Sukor SS 'Amend Love That Consumes You' *UPDATED CHAPTER 6 - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Its nice superb plse continue
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Originally posted by: BreakingBlue

The shower scene!❤️

Amazing! Please update soon!
(I was so engrossed in the Story and felt so bad when I read 'That's it for today'😭)



Awww dear that was sooo sweet 😊 don't worry i will update soon so that you can read more 😉
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Originally posted by: rosemahal

Its nice superb plse continue



Thanks dear 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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very nice!!! beautifully written, Sumi!
loved the way Chakor got annoyed when Suraj ignored her propossal..

Please update soon!😊
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Originally posted by: nycgal

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very nice!!! beautifully written, Sumi!
loved the way Chakor got annoyed when Suraj ignored her propossal..

Please update soon!😊



Thank u dear. I will try to update soon 😊
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awesome!!
loved it!! very nicely written

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Beautiful..
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Beautiful..

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I'm back with another update.! As you all know i have made a poll to decide BG song for Sukor. Sab tera, kaise mujhe tum and phir kabhi. I got more votes on kaise mujhe tum so I've decided to use it as the BG music and i will also use few other songs incase kaisa mujhe tum doesn't suit the scene. I've not rechecked it ignore any errors. Now Enough of my blabbering, enjoy reading.

Chapter 3
Discovering With Interruptions

It was morning. She slowly opened her eye lids, blinking. She felt a hand on her waist. She was crumbled up in suraj's arms. She looked at him sleeping peacefully without any stress.

She leaned closer and kissed on his forehead. He smiled feeling her lips touching his forehead. She slowly removed his hands, trying her best not to disturb his peaceful sleep and it was successfully done. She took her towel, clothes and went inside the washroom to take a shower and freshen up.

After a while she came out drying her hair with a towel.

Suraj woke rubbing his eyes. He saw her walking towards the mirror. Tiny little droplets fall down on her plum cheeks from her hair to her forehead, dripping down to her luscious lips. She was looking as tempting as ever.

Kaise Mujhe Tu Mil Gayi,
Kismat Pe Aaye Naa Yaakeen

Now she was using her both hands, sliding her hair at one side of her shoulder trying untanlge her wet hair. She felt a pair of arms, holding her exquisite waist from behind.

Utar Aayi Jheel Mein Jaise Chand Utarta Hai Kabhi,
Haule Haule Dheere Se

She looked down the pair of arms holding her. He nuzzled closer brushing his nose on her soft neckline, sniffing her honey and strawberry scent.

She clutched his hands feeling goosebumps in her stomach.

Gunguni Dhoop Ki Tarah Se Taranum Mein Tum,
Choo Ke Mujhe Guzari Hu Yu

He leaned closer to her ear and brushed his mushy lips on her murmuring

Suraj: you look so hot that i feel the urge to kiss everybit of your body.

She blushed furiously looking down biting her lower lip. He looked at his chakor through mirror. Her cheeks were red, hands clutched to his, eyes looking down shyly biting her lower lip smiling. She was looking erotic. His chakor was standing in his arms. 'Happiness took over him looking at her. He was happy that he was the one to make her blush, he was the one who could make her smile and he was one whom she loved endlessly. He felt lucky. She was his chakor suraj rajvanshi.

Dekhu Tumhe Ya Mein Sunu,
Tum Ho Sukoon, Tum Ho Junoon,
Kyu Pehle Naa Aayi Tum?
Kaise Mujhe Tu Mil Gayi, Hoo Hoo..
Kismat Pe Aaye Naa Yaakeen, Hoo Hoo..

She slowly opened her eyes and looked at suraj looking at her happily through mirror.
She turned back looking in his eyes. She could see warmth, affection, passion, gratitude, adoration and most importand love. Love for her. She caressed his cheek smiling.

Badle Raaste Jharne Aur Nadi,
Badli Deep Ki Timtim,
Chedhe Zindagi Dhun Koi Nayee,
Badli Barkha Ki Rimjhim

Suraj: i love you

Chakor: i lov..

Imli: didi where are you.?

They heard footsteps approaching. Chakor quickly tried to free herself from his grip but he was not ready to leave her. Not yet.

Chakor: suraj please leave me

Suraj: no first you complete your sentence

Chakor: imli is coming

Suraj: so what.? Let her come

Chakor: suraj please.

Imli: didi

Suraj left chakor looking here and there.

Imli: what happened.?

She asked looking at embarrassed sukor.

Chakor: nothing

Imli: I've been calling you since so long.

Chakor: yeah sorry could not listen you

Imli: its fine come quickly we have to make breakfast.

Chakor nodded

Imli: suraj babu why aren't you ready yet.? I though you already left.

Suraj turned back facing imli

Suraj: actually i was..uhmm..

Chakor: he woke up late

Imli: okay. Didi come fast I'm waiting downstairs in kitchen.

She left. Suraj was looking at imli leaving chakor came infront of him. She tiptoed and gave a peck on his nose.

Rituyein Adaa,
Par Mein Rahungi Sada,
Ussi Tarah Teri Bahon Mein Baahein Daalke,
Har Lamha, Har Pal..

Chakor: i love you too

She quickly said and left. Suraj was shocked. He touched his nose and smiled.

Mujhe Aata Nahi Kismat Pe Apni Yakeen,
Kaise Mujhko Mili Tum..

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Chakor: whats cooking imlu.?

Chakor asked joining imli in kitchen.

Imli: aloo gobi and lemon rice. till i make this could you please make some chapatis.

Chakor: yeah sure

She took some amount of wheat flour and water and started making chapati's

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Tejaswini: Clean it properly. How many times i should say you

Bijli: I'm doing properly no maidam

Tejaswini: no you are not doing it. Look there is still so much dust left on the couch.

Ragini: hello can i meet Mr suraj rajvanshi.?

She said entering the haveli

Tejaswini: yes, but who are you.?

Chakor: maa breakfast is ready.

Tejaswini: chakor some girl has came to meet suraj and i don't know her.

Chakor looked at ragini.

Chakor: i know who she is

She said and hugged her happily

Ragini: how did you recognized me

Chakor: old habits die hard. You still talk and look same way like before.

Ragini: i must say you're still very clever. I have to stay away from you.

Chakor looked vague.

Vivaan and suraj came downstairs.

Ragini: suraj bhaiya

She went and hugged suraj

Suraj: ragini

He hugged her back but still confused about her sudden arrival. She also hugged vivaan.

Ragini: so now i guess i should call you imli bhabhi from now onwards

Imli smiled and hugged her.

chakor: come let's have some breakfast

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Ragini: yumm bhabhi it's soo tasty. I haven't ate this type of food since so long.

Suraj: chakor cooks really well.

Chakor: imli made this breakfast. I only made those chapati's

Suraj: oh then you make chapati's also taste well.

Everyone chuckled.

Suraj: come sit here and eat with me.

He said catching chakor's hand and making her sit beside his chair.

Chakor: suraj leave me i have to serve.

Suraj: so girja and bijli are there to serve.

He said still holding chakor's hand and made her eat one morsel.

Suraj: look you have become so thin.

He said and fed her one more mouthful morsel. Her mouth was so full that she could not even chew properly.

Ragini: awww you both look so cute that i can feel love everywhere.

Everyone where shocked looking at suraj's changed behavior but they were happy that finally his emptiness is filled, healing him with chakor's pure and amend love that consumes him.

Ragini: so I heard that after papa's death his property and even this haveli belongs to suraj bhaiya and vivaan right.?

Everyone's smiling faces turned into a stern look.

Imli: yeah but suraj babu decided to share it with vivaan for our future.

Imli said smiling at both Suraj and vivaan. They both reciprocated with a smile.

Ragini: that's great. It means only suraj bhaiya is the owner of papa's whole property.

Ragini said with a handclap. Sukor and imvaan looked vague at ragini.

Ragini: i mean it's so sweet of suraj bhaiya to be the owner and share his property.

Chakor was still not convinced.

Tejaswini: tomorrow we are having mahalakhshmi pooja. So i want you to all be present in morning at 8 am.

Ragini: wow it's a good thing and after pooja we will have a small dinner party hosted by me.

Imli: it's a great idea ragini

Ragini: thanks.

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Suraj: i think i should take a leave today.

Suraj said looking at chakor who was fastening the buttons of his bshirt.

Chakor: and may i ask why do you think that.?

He cupped her face keeping his forehead on hers, nose touching.

Suraj: because if you keep arousing me with your soft touches how would i keep myself away from ur tempting love.

Chakor blushed and hugged him hiding her face deep in his hard chest. Automatically a smile crept on his face at her shyness.

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Meera: excuse me mam. May i come in.

Tejaswini: yeah come in.

She came inside with her bags.

Tejaswini: tomorrow we are having a pooja so i want you to clean the whole house.

She nodded

Tejaswini: if you have any doubts girja will help you.

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'What happened to suraj today.! I've been waiting for him since ten long minutes and he still did not arrived. We have early meeting for factory today and here mr suraj rajvanshi never-late-for-work is late today. How did this miracle happened.?' Vivaan thought going upstairs and marching towards sukor's bedroom.

He saw the door was open. So he just went inside

Vivaan: su..

Before he could knock he saw chakor hugging chakor blushing furiously. Suraj's one hand was on her waist and another one resting on her head smiling.

Vivaan: *ahem,ahem*

Suraj quickly left chakor irritated by his sudden interruption. Chakor was so embarrassed that she wished the floor would tear apart and she could hide inside.

Suraj: i think you know how to knock

He said in his usual annoyed tone.

Vivaan: Yeah bur you were so busy that you forgot to lock the door. I think i would just leave you both love birds alone and don't worry this time i will lock the door from outside so that nobody can disturb you both.

Vivaan said teasing. 'First imli and now vivaan i think they both won't leave us alone with my chakor' suraj thought in exasperation.

Chakor: vivaan don't worry i will lock it myself afterall you and imli taught me how to handle this

Chakor said winking. Suraj and vivaan both were shock at her retreat.

That's it for today guys. Sorry for any errors. Please review through your likes and comments. It motivates me alot. 😊

Chapter 4 on page 6
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Edited by sumaiya10 - 9 years ago
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Nice one! Update soon! 😊

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