Between the shadow and the soul. - An IshRa OS. - Page 9

Originally posted by: 4856

wow very well written...loved that it was from Raman's point of view...!!

Originally posted by: 13MEGHA05

wow... very nice one...

i like to read your stories... they are always wonderful...

Originally posted by: rev4eva

A beautifully story weaved with so much of emotion and perfection. Totally in love with your work.

Originally posted by: .ProperPatola.

Another beautiful piece of writing by You Aani...This was superb.

Loved how you potrayed raman's awareness about Leechad's intentions towards Ishu's and his Inner feelings and protectiveness. Another thing that was highlight for me that Raman was able to how clearly differentiate between Ishu and Shagun!

The choice of words while Raman was admiring Ishu were simply beautiful and subtle. Well done.

Superb stuff.

Originally posted by: momb24

Very well written 👏

Originally posted by: loveabletwinz

Aaaniii!!!!!

Sigh!!! The first line itself is enough to bring a smile to our faces!!!!

AnnJan 🤗 thanks a lot gals aww that's so sweet of you to say☺️ 😃

Her simplicity makes her look divine and resplendent at the same time. Tempting and sacred all at once. - Your description of Ishita was beautiful, and your choice of words is just brilliant!! Who would have thought to describe her this way; an oxymoron of sorts, but perfect to describe Ishita.

This line is inspired by Divz herself, man I am a gal and she makes me go all when she smiles, so to a guy the reaction has to be so, so stupendous. She can be the girl next door and even the woman you want to dream about, so that was the idea which made me write the line 😳

Only someone paying as close an attention to her as he is would notice the oddity of her movements. The recurring bout of sickness that makes her stops every few moments. Makes her close her eyes, place a hand on her neck- take a few deep breaths. Then as if, nothing were wrong with her, move on to the next person, the next thing on the list that needs her attention. - We LOVE this!!! First, we love that Raman is noticing her at all, and second, we love that he is watching her so intently, and knows when she isn't right in her space...

Ah this I must attribute to RKB/KP - the way he has this INTENSE gaze whenever he is with her ☺️, and at the moment he isn't even in love with her, he TRIES not to look at her too much, so when he is intent on making her the focus of his attention I cant even imagine what that will be like

Aani!!! What do we even say about the next few lines you write for Raman...his amusement and slight, unintentional, acceptance of the comments that people are making about him and Ishita...his attentive, purposeful gaze that is tinctured with slight caution, weary for the woman who is his wife and of the man who is his brother-in-law...you write his conflict so beautifully and you especially write beautifully about his revulsion at Parmeet's intent!!!

This line was added because I felt it would be so silly if no one even NOTICED Raman ogling his wife, his newly married wife at that esp when an entire society would be gathered, so naturally if someone notices they might talk and since newly married couples usually are teased to no extent about not getting enough of each other I felt why not write that 😉😆 And while Raman is not there yet in his mind, even if he has been celibate for 6 years now, it cant bother him too much to be considered as a MAN in his prime attracted to his wife 😳

This might be a very small part in your story, but I love that you chose to have Parmeet gawking at Ishita from behind a news paper...it is so symbolic of the coward and disgrace he is, and how he is hiding behind a facade.

OH wow, you two are amazing I love how you have interpreted something I wrote, honestly I dint even realize this, but it does make sense 😛 and I wrote this because, I sorta wanted to show a difference in both the men who are gawking at Ishita, one who hides because his intentions have nothing but malice in them, and the other has no such plans in his head and while people may misinterpret his actions he isnt bothered because -1) she is his wife, 2) he has the right as per that and 3) he knows what he is doing has a reason which needs no justification from his end 😳 Also... people notice Raman and not Parmeet doing the same thing because- one has nothing to hide while the other hides behind everything. One is diabolical and the other is merely an open book who is being read the wrong way around 😳

My GOODNESSS!!!! WHAAT WAS THAT WEAVE OF WORDS YOU SEW IN THE END???? HAILA!!!!!!!!!!!! If there was any piece of writing that was so painstakingly palpable, it had to be this!!!!!! Aani!!!! You write that scene between Raman and Ishita so so utterly beautifully ( I don't think there has been a more understated comment made before!!! LOL) UFFF!!! Raman and Ishita are gorgeous together...Thank you for allowing us to feel the intensity of that moment they share...what amazing words!!!!

Bravo, maestro!!!! Bravo!!!!! Love love loveddd this!!! I wish I could quote every line that we loved! But that is just impossible! We loved this OS in its entirety! I love that you can give us Raman's perspective, and perhaps, next time, you can give us one with Ishita's perspective? In either case, you really do know these characters well and we would love to read whatever it is you have up your sleeve next!!!

Love,

AnnJan!

thanks so so much aww you two are the sweetest, and hmm, an OS or SS from Ishu' POV nice idea 😛 tell you what you have planted seeds in my mind now 😈 so let me just cook something up I might just get hit by an idea 😃 thanks so much for that 🤗🤗

Love,

Aani 😃

Originally posted by: Arooj.M

So here it's Raman who first sees Parmeet's evil intentions towards his wife. The way Raman becomes protective of her, watching her all the time to make sure she's safe and secure, away from that stupid perv! And the dori scene was so sweet. And Raman noticing every little thing about his Ishu. This perv managed to do something good by making Raman realise his care for Ishita, but that doesn't make the perv's actions any good, I still hate him LOL. Loved the way you delved into Raman's thoughts, it was an enjoyable read. ❤️

Originally posted by: rajji-cutest

loved it !

please write a similar scenes with this time ISHITA watching RAMAN at a party and we could have HER thoughts too ;)

like how she likes him despite his rudeness, how she can be jealous of other woman watching him, then how she feels when they get close to each other "ruhi ke liye".