O Saathi Re - IshRa OS. - Page 10

Originally posted by: rutu83

wow👏
i had to reread it second time before i could comment- the emotions, especially of raman, came across the page with such intensity, i was feeling the insecurities, fear and panic along with him. brilliant 👏
take a bow, there are very few writers who can write a sensuous scene without making it crude 👍🏼
i always want all your os as part of the show but i don't think this one can be 😆 though i think we'll have much much tamed version of this eventually 😃

two lines i loved- one, of course, ishita telling raman he's the other half 🤗 , and second being freebie of the package 😆. freebie she didn't care for in the beginning 😉😆. actually, i loved that after such a panic filled passionate encounter and serious talk, ishita being her impish self brought a bright smile on raman's face ⭐️

Originally posted by: Tanyaarora11

I'm yet to read a better ISHRA OS than what I just read. Enough said.
Truly spectacular. You've captured the essence in such an outstanding way.
I'm at a loss of words. Like seriously.
Kudos!

Originally posted by: -AnGel_Mind-

JUST Awsummm

Originally posted by: paru_rox

Res:

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Passionate, complicated and intense.

Beautifully written Aani ... RKB's fear was so well portrayed and you kept his character in mind while doing so ... RKB being the man that he is would never show his fear openly, he would hide it behind a multitude of emotions and show conflicting emotions. This is what he did ...hid his fear, showed anger, passion, desperation for "her".

yep he is a man of few words and extremes - he lets his guard down when really angry, sad or drunk - here I wanted an extreme reaction which displayed his fear but in a way which also displayed his insecurity and need for affirmation that she is only his

Especially loved the below lines:

"Because I haven't been loved like this before Ishita...because I haven't loved anyone like I love you. Its true I was married before, I too have a past but one where all the feelings in the relationship came from my end... with you I found someone who loved me back for the first time. It broke me when I was cheated on... but it would destroy me now if I ... I ... lose you. I don't have it in me to recover from you, from us anymore."


PS -- Usually avoid RES'ing unless am super busy ... finally could read this 😃. Also I realize now that I have Res'ed twice on this post 😕

no issues Parul and thank you 😊

Originally posted by: Nikita99

OMGG! It is super intense and passionate. It's like Raman was marking his territory. And that hidden fear of loosing Ishita... you portrayed it so well. I think I almost stop breathing with them.

Hats off to you! 👏

Originally posted by: cool_aparna

I m amazed Aani...that was emotionally intense too...can't believe this day when i read this we also got to see in the show too rkb got so affected by the mention of him...

Originally posted by: kritu17krits

wow dat was simply awesome

Originally posted by: mnr123

Ur topic is so bang on what almost happened today ... Their verbal innuendoes and then their confirmation that they will b there for each other is so so Gud ... I didn't like one aspect of ur OS it's just a personal preference dong take it as a criticism ... That was Raman being overly physical wid Ishu ...I get ur point that Raman was just trying to make sure that Ishu belongs to him only ... It's just tht I am not too comfortable wid it ... 😆
Rest all was so nice 😳 n the song u chose ... Gulzar Saabs words ...

Originally posted by: disha93

Superb OS!!!

Originally posted by: Metamorphmagus

Hey Aani!

You are either psychic or one of the writers of this show. It can't be a co-incidence that both of you addressed Subbu's issue on the same day.😆

Story wise, this OS was good. The 'what if' question is a really scary one. I liked how you wrote Raman's fears.

The only thing I didn't connect with is the aggression Raman showed. The Raman I understand would never treat Ishita in a way which kept reminding me of marital rape. If he was angry, he would have pushed her away and shouted but not done this. This is your story and what happened was kind of essential for the story line but I didn't like that part. It has nothing to do with what you wrote but for whom you wrote. I hope you understand what I am trying to say.