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Posted: 3 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thank you so much Vanshu ❤️❤️❤️


Chutti khatm ho gayi meri to ab utna regularly update nahi de paungi. If possible, tu koi naya FF start kar na.

dekhti hoon abhi pehle jo ki hai sirf usse complete karoongi 😊

Tu pressure mat le jab aaram se de payegi tab dena don't stress your self ..🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: Priyapriyu

It’s awesome 👏


Whenever Kalyani is in trouble Malharji pahunch hi jate hai to rescue her


Malharji ko goli lag gayi fir bhi kalyani madam ko sunaye jaa rahe hai 😆

Kalyani is taking care of him


And singing one of my favourite song😊


Loved it 😍



Thanks a lot Priyu 💖💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago
#83

Chapter 7


The past flashed back in front of Malhar like a train and also the fact how Kalyani had betrayed his trust.

"Door hato mujhse Kalyani," Malhar said, "Ghin aati hai mujhe tumhari shakal aur tumhare naam se bhi. Chahe kitna bhi samay beet jaaye, main tumhe kabhi bhi maaf nahi kar sakta."

Saying that Malhar left by foot for his home, leaving Kalyani standing there.

When Kalyani reached home, Malhar had not yet come. She boiled the milk for Moksh then made him sleep on the bed beside her.

"Pallavi Bhabhi," Kalyani knocked the door of Pallavi's room.

"Kya hai? Chain se mujhe sone bhi nahi degi tu," Pallavi shouted without opening the door.

"Raat ke 11 baj gaye hain," Kalyani said, "Aur Malharji abhi tak ghar nahi aaye hain. Mera phone bhi pick nahi kar rahe hain vo. please aap ek baar unko call karke pooch lijiye."

"Ae Kalyani, Malhar kya us station par chooti laavaris vastu Moksh ki tarah doodh Peeta baccha hai kya jo kahin kho jaayega? Koi buri aadat nahi hai mere devar me haan jo raat ko vo aawaragardi karte firega..."

"Vo baat nahi hai bhabhi," Kalyani was trying hard not to weep, "Mujhe Malharji ki chinta ho Rahi h."

"Mar nahi jayega vo," Pallavi shouted from inside, "Aur mar bhi jaaye to mujhe kya?"

To ward off sleep, Kalyani made a cup of tea for herself but in her restlessness for Malhar and sleepiness, she dropped the teacup over and burned her hands. But Kalyani was so agitated that she didn't care for it.

It was 2 at night when Malhar came back and without changing into casual clothes and giving Kalyani a single glance, got into bed and closed his eyes.

When Kalyani saw Malhar was safe and sound, she slept on the bed with Moksh.

When Malhar ensured Kalyani was deep in sleep, quietly he opened the medicine box and took out an anti burn ointment. He kneeled at the bed's edge and applied the ointment on Kalyani's hands. Malhar had noticed the burn marks earlier itself but he didn't want Kalyani to think that he had any compassion for her. But those marks were like an ache on his mind. Kalyani shifted in her sleep and for a second, Malhar felt his heart stop. Then ensuring Kalyani was still sleeping, Malhar continued rubbing the ointment on her hands. Suddenly he saw some marks on Kalyani's arms.

"Kalyani ko ye chot kab aayi?" Malhar was surprised. Nevertheless he brought another ointment and applied it on those marks.

When Kalyani's eyes opened in the dawn, everyone was asleep in the house. Kalyani was surprised at strange smell, and when she saw the ointment on her hands and even on the marks where Atharva had beaten her, she couldn't help her eyes from welling up.

"Pillu," she whispered in Moksh's ear, "Bhagwaanji dekho kitna pyaar karte hain tujhse, jo tere liye duniya ke best Baba unhone chune hain."

"Malharji, aap mujhe chahe zindagi bhar pyaar na de payein," Kalyani said, "Magar main aapka saath har sukh dukh, dhoop chaanv me doongi, chahe aap mujhe apne se kitna bhi door dhakelein, ye Kalyani Rane ka vaada hai aapse Malharji."


https://youtu.be/D9N7qAyLofE


Malhar was searching for a document when suddenly a card fell from the drawer. With trembling hands, he picked up the card. Despite knowing who it was from, he opened it again- It was the first card given by Sampada in class 12th on Valentine's Day. He felt emotions rising but then he lit a match. The match was not getting lit due to his trembling hands. Then he took the card to the paper shredder and saw all his dreams shredded to pieces.


"Sampada ko chahne ka haq Maine usi din kho diya tha jab meri shaadi Kalyani se hui thi," he told himself, "Magar main apne pyaar ka 1 percent hissa bhi main kabhi tumhe nahi doonga Kalyani, ye vaada hai mera khud se aur tumse, DM Kalyani Deshmukh."


Please give your suggestions for this FF.

Edited by Autumn09 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
#84

Yaar pragyu this is not fair I am getting impatient reading your chapters it's just make me curious more ur mujhe neend bhi aati Teri stories padhne kein baad abb mujhe ek aur update abhi chahiye nhi kyin tu itna achs lagti hai why nhi bol 😭🤗😳

Are Kya chapter tha malhar ka gussa abhi bhi hai kalyani kei. Liye aur lagata hai jayega bhi nhi

Kalyani Ghar aagayi par malhar Kya hi Kahe inke liyr gone case

Pallavi this lady 😈ye kabhi nhi sudhregi

Aur kalyani my baby how much I get hurt seeing her like this

Chalo isse yaad aaya ki iski ek biwi uska khayal rakhna abb iski jimmedari hai acha scene tha vo

Ye kabhi nhi sudhrega but iski loyality humesha aisi rahegi ye at least kabhi kissi kein liye kalyani ko dhoka nhi dega at least kalyani ki Shaadi kein baare main malhar ko PTA chal jaaye

Chal dekhge hai Kya hots hai aage

Par pls jab tu free ho update Kar Dena ye Teri dost inteezar main hai 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
#85

Love how this story is taking shape! And love the fact even more that you are updating so fast!!!! It makes me soooooooooooooooooooooo happy❤❤

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Posted: 3 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: Phlo

Yaar pragyu this is not fair I am getting impatient reading your chapters it's just make me curious more ur mujhe neend bhi aati Teri stories padhne kein baad abb mujhe ek aur update abhi chahiye nhi kyin tu itna achs lagti hai why nhi bol 😭🤗😳

Are Kya chapter tha malhar ka gussa abhi bhi hai kalyani kei. Liye aur lagata hai jayega bhi nhi

Kalyani Ghar aagayi par malhar Kya hi Kahe inke liyr gone case

Pallavi this lady 😈ye kabhi nhi sudhregi

Aur kalyani my baby how much I get hurt seeing her like this

Chalo isse yaad aaya ki iski ek biwi uska khayal rakhna abb iski jimmedari hai acha scene tha vo

Ye kabhi nhi sudhrega but iski loyality humesha aisi rahegi ye at least kabhi kissi kein liye kalyani ko dhoka nhi dega at least kalyani ki Shaadi kein baare main malhar ko PTA chal jaaye

Chal dekhge hai Kya hots hai aage

Par pls jab tu free ho update Kar Dena ye Teri dost inteezar main hai 🤗

Thanks a lot Vanshu. Tere comments padhkar dil khush ho jaata h. Yaar tere paas is FF ke liye koi ideas ho to please dena yaar.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: Jara567

Love how this story is taking shape! And love the fact even more that you are updating so fast!!!! It makes me soooooooooooooooooooooo happy❤❤


Thanks a lot Zara. If you have any suggestions for the FF, please feel free to give them.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#88

Beautiful update Pragya..

Malhar's pain aptly described.

Kalyani's worry for him too is so so from the heart...

Pallavi is a woman who doesn't care about anyone other than herself. Wish she gets an apt punishment.. How she badmouths even a small innocent child.. 😡😡

Kalyani waited for him to reach home safely.. Though she knows he won't talk to her..

Malhar noticed her burns and applied medicine on it.. And even noted some other marks.

Wish he asks her about it or to her mother.

Kalyani knows that despite his inability to love her or accept her, her husband is a good man.. Her vow to stand hy him always and her telling her son that he got the best father was so emotional... ❤️❤️❤️❤️


Malhar though is broken hearted and struggling to get over his feelings for Sampada also is a man who will not cross his limits or stray from his marriage, even though he doesn't love his wife. His loyalty to his marriage is the bestest trait of a man. 👏👏


My few suggestions

1) Kalyani can learn that Atharv wants to harm Malhar. She attempts to thwart it.

Let Atharv taunt Kalyani.. Malhar should witness it and get doubts as to why he did that.

2) Someone in Rane family should fall ill and Kalyani administers emergency treatment.

Let Malhar get doubts about why Kalyani who was a doctor suddenly changed her profession.

3) They take Moksh to the hospital because he's not well. A doctor from Kalyani's past who has recently shifted to this hospital recognises Kalyani.

Let Malhar find some links to Kalyani's past and what she had suffered.



If it doesn't fit your narration, no worries. If i get any other ideas, I'll pass it to you.





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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: rekha_crm

Beautiful update Pragya..

Malhar's pain aptly described.

Kalyani's worry for him too is so so from the heart...

Pallavi is a woman who doesn't care about anyone other than herself. Wish she gets an apt punishment.. How she badmouths even a small innocent child.. 😡😡

Kalyani waited for him to reach home safely.. Though she knows he won't talk to her..

Malhar noticed her burns and applied medicine on it.. And even noted some other marks.

Wish he asks her about it or to her mother.

Kalyani knows that despite his inability to love her or accept her, her husband is a good man.. Her vow to stand hy him always and her telling her son that he got the best father was so emotional... ❤️❤️❤️❤️


Malhar though is broken hearted and struggling to get over his feelings for Sampada also is a man who will not cross his limits or stray from his marriage, even though he doesn't love his wife. His loyalty to his marriage is the bestest trait of a man. 👏👏


My few suggestions

1) Kalyani can learn that Atharv wants to harm Malhar. She attempts to thwart it.

Let Atharv taunt Kalyani.. Malhar should witness it and get doubts as to why he did that.

2) Someone in Rane family should fall ill and Kalyani administers emergency treatment.

Let Malhar get doubts about why Kalyani who was a doctor suddenly changed her profession.

3) They take Moksh to the hospital because he's not well. A doctor from Kalyani's past who has recently shifted to this hospital recognises Kalyani.

Let Malhar find some links to Kalyani's past and what she had suffered.



If it doesn't fit your narration, no worries. If i get any other ideas, I'll pass it to you.






Thanks a lot Rekha 💖💖💖These suggestions are excellent. I'll incorporate them in next chapters :)

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Posted: 3 years ago
#90

A bada wala Thanks to Rekha's suggestions:


Kalyani was getting ready for office when she saw the files which Malhar had mistakenly forgotten to take with him.

"Aaj to Malharji ki important meeting h Joint Secretary ke saath aur vo file yahin bhool gaye hain," Kalyani thought and then without eating breakfast, she took the files with her.

When Kalyani reached the office, the meeting had already started.

"May I come in Sir?" Kalyani took permission.

"ACP Rane, aap jab issues discuss karne subah mere office aaye the, tab ye files vahaan table par bhool gaye the," Kalyani gave the files to Malhar who was first puzzled then realization dawned on him.

Then the door opened suddenly, and Atharva entered inside.

"Kaun ho tum?" The Joint Secretary growled, "Aur andar aane ki permission kisne di tumhe?"

"Atharva Bapat permission leta nahi permission deta hai," Atharva said, "Aur Bade Sahab. Ye kya baat Hui? Aap ke dono officer kya gulcharre uda rahe hain aapke peeth peeche aapko pata bhi nahi."

Then Atharva produced a photo where Malhar had lifted Kalyani in his arms. The Joint Secretary was shaken at this revelation.

"Dekho! Dekho!" Atharva went on to show every person in the meeting room the photograph.

"Main flood relief work me lagatar 72 ghante kaam karke faint ho gayi thi, isliye Officer Rane..." Kalyani tried to explain but no one listened to her.

"Dekho dekho. Aurangabad ki tez tarrar DM aur daring ACP ki Aashiqui..."

Malhar closed his eyes shut and with clenched fists, he growled, "Patni hai vo meri."

"Kya?" Atharv said, "Kucch sunai nahi de raha..."

"DM Kalyani Deshmukh meri patni hai," Malhar said, "Aur hamare niji rishtey ke baare me workplace par safaai Dena ye mere aur meri patni dono ki dignity ke khilaaf hai."

Kalyani once again couldn't thank God enough for making Malhar her husband. She knew for Malhar to accept the fact of their marriage in front of everyone, especially in his workplace, was a walk through personal hell but still he chose that torture to save Kalyani's dignity.

"Are ACP Rane," Atharva jeered, "Matlab Kalyani yahaan bhi aapki boss aur ghar me bhi aapki boss. ACP Malhar Rand- DM Kalyani Deshmukh ka paaltu dash dash dash..."

"Atharva!" Kalyani shouted.

"Vaise kabhi apni gharwali se beemari ka bahaana karke seva bhi karwa Lena. Shoulder massage bahut accha deti hai aapki biwi..."

Before Atharva could finish his sentence, a punch shattered his jaw. In no time, Malhar had thrown him over the ground and was punching him without any stop, "Shoulder massage chahiye tujhe? Aaja Teri massage aaj main karta hoon- vo bhi full body massage aur hospital ka bill bhi main hi bhar doonga."

"Malhar!" The Joint Secretary ordered the cops to get hold of Malhar.

"Dekho Malhar," the joint secretary said, "Main jaanta hoon tumne kucch galat nahi kiya. Magar agar ye matter bahar faila aur Atharv ne public sentiments ka faayda uthakar tumpar action lene ke liye force Kiya, to...I just want you to be prepared. Use tumhari dukhti rag pata chal gayi h to agli baar Atharv se saamna hone par dil se nahi dimaag se sochna."

"Ji Sir," Without looking at Kalyani, Malhar went to his cabin.

Atharv was driving his car when he got an anonymous call, "Atharv Sir. Hamara maal pakda gaya toll nake ke paas."

"Tu ruk...main abhi aata hoon..."Atharva reversed his car.

When he reached toll naka, he saw nothing out of ordinary.

"Udhar dekhne se koi faayda nahi hai," Atharv was shocked to see Kalyani standing there wearing sunglasses.

"Mera maal?"

"Abhi filhaal to nahi pakda gaya hai," Kalyani said, "Magar agar tumne mere pati ko itna sa bhi nuksaan pahunchane ki koshish ki na to I'll make sure teri zindagi se behtar tujhe narak lage."

"Are, are," Atharv mollycoddled and twisted Kalyani's wrist, "Meri bechari biwi ke par nikal aaye, mujhse zabaan ladayegi tu...kiski vajah se? Us angry young man ke kaaran?"

"Aah!" Kalyani screamed as if deep in pain. Many people gathered around them.

"Kya hua ma'am?" People asked her.

"Dekhiye na, is bigde raeeszaade ne mujhe takkar maar di, aur mujhse hi badtameezi kare Jaa Raha h."

"Ae ladke," People said.

"Are koi takkar vakkar nahi maari maine use? dekho ek chot nahi lagi ise."

"To kya DM madam jhooth bolengi?" people started rolling their sleeves, "Aur bolne ki tameez nahi hai tujhe? DM ma'am se tu kehkar baat kar raha hai. chal sorry bol."

"kya?"

"sorry. ae sunai nahi deta kya tere ko?"

Seeing the angry people, Atharv had no choice. He said, "Sorry," meekly.

"Madam kon bolega?" A woman growled.

"Sorry madam," Atharv said.

"I hope isne ab thodi tameez seekh Li hogi," Kalyani said after thanking people, "Aur maine jo tumhe pehle samjhaya tha vo yaad rakhna varna result bahut bahut bura ho sakta hai."

On the other hand, Malhar was doing pushups returning from the office. Problem kya thi Atharva ko usse? Isliye kyonki usne uska illegal consignment pakda tha? Isiliye usne pehle Sampada se shaadi ki aur ab Kalyani ko target kar raha tha? Magar Malhar ki instinct usse keh rahi thi, ki kucch aisa tha Jo vo nahi jaanta tha, Atharv ke baare me aur shayad apni patni ke baare me bhi.

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