~The Unfathomable Love. ~ part12 updated !(07/01/2018) pg 58 - Page 11

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: PriyaSweety-Anu

Thanks for PM,Dear.😊

It was so Nice to see you with Story on Akdha.😊
The Banner was Amazing.😊
The Prologue was so Interesting.😊
Please Continue soon.😊
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Part 1-3

Awesome story...
Different concept...
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Beautiful Banner and the story so far is simply amazing


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Lovely and beautiful Banner ...
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Congratulations on new story

Prologue is Intriguing
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part 4:-

~Patna ~
Its the afternoon time When jalal is having a walk in garden to relax himself but the very moment his eyes caught attention towards a scene where one young man (probably someone from maharaja yudhistiv family) is helping her wife to put gajra in her braid which reminiscences him of one of his and Jo's beautiful past.

Flashback starts:-
Jalal was putting a beautiful motiya bahar in Jo's braid while humming a tune..
Jodha:- shehinsha aap ne kitne dino se Hume Koi gana Nhi sunaya ..Ab sunae Na.!
Jalal:- Ab..! Nhi phir Kabhi..
Jodha:- Arey.. Suniye na..humre Liye..!! Warna hum aap se Baat Nhi karenge..( turns towards opposite side with angry face)
Jalal:- Acha theek h..

Tumhare siwa kuchh na chahat karenge
Ke jab tak jiyenge mohabbat karenge
Mohabbat mohabbat, mohabbat mohabbat
Tumhare siwa kuchh na chahat karenge
Ke jab tak jiyenge mohabbat karenge
Tumhare siwa kuchh na chahat karenge
Ke jab tak jiyenge mohabbat karenge
Nazar chahati hai deedar karna
Yeh dil chahata hai tumhein pyaar karna
Tumhari wafa mein doobe rahein hum
Hai kya haal dil ka yeh kaise kahein hum
Mehakne lagega ho ho
Mehakne lagega badan yeh tumhara
Hum aankhon se aisi shararat karenge
Tumhare siwa kuchh na chahat karenge
Ke jab tak jiyenge mohabbat karenge
Hamein apne dil mein basaya hai tumne
Mohabbat ke kaabil banaya hai tumne
Agar tum na milte to hum jee na paate
Kise apna kehte, kahan dil lagaate
Saza Rab jo dega o o
Saza rab jo dega woh manzoor humko
Ke ab hum tumhari ibadat karenge
Tumhare siwa kuchh na chahat karenge
Ke jab tak jiyenge mohabbat karenge
Mohabbat mohabbat, mohabbat mohabbat
Mohabbat mohabbat, mohabbat mohabbat
flashback ends..
jalal's thought of chain got broken with Abdul's voice..
Abdul :- jalal Maine Agra paigham pahucha diya h Ki Yaha Sab theek h ,Aur humlog Kal Subha Yaha se nikalne wale h..
Jalal:- Acha kiya abd..
Their attention moved to Abrar who came running towards them.Abrar while trying to catch breath.
Abrar:- jalal.. Abdul ..waha. Massttt. ...
Abdul:- tum ya toh Pehle saans lelo ya phir bolo..
With this Abrar compose himself..
Jalal:- Ab bolo..Abrar:- tumhe pata h ,Yaha aage Ek Bohat bada mela Laga h.! Aaj Hindustan Ki 15th yuva sena jashn manaya Jaa raha h.
Abdul (with excitement) :- Acha. !! Toh hum Yaha kya Kar rahe h??
Jalal:- toh phir Chalo..
Jalal informed Maharaja Yudhistiv about their visit to mela. And left for a new journey..
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~ Bangladesh ~
It was a hustle bustle atmosphere, kids were running to eat ice gola,girls near jewellery store, women's bargaining on food & clothes Prices.elders citizens and young mens near horse riding, sword fighting ..
Jalal ,Abdul, Abrar(seeing happy atmosphere around):- Yaha Sab kitna Acha lag raha h..
Abdul:- Purane din Yaad agye(remembering their mela visit many years ago)
Jalal:- Haan..(remembering how he and Jo enjoyed mela)
Abrar (seeing them lost):- Ab kya pura din Yahi taherna h? Mela dekhne Ka irada Hai ya Nhi?Ab Chalo jaldi.(and pushed both jalal and Abdul)
Jalal took part in the sword fight, abdul in horse riding and Abrar in archery.Then visited few stores where Abdul went near food store to grab few bananas ,Abrar went to book store as he loves poetry,and jalal was gazing at every store when he notice a jewellery store

Flashback:-
(Joja in Mela)Jalal:- Jo Mujhe Yeh Payal/anklets Bohat Pasand aae ..Yeh lo isse pehanlo .and gives her only one anklet
Jodha:- jalal Yeh kya? Ek hi payal? Dusri Kaha h?
Jalal:- dusri mere pass rahegi.
Jodha:- q?? Ab tum Bhi payal pehnoge kya?? (And makes fun if him)
Jalal while coming near her ear:- jab hum aapse durr hoge tab Yeh payal Mujhe Tumhari kami mehsoos hone Nhi degi ..!
Jodha gets emotional seeing true love in his eyes for her and hugs him saying HUM WADA KARTE HAI,HUM HAMESHA AAPKE SAATH RAHENGE TAKI AAPKO KABHI ISS PAYAL KI ZAROORAT NA PADHI..!
Flashback ends

Abdul carrying 2 bananas in his hand and 1 in mouth gave each one to jalal and Abrar.
Abdul:- Mujhe toh Bohat Bhook lag rahi h ..main Ab Aur bhooka Nhi reh sakta.!
Abrar:- main Bhi..
Jalal:- toh Chalo Yaha kahi dhaba mil jaega Kuch Khaa lete h..
Abdul:- Haan Haan Chalo.
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DHAABA*
It was quite spacious with proper arrangements..
dhaba boy:- batae Saab kya khana Pasand karenge aaplog??
Abdul: -Marag,parathas,chicken gravy, mutton biryani, mirchi Ka salan,fish fried,russian salad,fruit chat ,khurbani Ka meetha ya double Ka metha Jo Bhi mila Jae Aur Haan Ek pani Ka bottle Bhi..!!
Mujhe toh bas itna sa dedo..(as if he had ordered only 2-3 dishes)
Jalal and Abrar with wide shocked eyes:- hum itna Nhi khaa paenge.!
Abdul:- HUM.??hum Nhi Yeh Sirf mera Hai..tumlog apna apna magalo.
Abrar (with unbelievable look):- tum Yeh Sab akele khoge??
Abdul with Proud:- HAAN..
Jalal with smirk:- Acha..Koi Baat Nhi hum dono ko Bhook hi Nhi h.
While the waiter servers the dishes..
Abdul forwards his hand towards Marag,but jalal quickly takes it and servers for himself half and rest in Abrar's plate .
Jalal with innocent face:- oopss.!! Maaf karna main toh bhool hi gaya tha Ke tum Bhi hona na.Koi Baat Nhi tum Kuch Aur lelo.!
With this Abdul forwards his hand towards Paratha's when Abrar quickly serves all of the parata's to himself and jalal.
Abrar:- Woh kya Hai na Marag Ke Saath paratha hi khaya jaega Aur Waise Bhi tumhre pass Marag Nhi Hai toh tum paratha lekar kya karoge..
Abdul:- hmm..and again Abdul moves his hand towards chicken gravy to which jalal again serves himself and Abrar.
Jalal:- tumhare pass toh paratha hi Nhi h tum Kuch Aur lelo..
And again it repeats with biryani to which Abrar served it to himself and jalal
Abrar:- Woh kya Hai Na chicken gravy Bohat theeki Hai,Isliye mutton biryani
And seeing his friends actions Abdul understood about their teasing session and gets angry..seeing Abdul's cute, angry face Abrar burst out in laughter and jalal smiles and pulls towards him and Abrar forcefully put a roll of paratha with chicken in his mouth.
Abrar:- lo Ab khalo..bhookad kahin k.
And trio complete their lunch having masti,chit chat.

Abrar:- Chalo Ab wapas chalte h.Hume Agra k Liye Bhi nikal Na Hai.
Abdul;- par jainge Kaise?? Main toh Bohat thak chuka hun an aur Nhi chal sakta..
Jalal indicates them to a baggi / horse chariot and three of them sat in it but didn't find a driver
Jalal:- tum Dono Bohat thal chuke ho.Isliye thoda aram karlo.baggi mein chalaunga.
Abdul and Abrar in unison: - NO.!!
Jalal :- Kyu??
Abdul:- tum Bhi toh thak chuke hoge na..(murmers) Aur Waise Bhi Hume seedha Agra Jana Hai.
Abrar in barely audible voice:- Hume phir se Ghum hona Nhi h.
Jalal with stern face :-Maine Kaha Na Ki main hi chalunga matlab main hi chalaunga,Aur Waise Bhi tumlog thak chuke ho..
Both Abdul and Abrar knew its waste to argue with jalal. So both silently planned something ..
Abdul:- Abrar tum Ek kaam karo. tum jaage hue raho ,sona mat !,Aur dekhte raho Ki hum sahi raste Jaa rahe h..a..
Abrar while interrupts:- main Kyu? Tum Kyu Nhi?!
Abdul:- Pehle Meri puri Baat to sunlo ..jab tumhe lage Ki tumhe neend arahi ho tab Mujhe jaga Ke tum sojana.!
Abrar:- Yeh theek h.isse hum kahin galat jagah Nhi pahuchege HUMESHA Ki tarha..
Abdul:- toh theek Hai main thoda aram Kar leta hun,tum chaukanna rehna.
According to their deal Abdul gives Abrar the responsiblility of being alert and sleeps. After few minutes Abrar feels sleepy and wakes Abdul reminding him about his turn and sleep,and this process carry on till both went sleeping whereas jalal in his Jo land.
Edited by zynahsiddiqi956 - 8 years ago
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part 5:-
After few hour's .Abdul felt something twitching him on his nose and large weight on his neck.In this irritation he slowly opened his eyes just to get scared with a feet on his neck and a toe near his nose.!! He could see only a feet .he pushed the feet and got up from his place and saw a horrible view ..Their baghi was at beach side collided with a coconut tree.And the surrounding was unfamiliar.and he looked for Abrar .
There he was a lazy bump sleeping peaceful with his mouth half open, one leg on couch and other leg outside the baghi.his body was lying in a zig zag way as if an octopus has spread his hands and legs.his one hand was clutching banana which was half eaten and his other hand on horse tail YUCK.!! Then Abdul look for jalal who had insisted to ride the baghi.and as always he was holding a payal in his hand and other hand holding rope of horse and is sleeping like a lost child.. Abdul felt pity for his friend.. And the angry Abdul woke Abrar from his danger sleep who too is shocked seeing their destination..
Abdul:- Yeh Sab Tumhari wajah se Hua Hai.jab tumhe jaagna tha toh tum soye Kyu??
Abrar:- soye toh tum Bhi the Na.!
Abdul:- kyu Ki tab Meri sone Ki bari thi.!
Abrar:- Nhi Meri bari thi.
Abdul:- Meri
Abrar:- Meri
Abdul:- ismein galti Tumhari Hai.
Abrar:- Tumhari
Abdul:- Tumhari
And the argument goes on till they heard CHUP HOJAO..!! and they moved their eyes towards source of voice
.
Jalal with sleepy eyes:- kya Hua? Kyu Ladd rahe ho tumlog?
Abdul and Abrar in unison:- MUBARAK!! APNA SOWA(100) RECORD BANANE K LIYE.!
Jalal:- matlab??
Abdul and Abrar: - matlab 100wi Baar gumm ho Kar Hume nayi jagah pahuchane Ke liye ..
seeing surrounding he understood what he did and gives a guilty smile.but this is not India neither Bangladesh.
Jalal:- Yeh hum Kaha pahuchgye?
Abdul:- humse kya puch rahe ho,tumhi Hume Yaha lae ho.
Abrar:- Haan.! Tumhari jodha Ke qayal Ki wajah se tum Hume Yaha le aae ho.
Suddenly Abrar realized that he took jodha's name and saddened his friend. He cursed himself for taking her name ..
Abrar:- mera matlab..Woh Nhi tha..WO ja.
Jalal:- Chalo kisi se puchlete hai Ki Yeh kaunsi jagah Hai.
And went away without waiting for their response.
Abdul:- kya zaroorat thi tumhe jodha Ka naam lene Ki.?
Abrar:- galti se nikal gaya par sari galti tumhari Hai.tumhe jalal ko baghi chalane hi Nhi dena chahiye tha..
Abdul:- Acha,jab jalal zidd Kar raha tha tab tum chup Kyu the
Abrae:- Woh toh...
Abdul:- toh toh kya??
Jalal who notice Abdul and Abrar are not behind
Jalal:- tumlog aarahe ho ya mai khud chala jaun?
Abdul:- Haan .hum aarahe the..
Abrar:- lo Ab 100wi Baar jalal ko baggi chalane dene Ki galti Mubarak.
Abdul:- Aur 100wi Baar jodha k qayalon mein kho Kar gumm hone k Liye Bhi Mubarak.!
Abrar:- Aur 100wi Baar nayi jagah pahuchne k Liye Mubarak.!
jalal again:- aarahe ho ya Nhi??
With this Abdul and Abrar run towards jalal..
jalal to a passerby:- suniye bhai.kya aap Hume bata sakte Hai Yeh kaunsi jagah Hai??
person in English:- I don't understand what you are saying??
Jalal:- Yeh kaunsi bhasha h?
Abdul with actions:- Yeh jagah kaunsi Hai?
Person:- place name??
Abrar:- yes.(Abrar knows little English as he reads books)
Person:- its Kuala Lumpur! ( & Leaves )
Abrar:- kaula Lumpur.? Yeh kaunsi jagah h?
Jalal:- kuala Lumpur ..Yeh toh Malaysia mein Hai.
Abdul:- matlab hum Malaysia mein h.
Jalal while digesting the fact that they came totally opposite side from India:- Yeh toh Hindustan se pure 3,091km Ki duri par h..
Abdul:- Ab toh magrib(evening) hone wali h.Ab hum adhi raat ko Kaha rukinge.?
Jalal:- Ek kaam karte h.hum Yaha kisi ghar mein rukk jainge Aur Subha nikal Jate h.
Abrar:- Yahi theek hoga.Aur Waise Bhi Mujhe Bohat Bhook lagrahi Hai Aur neend Bhi arahi h.
Abdul:- Haan Haan .agar Koi sota Nhi toh kam se kam wapas Jane Ka raasta toh pata Hota(a taunt to Abrar)
Abrar:- Acha.! Agar Koi Aur Bhi Nhi sota toh hum Yaha pahuchte hi nhi. !(to Abdul)
Jalal with irritation :- tum Dono ladna bandh karoge.?
Their convo came to halt with voice of someone
Edited by zynahsiddiqi956 - 8 years ago

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