Os IshRa (Ishita & Raman) - Gunja Sa hai koi Iktara!!

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PreciousPri

@PreciousPri

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

This was beautiful .. honestly just beautiful

I was imagining this occurring on screen while reading your OS.

You kept the character traits of IshRa especially during their argument and gave us the ultimate sorry from Raman and Ishu getting to see the pain of Raman

Please do continue writing ... you have a gift 😃

Edited by PreciousPri - 11 years ago

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Sandisha Drepaul

@disha93

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Superb OS!!!! Very beautifully written!!! 👏

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rekha

@re123

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

yoo namy...🤗

first of all thanks for penning down for ishra...you proved great in dear 😊

ur style made me fall in love for ishra more❤️...

ur are a wonderful writer dear..i feel proud fr u buddy

i felt like i was in dreamland of ishra...each an every sequence was good..i felt like really watching it on screen😃

dekho cvs better read this ...u get a better scene on screen😉

ishra is famous for their fight...that part i loved most...had fun how they blame each other what happend..

hurting part...why raman hurts ishu ...and want to say sorry😆

angry man raman abut his emotions he never relives to other person..whether he is in real pain

famous dailogue adi beta and exwife wala ...raman fumes like anything...u used it too dear😆

ravan kumar😆

i love here caring avatar hoo then raman's tic for tac dialogue too

ruhi and ishu conversation was lovely dear...

i love this mother and daughter relationship...it is cute naa she handles ruhi

last part made me even curious dear..😉..u write up made even crazy..hat off this one👏

the way he said sorry haa ...he called her ishu😳..hope he will say same in onscreen

emotional part of raman confessing his pain to here ..her consoling ohhh really touchy

demanding husband asking his wife ...and answer also ❤️

thanks for pm dear...

making my day bright with this os😃

do write many on ishra dear...it will pleasure for me

demanding my comment thanku🤗

🤗🤗

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Annet and Janet

@loveabletwinz

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

NAMYYY!!!

we LOVED reading your OS! It was so relate-able and we could totally imagine this back and forth banter between Ishita and Raman.

The way you describe the tension and argument between Raman and Ishita was perfect!!! The anger and hurt was so palpable through the lines.

Some of my favorite lines you wrote ---

"Heard Adi's' name from her mouth, Raman's throat ached with the need to roar"

"Pain wrestled with anger as he continued"

"He saw shattering tenderness in her eyes.. She noticed dark anger mingled with pain in his gaze" --- OH this line was awesome!!! love the contrast of emotions you show in these two.

loved the scene where you wrote about Raman calling Ishita "Ishu" and how he calls Aditya "Adi". That was such a perfect comparison because it allowed Ishita to see how hurt Raman was :(

"She fought the urge to wipe tears from his face, to pat his chest where it ached, to soothe his pain." - AHH! This is beautiful!! love this line! I am sorry, we are suckers for little details, and the lines you write are so beautiful, and filled with so much angst that it makes us ache for Raman here!! You actually, honestly, had us in tears...these lines are so tender, and so beautiful, but the force to you to really feel the kind of emotions Raman is going through! SO beautiful!!

Awww the end was fantastic!!!!!!! Raman, helpless, but hopefull that Ishita wouldn't leave him!! LOVED your OS!! Please do write more often on ISHRA. we aresorry for picking out all the little lines...we really do love details in a story and you did them so well!

Edited by loveabletwinz - 11 years ago

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PrateeK

@-CrazyPraT-

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Wow baby,, its wonderful OS!!!
grt job..😃
KEEP WRTNG!!!😳
Btw nami darling, u hve never said tat u r a amazing wrtr..😳😳

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lourel24

@lourel24

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

it was just beautiful.loved the line"I don't want to like you but I do. And.. and I am not gonna tell you that I really like you. "it was really touching.

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Shwetha

@-Shwetha-

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Nami, wow...I dun know how to express in words...such a beautiful OS...👏 Awesomely written ...👍🏼.

Love is a mesmerizing feeling, where the feelings cannot be explained, but felt...The hidden love feelings have been beautifully captured by you in the OS...😳😳 while reading , I feet like iam seeing it...😳😳

So In a Geetha ma style...stupendo fantabulosuly fantastic OS...👏👏👍🏼

Keep writing more...😳😳

Edited by -Shwetha- - 11 years ago

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uamaz

@uamaz

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Absolutetly fabulous, please do continue to write in this forum. 👏

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BeautyFooL

@BeautyFooL

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: simples28
Oh wooow yaar😊😊..so beautifully written😃😃Its exactly like how they would behave in the show😛..When will Raman break down in front of Ishu like this in the show..Aaahhh..Waiting for that dayThank you for this OS😃..please continue writing😊😊

The first comment on OS and that too so lovely..Thanks for your kind words and all the appreciation 😃 I am glad you liked it.. The inspiration for this scene was Raman's emotional break down in Ishita's clinic under influence of anesthesia'.. I really wanted to write something similar to that scene from so long.. And I found perfect opportunity to depict it with ths OS..Bearing that in mind, I wrote the last part of this OS.. So happy you enjoyed reading it.. Will defo try to write more ...

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BeautyFooL

@BeautyFooL

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#20

@Anne- Spark @ Serendipity @ Re, thanks for reading it.. and reserving the post.. Hope you would Edit' it soon 😉

@dreamygatz aka Gayathri, I understand your problem..Exams are more imp.. Tussi tension na lo..I wont let you forgt to unres' ths post ;)