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Posted: 11 years ago
#81
somewhat acceptable... :P
bt ur dream is soo gud continue soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#82
One killer caught...wt abt othr..
Something happens??


Ur challenge s acptd...waiting for nxt parts
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Posted: 11 years ago
#83
very good track. Loved reading all the parts
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Posted: 11 years ago
#84
last part

Scene starts with Raman and his wife in room talking in phone with their daughter.

Ruhi "Papa main waha aajaongee."

Raman don't want to take risk but his wife don't know the risk so she accepts it.

"Han tum Miss M key saath ajaana.Ok.Sab log aajaon naa yaha bahuth accha hain."

Ruhi "Sab log.Daadi ,daadu,chaachu sab log."

"paati aur chitti ko bhee bhulaon aur Shravu ko bhee."

Ruhi "Han mazaa aayega.MainShravu ko apnaa video game dikhaongi aur cycle bhee."

"Han tho Miss M ko phon do naa."

Megha "Sauthan .Are you sure sab log ko lekar aaun." Separating her self from others.

"Han kyon naheen.Yaha accha hain naa."

Megha "Kyaa hain merey boyfriend key saath Akeley bithaney ka mauka fir naheen milega."

"Shut up Megha.Tumm bhee kiss time kiss baathey kar rahen hon.Main hummesha Raman key saath hee rahoongi."

Megha "Han but everytime koi na koi bhee rahega.Are you sure ?"

"Kuch naheen hogaa.Sabko lekar aon."

Then she cuts the call and whole gang is ready to come to Raman's new house.

Raman was silent and his wife understood something is wrong.

"Raman kuch problem hain naa abhee bhee poora problem saort naheen huan hain."

Raman "Tumhey aisaa kyon lag rahan hain?"

"Raman main aapko jaanthe hun aap Ruhi ko abhee bhee door rakh rahen hain.I am sure some problem is there."

Raman "Han issue hain.Tum bhool gayee kyaa merey liyen minister ney bhee ek admee ko bheja tha.Kall who pakada gayaa tha but aur ek bahaar hain."

She was shocked and all her happiness evaporated in seconds.

"Raman bahaar mathlab.Kall aapney mazaak nahen kiyya tha.who sach thaa."

Killer was outside their room but was unnoticed.

"Raman fir aapney police ko kyo naheen bathaaya.Who ussey pakad lethey."

Raman "Who pakad gayaa tho doosra aayega lekin .Sach patha chalney sey sab kuch sort hoga."

"But Raman issmey risk hain.Hum kaisey yakeen karey kee who hummarey baath maanjaayega."

Raman "Han but sachaayi hummarey saath hain.Viswas karnaa padega."

Guard listened all this and he is getting doubt whether Raman is involved in conspiracy or not.He leaves at that moment but he need clarity.

She was scared completely and hugs him tightly .Raman was waiting for his next move.He want to speak to the organization personally.

Then by afternoon whole the gang of Bhalla's and Iyer's were there .It is spacious enough that everyone had a room.Ruhi got her room separately.Mihir and ROmi were sharing one and Mihika and Megha one.Then remaining on their order.

Then outside killer informs the caller that it seems Raman Bhalla is in our side and he want complete datails about it.He is taking his duty seriously now as he is not completely aware whether Raman is involved in scam and some other is targeting Raman.

Raman was happy to see all his family together but he can't avoid disputes between them.Ruhi is clear now and have no doubt that her father is at risk.But there is only one person who is scared to hell and no need to tell who it is.

Megha "Boy friend saarey sabooth mil gayen hain hum proceed kar sakthey hain."

Mihika was pissed as she is hearing the word boyfriend for her brother in law repeatedly.Even her sister is comfortable with it.

Mihika "Jeeju aap case kar rahen hain yaa."

Raman "Main naheen kar raha hun .Yeh kamm kissey aur ka hain.I will go and talk to him."

His wife understood what he meant and she will not allow it at any cost.

"Raman aap nahen milengey ussey ."

Raman "Kuch naheen hoga .Tum tension math loo main sab handle kar loonga."

Raman leaves outside towards the guard.Guard is initially puzzled but he understood Raman was coming for him and tried to escape but other caught him.

Raman asked them to leave them separate as he want to speak to him alone.

Raman "Tum mujhey maareny aye they naa."

He was silent .

"Mujhey tumsey baath karnee hain.Usskey baath tumhaari marzi ."

Then he gives him all proofs over that scam and tells him how to proceed.

Raman "Kissey ko maarney sey ussko szaa nahen miltha.Who mar jaayega aur uske uar lagey ilzaam kabhee sabith naheen hoga.Abh tumhaarey pass poorey saabhuth hain tum issey case kar saktey hon ussey sajaa milega."

Guard "Lekin who bach saktha hain.Ussmey mi ister bhee shaamil hain."

Raman "Tum news naheen pad rahen ho kyaa.Minister ko arrest kiyaa gaya hain aur Ashok key financiers ko bhee.Abh tumhaarey liyen line clear hain.Main kissey ko naheen bathaaonga kee tum hee killer hon."

Guard "Aap pehley sey hee jaanthey they kee main killer hun."

Raman "Han.Main bass mauka dekh rahan thaa kee tumhaarey organization kaa madad karney.Mijey bhee beti hain main kabhee kissey bachey key saath aisa nahen honey de saktha.Never."

Guard then leaves taking proofs and his wife who was watching this secretly .\

Raman "Tum bahaar aon abhee.Abh sab kuch solve ho gayan hain."

She comes outside and Raman hugs her.

"Dekha kuch nahen huan .Tum bekaar mey tension ley raheen thee."

"Raman aapkey jaan ka sawaal tha main chain sey kaisey bhatthee.I love you."

"I love you too.Abh to roona bandh karo."

Clearing her tears and kissing her in forhead.

Raman "Abh tum decide karo kee .Iss gahr ka kyaa karnaa hain.Hum yahee rukhey ya waaps uss ghar chaley."

She was in confusion she then remembers all her memories in both houses .That house has many memories but this house is of dreams it solved many issues and cleared every problem and their love confession.

She has to decide on what to do for this.

Then they go inside and Raman asks everyone the same question.

Every one are in same confusion as this house is big enough to hold everyone together.But they escaped easily by saying the decision lies on ISHITA RAMAN KUMAR BHALLA.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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This is the end of this dream track UNNAMED.I hope you enjoyed it .Thankyou for reading this story whole along and encouraging me.So your opinions are welcome and wish you provide it.

Thanking You
SAKIV!VIKAS Chandra
Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#86
Superb story...👏👏
very well written...😛😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
#87
thanks for sharing..
loved it 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#88
awww lovely ending...
all storys ends happyily..

and here ended with ishu's confusion

gud work vikas
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Posted: 11 years ago
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for regular readers realization is also completed.
Now their is only one ss which I din't finish.The one related to chennai track.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#90
Have to wait till next concept comes in my mind.

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