Originally posted by: RangnRia
Hi @Suhaaniladki.My apologies I do not know your name...Can you please tell me how to refer to you...
Thanks for the PM.I came across this story through your PM and read all parts in one go.
Well first of all a BIG APPLAUSE for your audacity and courage for this humongous HERAPHERI of CHARACTERS.Take a bow lady!!!
You made Naina fall in love with Rohan,they getting married with Mr Somani's aashirwad, Sharabi Sameer, Sameer in devdas mode cause of Sunaina, Rohan having a daughter, then Shefali is Ahana's Nanny, Ramdhari at Somani's place, Rohan dead on the night of his wedding, Somani in hospital and Sam taking care of him rather a SANE conversation between the always-at-loggerheads step-Dad and step son and finally Naina wanting Ahana at Somani's house...Oh God how did you manage to rumage through your brains for this plot...Anyways a big Salute to this gripping plot cause every update makes the reader wait for the next...
I was slightly confused in the third update ki how did she end up marrying Sam when in the previous update she was looking out of the window on her wedding night waiting for Rohan...And what happened to Rohan ?Was he dead or missing?
But then your comments clarified my doubt and I could understand the 4th update...
The build up in the first two updates was great...Taiji's acrid and stinging comments against Chachi's soothing words...
You choice of songs in the 3rd update was just so awesome.Bechara driver was just trying to keep his bhabhi happy...
What i really loved is you have kept an iron grip on the plot by "Concealing some and Revealing a little" in each and every update...The plot is unfolding in flashbacks and present time which is a tempting treat for the readers...
Again what held my notice is you always explain Naina's state of mind through the view out of her window-through the dark clouds,the partially eclipsed moon and stars or the sunshine...
Sam-Naina verbal tashanbaazi was awesome in the 4th installment,but what had my heard was Sameer's adviceπ€£...
Why is Naina hell-bent on getting Ahana into Somani household immediately?Should she not wait,understand the family dynamics and then make a move to make the Somani family accept Ahana...there has to be some strong reason that the baby was kept away from the family by Rohan...I completely agree with Sameer that Naina should start from the first step of taking care of the family and more importantly the paralysed Mr Somani...
Naina's breakdown scene was heart -wrenching and very well described.If felt as if I was watching the scene happen right in front of me...Sadly such cruel people do exist...
Caring Sam was a treat...both when he calmed down and assured a paralysed Mr Somani and when he took care of Naina...
Waiting for more dhamaka which i am pretty sure you have more of them up your sleeve...
Love,
Ria
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