Atominis' Musings #1

I have been on India Forums for quite a while now. I was a silent reader of this section and some times wanted to post here. But always hesitated.😳

I am not much accomplished but I felt like trying my hand at writing and sharing whatever I write. I hope to share my write ups here and learn from your feedback. 😊

Here's sharing my first write up on depression and what it feels like :

A drop of poison makes the meal lethal
A prick of a thorn makes the rose fall from the hands...

Is there a storm outside or is it in my mind?
Is there fog out there or dust in my eyes?
What is it that stuffs my breath?
What is it that clutches at my neck?

(Depression: )

I am the claw that clutches at your throat!
I am the one that uses your own nails to claw your face,
tear your hair
Give you a scare,
take you here and there;
Yet make you end up nowhere...

I make your voice a jarring noise to others
and others' voice, a noise to you,
leaving you with no choice...

I burn you without flames,
I imprison you without bars.
I make you sting others,
I make others bite you.

I teach you a lot,
yet let you learn not...

I made your life a drag,
reduced a young girl to a hag...

I made you bleed,
cast doubt upon your breed,
took away your creed.

I took you by surprise,
never let you know how I engulfed you.

They say I'll be cured?
Let them comfort you!

I'll forever stoke your ire,
keep you stuck in a quagmire...

Hope you read it. Please do comment and let me know your feedback. Thanks.

it s beautifull...

wow so well written...n so PERFECT this is wht u wrote on depression..!!

good to c u anu aftr a long time..🤗

@Skep...long time back to see u...really missed ur comments on MP forum.
Wonderfully written !!! 👏 Continue writing 👍🏼

What a surprise - Skep , Beautifully described. You got the essence of depression so right and the varied stages. Like how you equate it to suffocation and the loss of creed that takes us momentarily away from the realness of "us".
tear your hair".

love the poem, so beautifully written. 🤗👏

Wow!!! This is like a deadly 'open' secret. In your face, and gut wrenchingly, brutally honest.

It's beautiful.

Wow... I really loved it... 👏

Do write more... And pm me 😊