SS-Song of the Lark...(Part 17 Uptd) - Page 7

Part 16 has been updated ... 😊

Part 17 has been updated ... 😊

Just finished reading all parts though which one is which is hard to explain but going backwards I believe 17, 16 , 15 and 14. 😊 Loved every minute of the read. Some lines I'd like to compliment you on.
He let his gaze meander along, as the machine swerved along the curves, the rays of the afternoon sun, sneaking through the thick foliage of leaves, casting hypnotic reflections on the wind shield…
Excellent description made me feel as if I myself was seated in that very car. The essence of the scene is so alive it just captivated my senses a very moving description....and that I'm a fanatic of nature adds to the euphoria...😊
The two men stood in silence, looking ahead… lost in their thoughts… holding on to moments that had been, dreams they cherished… a future that beckoned, a memory, that was to be…
The most significant sentence of all parts....Prachi's importance and standing in both their lives... For one she is a memory and for the other a future ...the hope , the desparity...the loss for one and the gain for the other so beautifully put I'm awed yaar... 👏 👏 👏 cudn't have been said better.

Wonderful work will look forward to another update soon. Keeping in mind your busy schedule it's very well thought and penned out.😊

Sareeta....Brilliant.. 👏 👏 .it had to be Neev who had to bring in the realization...

Each dialogue Neev had uttered was brilliant...The pause between the dialogues making it a meaniful difference...

Neev's understanding of Prachi's feeling as only a best friend would know is absolutely perfect!!!

Him bringing Milind to meet Prachi! Absolute brilliance..

Kash, the creatives would get some pointers from us to develop the story...Right now, the story is so predictable that i am getting bored with Kayamath already!

The end when Neev tells him that he is the reason for her happiness and the brilliance of Milind smile which comes purely from the heart!! Sareeta, I loved that bit to pieces...

So far! Perfectooooooooooooo! 👏 👏 👏
I can't wait to see Prachi's reaction to Milind.....

Ok.. you know it was awesome..!!! Neev had to be the one to bring these two together..! i agree with everything panache has said above..!

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Read the parts Sareeta..Wonderful 👏 👏 👏 I especially liked the way you emphasised on Prachi's importance on these two men's life. Similar, yet so different.

I loved the words spoken by Neev. His simple words just had so much depth.. Milind's anxiety and feelings were clearly putforward. lovely 👏 👏 👏

Shan

hum toh chale the dost banke...jaane kahan dill mil gaye...im goin to start each post with song:D

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the impish smile on his face, belying the requesting undertone to his voice...hehe...so cute…catching the keys mid air that were flung across, sportingly towards him…

this is showing major guyness if u kno wht i mean. i adored it...its so natural...:D
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coool machine...:D wowiee...again so natural..

thap thap thap...thts how his hrt is going na...when part realisation of his destination strikes him...ki wht cud he possibly show me there...wht is it...wht is it ?

"the rays of the afternoon sun, sneaking through the thick foliage of leaves, casting hypnotic reflections on the wind shield " i love love this line....its just painting such a vivid picture in my head. it reminds me of somethin abs seren at the same time surreal...fills hrt with unexplained joy..atleast mere liye.

he finds it so easy to think of her...just a infinitesimal moment in time it takes him....
her smiling eyes when they find him among the hazy chaos... 👏 👏...her face her touch...her eyes..and then bang...hes back to torturing self...

oblivious of his pain and much to his chagrin… ...fact tht neev didnt realise his pain is biting into him...ur in for a rude shock dude. :D


the longing of her presence...haiii....so much he loves her. so much...phir bhi kuch nahi bolta use. he smiles the instant he remembers her smile..aiyyo...how cute is tht..

"The ecstatic feeling, gripping his heart again, he walked, breathless… waiting for him to continue, the desperate hope , seeming unreasonable at the moment , consuming his being, at the very moment…"

i love milind's reaction...hes silently willing neev to continue...ceasing to breathe...hanging on to every syllable uttered by the latter. sheer torture it shows.

and then when neev finishes...the truth glares at him..i like the way u;ve written tht...stark truth..blatant...but only unseen by him. tho u asaid truth of words hit him. to me its like somethin thts always been ther...but unseen by M due to his own fear.

Sang chala hoon hamesha, uske, par saathi uska kabhi tha nahi…"
haila...this is like nail on the head. precisely wht mr.hero needed to hear. claps for neev character...

The two men stood in silence, looking ahead… lost in their thoughts… holding on to moments that had been, dreams they cherished… a future that beckoned, a memory, that was to be…

two imp men in her life....but in totally diff realms..to me they define her life...but diff spheres of it...them standing together..looking beyond...i likes.:d

Surrendering to the ecstatic euphoria that filled his being, like the rhythm of the summer rain…he stared head, willing himself to not blink, lest he miss the moment …
her her her and her.


"Andaaz-e-bayaan badal sakta hai, wajah nahin… my
friend"
*whistles....throws flowers....wah wah...wah wah"

"Sensing his desperation, the look of puzzled excitement etched on his face , making him smile, Neev … continued … after a pause…with a knowing look… as he watched him standing afore … reading his thoughts, continuing his unexpressed thought as he looked him in the eye…" … koi aur ho hi nahin sakta… tha…"… "

haila...this is butiphull...him waiting to just hr tht one phrase...just once...and neev....bang on cue...spells it out for him...koi aur ho hi nahi sakta....tha..fundoooooooooooooooooooo. *hand on hrt and sighs*

ITS YOU....says it all...does it all...blinker on milind...aaaapki service dude...my kaam here is done...loverly woman...abs brilliant update...:D:D

Aww.....Sareeta darling...just fantastic girl...so beautifully written...and what else can I say except that I loved it.....👏

You described Millis feeling and emotions so brilliantly that I could so picturise the who secen😳......and the smile in the end.....on seeing her ...aww...what can I say...it made me smile too with him....😉...and Neev telling him...its for him....was just breath taking dear......👏👏👏

Loved the whole Neev and his conversation...the flashbacks...the drive......beautifully described with the shadow of the tree falling on the wind shield....😃

It was excellent dear👏👏👏...and thus can't wait for the next part from you soon😉.

Love

Krishna

👏 Sareeta - that was lovely yaar 👏

I kept postponing my visit to this topic, lest I get extremely insecure after reading what I knew would be a piece of first class art 😉 And, boy, wasn't I right.... 😳

WIsh I had stayed away - now I feel stupid! 😆

Thank you so much everyone for reading and being kind enough to leave your comments and feedback!

I shall be wrapping this up in a few clock ticks ... Kindly bear with me and yeah I shall reply to all the comments...

I apologize for not being able to respond to all the comments, given my erratic work timings and hectic schedules. I shall do so tonite... Thank you!

Sareeta