After The Storm - IshRa SS | Chp 5 - Page 39

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shreya

@shreya98

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

i like the way u write :) u r so good at ur words :) nice updt continue soon...

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dreamy-sa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

aani, u have chosen the perfect words that hooks us to read ur story. ur writing style is excellent. the way u described ishita through raman's pov is amazing.

I am happy that u are writing an ss🤗

I guess I have to save comments for future parts also. 😆

thanks for the pm😳

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javeria

@Javeria3991

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

awesome start

Raman thoughts are very well written. He is feeling guilty and want to makee up of his mistake, he wants to understand ishita, make her fell special. I think he is the first one in her life who is planning to do so much for her smile and thats fantastic.

eager to know about his gift.

thanks for the pm.

update next part soon

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Ami

@beebutterfly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

Loved how Raman was going over all the things that made Ishita who she was in his head. This realization phase so beautifully conveyed through your words, this was a wonderful read. :)

As if, he is supposed to be grumpy all the time.

Hehe, this made me chuckle. It's so RKB! I almost answered out loud that yes, you are supposed to be grumpy of the time, at least that's how you were before you started falling in love.😳

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FieryLioness

@FieryLioness

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+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#25

hey Aani a new story from u, thats grt...

i wanna start wid ur title...

very very apt title ...not only for IshRa but for we viewers as well... this track was no less then a storm for us...finally its over *sigh*

and as usual i know i never gonna get in show , what i want

so m happy here we have ur story...i always know what we don't get in show, we have here in ur thoughts...

loved the start wid Raman's thoughts abt what he feels for her , and how much he hurt her in past

and wanna make up for it... loved it

something we all wanna see in show too...

awesome start Aani...continue soon

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

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+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#26

Res :)

*** EDITED... I think I will hold this spot for my comments on all the future parts too :)

Part 1:
I will start with complaints this time😈 😃

- Story was TOO SHORT (this is a minor problem, i can live with it... but not the next one)
- you are a tease Aani... what was that ending 😡😲😆 i never thought you'd do that to us... seriously...

If you update next part immediately tomorrow, then i will take BOTH my complaints back 😆

chalo, timepass done... the first part is beautiful Aani. I have always thought (and hoped) that Raman will realise his feelings for her first. and this track also reinforced that for me. So I love how your first chapter showed his thoughts. I love that he realises that he's messed up big time. and at the same time he knows that she is a special person for him. very well written my friend 👏 this story of yours is going to be a 'relief' space for me because I am going to get exactly what I want to happen. I am not sure about it on the show.

I will not be able to give you a quote this time, because I need to know more about what is coming next. I think you know what I mean 😛 so'll I'll get you a quote in the next one Aani 🤗

Part 2:

Wonderful second part Aani👏

If anyone asked you to write a book on the differences between Ishita and Shagun, you could do that effortlessly.😃 I love how you incorporated the Ashok proposal part into the story!

Pricesless line >> "He honestly pities Ashok now"

and the GOT fan in you had to come out and play huh 😉 that part was very cleverly incorporated my friend!!!

I read this part before the episode yesterday, before their banter had started and your piece felt so nostalgic 😊

Oye... where is the gift ??? another cliffhanger ???😲

Part 3:

Chalo, you didnt make me wait long. so 🤗

This part was so emotional Aani. I am not able to find the right words.

When Ruhi was taking care of Raman, my mind went to a different track and I discussed this with Vyas also. It was almost as if Ishita was 'training' Ruhi to take care of her father, in case Ishita wasn't around. I was so scared by that scene, in spite of the cuteness of it

Some day, when I am in the mood, I would like to express that side of that scene also (but so many happy things are happening right now ;) so I will wait)

coming back to your OS. Perfect gift. You know how much I liked that gift concept! That is something that is of utmost value only to Ishita. The woman who cannot have children of her own, has now been given the gift of a child she can call her own!!! and the best part is that Raman understands how much important this gift is to her 👏

the way you wrote about her thoughts when she was guessing about what the 'next-level' could be... even that was wonderful Aani !!! She still remembers that Raman listened to Shagun, so what if she is out of his life, and he doesnt love her. He still listened to her. Ishita is so mature when it comes to analysing people's actions!!!

so, now i think I have something that could go with all your 3 parts so far... its not a quote this time... but a song. hope you find it appropriate

Aye Zindagi!!! Gale laga le...

Humne bhi tere har ek gam ko,

Gale se lagaya hai...hai na??

Hamne bahane se, chupke zamane se,

Palkon ke parde main gar bhar liya,

Tera sahara mil gaya hai zindagi...

Chota sa saaya tha,

Aankhon main aaya tha,

Humne to boondon se man bhar liya,

Chota sa saaya tha,

Aankhon main aaya tha,