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Posted: 12 years ago
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Extremely well written but thats not the only thing what made me comment its the...relateable level! Sorry don't know how else to put it but darn its like you took a day out of my life and described it so eloquently.
The friendship, the giggling, the shared secrets and whispers, the staring, the no-fairy-tale-hero-for-me thinking...and most of all the green tee! Oh god! That sounds so like me lol. Or maybe every girl is like that. Seriously too good and yeah, I too have a thing for olive green shirts lol.
I'm glad you ended it that way; with the stare following whom no one knows...so we can make up our own assumptions. For once I wish the not so pretty one gets her own fairy tale too.

Once again, beautiful writing and concept. Keep writing. :))
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ameres

Extremely well written but thats not the only thing what made me comment its the...relateable level! Sorry don't know how else to put it but darn its like you took a day out of my life and described it so eloquently.

The friendship, the giggling, the shared secrets and whispers, the staring, the no-fairy-tale-hero-for-me thinking...and most of all the green tee! Oh god! That sounds so like me lol. Or maybe every girl is like that. Seriously too good and yeah, I too have a thing for olive green shirts lol.
I'm glad you ended it that way; with the stare following whom no one knows...so we can make up our own assumptions. For once I wish the not so pretty one gets her own fairy tale too.

Once again, beautiful writing and concept. Keep writing. :))



Okay now I am grinning. You do have a thing for olive green tees? I do too😆

You had put it the perfect way... that touched my heart. Nothing satisfies you more than knowing that what you wrote had made someone to connect themselves to it. It is probably the best compliment any writer can ever receive so thank you for making me feel so special.🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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commenting to come back to this later **

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i felt sad for the narrator because she feels she is not beautiful enough to attract attention of the opposite sex 😛
very well written; the story was full of details and i could picture everything happening in front of my eyes
pls do write more
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Posted: 12 years ago
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beautifully written. It was just like any day of a girls life.
And I liked the ending too...
Keep writing more and PM me if possible.

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