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Plot Pundits

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Viswasruti

The story line appears to be following an undesirable plot line. Rules forbid making a different connection between the siblings.

Before anyone raises a complaint, let's do our best to clear up the haze.

The plot should proceed logically and within the bounds of societal norms.

One thing I must say is that every single participating author contributed a lovely perspective to the story, each chapter is quite engaging, and it once again demonstrated that IF is teeming with some wonderful authors.

Removed my segment. My intention was actually not on these lines to be honest.
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Dream Weavers

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Quantum-Dot

I am removing my segment...You please carry forward...I am already very messed up with work in real life, its not possible for me to rewrite the segment. All my thoughts are messed up with this twins angle.

Simi❤️, you didn't make a mistake. This component disappeared from your mind because you were so caught up in developing a few characters. All writers experience it. It implies that you were actively involved in writing your story❤️. I really admire how mature you are as a writer to take prompt action.🤗
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Narrative Ninjas

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Quantum-Dot

I haven't read the summary again...I just read your segment where Manav's role was not clearly mentioned as far as I remember, so I can't get away with the fact just like that Kangana's husband didn't know the truth. Plus this couple didn't have any other child too. So that way, I made Veronica the ultimate heir and owner of the Mehta Enterprises who is Manav Mehta's daughter. Sam and Abhay are nowhere a part of the Mehtas. This whole twin angle and the logic behind it got over my head to be honest. Well my thoughts got messed up with the extreme work pressure...so I am removing my segment. Next persons can please continue.

Thanks, Simi for understanding the issue. ❤️

You don't have to remove the entire segment, you can fix it if you wish.

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Plot Pundits

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Thanks, Simi for understanding the issue. ❤️

You don't have to remove the entire segment, you can fix it if you wish.

If someone wants to continue...they are free to do so. All my thoughts are messed up now. I need some free time to process my thoughts. To reason one, I messed up the whole plot. Sorry peeps.
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Narrative Ninjas

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Quantum-Dot

If someone wants to continue...they are free to do so. All my thoughts are messed up now. I need some free time to process my thoughts. To reason one, I messed up the whole plot. Sorry peeps.

No harm done! Hota hai.

Take care of yourself, de-stress and come back to contribute when you’re feeling better! ☺️ Parm is doing the next one.

Edited by LizzieBennet - 2 years ago
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Plot Pundits

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Viswasruti

Simi❤️, you didn't make a mistake. This component disappeared from your mind because you were so caught up in developing a few characters. All writers experience it. It implies that you were actively involved in writing your story❤️. I really admire how mature you are as a writer to take prompt action.🤗

I was trying to find reasons about how Panther was tampering oxygen supplies of the patients in such a hospital with tight security and how Manav didn't know about his wife's pregnancy and twins got separated. On the verge of finding them, I became like that small baby elephant who fell on the mud by becoming over-excited.

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Plot Pundits

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

No harm done! Hota hai.

Take care of yourself, de-stress and come back to contribute when you’re feeling better! ☺️ Parm is doing the next one.

Thanks! I can post the first half as it is, if you all allow, anyways.
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Narrative Ninjas

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Quantum-Dot

Thanks! I can post the first half as it is, if you all allow, anyways.

I’ll leave it to Parm to decide since she’s the creator and is doing the next segment as well

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Mystery Masterminds

Posted: 2 years ago

Ladies,


There will be a little delay with next segment! I have both kids under the weather and I barely slept 2-3 hours per night in last few nights🥱

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Mystery Masterminds

Posted: 2 years ago

Segment #18


Jiya texted the Panther: “Thank you <3”


Sai was dead. Just as his beloved wife Shweta. Both deserved to die.

Revenge, Jiya thinks, is a beautiful tool but a tool nonetheless: it must be used with the right people!

But why didn't she feel satisfied? Why wasn't that weight that oppressed her heart lightening? What was missing?

Old memories crowded her mind.


A young Jiya smiled ecstatically at the idea of their imminent marriage.


He was perfect, he was her whole world, he was hers…


"I am sorry but I am breaking up with you, Jiya..."


Sai’s words died away like a distant echo. Her phone rang twice before she picked it up!


"Is your little vacation now ? I need you in Brazil for your next contract" said an icy voice.

"One trip to post office and I am done with my…vacation" replied Jiya!

"Your plane leaves in 2 hours! Check your email for details" And the call disconnected! Jiya was ready to leave the chapter named Sai behind her!

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The day was dull, big black clouds swollen with rain chased each other on the horizon. A gust of icy wind sent leaves left and right, destroying a mound patiently collected by a caretaker of the cemetery

A funeral is never nice. Just one can be excruciating, a waking nightmare. Two funerals now filled the venue that day. Families and friends were united to mourn their loved ones. Sai and Swetha were dead.


——

Veronica sipped the hot coffee, while staring at the flames meandering in the fireplace. It was raining cats and dogs outside.

She hadn't seen Sam for a few days and she already missed him like crazy but that detachment was necessary, she had to reflect ... think.

She loved him immensely and everything had been great between them until three weeks ago.

Until the day after Sai and Shwetha’s funerals!
Until the courier delivered an envelope to her and she opened it.


Samrat and Abhay DNAs report! 99.9 % match…twin brothers!

She sighed heartbroken, how would Sam have reacted knowing this secret? She put a hand to her head pounding…she was afraid to lose him…she didn't want to lose him…she wanted to be with him.

Forever!

She had to tell him, she couldn't hide anymore, but how? Like all brothers, albeit twins, they were different in character and appearance. As a rule, twins like them have similar traits, while these two couldn't be more different. They were day and night! Light and dark!

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