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Posted: 3 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: Priyapriyu

I read all part in one go….



It’s amazingly awesome dear…smiley32smiley32

See I was missing this…




Sindhu se mujhe Mohenjodaro yaad aa rahi hai…



Malharji adopted moksh as he felt some raabta with him…


And the baby called baba is his child only….


They are here together after a lifetime..

I’m loving this…

ACP sahab bachpan me ACP bante the….


Kya excuse di hai….smiley36smiley36


Kalyani is feeling something for him and at the same time she irritated with him…


And that last line is hilarious

Shadi.com


Aapki shadi tooti to dulhe ki taange todne ki jimmedari humari

🤣🤣🤣🤣



Loved it



Thanks a lot Priyu. Tujhe bahut miss kiya maine💖💖💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thanks a lot Priyu. Tujhe bahut miss kiya maine💖💖💖💖

Tujhe bhi miss kiya aur teri stories ko bhi…


I love the way you write…

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Posted: 3 years ago
#83

Chapter 9


When Kalyani brought Moksh that evening to play with him, Malhar made sure the mask of indifference and irritation with the baby didn't fall off his face while he was engraving design on an iron pillar that Maanchand assigned to him. Moksh started crying to which Kalyani cooed, "My Baba is hungry. Wait, I'll bring warm milk for you."

"Kalyani, he's not hungry," Malhar wanted to tell Kalyani, but he couldn't. Moksh's wailing became louder and louder. In the end, Malhar couldn't stop himself and lifted Moksh in his arms and wiped tears off his cheek.

After that, it was as if Moksh had forgotten crying. Malhar took him outside in cool evening air. He knew it was Moksh's sleeping time and Moksh could never sleep unless someone walked up and down, with him in arms.

"B...A...B...A..." Moksh tried to look at Malhar but his eyes were getting heavier.

Malhar kissed Moksh's cheek softly, and then his fluffy palms all around, "Haan beta! Main aa gaya...Moksh ka Baba. Baba ka asli Baba."

Malhar said, tears flowing down his cheeks.

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Kalyani dropped off into the coffee shop Malhar visited frequently. Malhar was right when he said she was stalking him. She really was just for the glance of Moksh, though she always lost sight of him abruptly. Sometimes she felt as if she was sitting in a magic show, in which Malhar, the magician was showing only what he wanted her to see. There was something off about Malhar. Sometimes, when she saw him looking at her from the corner of her eyes, it felt as if he was completely a different person. Like he was not the smooth-talking Casanova as he presented himself to the world, sometimes when she looked into his eyes, she felt as if he was just a simple, seedha-saada guy like her, one who's content over just a cup of tea after a tiring day at work. Someone who absent-mindedly searches for the newspaper the first thing in the morning even though it's a scheduled holiday, someone who's just a shy person valuing little things in life not the one who parties everyday toll dawn, is surrounded by girls all the time. She strongly felt Malhar was hiding something from her? But what and why she cared so much about it?

Malhar brought Moksh with him in the coffee shop, which again was odd. It felt as if he listened to each wish, each fear, each dream that whispered in her heart.

As Malhar tilted his neck left and right after ordering a cup of coffee for himself and a milk shake for Moksh, Kalyani initiated a conversation with him, "Had a tiring day?"

"Hmm..." Malhar said. He was wearing a simple blue shirt and black trousers. He was not doing his usual drama. He was not looking like himself, or maybe he was looking exactly like himself.

"Kalyani, I've to meet someone outside," he said getting up, "You take care of Moksh in the meantime." This was their daily routine. Whenever Moksh was with Malhar and she saw him, Malhar always left her alone with Moksh. She felt, no she knew that he knew she was Moksh's mother. Still his impeccable perception of her feelings led her to believe that maybe he was once a father who too was too helpless to call his child his own, too helpless to hold his child in his arms, too helpless to go to the baby even when the baby cried for him...

Malhar handed Moksh to Kalyani and was going to leave, but Kalyani hold his arm with her free hand and said, "I want three of us to together, at least for this coffee."


Moksh caught hold of Malhar's shirt with his tiny hands and said, "Baba!" At which Malhar after lifting him up, made him sit on his lap, and said, "Lo baith gaya mere Baba ka Baba."

"Baba?" Kalyani asked questioningly.

"Oh, he knows only one word to speak-Baba," pride was gleaming in Malhar's eyes, "That's why I nicknamed Moksh as Baba."

As Malhar and Kalyani were drinking coffee and also made Moksh drink milk shake in a Toy story cup, a gunshot was fired.

The robbers followed by police had entered the coffee shop and held a girl of eight as hostage.

The robbers said to the police, "Give us the keys of the police van so that we could escape otherwise we'll kill the girl."

The policemen were at loss on what to do.

"So you'll not do as we say. Fine," The robber who held the gun at the girls head said, "I'm going to shoot the girl in three...two..."

Malhar took Kalyani's cup of coffee from her and then holding both his and her cup walked towards the other robber.


"What are you doing?" Kalyani whispered but Malhar kept walking and collided straight to the body of other robber, with steaming coffee of both the cups over the robber's chest


"Sorry Ji," Malhar sheepishly said.


"What have you done," the robber said, pulling his short drenched with coffee over his head. In the instant, the robber could not see around due to the shirt over his head, Malhar swiftly took the gun from the robber's pocket and shot him on his right leg. The robber screamed in pain.

The robber with his gun on the girl turned around.

"I've only shot his leg," Malhar said. The robber was wriggling with pain on the floor, holding his leg.

"But if anything happens to the girl," Malhar said emotionlessly, then all five of the remaining bullets will pass through your heart. Think again! Do you want to die so early? I won't lose anything if you kill the girl, but if I kill you both, I'll get more stars and my desired posting. Soch lo, I've everything to gain if you kill this girl and in turn I kill you."


People are not upset over their misfortune as much they are upset over another's good fortune. And this was the psychological trick Malhar was using on the robbers. As soon as the robber's hands dropped, the police officers handcuffed them both.


"Thank you, ACP Sir," the police men folded their hands, "We would've have been suspended if anything happened to the girl or these robbers managed to escape."

"As long as ACP Rane Sir is here, we don't need to fear anything," another police officer said

Malhar patted their arms and said, "Just be more alert from next time."

"Jai Hind Sir!" They saluted.

"Jai Hind!" Malhar saluted back.

"ACP Malhar Rane!" Malhar didn't know how to face the pain of betrayal in Kalyani's eyes.


So I'm going to wrap up the story in at most one or two chapters. Please let me know what you feel about this story.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#84

Both chapters are awesome praku mujehin bada mazaa araha hai ye story padhkar how you are shaping their characters and how they both are coming close to each other I am liking each and everything about this story but somewhere I know they will not get a happy ending ..their missions all the things will keep them apart to each other like now and in end one will loose another one..😞😞

I am liking this malhar rane who is a full savage person a responsible guy , a full flirtious man ..a good and caring father ...mere liye husband material mujhein mil gaya 🤣🤣...sharma ji ne watt laga di Malhar ki wahhh ye to seedha bhabhi bana diyein kalyani ko apni..badhiya ji badhiya🤣.. aur kalyani ko lagata hai malhar me acp nahi hai to madam aap hi bata dijiyein vo kaya hai beachara malhar bach gaya varna saari kiye karyai mehnat paani main jaati 😆and on other side how he flirts with kalyani I am liking it more than anything sacchi ye Malhar mujehin bada pasand aaya 😳😳...to atharav ka patta cut hone wala hai hmmmm.sahi hai 🙂🙂...

Ohh I got emotional while reading malhar emotions for his child ..both are suffering too much neither moksh is getting proper love of his father neither Malhar can freely Loving child ..😭😭...but on other side I love how in present Malhar is taking care of kalyani feelings aur Shaq ke saath saath vo kalyani ko moksh sein milne dein raha hai acha laga dekhkein...👍🏼👍🏼..aww inka family moment...see I said kalyani and Malhar both have feelings for each other ...lekin itne waqt aayega itne shayad ye bohot kuch khoo chukein honge 🥺🥺...inka family moment...acha mazza chakya Malhar ne unn robbers ko sacchi maazza aggaya ...pata nahi kyun lekin your last line ..about kalyani just broke my heart ...the pain of betrayal in her eyes ...matlab ek line ne hi uss ladki ki full life ki situation ko represent kar diya ..from. The beginning she is being betrayed only and now one more betrayal is on her way..poor girl but here neither Malhar is wrong ..as an acp first he has choose his uniform nor his feelings ...bass dono ka aakhiri main dil tootega aur ye soch sochkein mera diltootein jaa raha hai 😭😭....

Thanks meri express train itni jaldi jaldi update dene kein liye tune to sacchi iss story ko mazzedar bana diya hai ..sacchi pragyu you have a great hand in writing thriller stories ..pls try more on that sacchi l laughed hard while reading that acp Pradyumna dialogue..tere uss dialogue nein full childhood ki yaad dila di sacchi 😆😆...aur tu iss story ko continue karna chathi hai to aaram sein kar and if you are feeling ki iska climax yahin sahi rahega to yahin de dein..bcz you know better where to end this story as per your climax ..🤗🤗lots of love meri jaan 💕💕💕❣️❣️😽😽

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Posted: 3 years ago
#85

Please don't end it so soon!! This story kept me hooked for all this time and I literally don't want to see it ending so soon. Please write a few more chapters. You can write a couple of happy kalmaksh chapters if the story ends according to your plan.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: Phlo004

Both chapters are awesome praku mujehin bada mazaa araha hai ye story padhkar how you are shaping their characters and how they both are coming close to each other I am liking each and everything about this story but somewhere I know they will not get a happy ending ..their missions all the things will keep them apart to each other like now and in end one will loose another one..😞😞

I am liking this malhar rane who is a full savage person a responsible guy , a full flirtious man ..a good and caring father ...mere liye husband material mujhein mil gaya 🤣🤣...sharma ji ne watt laga di Malhar ki wahhh ye to seedha bhabhi bana diyein kalyani ko apni..badhiya ji badhiya🤣.. aur kalyani ko lagata hai malhar me acp nahi hai to madam aap hi bata dijiyein vo kaya hai beachara malhar bach gaya varna saari kiye karyai mehnat paani main jaati 😆and on other side how he flirts with kalyani I am liking it more than anything sacchi ye Malhar mujehin bada pasand aaya 😳😳...to atharav ka patta cut hone wala hai hmmmm.sahi hai 🙂🙂...

Ohh I got emotional while reading malhar emotions for his child ..both are suffering too much neither moksh is getting proper love of his father neither Malhar can freely Loving child ..😭😭...but on other side I love how in present Malhar is taking care of kalyani feelings aur Shaq ke saath saath vo kalyani ko moksh sein milne dein raha hai acha laga dekhkein...👍🏼👍🏼..aww inka family moment...see I said kalyani and Malhar both have feelings for each other ...lekin itne waqt aayega itne shayad ye bohot kuch khoo chukein honge 🥺🥺...inka family moment...acha mazza chakya Malhar ne unn robbers ko sacchi maazza aggaya ...pata nahi kyun lekin your last line ..about kalyani just broke my heart ...the pain of betrayal in her eyes ...matlab ek line ne hi uss ladki ki full life ki situation ko represent kar diya ..from. The beginning she is being betrayed only and now one more betrayal is on her way..poor girl but here neither Malhar is wrong ..as an acp first he has choose his uniform nor his feelings ...bass dono ka aakhiri main dil tootega aur ye soch sochkein mera diltootein jaa raha hai 😭😭....

Thanks meri express train itni jaldi jaldi update dene kein liye tune to sacchi iss story ko mazzedar bana diya hai ..sacchi pragyu you have a great hand in writing thriller stories ..pls try more on that sacchi l laughed hard while reading that acp Pradyumna dialogue..tere uss dialogue nein full childhood ki yaad dila di sacchi 😆😆...aur tu iss story ko continue karna chathi hai to aaram sein kar and if you are feeling ki iska climax yahin sahi rahega to yahin de dein..bcz you know better where to end this story as per your climax ..🤗🤗lots of love meri jaan 💕💕💕❣️❣️😽😽


Thank you so much Vanshu ❤️❤️❤️❤️

Aye Haye hame finally apne Jiju mil gaye, bhale hi vo fictional kyun na ho. Koi na, real life me bhi jaldi hi mil jayenge ACP sahab. Bas unki saaliyon se unka parichay zaroor kara dena.

Coming to FF, aaj meri chutti hai and to hopefully tujhe aaj ek ke baad ek updates milenge. Aur yaar agar time mile aur tera man ho, to apni behen ko ek Shera Chaudhary wala update bhi de dena.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: kalma_lover

Omg!! again I was crying while reading this.... You have written such an emotional story!!! Feeling sad for Kalyani and Moksh.. I want them to Live happily.. And wanna see a guilt on Malhar's eyes for behaving so rudely with moksh and for doubting on Kalyani but he is also right on his place he is doing his duty... All of them are right they only need love... Waiting for next 🤩🤩❤️❤️


Thank you so much Anu 💞💞💞

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Jara567

Please don't end it so soon!! This story kept me hooked for all this time and I literally don't want to see it ending so soon. Please write a few more chapters. You can write a couple of happy kalmaksh chapters if the story ends according to your plan.


Don't worry Jara. Today you'll get many updates as today is my holiday ☺️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter-10

Malhar was jolted out of his trance by Kalyani's loud voice.

"Moksh! Malhar! Where are you?" On seeing them, Kalyani came running towards them.

"Where have to taken Moksh?" Kalyani complained, "You know I was so worried. I...I..." Kalyani could not complete her sentence and broke into tears. Seeing her like that, Moksh also started crying.

How much Malhar wanted to wipe both their tears, but he couldn't, at least not until he fulfills the duty given by the Senapati to get the map so that they could attack Darius and his army and reclaim the throne for its rightful heir. Maybe Malhar wouldn't be able to survive that long, but at least Moksh had Kalyani who cared about him more than his parents. He just prayed to God to give him just one chance, in his next birth, to make amends to both his son and Kalyani. This life he had already sworn for his motherland when he joined the royal army.

Malhar roughly handed Moksh over to Kalyani and said, "Take him. Even I can't bear one more second with this irritating child. He just cries and cries. I was not able to focus on my work due to his incessant crying. I don't understand what he wants. He is not a child, he is just a bad news."

"Enough," Kalyani said, "If you said one more thing about Moksh, I don't know what'll I do..."

"What will you do?" Malhar said, "Aata hi kya hai tum dono ko rone aur chillane ke alawa?"

"Why do you hate Moksh so much?" Kalyani said, searching in Malhar's eyes for an answer, "He is the sweetest baby."

"I've already told you I can't stand kids," Malhar said, turning away from both Kalyani and Moksh.

"Would you have done the same with your own child?" There was accusation in Kalyani's tone.

"I don't have a father's heart inside me," Malhar said, pointing at his chest.

"Don't say that," Kalyani said, "Who knows God will make you long and agonize for the very same thing?"

Malhar gave a bitter laugh. God was already punishing him for heaven knows what. First he lost his wife who was his childhoods friend, then he lost his son whom he assumed was dead. And when finally after one year, he met Moksh, he was so helpless that he couldn't even kiss his child, hold him in his arms when he cried, couldn't even say him as his own. Moksh recognised him but he couldn't even recognise the familiar way Moksh called for him whenever he was near. On the other hand was Kalyani who was not related to Moksh in any way, but understood him.

When Kalyani got a written message from Malhar to meet him at the banks of Sindhu, she was pleasantly surprised. When she reached at the banks, Malhar was there with a boat. He indicated Kalyani to climb upon the boat. Above them were stars and the full moon, eavesdropping the secret meetings of every lover on earth, and below them on the water were earthen lamps, their light dancing on the waves of river.

"Thank you," Malhar said.

"For what?"

Malhar just smiled in return.

They both sat silently on the boat, stealing glances at each other when the other was not looking. And when their glances collided, Malhar couldn't stop himself. He slided at Kalyani's side, and kissed her on forehead. There were tears of joy in Kalyani's eyes. She hugged Malhar. Just then, she felt the cool steel of a dagger at her throat.

"What are you doing?" Kalyani couldn't understand what was happening.

"Just keep quiet and come with me to the other side of the river," Malhar said whispering in Kalyani's ear and then patting her cheek, "Nice! Good girl!"


So who's you favourite character in this FF and ab tak ki kahaani kaisi lagi aap sabko?

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Ok... Malhar wapas flirting and irritating Kallu..

He was called bhai sahab or master ji in college.. 🤣🤣

He saved Kallu on the road...

He definitely feels a lot for her..

Uh oh his subordinate almost gave him away and he had to make up stories to escape Kalyani's questioning..

So they are finding some clues about the drug mafia..

Pawar and Malhar convo.. 🤣🤣

Side business shuru kar lo tum aur Sharma apna: Shaadi.Com- Bharosa Dilli Police Ka. Agar apki shaadi kisi bhi vajah se tooti to doolhe ki taangein todne ki zimmedari hamari. Rakho phone aur baaki information collect karo," Malhar scolded Pawar.

This was absolutely what Malhar would say. It really made me remember all Malhar and Pawar scenes in PS.. 😆

Nice update.. 👍🏼

Will read the rest too soon..

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