False Mirror - Part 3- The Final Part Pg 8 - Page 6

@Aria : yeah, its true... when people part ways.. it becomes sort of impossible to see a future together... but loved the way u penned it there :) :) and i totally imagined the horses in a similar fashion... me standing somewhere in a valley, a setting sun and the seeing horses flying past me...!! i say it again, u are one talented writer :D :D loved reading ur reply...!

Heyyy Aria !! ;) :)

Originally posted by: SunainaTM007

Heyyy Aria !! ;) :)

uh, why isnt there any update on this fic??? or did you forget this one existed ??? hmmm, so, can i expect an update here, sometime this month???? missing this one too !!

Originally posted by: olive_green

Sunaina, I always forget about this ff until it shows up on my topics list.😆 I was working on IOL but thrashed what I had written as I didn't like it. :(

By the lake

I knew you'd be here, he stared out blankly at the lake ahead.

Those flowers are beautiful. He stirred slightly..and smiled, I know you love white orchids.

I thought you'd never remember. I lied, I knew he'd never forget.

This day? He asked turning towards me. He had lost some weight, needed a haircut badly but his dimples were still the same.

I smiled back, No, the flowers, silly! I playfully slapped his forehead..

And we slipped into silence, no one kept track of the minutes..

Finally he turned towards me, and spoke gently – over the past year, there hasn't been a day when I haven't seen you seated here all alone through that window. And he pointed to the hospital across the lake. Thank you for being there for me. And, I am sorry it took so long for me to get here. I could feel the pain in his voice as he spoke.

I couldn't if I wanted to, my world revolves around you. I suddenly felt liberated talking to him, as if he was setting me free, from these shackles, it was a strange sensation…

He wiped his moist eyes, and mouthed a soft, I miss you.

I miss you too. I placed my hand on his.

And we slipped into silence again…

We didn't realize, when the sun had set, and the winds had picked up as they usually did at this hour of the day. The simmering lights from beyond the lake, told us, it was time to leave.

I'm sorry for everything, he broke the silence. I love you…

I remained quiet…I have to go now, I whispered.

I know he said. And got up reluctantly, placed the flowers on the bench beside me; stared into my eyes as he spoke, I'll be back tomorrow, he could no longer hold back his tears. In all our years together, I had never seen him cry.

I watched his retreating back for as long as I could see his figure in the fading lights..till it merged into nothingness..into the void leaving nothing but emptiness where I sat.

I love you too, I told myself…as I moved my hand over the beautiful flowers he had placed beside me, it was nothing ...I couldn't trap time…we had lost.. had come too far from everything, from us and from life…Good bye my love.

~~~

As the morning sun seeped through the heavy tree cover surrounding the lake, a ray of light shone brilliantly, focused on the bench, where the dew-laden flowers remained untouched.

I know this is short, but it's the logical end to this truly experimental piece.

amazingly beautiful piece...and since im in a general emotional mood now a days, i loved it even more.
the pain, love- all of it was too good...i actually dont know how to comment this time...
but why the final part? no more os 😭
the scenes were really flashing in front of my eyes...the last one, where the orchids lay untouched was too good.
Hey i never even realized im not in ur buddy list...thnx for adding me...and the pm too
Sur

Originally posted by: Sur_Singhania

amazingly beautiful piece...and since im in a general emotional mood now a days, i loved it even more.
the pain, love- all of it was too good...i actually dont know how to comment this time...
but why the final part? no more os 😭
the scenes were really flashing in front of my eyes...the last one, where the orchids lay untouched was too good.
Hey i never even realized im not in ur buddy list...thnx for adding me...and the pm too
Sur

Originally posted by: olive_green

Thanks for your quick response Sur. Actually, even I am very emotional today, I don't know why..😕. This is the logical end to this piece don't you think? Appropriately a little sad...I don't know about any more OS, I seem to be suffering terribly from a writers block at the moment😭 - I can't seem to write a word for either of my FFs.

hehe seems like a common problem...i updated my ff on gun point a week ago...anyways since im on an official vacation, i do have a valid excuse.end is logical for sure...but still,its good to read more isnt it?

Originally posted by: Sur_Singhania

hehe seems like a common problem...i updated my ff on gun point a week ago...anyways since im on an official vacation, i do have a valid excuse.end is logical for sure...but still,its good to read more isnt it?