ISHRA OS Tagathon # 3:Trouble is a friend

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

ThruMyEyez-Nita

@ThruMyEyez-Nita

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

You amaze me each and every single time with an amazing story. You have amazing talent and thanks for sharing your pieces with us. It's an absolute pleasure reading them. 😊

Quote

sai

@sai14

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Aani, This is beautiful. You got the characters down to the T and i could actually visualize the scenes. amazing!

love that Raman lied about car breaking down 😆

hopefully i will write mine tomorrow or thursday by the latest 😳 I haven't watched YHM since yesterday, so hopefully tomorrow i can catch up on the shows and get used to Ishra mannerisms again 😆

Edited by sai14 - 11 years ago

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: dark.lig8
3 people continued this story each n evry part is amazing n differnet loved each part loved everyone hard work u three r best writters of YHM forum i must say

thanks hon 😊 its been fun collaborating on this for us too! I hope Lucky and Isha agree with me 😳

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: happenstance
Aani this is just so beautiful. Incredible piece of writing as always.

Couple of things which really stood out for me-

Loved your use of Hindi dialogue, it was so in line with their dialogue on screen. This is why I say you need to be a screen writer! It was seamlessly interwoven into the scene.

"Their breathes kissing" seriously I had butterflies reading the whole holding her hands behind her back part 😳 😳

Also the way you incorporated the car into the scene was just so coherent and completely realistic of what could have happened after where Lucky left off. Oh and how I love our RKB and his bright ideas bechara gets floored by his wife each time.

Thanks for your amazing piece, can't wait to read the next part.

thanks a lot 😊

@bold - i was so nervous because I dont write lines in Hindi usually but this fic, when I thought of it - the language itself was hindi when the words they would say came to me hence I took a shot at it, so happy to see it actually worked! And screenwriter - wow I never gave a thought to this like I said I need inspiration else I am lost 😳

@red - this part just wrote itself but once it was down on paper it felt apt also when I visualized IshRa it was just ... no words for it, that was my exact expression 😳😆

@blue - did some plays back in school learned to use props 😉😆

@pink - 😆 yep takkar ki biwi jo hai! 😆

I cant wait for Sai to take this forward too 😊

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: --mancityfan--
First of all a very cool idea

My apologies to you both isha and lucky as I read both your parts and loved it but forgot to comment

And good continuation aani

It is interesting how 3 ppl can carry same story forward and it is call team work

thanks so much Vyas and yep this was team-effort honestly I have never done something like this but it was so much fun! somehow like we were playing some game here where each of us had the same ingredients and had to come up with a dish of our won 😛😊

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: swati_bhatia
wow..loved it :)

thanks Swati 😊

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: cool_aparna
Aani, as always ur writings are vivid and beautifully expressed...very well continued ...I had said after Isha had posted the first part that it had freshness and the freshness is still there till the 3rd part...

the hindi dialuges and even the haryanvi kinda hindi of those policemen ...very well written...i actually loved every bit of it...but the most loved the convo IshRa had at the end sharing their crazy moments...

Never regret if ur writing end up long...its better then...keep it up👍🏼

And Sai ATB !!!

Hey thanks Aparna I am so happy you liked my contribution 😊

@bold - thanks once again

@red - I never regret it Aparna I go with the flow I worry the readers may fall asleep 😆

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: lwrimaforever
Lovely OS Aani Di 😊 Thanks fr pm 😉 Pls do write more on Ishra & pm Me 😃

thanks Lipi 😊

Quote

Aani

@EkPaheli

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: paru_rox

Absolutely engrossing and I couldn't stop reading :) .

Both of them seem to be caught in this emotional roller coaster where they are unable to understand their own and the other person's feelings. Each word, each action is a revelation to both of them. More than pride, its the fear of rejection keeping them from exploring this turmoil. Beautifully written by you.

Quite hilarious when Raman was caught in his own lie about the car breakdown. Poor guy did not know how to react 😆. Their conversation about their wedding moments was so touching. I hope they show something like that in the show. Raman went there once when he was in Mumbai and bought up the Rasam episode.

Loved the update Aani 👏. It was fabulous as usual.

Hey Parul thanks 😊

@bold - I believe they are very attracted to each other and personally are sinking into a comfort zone, which is not yet love but when it does become love they will have the hardest time not because of the other person but themselves - their pasts and the rejections they faced then, though in different circumstances and for diff reasons but it will have a major impact on them so thats where this idea stem from 😳

@red - inspired courtesy Mihir' engagement fiasco- even Mr CEO can be trapped sometimes 😆

@green - me too esp about the ritual like you said Raman went there once all by himself, and I personally think of all the ceremonies and rituals in their marriage he enjoyed this one the most 😆