite several attempts of her telling me that I was choosing the wrong person to ask for help in that category) and helped me pen down those aunty scenes which I then decided to cut out at the moment and add on later because as much as I find the aunties uncomfortable I also do find them endearing and scandal, the mere mention of scandal gets me all excited and what enter than their various versions of them (IshRa).


Lastly, today, a bunch of my classmates were sitting and singing Bollywood songs and I just casually joined them and the just stopped and stared at me and one of them was even like, aren't you "anti-Bollywood/Hindi" types, why the hell are you even sitting here and singing these songs or better yet, how do you even know hindi songs.." (rephrased statement) and I had to explain that I started with Hindi songs a month or so ago. The things this couple gets me into. That is why I literally beg for song recommendations.
Edited by AraBearxx - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
^ mak it fast. I'm going back to war with my mind after I read the first long comment.
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Phew. I thought I was super late!
Hang on.

That part where he ties the ends in a knot was endearing and oh, I like such possessive acts all right.
Kiara I loved the explanations you gave for dhum tana tana Haha
And when he was laughing, I laughed with him too. Haha okay I'm still laughing!

I liked this metaphor 'Like a scratched CD on repeat, her heart had skipped a beat'.

Aww his request to not watch SRK films. And the fact that you didn't forget ruhi when sending them away in another world was thoughtful.

I promise to send you a long list of songs if only you promise to exchange each sing for an update ?

Jokes apart, here is my list of sauggestions:

Lungi dance or drama queen for the dance scene. Okay my list ends here for now. I'll recommend some when I get my hands on my Hindi collection.

I don't know if it belongs to someone else but reading your update this came to my mind : "with each word she creates magic"

Also the dance moves were written so vividly that I could almost imagine which steps you were talking about.

Now my rally for another update starts.

Edited by aaminah123 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Loved the way Raman went up to Ishita in the beginning to fix her or his shirt on her and her hair. That was really sweet. Best part was the whole dance rehearsal cause I could not stop laughing just like Raman. That song is so not IshRa. It was fun to see Raman tease his JKR for it.

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