EKAKI CH.10:THE END:P.15 - Page 6

Originally posted by: SenRazia

Jhanvi Di,

YOUR STORY IS SUPERB!!!!!

Every aspect is perfect!! The emotion, the accuracy.. BANG ON!!

This could be a very hit show if turned into one !!

LOVED IT!!

P.S. I am a Bong too and your bengali is perfect :)

DD ur story is awesome
I just luv it

How could Anika reject him... Jai seems to be such a nice guy

Nd Plzzz post the next part asap

Heyy Janhavi.. loving the pace and the story.. and the characters.. and thanks for sharing it babes.. sorry for the late reply.. looking forward to the next chapter :)

Originally posted by: Anokhisharma

DD ur story is awesome
I just luv it

How could Anika reject him... Jai seems to be such a nice guy

Nd Plzzz post the next part asap

THANX ANOKHI. AM UPDATING ONE PART DAILY. SO KEEP A TRACK EVEN IF PMS DON'T REACH YOU 😃

Originally posted by: rupsii

Heyy Janhavi.. loving the pace and the story.. and the characters.. and thanks for sharing it babes.. sorry for the late reply.. looking forward to the next chapter :)

Poor Jai...Anika rejected him

Originally posted by: peeyara

Poor Jai...Anika rejected him

If Jai loves her truly he will respect her decision and may be some day(if writer wills😆) Jai will be united with Anika

p.s.: I am Pro at HinLishDu 🤣 🤣 that is my mother tongue so i understand it easily...i wont mind regular updates but kabhi kabhi comment karne mai late hosakti hoon😆

6. CHANGING TIDES

Door bell rings. Nani opens it.

Nani- itni akal nahi di hain tumhe ki barish ho toh kahi ruk jao aur agar nahi toh rikshaw lekar aao. Yeh bemausam barsaat ke bhi kya kehne. Jaldi aa ja.

Jai departs to his room silently. Nani is amused at his behavior.

Nani- oye ani, iss chirkoot ko kya hua hain? Chup chaap se nikal gaya? Na kuch bola na behas ki? Ye toh aathva ajooba hi ho gya.

Anika- use jaane de nani. Kuch der baad ho jaega theek.

Nani- jhagda toh nahi hua tum dono ka? Anika kya fark padta. Kaha na maine rehne de use aap.

Next morning

Anika- yeh jai kaha marr gaya? Nani use bheje jaldi please.

Nani- beta wo toh kab ka nikal gaya.

Anika (thinks)- accha ab yeh tashan dikhaana shuru sahaab ka. Main bhi haar nahi maanungi.

*Flashback starts*

Bindiya- pata nahi itni der kaha ho gayi inko. Ab tak nahi aaye daftar se.

Durga- aa jayenge maa chinta na karo.

Achanak ek badi gaadi dware khadi ho jaati hain.

Bindiya- basu ji aap? Durga ke baba kidhar hain? Badi der se unka intezaar ho raha hain.

Basu- bhabhiji maap korben ( forgive me). Par shanta ko dil ka daura..

Bindiya- ki? Ab kaise hain woh? Aur kaha hain?

Basu- shanta ab iss duniya mein nahi raha.

Bindiya breaks down with this news. They bring out shantaram's dead body.

Days pass by. There is an air of melancholy surrounding the house. With his death, family faced a lot for the daily bread and butter. Hope never leaves you even when you leave it. Family rejoiced again when durga got a government job. Her efforts through these years helped her a lot. She forced bindiya to leave the work that she had taken up again.

Bindiya- durga, charu ka phone aaya tha. Keh rahi thi raja ke liye ek rishta hain. Unke hi rishtedaar hain. Yahi Kolkata main rehte hain.

Durga- acchi baat hain aur agar didi keh rahi hain to vichar karne ki koi jarurat hi nahi. Aap haan keh dijiye.

Bindiya- aise kaise haan kar doon? Teri shaadi ka kya? Aur raja toh kuch kamaata bhi nahi hain... baap ki jagah par miili toh thi naukri apne garam dimaag se wo bhi gawa baitha.

Durga- aap meri chod dijiye maa. Dusro ki chinta kare. Raja ki kamaayi ka main kuch karti hoon.

Durga's office

Durga- haan dada wahi chinta hain, naukri toh raja se hone se rahi. Soch rahi hoon factory hi kaam aa sakti hai jis se khud ka vyaapar ho.

Dada- arre haan gehno ki kaarigari kaisi rahegi? Khub maang hain inki bazaar main.

Durga- isme toh bahot paise lag jayenge lekin. Jama jamaya toh hain maine thoda par

Dada- toh baki udhaar le le kahi se. chukka dena waqt se aur kya. Bala to talegi ab tumhari.

Durga- haan yeh toh hain. Main chatterjee sahib se baat karti hoon. Shayad baat ban jaye.

Dada- bhalo. (nice)

In the lunch time

Durga- mujhe baat karni hai aapse anmol.

Anmol- ji kahiye.

Durga- mujhe raja ki madad karni thi. Chand paison ki jarurat hain. Agar aap.

Anmol- kyun nahi raja mere bhai jaisa hi hain. Main ghr se intezaam karta hoon. Chinta mat karo.

He cups her hand to console her. She shoves it away.

Anmol chaterjee was a worker like durga. Same post. But had an additional benefit from his family.

He was actually smitten by durga. She chose to ignore but the world did not.

Jamayi huyi rakam se raja ki pareshaani ka hal nikal aaya. Factory lag gayi. Ladki ka haath bhi mil gaya. Zindagi phir chal padi. Lekin yaha bindiya ki chinta badhne lag gayi.

Bindiya- tumhe andaaza hain durga?

Durga- kya maa?

Bindiya- ab toh raja ki shaadi bhi ho gayi. Waha charu ko bhi beti ho gayi. Tumhara kya? Ek toh umar badh rahi hain upar se..

Durga- aur kya?

Bindiya- rehte hum Bengal mein, mera maayka Bengali par mere baccho ke saath naam lagta hain naik jo hain Marathi. aise toh ho chali tum chaaro ki shaadi.

Durga- itni si baat? Theek ho jayegi. Kuch na kuch kar hi lenge.

Bindiya- kaise? Ab har koi toh meri tarah dusri jaat mein shaadi nahi karta.

Durga- maine soch liya hain maa kal court jaakar kaanuni taurr par naam badalvaayenge.

Bindiya- aise kaise? Wo judge aur wakil tumhare dada pardada hain jo chutki bajaate karenge? Moti rakam deni padegi unn chaar aksharo ko hataane ki.

Durga- aap chai pijiye aur yeh baaki mujh par chod dijiye.

Durga's office

Dada- didi yeh kaam hain toh tedha par ho jayega. Ab maa durga ki kripa se aapka darja bhi badh gaya hain. Aap yaha hastakshar kar de main de aata hoon court mein.

Durga nods.

After a month

Durga- dada aapse kuch kaam kaha tha mahine pehle. Ho gaya kya?

Dada- ji didi, bas aapko wahi kaagaz dene aaya tha. Naam naik se roy ho gaya hain aapka.

Durga- dhanyabaad dada. Aap yeh raakh le.

Dada- nahi didi hum aapka kaam commission ke liye nahi karte.

Durga- phir bhi rakh le. Upahaar hain.

Dada- khub khub dhanyabaad. Didi bas aapki mushkile hal ho jaye.

Durga- chaterjee ko bhej de dada.

After sometime, there is a knock on the cabin's door.

Durga- aashoon. (come in)

Anmol- aapne bulaya tha madam.

Durga- ji haan basa (sit down).

Anmol sits.

Anmol- kya kaam tha durga? Sab theek toh hain na?

Durga- haan maa durga ka aashirwaad hain. Aap mujhe madam kahe to behtar hoga. Aap ke paise lautaane the mujhe.

Anmol- de deti aaram se jaldi kya thi?

Durga- ye rahi aapki rakam sutt samet. Aap ja sakte hain.

Anmol reluctantly goes.

At home

Durga- maa le aapka kaam ho gaya. Aj se hum naik nahi roy ke naam se jaane jayenge.

Bindiya- iss baat par roshgulla toh banta hain. Benoy jao bazaar se mithayi le aao.

Durga- mujhe kya maloom tha iss choti si baat pe mithayi bategi. Main khud le aati.

Bindiya- bas ab meri chinta door. Shampa ki baat chalani hogi kahi.

Durga remains stunned.

V.O.

Durga

Sahi baat hain maa ki. Shampa bhi 17 ki ho gayi hain. Uske bare me na soche toh kiske bare me soche. Waqt bhi kitni tezi se badh gaya ki meri umar hi nikal gayi. Mujhe koi aitraaz nahi par samaj ko hain.kunwari reh gayi toh maa ke liye pareshaani badh jayegi. Koi toh hona chahiye jis se apni jimmedari baant sakoon. Koi toh ho jo mera apna ho. Mera bhi dil chahta hain ki main ek aam zindagi jeeu. Ghar pe rehke sabka khayaal rakhoon. Na jaane iss jahil zindagi ne bhi mujhe mard ban ne par majboor kar diya hain.

A tear escaped her eyes. She sighed but alas no one was there to hear her

*flashback ends*

DD will Anmol wait for Durga ? Hope she will not remain an ATM.

Originally posted by: gmgi

DD will Anmol wait for Durga ? Hope she will not remain an ATM.