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Posted: 11 years ago
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part 10


Scene starts with Raman thinking about dinner.

Raman scolding himself.

Raman "Abh Ishita key saath Akeley jaana pad rahan hain."

Raman "Kyaa time chal rahan hain mei pehley Ishita sey Akeley milney key liyen bahana dhondh raha tha.Abh jab ussney khud bulawa diya mujhey ussey rokhney kee planning karna pad rahan hain."

Raman "Kyaa karna hoga abh main jhoot nahen bol sakta kee koi meeting hain."

Raman "Aaj koi meeting kyon naheen rakha yaar.Sab din tho mera plan kharaab karney koi naa noi meeting athee thee.Aaj kya ho gaya."

Raman "Abh mujhey hee kuch karnaa hoga.Kyaa karon?"

Raman "Think Think think.Idea"

Raman "Ishita mujhsey yeh sawaal pooch saktey hain.Who kissey aur key saamney yeh sawaal kar payegi kya."

Raman "Ruhi.Yes Ruhi key saamney who aisey baath kar naheen paayegi."

Raman "Abh mujhey kissey bhee taraha Ruhi ko bhee saath le jaana hoga."

Raman feels happy for the solution he got.

Raman "Mujhey ek backup plan bhee karna padega."

Then he calls Mihir and tells him something .

Raman "Mujhey yeh kaam theek hona chahiyen kuch bhee gadbad huin naa tho main tumhey chodunga nahee."

Here Ishita is making planning for dinner.She is checkin all sarees and combinations before mirror and she is not liking anyone now.

Now her motto is to impress Raman and stay with him and keep his eyes fixed on her.

She finally selects a combination and is quite impressed with it.

Ishita then remembers about Mihika.

Ishita "Main abh Mihika ko sach bathaungi tho who meri taang keechti rahegi.Kuch naheen bolungi tho ussey shak ho jayega .Mujhey ussey is belief mey rakhna hooga kee abh bhe problem chal rahan hain."

Ishita then goes to Mihika .

Ishita "Mihika tumhey kuch patha chala uss chot key baarey mey.Mihir ney patha lagaaya."

Mihika "Han Akka .Opening party mey huan tha sab."

Mihika "Party mey koi bahaar waaley ayen they .Aur daaru peekar koi ladkee ko ched rahen they aur jeeju ney unhey rokhney kee koshish kee aur who log jagada karnaa suru kiyan.Jeeju ney sabko achey taraha handle kar rahen they fir kissey ney beer bottle sey marney kee koshish kiya tab slit huein thee.Jeeju ney sabko police key hawaaley kar diya thaa."

Ishita "Kyaa jaroori tha Raman ko doosro ko maamlo mey involve honey kee.Ussey kuch ho gaya hotha tho."

Mihika "Akka aap jeeju key baarey mey itnaa sochna bandh karo.Jab sab kuch theek hain aap fir wohi baath ko pakadkar baith gayee kee jeeju ney aapko nahen bathaya.Aur aap itna negative kyon soch rahen hain kee kuch huan hotha tho."

Ishita "Yeh simple see baath lag rahen hain tumhey.Fir bhee ussey mujhey bathana chahiye thaa.Mujhey yeh hatsa tumhaarey mu sey sunna pad rahan hain.Had hain yaar."

Mihika "Akka mujhey jaana hoga .Bye baath mey mikengey."

Mihika in her mind "Thank God jeeju ney akka ko kuch nahen bathaya .Accha huan mujhey mauka mila.Jeeju ney bathaya hoth tho gussa wahee nikalthee aur sab kuch khatam ho jaatha.Abh yeh sabh gusaa ikkatta karkey ek hee baar nikaalna hoga" leave s smiling at Ishita.

Ishita reciprocated it with a smile and in mind "Sorry Mihika mujhey tumsey jhoot bolna pad rahan hain.Maian jaanthaa hun kee main Raman sey pyaar karthee hun ,Yeh baath main sabsey pehley Raman ko hee bolungi aur kissey sey bhee nahee."

Raman comes home and is watching TV in his room.

Ishita comes there and looks at him smiling from door and blushes.

Raman "Ishita tum pehley Ruhi ko rady karo aur tum bhee ready ho jaon.Fir hum chaltey hain."

Ishita "Ruhi ko kyon?"

Raman "Ishita hummarey dinner mey tum Ruhi ko kaisey bhool saktee hon."

Ishita "Sorry main bhool gayen.Abh kaisey mainey reservation sirf hum donon key naam mey kiyan."

Raman "Han jaantha hun manager ney phone kiyaa tha.Thab main ney bol diyan kee teen logon key liyen kare."

Raman "Ruhi ko gussa ayega kee hum dono Akeley chaley."

Raman "Mainey Ruhi ko batha bhee diya who bahuth excited hain."

Raman "Main ready hokar atha hunt um merey kapadey nikaal lena."

Raman goes to bath room and Ishita signs as if he is going to hit him.

Ishita "Kitnaa accha mauka thaa.Raman ney Ruhi ko bhee buladiyan." Smiling as her plan failed.

She then removes new shirt which she brought for Raman and places it over his bed and she then goes and makes Ruhi ready.She then gets ready in complete attempt to fix Raman's gazes on herself.Which she never fails even without trying .

Raman gazes are as planned by Ishita fixed on her and she is happy with this and is smiling and then Ruhi is happy with plan of dinner along with family.She don't know that she became Kabaab mey Haddi for Ishita and Shield for Raman.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Raman forget the fact.
Ishita will not ask Raman befor Ruhi.

But Ruhi may ask.She dont have any trouble.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow awesome 👏
I jst read it in one go and I totally loved it.. update soon :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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part 11


Scene starts with IshRaRu going in their car .Ishita was looking at Raman and Raman looking at Ruhi.Ishita notices this and asks Ruhi to sit along with her over her lap.Ruhi readily agrees.

Ishita "Raman aapko yaad hain Raman.Jab hum pehlee baar miley they jab Ruhi Akeley bhaitney key liyen kitnaa Ro rhee thee.Thab mainey ussey godh mey bhitakar issey seat pey bhathee tee."

Raman smiles remembering it "Han yaad hain.Ruhi bahuth ro rahee thee daanth ka dard sey aur mujhey tumhaara hee number mila help service sey."

Ishita "Hummari kitnaa jhagada hotha thaa naa .Abh bhee kam naheen huyen lekin abh sab kuch theek lagtha hain jagada kartey waqt bhee."

They reach a mall in which Ishita has reseved for dinner.They were going for restaurant and they were stopped by a person.

Rp "Sir aaj hummarey shop kaa anniversary hain .Humney issliye kuch competition rakha hain couples key liyen.Aap participate kar saktey hain."

Raman and Ishita were silent and both wanted to participate but they don't know how to initiate for others .But that problem was sorted as Ruhi was there.

Ruhi without any timewaste "Han Mama Papa participate karengey."

That man smiles at excitement of Ruhi.

Rp "Beta aapka mama papa kaa naam bathao."

Ruhi " Papa ka naam Raman Kumar Bhalla.Mama ka naam Ishita."

Rp "So Mr and Mrs Bhalla.Aap thoda wait keejiyen program adey ghantey mey suru hoga.Aap chahey tho wait kar saktey hain yaa aapka kaam pura kar saktey hain."

Raman "Hum dinner key liyen aye they .Dinner karkey ayengey."

Rp "Theek hain sir."

They go for the restaurant and were having their dinner.

Ruhi was super excited and we know what she wants .Raman and Ishita should win it at any cost.

Ruhi "Papa humey jeethna hain."

Raman "Tum sirf mujhey kyo bol rahen hon.Ishita ko bhee bolo naa."

Ruhi "Papa Ishima ko patha hain mujhey kyan chahiyen.Issliyen sirf aapko batha raheen hon."

Ishita gets a plan and continues.

Ishita "Raman aap comfortable hain naa.Aapko participate karnaa chahtey hain naa."

Raman understood he was locked but then remembers about his promise seing his bracelet.

Raman "Ruhi chahtey hain naa kee hum participate karey.Tho mujey bhee manjoor hain isss competition.Abh main bhee chahtha hun"

Ruhi was happy with answer.

Ishita was confused with answer as it is not as straight forward she expected.Now she is confused of two meanings as it gives statement that Raman wants to participate because of Ruhi and other is he want to participate and even Ruhi wants same.

Ishita in mind "Raman kiss matlab sey bola ussney.Ruhi key liyen ya khud key liye."

Raman smiles at his victory as he was able to handle situation and Ishita in confusion.

Ruhi "Papa who bracelet nayeen hain?"

Raman "Han tumhaari Ishima ney diyya.Tumhey accha laga."

Ruhi "Bahuth pretty hain papa mujhey chahiyen."

Ishita now comes out of confusion and gets a new shock as Ruhi was asking that bracelet.

Raman "Han bahuth pretty hain naa.Dekho yahan "showing their initials."Ruhi Ishita Raman.Ishima ney hummarey initials bhee embrae karvaaya."

Ruhi "Han .Bahuth pretty hain."

Raman "Ishita Ruhi ko accha laga Ishita ussey dey do naa.Main khareed lunga."Raman forwarding his hand.

Ishita got a situation to handle now.She remembers the scene where she told him that he should not tell lie before her until she remover brace let by her own hands.

Ishita now struck between Ruhi and Raman.She is thinking how to deal with this now.

Ishita in mind "Main bracelet nikaalongi tho .Itnaa accha mauka fir nahee ayaga.Aur Ruhi ."

Ishita "Ruhi .Beta chod do naa.Main tumhaarey liyen nayee khareedoongi.Yeh aapkey liyen loose ho jaayega.Ha naa Papa."

Raman now unable to tell lie and understood his plan spoiled withdrawing hi hand "Han."

Raman fumes silently while Ishita smiles.

Then they get a call from the competition and they go their to attend it."

Anchor then announces the couples name who are participating .

Anchor "Iss competition mey jiss couple jeethega ussey hum.Iss shop say apney pasand ke kapdey ley saktey hain aur hummarey maal kaa coustomer card free mey milega."

Ruhi gets excited.Ishita was not interested in gifts but she want to check her co ordination with Raman.Raman was silent as he will be before a challenge.

Anchor "Theek hain pehley aap apney gifts decide keejiyen.Fir hum competition key liyen agey bhadengey."

Raman feels it strange even Ishita.

Anchor "Theek hain sarey gets iss taraf ayiyen aur aurat uss taraf."

Anchor "Aap yahan sey.Ek Casual wear ,Ek party wear aur ek normal use key liyen lena hoga."

Anchor "Fir jho kapdey aapney select kiyaa ussey hummarey attendant ko deejiyan.Aap competition jeeth gayen tho who kapdey aapkey."

Raman don't like this but seing Ishita excited he also gets interested in it.

Then attendants lead them to shop.But they get shocked when they realize gents were taken to ladies corner while ladies to gents.

Then anchor announce in mike.

Anchor "Abh aapko apney better half key liyen kapadey select kar hee saktey hain naa."

Raman then goes through the flow and selects dresses fot Ishita in order of their pattern and gives them to attendant and comes out before everyone.Even Ishita came outside early.But they were not allowe to meet.

Then they wait for competition waiting for anchor to announce the competition.

Anchor "Abh competition kee baarey.Ok abh gents gets corner mey aur ladies ladies corner jaayengey."

Anchor "Aapko pehachaana hoga .Kee aapkey partner ney aapkey liyen kiss kapadey select kiyan."

Anchor "Jiskey match hothey hain who jeethega."

All the couples gets shocked including IshRa.

The problem is they have to trace one pair among hundreds of others in each format.

Ishita and Raman have a distance eyelock before parting and they go to corners.

Here Raman gets struck over thought which clothes would Ishita would have selected for him and same does Ishita over the clothes their.

Raman slowly looks at them and reduces three pairs in each format.Same does Ishita.

Raman "Abh in teenon mey kissie ek ko select karna hoga .Ishita apney choice ka select kiya hoga tho yeh ho saktey hain.Mera choice tho yeh aur Ruhi kee choice par yeh."

Raman "Abh problem yeh hain kee Ishita kisskey choice pey select kiyan.Mera ya Ruhi ya apnaa."

Raman was trying to break the code here.

Ishita was equally confused "Raman kisskey choice pey liyan hoga."

Then they think for few minutes and they select on others choice.

Raman selects clothes which he assumed Ishita would have selected on her choice.Ishita does same on what shee assumed would be of Raman's choice.

They come out taking the clothes they selected.Both Ishita and Raman are shocked seing dresses in others hands.

Then attendants comes and takes clothes from them.

Then after few minutes anchor comes.

Anchor "Mainey kabhee naheen socha kee.Do insaan ek hee taraha soch sakte hain."

Raman and Ishita are waiting for results.

Anchor "Humey yahan do couples ney clean sweap kar diyan."

Anchor"Mainey socha bhee nahen kee koi itnaa perfect kar paayengey.Lekin yahna hummarey pass do couples hain.Aap jaana chahtey hain who kaun hain."

Then after a pause he announces it suddenly

Anchor "Mr and Mrs Bhalla and Mr and Mrs Mathur."

Raman and Ishita jumps with happiness and Ruhi was beyond happy.

Raman and Ishita had made a clean sweap they selected others selection perfectly.Ishita's happiness was beyond limit.She got Raman's choice correctly and and same did Raman.She have drops of tears in her eyes with happiness.

Anchor "Lekin humey ek hee couple chahiyen.Issliyen humey aap donon ke beech ek competition rakhrahen hain."

Raman and Ishita were allowed to meet now and Ishita was happy .

Anchor "Abh Mr Bhala and Mr Mathur aap yahan ayiyen."

Anchor "Aapney apney bewiyon ko bahuth baar gifts diyen hongey aur gifts dekar propose kiyan hongey."

Anchor "Abh aapko hum sabkey saamney apney pyaar key baarey mey bathana hoga.Aur uss speech key result sey hum winner decide karengey."

Thunder struck on Raman after listening this.Smile erupt in Ishita's face.

Now Raman is supposed to give a speech on his love .Now Raman is struck.

Raman is not supposed to tell lie and telling the truth will reaveal about his love for Ishita which he don't want.

Ishita is now sure ball is in her court and she will get her answer.

Anchor "Mr Bhalla aap stage pey ayiyen."

Raman goes on stage still thinking on how to handle this situation.



I think this is the lengthy part I wrote till now.

So I think I can wish for your feedback over this part a little brief.

A healty feedback will help me to analyze my mistakes and understand which part you are likinf and which you are not.

So Please give a proper feedback.

Even silent readers please gie a reply.For betterment in My Dream Track.

How ever it is optional as it is your choice to give reply or not.

Thanking you

SAKIV ! VIKAS Chandra

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome... Eagerly waiting... Continue soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Asha122

Awesome... Eagerly waiting... Continue soon...

yaar thoda expand tho karo .Itnaa lamba part key liyen bhee teen word ka reply.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Superb team I like it. But you should drag three story to more emotional feelings. Thanks for your creative ideas you share with us. Fabulous job shakiv
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey Vikas...

Priya here.. Im generally a silent reader on the forum.. But your SS made me comment.. Read all the parts in a go..

Trust me.. Its awesome.. But yaar.. Dont pull the confession so long.. Ab kara bhi do pyar ka izhar.. Waiting waiting..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very Nice. I liked this part. I'm curious about to know how Raman handled the situation.

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