#1| IshRa : Meherbaan FF | Thread One - Complete. Moved to Thread Two. - Page 21

Created

Last reply

Replies

970

Views

450.1k

Users

84

Likes

2.6k

Frequent Posters

AraBearxo thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
Likes here are just markers for me to know to whom I have replied to. Penning down the update. Will reply soon. Xx
aaminah123 thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: AraBearxx




Let's begin. Apologies for the uber long comments. About your fiction, I shall stalk your profile when I'm free, just mention the fandom's you wrote on.


Same here. When I discovered YHM all over again, all I had gained was disgusted looks from my friends as they went, are you seriously watching a trashy Hindi show?

I was lost cause when it came to Kdramas and now came this - a hindi show. When I narrated the premise, they like it. But not enough to watch a hindi show. And this is like a really important phase in my life, are here I was wasting my time. Honestly. I thank Ekta for her stupid track that made me give up on the show.

I will be on a two week break. I'll try writing and saving updates so that I can just come online and update and get back to work.

Coming to the fashion bit. Not really. Growing up fashion had been my guilty passion - it influences me even today with the courses I take and the subjects I chose back the. I had my own take on what people wore and on they presented themselves. But personally knowing models, and everyone in friendlist attempting modeling - that industry wasn't something I wanted to be part of. Even today, the terrible curse I face is that I look at a person and I can literally see price tags as they walk. From their hair to the shoes - the brands, the price and the value. I had dreamt of being a fashion editor but then I had also dreamt of marrying into a corporate family *sigh*. So, I never really spoke about it and pursued Sciences, and here I am today. I don't really know if it comes with being a girl, when it comes to Indian Couture I grew in a totally non traditional place where my friend circle shunned everything that had India tagged to it. It wasn't something that was chosen by me but now recently, I think I'm falling in love with it. Selectively. My mother no longer has to try forcing me into an Indian outfit when the situation demands for it. So, answering your question I don't really know if it comes with being a girl - it's mostly either shopping or research for me.

Are you by any chance a guy? Aaminah, is a girls name. :) Not that I'm complaining, lol.


Haha no, im proud to be a girl, but first thing first, what made you think the opposite I wonder!


To answer your question my ff are on yhm only. Its actually the first show that made me explore myself and before I knew it I had penned down quite a few fiction. Sure, read them when you get time and let me know your take too.

Actually I'm also beginning to thank the CV for ruining the show because may be now I can get off it completely because I can't seem to watch the episode without cringing. So coming back t your ff. When are you updating? 😳
AraBearxo thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
Aaminah123:You asked me if describing outfits was a girl thing. Lol.
If they're on YHM, give me links I may have read them during my FF reading spree. I'll let you know.

Just go on youtube and subscribe to the IshRa dedicated channel and have your fil there.

I deleted the update absentmindedly, and then recovered it. Thank heavens. I'm updating that, before I end up deleting it again. Update in 5.
AraBearxo thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
I'm was here for exactly 10 days and active in the forum for two and I feel like smashing so many heads. I honestly feel for all the old members of the forum who obviously feel worse than me.

I have a theme song for this, say what? EXACTLY. A THEME. I started humming this yesterday, and then went and Googled the lyrics and it fits.

Sab Mera Tu : Teri Meri Love Stories, Episode 2 - Shilpa Anand & Viraf Firoz Patel
[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LxpVrLmvNGA[/YOUTUBE]

"Hai tu kahan, kahan hai tu? Aa jaun mein jahan hai tu? Is Dil Mein, dhadkanon mein hai tu hi tu. Hai Jaan tu, jahaan hai tu. Mein hoon jaha, waha hai tu. Kaise tujhe bata doon.. Kya kya hai tu? Yaar hai tu, pyaar hai tu, arzoo tu, justaju tu, zindagi tu, bandagi tu, rab mera tu, sab mera tu. Aadhi adhuri jaisi hai zindagi jo saath me mere na tu. Karte hai har ghadi khud se baatein tumhari, har gham, khayalo mein tu. Tere liye bana mein, mere liye bani tu, duniya ye jaan le. Dil mein tumhi baase ho, saanson mein ghul gaye ho. Tum toh hai badkar jaan se."

I will be inactive during the first week and half of November but I will try my best to pen down the maximum number of updates I can till the end of this month and then update. :)


This one goes to the mini heart attack you get when you absentmindedly delete a whole bloody chapter that took hours to write.

Will proofread and update later.



C H A P T E R 10 S A B M E R A T U Part A

Chapter Edited by Dhara (@dsgirl)

Raman had always loved the colorful chaos that came along with life - that was the fun in being Indian, he had concluded. The loudness, the overly done events, the class consciousness and everyone's struggle to move ahead in life whilst entwining their lives with you. Raman's fondest childhood memory had to be one of those days where his mother relieved from her daily chores and relaxed as she chatted with her friends - something that she had stopped doing upon moving to Delhi. Delhi had been their home since Raman was a ten year old kid. Their move to Delhi had never been an opposed one. Raman was born into a middle class Punjabi family - who were wealthy rurally in their little world but in the real world their wealth had meant nothing, Raman's father was an ambitious person who strived hard to succeed. He had moved to Delhi at the mere age of thirty five with three kids and a heavily pregnant wife. Life in Delhi wasn't difficult, nor was it easy - it was moderate, just the way they liked it. Papaji had left early in the morning only to return late at night. He had started his own business and it was flourishing, enough to keep four kids fed and clothed. There wasn't much left but what remained behind was invested in their kids' future. Raman had always been Papa's favourite boy - until he married Shagun. Shagun, who brainwashed him against his parents. Papaji had never said anything against Raman, who joined his father's rivals company nor had Papaji said anything when Shagun instigated Raman against him - all he had wanted was the son who he doted upon to dust away the dust that protected him from the realities of life. His Raman who was keen on making his way in the harsh world had refused help from his father. Raman had toiled away like a camel in a desert with Shagun being his oasis - his mirage. When Raman had finally dusted himself, it was too late for him. Not only was he served with Shagun's betrayal but also Papaji's attack that forced him out of his misery. The two events put together had killed Raman Bhalla - the gentle soul and in place of him came Raman Kumar Bhalla - the fierce, cunning and ruthless businessman with no care or feeling. Raman Bhalla was the caterpillar which had morphed into Raman Kumar Bhalla.

Upon realising that his father's life long work was just for him - his Papaji's Happy. Papaji who had recognised Raman dream as a kid had brought it up to reality using the last 15 years to form a base which later gave birth to Raman Kumar Bhalla. A gift that could never be surpassed - not even by Adi. His father's sweat, blood and youth just to form a base for his son to build his dreams on - the industries had always been Raman's - from the day they were founded and for the four and half years to come Raman had just expanded his father's business that would always be his. He had toiled day and night all over again - this time for himself. For his family. For the daughter he would never profess his love to. For karma, who bit him in the ass for no god damn reason.

And then came Ishita barging into his life - his firecracker. As dangerous as she had turned out to be she had given him more times the joy. She had thought him to live. To love. To breathe. To let go. She had taken over his responsibility, if not shared them and in return she had only asked for trust, faith and hope. Three things that he had given her unconditionally along with their daughter. Along with the hurt that came along with being tied to him. She had smiled as she held his hand, joining him in their journey through life and death. And to her vows she had been his wife - in happiness, in sickness, in rich, in poor, without doubt, with faith. Theirs had been a relationship that no world's could describe and she had loved and cared for anyone and everyone but him. Care, yes. Love, no. Their life was no fairytale, but he intended for it to be. They had a life of their own and he would truly make it theirs. Raman Kumar Bhalla refused to be friend zoned by his own wife out of all people.

That night after being a loner in a room full of strangers who admired and worshipped him for his accomplishments and power rather than attempting to know him, Raman had decided to retire to bed. To Ishita's bed. Ishita had just given him an apprehensive nod, indicating him to go ahead. Raman's luggage was brought and moved to Ishita's room. He had laid on the bed, and within seconds he had fallen asleep. The dance practices with the backup dancers taking toll on him. He could imagine Ishita's jokes as he fell asleep "Buddhe ho rahe ho Raman. 12 years ke bete jo hai. Look at you, white hair. Murugan, my husband is getting old. Ye kya hai."

Hours later Raman was awakened with his face in Ishita's cleavage as his Madrasan stared at him. He had stood still of how long, he didn't know until Ishita had calmly stated, "Oh you woke up. Call up Anmol. My phone is dead. Ruhi has decided to sleep over at Tammy's. Shravan peed his pants and then cried for hours only to join Ruhi and Tammy on their sleepover, our daughter is such a Gangster. Poor Vandu akka. Not only is she pregnant, she now almost had a hysterical son to take care of."

"Ruhi will be fine for a day, Ishita. It's so late. Leave them alone for a day."

"It's not Ruhi. That little Juliet has locked up my cupboards or instead, has made someone lock then and now I have nothing to wear. "

"So you're going to bed in this?"

"Do I have a choice?"

"Do you want a choice? Okay, stop glaring, with your smudged makeup... it's scary. Wear one of my shirts. They'll fit you and it's just us in the room."

"You dream huge. Some serious hopes there, why Mr Bhalla. I'll wear a bikini for you."

"That's on our to do list but change first. God. Though that looks great on you, you've worn it the whole day and not to forget night and there's no way you're sleeping with me wearing that."

"I never said that I was sleeping with you. Why would I sleep with you? Sleep with you, haaaw. Ramaaan."

"Feel free to sleep on the floor then. Actually no, I don't want to be tagged as a horrible husband. Just change and come will you, we'll even watch one of your lame shows if you do it fast, it won't make a difference."

"My body does nothing for you, why don't we experiment?"

Raman suddenly hated the volunteer in him. If only she had known the things her body or the thought of it did to him. She would run away blushing while he penned down the next book that could knock Kamasutra off it's position. Experiment, he was gone for. Dead. Gone. Minced. Gone.

Ishita had then emerged in his shirt, it covered every part of her perfectly the sad part being it ended eight inches above her knees, giving him bad ideas. He couldn't be sane. Heck, sanity was the last thing on his mind. Asking him to keep sane was like asking a sex addict to abstain from the act.

Raman, stop perving on your wife, he chastised himself. But she's your wife, another part of him responded. And she's a feminist, the last thing you need is a lecture, the first part of him taunted.

It was Ishita's new forte to trip and fall over flat surfaces and she had done just that. His wife had tripped with the help her own two feet and toppled right over him, landing them in a severely compromising position. That was how Raman Bhalla, innocent Raman Bhalla, father of two kids who was sitting at the foot of his wife's bed pondering over sweet nothings was double attacked by his wife. First, when she walked out of the washroom as if begging him to devour her then and then. And the second, when to make matters worse she had landed right on top him - right on top him and between his legs to be precise and they now lay splattered on her bed, her wet hair plastered all over her face now devoid of all the makeup she had worn for the day as his wife stared at him with a soulful gaze.


This is all that I had penned down - lost and recovered a few minutes ago. Honestly. That was scary.


Initially, this was to be dedicated to the moment when an uber hot and lean guy goes shirtless right in front of you as you blush that blush.

I planned on dedicating this ff to each of my readers who comment but then I would either be short of readers or chapters and that would be unfair. Until I shortlist my readers and chapters I dedicate each chapter to the moments we face in life or my moment of the day and you do that in return. :)



Please like and/or comment to show your support.




Edited by AraBearxx - 10 years ago
clover thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago
Wonderful update. Can't wait to read what happens next.😊
TheSunShine thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 180 Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago
nice update... waiting for more
Edited by TheSunShine - 10 years ago
aaminah123 thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago
You do know its unfair kiara!
But I loved it. Continue soon and yes, as always I'm eagerly waiting already after reading the last part.

Once same thing happened with me and I had to write everything down. Again. So I prefer to write in gmail that way the drafts are automaticalky saved. But I'm glad you could recover the data :)
MidnightMusings thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
"It was Ishita's new forte to trip and fall over flat surfaces and she had done just that."

🤣 Oh hell. 🤣 i had to stop reading and comment on this

I saw this in my mind's eye and I cannot stop laughing since 😆 . Bravo Kiara.
Albeli26 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago
plz clr me a thng that they moved on in their relationship or they r only ruhi ke liye nd pretendng as husband wife infrnt of evryone?? plz clr it.
AraBearxo thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: aarohi26

plz clr me a thng that they moved on in their relationship or they r only ruhi ke liye nd pretendng as husband wife infrnt of evryone?? plz clr it.



Neither. They're friends. I've explained te whole deal in chapter 3, in between the dance sequence thing. They have found a middle ground - nothing for them nor just for Ruhi. I don't really remember the details (yep, I'm horrible, LOL) But somewhere down the line after the whole Shagun fiasco and times after that to provide a better relationship for the sake of ruhi who has to always be on a watch out for her parents and their fights. Raman and Ishita sort out their differences and be more than mere strangers, they become friends - close friends. While from Ishita struggles with her "sprouting" feelings that would never be reprociated by Raman and her getting rid of them followed by her insecurity that stops her from taking the first step. Raman on the other hand feels Ishita and he need more in this relationship. Afraid to lose her or be unfair to her, he prepares himself for the worst while preparing to do whatever it takes to be with her.

Raman and Ishita are friends whose lines are blurred in this fiction. They stand somewhere in between lovers and friends, afraid to go towards the first and willing to shun the latter status yet unable to express their want.

Related Topics

Ye Hai Mohabbatein thumbnail

Posted by: ChanChanMan · 4 years ago

I dare you to post a thing about anyone other than DivAn.

Expand ▼
Ye Hai Mohabbatein thumbnail

Posted by: Im_sherlock · 6 months ago

On the show, we all know how Raman tried to give hints to Ishita about his feelings and desires, by keeping a box of condoms in her drawer. An...

Expand ▼
Ye Hai Mohabbatein thumbnail

Posted by: Devanshi14 · 5 months ago

Chapter # 01 Title: “Pehli Baar Ishq Hua” Raman and Ishita had been married for months now—contractually, yes—but slowly, silently, love had...

Expand ▼
Ye Hai Mohabbatein thumbnail

Posted by: Im_sherlock · 5 months ago

It was one of those rare calm nights in Delhi, the kind that carried a soft breeze, the scent of blooming mogra, and a strange kind of silence...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".