ADIYA OS -A Phone call!

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hi friends,

I am sumi and this is the 1st time ever that I am attempting an OS or any story for that matter... I hope you guys enjoy it!
tomatoes and eggs are most welcome as I am sure I could have written 100 things differently and better!!Plz bear with me!😆

just a little background for this:
Yash's death has been declared a suicide in court and Adiya are free... Zoya gets very angry at Aditya and vents out at him..post which the Siddique khaandaan returns to Mussoorie!!

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It is a beautiful day in Mussoorie!!Sunlight pouring over the town with clear skies, making it just the perfect day!As she soaks herself with the sunlight shining through her window in her room, Zoya feels uneasy and restless..She doesn't pay heed to the wind that blows through her hair as she tries to forget the bitter words that she said to Aditya just before leaving!

Roshana Siddique watches her daughter as she carries the tray of breakfast with her into zoya's room...she puts down the tray on the side table and studies her daughter! She knows a lot has transpired recently to put that frown on her face...Yash broke her heart and trust and it would take days,weeks maybe months for Zoya to recuperate!

"zoya beta, have your tea"
"Yes ammi.." says Zoya as she smiles looking at her mother.

"It is a beautiful day, is it not..?." says Roshana , breathing in the air!
Zoya watches her mother but she does not feel the fresh air...instead she feels suffocated!! she frowns again "What is it that is making me so unsettled", she asks herself.

"zoya what is it that is troubling you?...Ok, i know many things have happened but what is that is troubling you the MOST?" asks Roshana after watching her daughter for about a minute..she has to find out!

"nothing mother, it's nothing"...

"Please tell me Zoya...I am your mother and I want you to be happy. I know the betrayal of Yash is going to hurt you for a long time, but sharing your pain, lessens it...tell me beta..What were you thinking just now?what put that frown on your face?"

"I was thinking about what I said to Aditya just before I left Mumbai...What He did was wrong ammi, what his father said about yash, it was totally wrong...I might have been clueless about his affair and his financial problems, But I know he was not depressed!! How can Mr Hooda convince the judge that yash was depressed and he committed suicide?Suicide? I know he did not...but still it was declared that he did..It is not true ammi!...just imagine the pain mummyji would have got hearing about all this?Why would someone do that? why Aditya did not object to his father's trick?why?"

Roshana hears everything patiently and asks zoya just the right questions..

"Did you and Aditya know about Pooja and Yash's affair before their death"?
"no...but"..
"Did you and Aditya commit their murder"?
"no..."
"Are you and Aditya in jail now"?
"no..but ammi"...
"Was there any other way to prove your innocence in court"?
"yes there could have been many...like me and Aditya never met before that gift shop...if somehow Mr Hooda had proven we did not meet before and could not have planned the murders...they could have checked our phone records,we were never near each other before we met in the gift shop...if.."
Roshana interrupts and asks "how much time do you think that would have taken"?
"I dont know ma, but.."
"You and Aditya would still be in custody and Rajveer would have tortured you both..if not you, then he would have definitely tortured Aditya... would you have preferred that?"

"No ammi, never...i never want to relive that moment of horror again...but that's not the point, yash..."
"Yash is dead zoya, he died cheating on you holding his girlfriend's hand"
"I know...I know that.."
"And you are alive, with your whole life in front of you...and HH and aditya made that possible..did they not?"

Zoya pauses as deep down she knows the answer to that question...She still has not told her parents about her suicide attempt and how Aditya had saved her...
She nods to her mother and after few minutes of chit-chat, Roshana leaves the room...
leaving zoya alone with her thoughts...
She acknowledges how hasty she had been to blame Aditya when in turn she should have thanked him! She ,of all people, know just how many times he has saved her!not just from the outer world, but from herself too...He had made her strong, confident! He took her into his home when all the doors had closed and he stayed with her until she left Mumbai!!

and ever since she has come back, she has been worked up, annoyed at the slightest things... She remembers how she had assured him in prison that she trusts him but then when the time came when she should have,she did not..instead,she blamed him!

"Oh Lord,What did i do?" she thinks...
She looks at her landline phone sitting on the table and contemplates...
"would he talk to me after all the things I said to him?"
"How will I ever apologize"?
"Will he forgive me"?
"I don't have the courage to make this call! I cant..."

As she convinces herself she can NOT make that call,she remembers how he had instilled confidence in her in the darkest hour "tum nazuk ho, kamzor nahin"... She nods to herself "yes, I can do it"

she picks up the landline & dials his number..she doesn't want to call from her mobile as her number is saved in his mobile..."what if he doesnt even lift the phone when he sees it is me calling him?"

She is losing her courage when she hears a confident "hello?" on the other side... she stills, listening to his voice after so many days...

She answers a hesitant but a hopeful "Aditya?"

There is a pause at the other end...she fidgets again.. She is still worrying "what if he doesn't recognize my voice" when she hears her name from other end, a soft,soothing "Zoya????"

"Did my name always sound this good before?", she wonders...
He asks again, "zoya, is it you"?

She feels a sense of calm taking over her!she smells the fresh air, feels the cool wind!
she exhales a breath of relaxation and smiles genuinely for the first time in many days! A phone call...all it took was just a phone call to him to loosen the ties that were smothering her!

Love, sumi!

PS: plz let me know how this went!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This felt so real as it could be well connected to the ongoing track of the show. Keep writing. It was short and beautiful.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This OS is so like AdiYa, simple, cute but yet refreshing and hidden intense 😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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IF shdnt just have a like button. There shd be more emoticons, a wow would suit here!

To the OS. You nailed their status quo nicely. More than anything, I liked how Zoya realises she was harsh on him; and the fleeting thought that she didnt stand by her words of trust. That is what has been bothering me since the spoiler videos are out. Will be jumping with joy, if this is shown like u said in the episodes to come.

Drifted. Back on OS - loved how it was a talk with her mom that pushed her - i like the family dynamics and crave to see those. The time spent on showing the Rajma and the plotting, can be used to show the stength family provides.

In all, loved it. 👏

PS: for the few days mentioned, would Aditya let her be without being on talking terms? 😉 but, i loved that she is stepping up to reach out.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: _Rai_

This felt so real as it could be well connected to the ongoing track of the show. Keep writing. It was short and beautiful.

Thank you so much Rai!😊 glad you liked it
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Lovely OS
A simple phonecall can make a lot of difference
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Posted: 7 years ago
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A sweet one sumi..
his saying "Zoya" did it all ❤️

Continue writing sumi 😉maine bhi abhi try karna shuruh kiya hai 😆 its fun to write😳



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Posted: 7 years ago
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amazing i can feel ur os
last part is very touchable❤️
gud job sumi
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: alanta

This OS is so like AdiYa, simple, cute but yet refreshing and hidden intense 😳

Thank you so much
Glad you enjoyed!


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Prriyam

IF shdnt just have a like button. There shd be more emoticons, a wow would suit here!

To the OS. You nailed their status quo nicely. More than anything, I liked how Zoya realises she was harsh on him; and the fleeting thought that she didnt stand by her words of trust. That is what has been bothering me since the spoiler videos are out. Will be jumping with joy, if this is shown like u said in the episodes to come.

Drifted. Back on OS - loved how it was a talk with her mom that pushed her - i like the family dynamics and crave to see those. The time spent on showing the Rajma and the plotting, can be used to show the stength family provides.

In all, loved it. 👏

PS: for the few days mentioned, would Aditya let her be without being on talking terms? 😉 but, i loved that she is stepping up to reach out.

Aww thank you yaar for saying the nicest things...its my v first attempt at a story, I generally just analyze and write abt the epis... So encouraging to read ur words!
😳

Yes, I also like family dynamics...especially parents dressing their child's issues without much hulla-bulla!..

PS: I think he would coz it was she who vented her anger on him..he took shall let all sink in with Zoya..

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