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Posted: 7 years ago
nice chapter😊
arjun's idea is awesome😃
the conversation between bhishma and brothers was very emotional😭
karna's thought about  shakuni is true⭐️ 
i hope nothing happens to them
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Posted: 7 years ago
Hey here's the new update but before the chapter guys one little thing. I just noticed that views are increasing continuously, so thanks to all those who are reading it. But one tiny request if you are reading it please let me know how you like it, or if you didnt like it. Pls just responed its a little discouraging to find so less reviews. So pls read and review...

Chapter 17
According to the plan the brothers returned to the camp and hastily packed some utensils, blanket and a change of clothes and threw them into a chariot, then they armoured up as quickly as they could and drove the chariot in the forest. Hiding it in a cave deep inside the trees, they chose a clearing to hide. They left some clear indications in the path so as to lead Ashwathama to the clearing. They then hid behind and on top of trees and waited like a hunter waiting for its prey.
Here on the other hand Ashwathhama led his army to the pandava camp. Army had come from provinces like Magadh, Vidarbh, Avanti, Ujjaini, Chhedi etc., it was a battalion of about a thousand. Ashwathama was leading the army, the mixture of an hungry wolf and a brave tiger, a very dangerous combination. And behind him was the sly and cunning pack elder, Shakuni, whose crafty mind had caused Mahabharat, and now could destroy these brothers newly found happiness, but little did he know that even he was just a pawn in God's game of ever continuing change. They reached Pandava camp ready for war but alas they found it empty apart from Duryodhan's charioteer. "Kaha gaye Kuruvanshi?" Ashwathama roared. "Wo...wo.." the man stammered "Jungle ki or gaye hain..ab main bhi agya leta hun" and he almost ran away from there toward the road. "Ahhh" Ashwathama shouted, "Bhaag gaye." "Shaant bachhe shaant" Shakuni said in his patent cunning voice "Woh bhaage nahi hai jaal bichhaya hai humare liye, par wo nahi jaante ki hum unhe hi phasayenge. Chalo achha hua aise bhi amne samne ka dwandh mjhe bhi anarthak hi lagta hai. Ab wo swayam humare samne ghutne tekenge tum 100 ki saina tukdi yaha rakho aur baakiyon ko apne pradeshon mein wapas bhej do, samman aur upahar sahit." "Par gandhar raaj.." Ashwathamma tried to interrupt. "Mere bachhe" Shakuni said "Vishwas rakho, tum jaldi hi unse apne pita ki mrityu ka badla le rahe hoge. Aur kuruvansh ka vinas ho ga, hum unhe yaaha marenge phir wapas isi sena ke saath unke bachhon aur baki bhaiyon ko hastinapur mein maarenge." He then came closer to Ashwathama and whispered his wicked plan and as soon as he completed both of them burst out in a menacing laughter a laughter so wicked that even satan would be scared...
The brothers waited for quite a while before they heard foot steps, and foot steps of a large number of people. They braced themselves for the fight and soon enough a small regiment of Army came in site. Ashwathama came in the clearing and shouted "Kayar kuruvanshiyon agar yodha ho to saamne aao" Bheem was about to go but Yudhishthir stopped him. "Bahar aao" he said "bahar aajao varna mujhe mushakon ko unke bilon se nikalne achhi tarah aata hai." No one answered him "Thhik hai" he said "toh dekho" He clapped and suddenly 4 soldeiers dragged in a wounded and dirty Shakuni. Ashwathhamma threw Shakuni to the ground and kicked him. "Mere bachche Duryodhan" Shakuni cried "Mujhe bachao" "Bahar aao Duryodhan" Ashwathama said "Varna tumhare mamashree ka jeevan yahi ant ho jayega." Seeing his beloved uncle in this state, Duryodhan rushed out before anyone could stop him. "Ashwathmma" He raged "Main tumhe chhorunga nahi" But as soon as he came in view, 10 people pounced on him but he was desperate tiger and stood more than a match for them. "Duryodhan" Ashwathama said "Shastra phenko varna tumhare mama.." Ashwathama maid a slight cut on his Shakuni's fore arm. Duryodhan without anither word dropped his mace. "Baandho is per se" Ashwathama said. Then soldiers tied him to the tree. Leaving Shakuni with the soldiers, Ashwathama now headed towards Duryodhan and touched the sword to his throat so sharply that it almost cut in. "Bahr aao" Aswathama said "Varna keval Gandhar raj nahi tumhara bhrata duryodhan yahi kaa; ki god mein so jaayega. Ek bhi van ya shastra mujhe maara toh baaki is e noch khayenge. Chup chap apne hatiyaar daal ke bahar aa jao." They had no choice now, they came out of their hide out slowly and put their weapons in ground. Ashwathama smiled. "Wah" he said "Yeh hui na baat. Yudhishthir bheem aur Karn ko bhi per se baandh do. Dushyasan, Nakul, Sahadev aur khaas kar Arjun ko mat baandhna...ab pata chalega tum sab ko." The soldiers followed his instructions. They tied Karn to the same tree as Duryodhan and Bheem and Yudhishthir to a tree beside them. As soon as they were tied four soldiers came beside them each holding a nife threateninly on their neck. Then something strange happened, Ashwathama went towards Shakuni and pulled him up. Then a soldier brought a pitcher of water and Shakuni washe dhimself, there wasn't even a single wound in his body except for a small cut in his arm. "Bohot achhe Ashwathama" he said "bohooot achhe." "Mamashree" Duryodhan was stunned "Apne aisa prapanch kiya mere saath. Kyun?" "Kyunki mujhe ghrina tum kuruvanshiyon se" he said "aaj tum sab ko wo pira denge hum ki mrityu ki bhikh mangoge tum." "Aage aao tum charon" Ashwathama ordered...the four of them stood on their place uncertain...

ps: Thanks for your review nonie12345 tellme how's this chap...
Edited by livelyandlovely - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
Amazing chapter😃
Looks like Sahadev's dream is coming true😲
I hate Shakuni so much😡how could he do that with his own nephews?
I feel that next chapter is going to have suffering of the brothers am I right?

P.s. - do not get discouraged by less reviews .  I am sure you will get your readers back. I just love your fanfic❤️
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: Nonie12345

Amazing chapter😃

Looks like Sahadev's dream is coming true😲
I hate Shakuni so much😡how could he do that with his own nephews?
I feel that next chapter is going to have suffering of the brothers am I right?

P.s. - do not get discouraged by less reviews .  I am sure you will get your readers back. I just love your fanfic❤️

Yup you are right and its gonna be real wicked...they will have their day well till the bros strike back...thans for the review
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Posted: 7 years ago
Nice update!
Now the villain is doing shadyantra again.😡
I hate shakuni😡
Why he is destroying his own sister's family?
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Posted: 7 years ago
Wow...nice update ..sakuni is really very evil person..feeling sad about duryodhana and brothers...
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Chapter 18
The four of them came forward hesitantly. "Apaman kya hota hai aaj tumlogon ko pata chalega" Ashwathama said "apne kawach utaro" They obeyed helplessly. "Ab apne ghutno pe baitho" the next order came. They did that too. Ashawathhama walked to Nakul and said "Ek karya karo tum uthho" He ordered. Nakul got up. Ashwathama cast a menacing look at Arjun and then he took a whip and started beating Nakul. Nakul tried not to shout, he knew that would hurt his brothers. But Ashwathamma threw him against stones, and it was not long before Nakul was shouting in agony. "Ashwathama" Karn growled struggling helplessly against the ropes "Chhoro mere bhaiyon ko, chhoro unhe varna bohot pachhtaoge." "Achha" Shakuni said and he also took a whip and started beating Sahadev. Then Aswathama did something horrifying, he pulled the angavastra from Nakul's body, and then he stripped him off his dhoti and within moments he had strippped Nakul completely Naked. "Ashwathama" Yudhishthir shouted "Yun kayaron ke bhaati asahay pe atyachar kar rahe ho" Ashwathama did not reply, he just started beating Nakul harder. "Mere daas hain yeh" Ashwatham said "Main jo chahe karun." "Mere bhai tumhare daas nahi" Duryodhan said "inhise puchh lo" Ashwathama said "kyun nahi ho tum mere daas?" He asked pointing towards the four sword men near the trees, "Haan hain" they agreed just to save there brothers' lives. Jungle was field with screams of nakul and Sahadev. "Arey Arjun" he said stopping for a moment "tumhare saath kya kiya jaaye" He thought "Haa, aaj tumhara bhi chir haran hoga" he said with his eyes glinting "par pehle tum apne brihanna la swarup ein to aao, pehno yeh saari" he said throwing him a saree. Arjun nodded in no. "Nahi achha" he signaled some soldiers, who went and started beating Dushyasan brutally. Arjun still hesitated to move. Then Ashwathama did something gruesome, he dragged the naked Nakul to a mud puddle near by and ducked him in it, making him lick the mud. "Nahi Ashwathama" Arjun said rushing to Nakul, and trying to pull him back from mud but the swords men near his brothers throat stopped him. Ashwathama made Nakul crawl in the mud. "Nahi Ashwathama" Arjun said sinking to his knees "Tum jaisa bologe main karunga, mere bhaiyon ko itni yatna mat do" he said in a defeated tone. He picked up the saree and wrapped around himself. "Kaho kya karna hai?" he asked in a woman like voice. "Ab uchit hai" Ashwathama said, turning his attention to Arjun "Apne nritya se humara manoranjan karo Arjun." "Main karta hun" Arjun said "Par inhe marna banndh karo" He pointed to Dushyasan and Sahadev. "Thhik hai" Ashwathama said after thinking for sometime "par tumhe inke hisse ki maar khani hogi.." "Main prastut hun" Arjun said. Ashwathama smirked and signaled the soldiers and Shakuni to leave those two, they were almost half dead. Nakul was shivering behind Ashwathama. "Shuru karo Arjun kshama karna Brihannala" Ashwathama mocked him. Arjun started dancing. The soldiers laughed at him, shakuni and Ashwathama mocked him, but Arjun continued. Karn and the others tied to the tree either wanted to die themselves or kill each and every of their brothers tormentors. They struggled against their ropes, their pain wasnt physical but it just burnt their heart to see their little brothers who they were supposed to protect taking all these silently to save their lives. After Arjun had danced for sometime, suddenly a whip landed on his back. Ashwathama started beating Arjun and he did it mercilessly. Arjun's body was soon wounded badly, bud not one shout did escape Arjun's mouth, the pain, the humiliation the anger was just boiling in him. He just waited for an oppurtunity but could see none. Ashwathama kept on throwing him around and by mistake Ashwathama threw him at Karn. Arjun who was about to fall stabilised himself by holding on Karn's shoulder. Karn felt so helplessly, damn he couldnt even hug Arjun and comfort him. but he had a plan and it was an oppurtunity to convey it to Arjun. "Arjun meri bat suno" he said "Tum aur Sahadev mere aur Duryodhan ka apman karo, taki inhe lage ki tum apne bhaiyon ke liye hume maar doge. Woh tumhare haton mujhe marwane ki lalsa sambhal nahi paayenge aur tumhe shastra de denge, sashtra milte hi tum humare bandhan kaat dena aur in talwar dhariyon ko maar dena. Yeh kar sakoge tum dono?" "Haan" Arjun said. "Kitna rakt bah raha hai" he said looking at Arjun. Ashwathama who was enjoying Karn's inability to comfort his brother now decided to call Arjun back but not verbally, instead he started beating Sahadev. Arjun noticing this rushed and hugged Sahadev taking all the beating himself. Arjun also took this opportunity to whisper the plan to Sahadev. Ashwathama pulled him apart from Sahadev and threw him to the ground, he beat him brutally. Arjun knew he would probably cry holding Karn for hours but for now all his pain turned to anger. "Chinkho Arjun" Ashwathama said "Mujhse karuna ki yachna karo." He placed one foot on Arjun's head. "Jitna maar sakte ho maaro Ashwathama" Arjun said "Aur prarthana karo ki mere pran nikal jaayein, kyun ki agar main bach gaya toh tum ko kaal ki god mein sula dunga." Ashwathama hearing this turned Arjun and started whipping his chest and belly. "Main sarvasresth dhanurdhar hun iss viswa ka" Arjun said "nahi hara paaoge mujhe aise" "Sarvasrshth" Ashwathama laughed "Karn ko bhi hara na paaye tum." "Maine toh unhe maar hi diya thha" Arjun said "Mere bhrata Yudhishthir ne apne dharm raksha hetu hi unhe bacha liya." "Humare daya se hi toh yeh log aaj zinda hai" Sahadev said catching on que. They continued insulting Duryodhan and Karn, Dushyasan was about say something angrily but Karn signalled him with his eyes. "Achha" Ashwathama said hearing their rant "toh ek kaam karo." He dragged both Sahadev and Arjun and made them stand in front of Karn and Duryodhan's tree... "Toh maar do inhe aur apne baaki bhaiyon ko lekar jaao." He thrust a bow and some arrows in Arjun's hand and a sword in Sahadev's hand. "Nahi Sahadev, nahi Arjun" Bheem and Yudhishtheer shouted. "Maaron inhe Arjun varna nakul aur Dushyasan apne pranon se haat dho baithenge." Arjun turned and looked at them, two soldiers were holding swords over them. Arjun signalled something with his eyes and then turned to Karn. He put an arrow in his bow and waited for Sahadev to move towards the tree. As soon as Sahadev had taken his stance, Arjun was also ready and next events happened within a flash. There were three slashes from Sahadev's sword and three arrows fired from Arjun's bow and there lay for dead swords men and the ropes on the trees were cut. Simultaneously Nakul and Duryodhan hit the gaurds standing over them on their sheen and the gaurds fell. Suddenly all the brothers were free. Arjun tore of the Saree from his body and threw it to Nakul who used it to cover his lower body. And suddenly there was open battle. In front of the brothers valiance Aswathama's army crumbled like straw. Karn had dropped his bow and he started beating Ashwathamma bare handed, remembering his each and every torture on his brothers. They were like wounded lions, even more destructive even more dangerous. Shakuni tried to run from there only to be dragged back by Bheem, by then the soldiers had either escaped or were dead. Only Ashwathama and Shakuni remained, the brothers circled around them threateningly....

What will be there fate? Stay tuned to know...i will update again tomorrow, if comments come fast enough...pls read abd review
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Posted: 7 years ago
Nice chapter..sakuni and ashwathama plan was so dreadful..they were heartless ...now he brothers are free...and will teach them a lesson
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Posted: 7 years ago
A quite wise plan by Karna!😉
Shakuni deserved all that happened or will happen to him.
Waiting for the next chapter
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Posted: 7 years ago
Chapter 19
Karn looked at Ashwathama, he wanted to kill him. "Sare bhrata puchhe hat jaao" he instructed "Aur mamashree Shakuni ko sambhalo" he looked at Ashwathama with hatred. "Uthho Ashwathama" he said "Aur yudh karo mujhse, koi shastra nahi malya yudh koi aur bich mein nahi aayega" Ashwathama got up and ran to Ashwathama with full force but Karn caught him by the waist and threw him on the ground. The ensuing fight was a onesided affair. Today it wasnt warrior Karn who was fighting it was big brother who had seen his younger brother bieng tortured in front of eyes. He beat Ashwathama mercilessly, he would have almost killed him but then he suddenly stopped. "Ashwathama" Karn said "tumne jo kiya wo ek jaghanya karya hai. Tumne nishatra ko yatna di. Tumhe dand kya dena tum toh swayam hi swayam ko yodha ke pad se gira chuke ho. Main samajhta hun ki tum apne pita ki mrityu ka pratishodh le rahe thhe, par ye badle tum amne samne ke yudh se na lekar yun chhal aur kapat se liya. Tume toh apne pita ki aatama ko aur thhes pahunchayee shayad. tum ne yeh tak nahi socha tum unhi ke swapna ko kuchal rahe thhe" Ashwathama looked suprised. "Yeh hai tumhare pita jee ka swapna" he said pointing to Arjun "ise sarva sresht dhanurdhar banane ke liye tumhare pita ne kayi paap kiya, apne sikshak dharm ka apaman kiya aur shayad isiliye unhi ka shisya unke mrityu ka nimitya bana. Isiliye main tumhe koi dand nahi dunga tum apna dand swayam bhogoge, apne isss jaghanya apradh ki shokagni mein jal kar. Apne jeevan ke har pal yahi sochoge ki tumne ek yodha ke ayogya acharan kiya. Jao meri drishti se nikal jaao. JAAO." Ashwathama got up embarassed, and left defeated on his horse. "Mamshree" Karn said "Aap hum sab se adhik Duryodhan ke apradhi hain aapke dand wahi chunega." Duryodhan advenced towards Shakuni, his deciet burning in his heart. He raised his sword to kill shakuni. But his childhood flashed before his eyes, he had spent it with shakuni. His mother's face flashed before him, how it would pain her if she came to know that here own son had killed her own brother for whatever reason it may be and he loered the sword. "Mere bachche" Shakuni looked influencingly at Duryodhan thinking that may be he could again sway him to his side. "Bas mamshree" Duryodhan said in a low pained voice. "Aaj apne jo kiya uske liya aapko mujhe mrityu deni chahiye, par main yah nahi bhul sakta ki aap mere mama hai meri mata ke bhai hain. Maine yadi apka vadh kiya toh meri mata ko pira hogi isiliye main apko nahi marunga. Aap Gandhar laut jaiye, aur bhavishya mai kabhi Aryavart mai nahi aayenge aap" Shakuni nodded. Suddenly Nakul due to the blood loss and exposure, lost his sense. He was about to fall and Yudhishthir caught him on his lap. All the other brothers gathered around him. Shakuni also got up to leave, suddenly Duryodhan called him again. "Mamashree" Duryodhan said "Agar aap dobara iss Aryavart mein aaye ya aisa ghrinya sadyantra racha toh main bhool jaunga aap mere mama hai." There was subdued and dangerous anger in his eyes. Shakuni knew he that he no more had control over his nephew. He hastily left the nrothers tending to Nakul. They were taken in themselves and didnt even spare shakuni a secong glance...

Okay I know its a short update but I just returned from 8hrs long class...so pls understand...and pls read and review...next update is again bromantic and their return to Hastinapur will be there...pls read and review..
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