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Posted: 14 years ago
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The poem below has nothing to do with me, I watched something today and it was related to submissive women and women who have to undergo a lot in their life !

I was so touched by their condition that I couldn't help but let these thoughts evade me and thought of writing an article but ended up with a poem. Don't know whether I'm doing justice or not, hopefully I am.


Also posted here : https://duskndawn-fatima.blogspot.com/2010/10/starless-black-night.html

The starless black night !




Sleep is a thing of past,
As love and longing has quelled my heart,
I was in distress and my soul squeaked,
For once please set me free.

Slowly days turn into night,
Yet euphoria is hard to find,
And my soul languishes in love,
Murmuring, just one more time.
Searching from door to door,
I realize I'm trapped inside,
Where factual is also a faade,
As life has turned into a haze.

I try to set myself free,
But end up molding myself to thee,
As quiescence and innocence is no longer there,
And sham has made its place there.

Starring at the seamless black sky,
Escapes nothing but a sigh,
And tears roll down my cheek,
As I realize I have a long journey to complete.

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Another poem of mine: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/writers-corner-books-stories-and-poems/1500999/memories-poem
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Like always, you've done a remarkable job! 😳 This poem has so much depth in it. It speaks volumes, it does!

P.S. Gimme some time. I'd go through your blog and comment. 😊

-Kanky
Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Shab,

I must say one thought took the pain and the situation so well,
you are kind of Atom which can be converted anything ,you might not know what you wrote
but it was touchy ,i was feeling the pain
and it had so much which can't be concluded also
keep writting more ,
Luv,
Aru Di
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Posted: 14 years ago
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profound
intense...loved it..
👏👏👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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👏 👏 👏
Beautiful
Mindblowing
Loved it
Thanks 4 sharing
Thanks 4 da pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
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fabulous poem Fatima thanks 4 d pm
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Its just out of the world...U've done a great job...portray their feelings beautifully...
I've become a fan of ur writing...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sorry for the delay Noor..But do we need to really say it again? Excellent work!!!👏

Here is a response from someone you know 😊

My wits just ponders what these words say,

Isn't it just your own conscience musing its way?

How long will we proceed this way,

It's time to trounce pains and make a new start today.

Edited by Nirvrithi - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wonderful poem👏
u have writeen very beautifully
loved it keep writing more👍🏼
Edited by jainypatel - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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like always beautiful poem dear

thx alot for the pm

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