You are mine Sukor part 1 - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Liya ...I'm in telly updates also and I have read your sukor story there...'YOU ARE MINE ' is one of my most favourite Sukor story..and you are an amazing writer...when I read your story in Siyyam name I thought that is You only and you changed your user name ...but still had a doubt. .today I was about to message you but before that I saw your this post. .whoever did this very shameful act. .Giving your name to someone else's hardwork. ..it's ridiculous 😡 I'm sorry Liya...😭 but one thing someone steal your work but they can't steal your original talent..don't worry dear...we are all with you. ..Love ur writing's and love u😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#12
Wow rolerkoster ride updates...
All parts was marvellous...
My favourite sukor, I hate KN ans Co.
Thank god vimli and teju is there...hope so they cleared missunderstanding between sukor...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello Liya...sukor ff always excites me..and this one...was just FANTABULOUS...this one is for you👏👏👏
honestly speaking I have read only three parts coz I am supre busy in my studies,took half an hour break and utilised it to read,but I will read another ones as soon as I get free...you are super writer...
Keep it up👍🏼
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Posted: 8 years ago
#14
hi liya u r a great writer i am in love with ur story
waiting for next part eagerly
dont get depressed u know what is ur talent
u got a wonderful talent leave that saiyam
home he/she understands HIS/her mistake🥱
u dont worry
but pls post next part
i am waiting eagerly
but u gently told saiyam her/his the mistake
hats off to u 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#15
I am really sorry that i made you guyzz waiting for the next part.I was busy with studies ..sry everyone.

Story till now :
After the trip from gavi ,chakor was heart broken as she found divorce papers in suraj's jeep.she left from their without informing him. suraj realized his feelings for chakor ,as she went without informing him to aazdgangh he became worried for her...and lately realized that he loves her. On reaching back haveli,vimli enquired suraj about his were abouts and he spill the beans of his feelings for chakor and what happened during gavi trip! Ranjana over heared their conversation and made plan with kn and rag...as per their plan ,they made chakor hear their conversation.they said that suraj was actually with them and is cheating on chakor,he is acting like loving her so that they could break her when she falls in love with him...kn-rag-ranjan plan got succeded as chakor believed them.when suraj went to chakor's house they have massive show down and suraj is very hurt! Kn try to make use of sukor separation and poissened suraj's mind to take divorce from chakor,on the day of taking divorce ,lawyer said that for sukor to apply for divorce they have to stay together for 3 more months. Tejaswini & vimli don't know the reason behind sukor fight so they decided to talk to sukor.

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Lets begin!
So chakor is now in haveli,the next day after divorce incident :

Chakor was standing at the balcony of her room and inhaling fresh aroma! She was enjoying the blissful nature and trying to forget the storm running in her heart...she felt a hand on her shoulder and turned to the left to find vivaan by her side. He gave her a warm smile and she too gifted him a smile.
Vivaan : Good morning.
Chakor : yaa Good morning.
Vivaan : Where is suraj?
Chakor : what you mean where is he? Is he not in haveli? She asked worriedly
Vivaan: Nope.I did'nt see him from yesterday noon...did he tell you anything?
Chakor : No ,he did'nt said anything.yesterday after the lawyer left ,he brought me to the room and then he too left...after that he did'nt came back to the room and I did'nt step out the room ...she said worried.
Vivaan : don't worry he will be fine, you know him naa he is like this only,nothing new!

Chakor nooded in agreement and again stared staring at the deep blue sky

Vivaan : chakor !!...he called her grabbing her attention.

Chakor : yaa

Vivaan : you wanna share something chakor? We are friends from childhood and i believe no one knows you better than me,right chakor ...and the bond we share is something special chakor nd strong .so i want you to believe in your friend and let him wipe your tears ...now will you speak up...you can't hide anything ,atleast not from me...i am your bestiee ,don't forget that!

After hearing this chakor's eyes welled up,she was in great need of someone,someone to share her sorrows ,she was in great need of a shoulder where she can lean on...and yaa who could be better, than your bestiee !
Vivaan turned chakor to his side and made her face him,he gently wiped her tears and she broke down once again...

Mean while @ vimli room :-

imli was walking to and fro in her room biting her nails and talking to herself.

Imli : Vivaan is always like this,he always changes the plan in last minute,yesterday he said imli you go and talk to chakor and today he came and said he will go to chakor...I am damn worried,suraj is also missing and on top of that these many problems...hope everything goes well...i think I should go and check on vivaan and didi...i cannot wait more ,I will die out of tension.

Back to Sukor room @ balcony:
Imli entered sukor room and was shocked to see chakor crying so badly and vivaan trying hard to console her.she rushed to them and vimli consoled chakor,imli asked vivaan through signs does chakor tell anything vivaan nodded in -ve.chakor who was sitting on the floor stood up to go back ,was stopped by imli.

Imli : Its enough dii, stop this hide and seek game and spill it out.don't we have the right to know dii? Why you hide your every problem from us ? why you face them alone ? don't you trust us dii or are we not capable to know that or you find it not necessary to share your problems with your sister,imli said everything in one breath with her eyes welled up

Chakor took a deep breath and started narrating everything from the beginning. chakor told them everything ,from their trip to gavi how they had a geat time teasing ,fighting and laughing together on their way to gavi,Their dance which was a complete disaster, the time they spend in dabha eating to the fullest and the most memorable time they spend talking at the hill top...she was happy telling about the most beautiful night of her life...suddenly her expression changes to a painful one from thinking about the incident which happened next ,vimli did'nt failed to notice it but they kept mum.She told them about finding divorce papers from suraj jeep vimli was shocked hearing all this she also told them about rag-ranj-kn convo that she heard ,and her and suraj's fight at her house.

Chakor : The rest of the things that happened was infront of your eyes,the divorce drama...my life is such a mess now!

Imli : i think you are the one who messes things up.

Chakor : me ? what have I done.
Vivaan give a nudge to imli & whispers to her : its not the right time imli.
Imli looked at vivvan and then said
Imli : I mean if you told us this before we could have solve it together.now you take rest dii.

Vivaan : yaa

Chakor nodded in agreement


Vimli come out sukor room:

Vivaan : did we miss out something?

Imli : I think we did
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Vivaan : yaa, gotta findout the truth behind the divorce paper that chakor found in the jeep

Imli : even suraj did'nt mention about it,don't you remember the day suraj confessed his feelings for chakor to us

Vivan : how can I forget that day, we had a great time right

Imli : yaa,not only that suraj told us everything that happened in gavi,I mean what chakor just said except the divorce paper

Vivaan : your right,so suraj is the door to truth..
Imli : only he can solve the mess

Vivaan : but where is he ?where are you duffer?





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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wow...that was awesome update dear...
Vimli want to sort out things...that's good...
Waiting for next...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome update !!
Try to update soon 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#18
In previous chapter there was no sukor scene,hope I was able to compensate it today : ) and sorry for the short update.

"How much they fight or how much they say they hate each other the truth is they can't live without each other and even a one day separation have made them desperate to see at least glimpse of the other to make sure that your partner is fine. At that moment nothing matters to them even their previous fights,the only thing that matters is each others presence but they won't show their happiness exploding inside them because of their ego"
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The night was getting creepier ,whole haveli was in deep Slumber but sleep was far away from chakor..there is no news of suraj till now ,many bad thoughts were coming to her mind .chakor is feeling scared of loosing suraj. Its that feelings are not born to die ...they can't neither be created or destroyed...like energy..it just happens and when it happens there is no way to wash it out...that's what happening to chakor now...how much she try to ignore,resist or control her feelings, one day it has to come out some way or other!

Chakor being stressed decided to take a walk to cool her mind...the whole haveli is invaded with darkness as everyone's sleeping and all lights are off...chakor was climbing down the stairs carefully, but suddenly she bumped into someone and in no time they both find them self's on ground lying one over the other.

Ouchhh!!!he screamed ,chakor realizing the owner of the voice beamed in happiness.
Chakor : suraj is that you ?
Suraj : How much I wish its not me ...ouchhh...get off me you motti.
Chakor : you stop calling me that okay .
Suraj : you stop eating so much okay.
Chakor : what's your problem?
Suraj : you are my problem!
Chakor : and mine is you !
Suraj : My problem is bigger he said while chuckling.
Chakor : you idiot how dare you call me big ! I will kill you one day she said irritated.
Suraj : I think that day is today..he said sarcastically ..get off me or else I will be R.I.P soon.
Chakor : Then get ready to die you monkey ,cause I am not going to get up.

Suraj : you heartless women get off naa .

Suraj tried pushing her but chakor being arrogant clinged to him.

At the end of this pushing and pulling process they were lying in a very close position on the floor...chakor could hear his heart beat and suraj could feel her hot breath on his chest..they were feeling awkward realizing their position, due to darkness they could'nt see each other but is able to realize what the other is feeling. Suraj then gently travelled his hand around her waist making her spines shiver,he pulled her more closer ,she was enjoying his warmth and clutched his shirt more harder...he gently moved his head towards her ear and said you are getting naughtier now a days wild cat .

Chakor : huh ? She said in confusion .
Suraj : Don't be so innocent naughty,I know I am so hot and happening that you are desperately falling on me he said with a smrik yet again to irritate her.

Chakor's mouth was wide open hearing this : my foot ,not even in my wildest dream I will drool over you..have you seen your face buffmonkey,I am not interested in an idiot like you, She said proudly.

Suraj : Really ? ,so why are you still over me get off na motti

Chakor : excuse me,you were the one who pulled me okay?

Suraj : ohho ,you could have pushed me away right? Why you did'nt do so..he said with a naughty smrik on his face.

Chakor : I... actually... I... Chakor was feeling embarrassed,she was searching for words and blushing hardly

Suraj could sense her shyness which was driving him more crazy "What I?? I?? "he said with a chuckle ..he then again pulled her more closer to him ,squeezing her over him giving her shock...he then rubbed his cheeks on hers making her shiver.

Suraj : Get one thing straight into your head wild cat neither you can push me away from Yourself nor from your life...because

Before he could complete the lights were on and sukor could see vimli standing infornt with their mouths open seeing the scene infront of them...soon their shock turn in to a smrik..which scared sukor..you know sibling are sibling...teasing is in their blood..sukor cursed themselves for fighting and vimli was getting ready to have fun .

Precap : chakor enquiring suraj where was he

Thankyou soo much everyone for your support and love : )

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Posted: 8 years ago
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I am sorry for the late update and for not replying to comments ( cause I don't know how to reply ,so if you could plz tell were to click to reply ).hope you all did'nt forget the story! Enjoy reading guyzz


Precap : sukor njhok- jhok (floor romance)
vimli seeing sukor in a very intimate and awkward position



vimli was standing there with their mouths open seeing the scene infront of them...soon their shock turn in to a smrik..

Sukor stood up and looked at each other shocked and is having their telepathy (talking through eyes)

Suraj : we are dead now ,it's all your fault motti

Chakor : really idiot ? Who pulled me ,you right

Suraj : who started? You right

Chakor : what will they think of us
Suraj:

imli : ehmm ehmm.. imli said breaking their telepathy

Sukor looked at vimli with a worried face,they forgot that these devils are standing here only

Vivaan : sooo, what's going on here ( vivaan is saying about seeing them together on top of each other)

Sukor together : nothing like you guyzz thinking

Imli : ohooo so you two know what we were thinking

Vivaan : ahaa,then tell na what we were thinking ,right imli

Imli : yaa , Didi tell Na what I was thinking.

Chakor : actually imlu I forgot

Vivaan : ohh chakor you forgot, it's alright suraj is there na,he will tell us, right bro

Suraj : meee

Vimli : yaa you!

Suraj : I...
Suraj looked at chakor with puppy eyes for help

Suddenly chakor said : he too forgot actually ,right suraj

Suraj nodded his head like a good boy :yaa I too forgot he said with a relief

Vivaan : imli , I guess it's up to us now

Imli : ya baby let's remind these Alzheimer's what they have forgot and smirked at him.

Sukor looked at them confused but before they could grasp anything imli pushed chakor towards suraj ,both sukor were now on floor with chakor on top of suraj as before

Vimli : Now you guys remember something, vimli said in a teasing tone,sukor were so embarassed chakor was blushing like hell and suraj was scratching his head and smiling like an idiot.
Both vimli was laughing hard seeing their siblings state

Imli : Get a room both of you

Sukor mouth was wide open hearing this ..they were dumbstruck actually..

Vivaan : "hahaha..right..have some privacy at least " (vivaan too joined his wife teasing them.)

Imli : Right!

Vivaan : "Thank god we only saw the trailer of your Ramleela , poor us we will get spoiled seeing all this"..he said dramatically

Imli : I guess we should only arrange everything for these two

Vivaan : Anything for my little chakor

Imli : No it's little suraj okay

Vivaan : No it's little chakor only

Imli : how can you be sure it can be little suraj also

Vivaan : same too you

Imli :back to you

Vivaan :No return

And they start fighting..
Our poor sukor was seeing all this with their mouth open..they were so embarassed..suddenly they turn and both face each other ,suraj could sense her shyness he was also feeling shy..chakor looked at suraj ,for the first time she saw his cheeks turning..her heart skips a beatTheir thoughts were disturbed by Vicki's fight

Sukor : Shut up you two

Sukor were fuming in anger

Vimli gulped in fear
Imli : are we in trouble

Vivaan : I think so

Imli : then what are we waiting for ,let's escape

Before they could go sukor held their ears and made them do sit-ups for troubling them

Imli : I'm done with this exercise and that too in midnight saying this she sits on floor itself

Vivaan : me too saying this he also sits on floor

Sukor was sitting in sofa .. four of them looked at each other after a sec all of them burst out laughing

Vivaan : you two are heartless you guyz made us do exercise in midnight

Chakor : oyii hello you two also troubled us okay

Imli : whatever

Suraj : okay guyzz let's sleep it's already 2'O clock

Vimli : yaa

Chakor : but suraj where were you till this time ?

Suraj : I was with...he was about to tell then he thought something and said .."why should I tell you ?"

Chakor was really hurt by his words , she was hell worried about him whole day and he does'nt even find it necessary to inform her where he was + his cold reaction

Suraj continued :you are so eager to get divorce from me right,then why these un necessary question...wait are you having a change of mind he said with a smrik

Chakor was baffled by his question ,a min ago suraj was rude to her saying why should he tell her where he was ,now he is asking did you have a change of mind..he is smriking too his eyes were having a sparkle the same spark that he had lost...Is his smrik a mask to hide his real emotion? Is he trying to know something from me? May be he is trying to know if I have a change of mind..she was finding a ray of hope ,she was happy...but why? Why am I happy?

Imli : didi? Where are you lost?

Chakor : what?

Sukor : I was asking are you having a change of mind?

Chakor : Why should I change my mind for someone like you

Suraj : Thank god other wise I had to bear your bak-bak life long.

Chakor huffed in anger and left to room

Vimli after making sure that chakor had left smirked at suraj smiled at them sheepishly

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PRECAP : Suvimli

I know this chapter was not that good i will try my best to make the next one better

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting update👏
Loved sukor's nok jhoks😆
Vimli's teasing & sukor's punishment to them was funny😆
Hoping that sukor's misunderstanding clear soon
Waiting for next

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