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Posted: 6 years ago
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A Lovely Day to Die

It's a lovely day
To hide in the sun;
To hide behind the smile
And the laughs.

The clingy clear sky
Never looked so sweet,
Like the kitten over the fence
Of my crush's house.

Endless. The sky and
My wait.
But I know better than
To ask him. Maybe, he'd
Agree but who's taking the risk?
Me neither.

I hope he sees the invisible
In the way I walk and I talk
And pine.
Do you think that's all?
Me neither.

The times I've hoped
And have had them shattered.
You'd almost think 
That was my hobby-
Taking a flight
To realize I had
No Wings.

Someday, the spell will break,
He'd rush to see if I waited for him.
He'd ask me why I was gone
Once and forever.
But he would have his wife and
His own children to look after.
You think he'll match the obituary?
Me neither.

It's a lovely day to
See the sun fade into night.
Maybe I could die later.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#2
I love the descriptions that you have given in this <3 
What I love about your works is the brevity! 
Way to go and hope to read more stuff from you! <3 
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Posted: 6 years ago
#3
what a beautiful poem
I just love it
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Radhikerani




That was my hobby-
Taking a flight
To realize I had
No Wings.


Someday, the spell will break,
He'd rush to see if I waited for him.
He'd ask me why I was gone
Once and forever.
But he would have his wife and
His own children to look after.

You think he'll match the obituary?
Me neither.


You are so talented Pro 👏⭐️

@bold lines are so good

@red- I haven't seen such practicality in a romantic poem 😆

Its a wonderful attempt. Very modern, practical and romantic.


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Posted: 6 years ago
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^^ She is so so talented, hai na? 😃
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Posted: 6 years ago
#6
So beautiful, dreamy and pragmatic at same time:) Well done!

Is someone in the L-world😉
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Posted: 6 years ago
#7
Again, a very romantic dreamy creation. 😳
You're killing it Choti. ❤️
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Wonderful poem Proteeti😊
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Nice Poem.
Your Very Talented.
:-)
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Posted: 6 years ago
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such a beautiful poem ...i really liked it