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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hola peeps😃
I m Rads not really new to this forums ,I have an ongoing fiction here...n well writing's my passion...
My kiddo who u may know as Maya/Mugsy...
kept encouraging me to write an independent fiction ,and due to some reasons or the other I couldnt...well this one's for u kiddo😃
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APPARITION
I could feel every bit of her,
her eyes,the color of a vast ocean,I could so swim in that deep sea...forever...
her skin...so soft...it felt like feather,
those luscious lips...
that curvy body...
I could read it in her eyes,
that passion,that want, that desire...
WE truly BELONGED to each other...
it was getting warmer every other second,
I could feel the heat as we came closer ...
she surrendered herself to me ...
her eyes closed...
her lips just inches apart from mine...
and just when I was about to kiss...
IT HAPPENED...
I heard a cry...
she needed me ...
she was in danger ...
a grave danger...I wanted to help,but I couldn't move, I was sweating profusely...
I wanted to shout,but my mouth suddenly felt dry ..so dry...water I needed water!!
nooo...all I really wanted was to help her...It was a blood bath all around me ..
I could hear a siren blaring around the corner,
my hands were covered in blood ...I ran out shouting...
HEEELP...PLEASE SAVE LYDIA
LYDIA ...LYDIA
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A hand gently shook me ,I looked around
and found myself in the familiar comfort of home sweet home,
and yet something was different,I was panting,sweating
she was trying to sooth me ,comfort me in the best way she could!!

"Are you okay??" she asked me in her sweet charming voice,calming me down ,thats what I had always adored in her ,the way she calmed me down,I was tired of those recurring dreams...
every night I saw the same dream...since forever!!
and only she had the power to control me, to tame me!!
what always bothered me was that she...
I was interrupted in my thought process when she suddenly faced me...
looked directly into my eyes...
and asked the most obvious and expected question
"who's Lydia?"

I looked her in the eye...and a lump formed in my throat...

"I wish I knew" I finally told her " If I knew her maybe I could have saved her"
Those chocolate brown eyes...suddenly looked intrigued... hate it?

her right eyebrow shot right up, it was evident that she didn't believe me!!
She just sat still for a few seconds...
then finally came close to me, I could feel the warmth,her comfort...
now I wont have to worry about the dream, it would be a GOOD NIGHT...
like always...she'd hug me tight,caress my hands...and we'd sleep in each other's arms!!!
EXCEPT!! That didn't happen...
she came close...
whispered something in my ears...
and all went blank!!!
"LIAR!!"
Those were the last words I heard on the face of this Earth!!
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A/N : like it ? hate it
do leave ur comments
coz honestly I dont know what made me write this!!1
love
Rads😃

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Oooh niiice!
Moi lous this! :D

Can I say this?
You seem to have improved.
There is a new beauty to your words, something deeper than before.
I can't exactly explain it, but this is what I feel.

The end was like, WHOA!
Totally unexpected!
Forgive the question, but she killed him? Out of jealousy and suspicion, yes?

I love the flow of this piece.
Smooth.

I'd love to see more from you here. :D
^Look how bossy I sound. :P

But I'm REALLY glad you followed my advice. :D
To be honest, I'm terrible at following FFs. Isliye OSs do it for me. *sheepish grin*

Again, I love you for this. :*
And for the dedication, of course. <3

~Kiddo
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: .Rhapsody.

Oooh niiice!

Moi lous this! :D
u do???? Yay!!😃😃

Can I say this?
You seem to have improved.
There is a new beauty to your words, something deeper than before.
I can't exactly explain it, but this is what I feel.
really😲😲
OMG!!! Thank u sooo much kiddo😳😳😳
I hope to keep improving😃

The end was like, WHOA!
Totally unexpected!
Forgive the question, but she killed him? Out of jealousy and suspicion, yes?
its an open ended story kiddo
feel free to interpret either way😉😉
yup she did kill him!!

I love the flow of this piece.
Smooth.

I'd love to see more from you here. :D
^Look how bossy I sound. :P
lol...u know me...writing is my drug...I m addicted to it!!
But I'm REALLY glad you followed my advice. :D
To be honest, I'm terrible at following FFs. Isliye OSs do it for me. *sheepish grin*
ya I know😉😉

Again, I love you for this. :*
And for the dedication, of course. <3
anytime kiddo..🤗

~Kiddo

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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres soon partner😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hmmm...lots of questions there...
In my mind, this Lydia would either have been a love from a past life or his past - which he may have forgotten.
Whoa...at the end. She killed him?

Loved reading! Thanks for the PM :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: bookworm-ALS--

hmmm...lots of questions there...
In my mind, this Lydia would either have been a love from a past life or his past - which he may have forgotten.
Whoa...at the end. She killed him?

Loved reading! Thanks for the PM :)


hmmm...maybe...or maybe not he was subconsciously blocking the actual day's event!
This OS iswritten kn a way that its open for any kind if interpretation
Yes she killed him
hey I m Rads...whats ur name??
Edited by ..Serendipity.. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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this is so beautiful...i lv ur way with wrds...
Aww...this was put up so beautifully...
Radsy di u r perfect...i lvd d way u created dat illusion...
And that last wrd...cho...lovd it...
Pls write mre i miss u!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gunseerat

this is so beautiful...i lv ur way with wrds...
Aww...this was put up so beautifully...
Radsy di u r perfect...i lvd d way u created dat illusion...
And that last wrd...cho...lovd it...
Pls write mre i miss u!


Gunsi.. 🤗
M so glad u liked my unusual experiment 😃 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yup! It's me. :)

Hi Rena! :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
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well- written👏
loved ittt😊

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