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Posted: 8 years ago
Wow, your story is getting better and better after each update, liked this update very much , liked how karna made ashwathama realize his mistake and duryodhana warning to mama sakuni.keep updating , can't wait to read more.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Thanks nonie and thanks abhi for the review...will try to update today...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Chapter 20
Nakul was gasping, he had had one of the most traumatic experiences of his life. Karn tried to console him, he ran his hand through his hair, rubbed his hands and spoke to him comfortingly. Duryodhan was holding Dushyasan close to himself, since they were young Duryodhan had always been very protective about Dushyasan but today he had failed. Yudhishthir was trying to console Bheem and Sahadev simultaneously both were hurt one mentally one physically. Only Arjun was sitting aloof. "Hume yaha se chalna chahiye" Arjun said very factually "Mujhe lagta hai ki hume raat usi gufa mein guzarni chahiye jis gufa mein humne rath chhupaya hai, Nakul tum yaha aas pas kisi adivasi gaon ka pata laga sakte ho? Kar paaoge kya?" "Haan" Nakul nodded. Painfully proping himself up a little more, he cooed like a pigion suddenly some pegions fluttered around him. He cooed some more and them shooed the birds away. "Humne jis gufa mein rath chhupaya hai" he said "usi se kuchh duri par ek gaaon hai, hume waha se shayad kuchh anaj mil jaaye" "Chalo phir gufa ki taraf" Karn said. He helped Nakul stand up, Bheem supported Sahadev and Duryodhan helped Dushyasan. Yudhishthir placed a hand on Arjun's shoulder but Arjun nodded in no. He walked himself, his foot soles were cut the blood oozed out of them. Karn looked at him in concern, he was suffering Karn could see that, he needed to cry. They reached the cave, they took their chariot out and tied it under canopy of trees. They hastily made for hay beds and let the wounded ones sit on them. Duryodhan and Bheem went to gather fire woods. After making Nakul lie down and Sahadev and Dushyasan comfortable, Yudhishthir and Karn appproached Arjun, he was concerning them the most because he had bottled up the pain. Karn placed one hand around his shoulder and held him securedly, Arjun tried to scoot out but Karn tightened his grip making him wince a bit in pain. "Arjun" Yudhishthir coaxed him taking his hand "Arjun baat toh karo putra, kyun pira apne andar chhupa rahe ho." He cupped Arjun's cheek, while Karn rubbed his back. "Kis par krodhit ho Arjun" Yudhishthir asked "hum par? hum bohot bure bhai hain na, tum logon ki raksha tak na kar sake, tum hum par krodh nikalo apne aap pe kyun." "Main kisi pe krodhit nahi bhratashree" Arjun answered shortly. Karn put a hand on his head and tried to console him but to no avail. Suddenly Karn did something unusual, he turned Arjun to himself and slapped him hard. Arjun did not react at all, he remained expressionless, Karn slapped him again harder. All others except Yudhishthir were shocked. "Yeh aap kya kar rahe hain bhratashree?" Sahadev asked. "Moun raho Sahadev" Yudhishthir said rebuking him with his eyes. Yudhishthir looked as though he knew perfectly well what Karn was doing. Karn kept on slapping Arjun the slaps growing harder each time, Arjun was initially expressionless but soon he started wincing and after probably the twelfth slap Arjun sudddenly let out a shout of pain and then he started crying and weeping loudly. Karn abrutly stopped slapping him, and pulled Arjun into his chest. Arjun latched his arms around Karn's neck and hid his face in the crook of his neck. He cried and shouted as though each lash hit by Ashwathama was hurting him now, he sobbed into his neck holding on to Karn for support. Yudhishthir reached out to pat his back and ruffled his hair. Karn stretched an arm and took Yudhishthir in the hug too. He knew it was hard for him to stop being the eldest so suddenly but even he needed to learn to show his pain. Karn held both of them as securely as he could. Arjun kept on shouting and crying. Meanwhile, Duryodhan and bheem returned. They were shocked to hear the violent screams of Arjun. Yudhishthir also had burried his head in Karn's chest, it was probably the first time since his father that a elder man had given him this much sense of support. He reluctantly pulled back from the hug "Main aur bheem us gaon se anaj le ke aatey hain" he said. Karn nodded and they left. Arjun's screams had stowed a bit but the sobs were as violent. Karn held him tenderly and strocked his hair placing his cheek on his head so as to let him feel safe and secured. "Shhh" he whispered not to quite him down but just to comfort him. "Bohot dard ho raha hai" Arjun said "Bohot pira ho rahi hai" "Sab thhik ho jaayega" Karn said "main hun naa." He let Arjun take out all his pain, humiliation and trauma after a long while Arjun sobs quited down. Karn slowly parted from him let him sit comfortably. Meanwhile Duryodhan had boiled some water and dipped fresh clothes in it, he also had prepared an antiseptic paste. Karn smiled aprovingly at him. They started tending their brother's injuries...


Okay I could write this much only today so I am updating it...actually today also I had a 8hrs long class...tell me if you like it...pls read and review...
LOVE YOU GUYS..
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Posted: 8 years ago
wonderful chapter
Karna's Technique was nice👍🏼
Loved how Karna was consoling Arjun and Yudhisthir❤️
It is nice that Yudhisthir also got some comfort from his elder brother
Liked how Duryodhana is doing something to heal his brothers⭐️
Edited by Nonie12345 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Caught up with the last 3-4 updates and loved all of them!! ❤️
The care and the love the brother's have for each other deserve a special mention...👏

When are you updating the next part...it's been a long time.Eagerly waiting for your next update😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hey guys loved to see this forum is alive I will update again actually had a writers block and also I started another ff... so...this got a bit neglected...check that ff out too. Here's the link...https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/fan-fictions/4703180/khotey-sikkey-one-shot
Will definitely update this...
Edited by livelyandlovely - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: livelyandlovely

Hey guys loved to see this forum is alive I will update again actually had a writers block and also I started another ff... so...this got a bit neglected...check that ff out too. Here's the link...https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/fan-fictions/4703180/khotey-sikkey-one-shot

Will definitely update this...


I will definitely read this FF.😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
Chapter 21

Duryodhan made Dushyasan sit up against his chest, while Karn gently cleaned his wounds. The antiseptic burned, Dushyasan cried in pain, Duryodhan rubbed his arm while Karn gently blew on his wounds. They comforted him and dressed the wounds and made him lie down. The same routine was repeated with Sahadev, he latched on to Duryodhan quite tightly,it helped with the pain. And then they moved on to Nakul. Nakul was in a semi asleep state, the Sari wrapped around his waist covering his legs, Karn needed to strip him once again to check the wounds on his legs. He thought it would be the best if he did so while Nakul was still asleep. He slowly tried to remove the saari, but suddenly Nakul waked up. Grabbing the saari with all his might he pushed Duryodhan back against a rock and kicked Karn on his chest. Karn was taked aback "Nakul" he still spoke softly "Bachcha main toh bas tere ghao dekhna chah raha thha, hum tumhe aur pira nahi pahuchayenge beta." "Aap log bhi toh Ashwathama ke saath hi thhe na pehle" Nakul shouted "Aap bhi usiki tarah hume apaman aur pira denge, isiliye aap mere vastra utaar rahe thhe..." "Nahi Nakul" Duryodhan said "Hum bas tumhara upchaar.." He couldnt complete as Nakul again hit him and kicked Karn. "Achha thhik hai" Karn said, he had enough now "Yudhishthir aur bheem ke ane ke baad wo tumharz upchar karenge. "Nakul kya kar rahe ho tum?" Arjun shouted, all of the brothers were stunned by Nakul's behaviour. "Shaant Arjun" Karn said. "Galtiyan to humne ki hai" Duryodhan said "Bhugatni toh paregi, aao tumhara to upchar kar le" he said to Arjun. Karn and Duryodhan moved on towards Arjun. Karn cleaned his wounds carefully, while Duryodhan supported his body. Arjun found it quite comforting but he was irked by Nakul's behaviour. Karn noticed this so he spoke softly so that Nakul wont hear, "Shant ho jaao Arjun. Sambhavata Nakul ne koi duswapna dekha hai isi karan usne achanak uthke mujhe uske vastra utarta dekh is prakar ashaant ho gaya. Usse thhora samay do wo swayam hi thhik ho jaayega. Thhik hai ab tu shaant ho jaa" Arjun relaxed, he believed Karn. Indeed Nakul had been dreaming, he had dreamed of himself naked and bizarre voices laughing and jeering at him,and thats why he had been so violent on waking up. But as he was left alone he slowly his mind calmed and with that came the realisation what he had done. How could he hit his elder brothers. Oh god! he didnt know how to make up for it, may be he could apologise let them decide his punishment. Meanwhile, Arjun put his head on Duryodhan's lap and closed his eyes. Karn washed his body with warm water, there were cuts under his feet, on his palm, his back his chest...all over him. Arjun now openly flinched as his wounds burned, he clutched duryodhan's outstretched hand. Karn comfortingly bandaged his wounds, while Duryodhan lulled him half asleep. After Laying him comfortably they, Karn and Duryodhan both got up to arrange a the fire. He had just walked to steps when he almost stumbled as someone had tightly hugged his left foot from behined. He looked down to find a curled Nakul at his feet, crying his, his tears washing Karn's feet. "Nakul kya kar rahe ho..." Karn tried to coax him up. "Nahi bhratshree" Nakul said "Hum anujon ka sthhan apke charnon mein hi hain, kshama kar dijiye maine ap ko... ap dono ko padaghat kiya..." Nakul looked up his hand folded , eyes red, breathing hitched with sobs... he turned towards Durodhan. "Bhratashree" Nakul said "Aap bhi kshama kar di jiye na. Dand de dijiye aap dono mujhe, dand toh milna hi chahiye mujh akinchan ko. Milna chahiye..milna chahiye" Nakul started slapping himself. "Nakul" both Karn Duryodhan were horrified, Karn knelt near Nakul and holding both his hand firmly to keep him from slapping himself "Kshama kar diya tumhe Nakul" Karn said. "Haan bete" Duryodhan said "Hume pata hai aaj jo huya uske baad tumne yeh jo kiya woh thhik na sahi par tumne soch smajhke bhi nahi kiya" Nakul was still struggling with his guilt. "Nakul" Karn said "Saiyan pe wapas chalo. Chot lagi hai aur tum iss prakar ghutno, matlab budhdhi hai ya nhi chalo abhi..." He and Duryodhan supported Nakul to the bed, and after they sat down Karn said "Nakul mujhe pata hai tumne koi diswapna dekh kar hi aisa kiya na?" Nakul nodded "Bas toh khatam ho gayi baat" Karn said "Magar dobara kabhi iss prakar karoge toh dand awashya dunga" "Nahi bhratashree" Nakul said holding both Duryodhan's and Karn's hand "Dobara nahi hoga" His voice was raked with guilt, Duryodhan ruffled his hair to comfort him. He slumped agains Karn's chest, tightly hugging him...his sobs loud and heartwrenching..."Shh chup" Karn said "bas ho gaya ab chup ho jao" Karn signalled Duryodhan to check on Nakul's wounds, while he held him in his arms. Duryodhan hesitantly removed the dhoti and cleaned Nakul's legs. Nakul did not protest this time he just buried humself in Karn's lap. Duryodhan cleaned his wounds abndaged them and Draped a pink dhoti on him. "Dekha" Duryodhan said "Hogaya. mera bachcha" "Haan" Karn said "Tum sab so jaao thhori der ke liye" "Bhook lagi hai bhratashree" Dushyasan said..."TOh hum aa gaye bhojan lekar" Yushishthir walked in with bheem. They served food, which they had brought from the village in excahnge of hard labour...Duryodhand fed Dushyasan, Bheem fed Sahadev these two were hungry so ate up quickly... while Nakul who was bieng fed by Yudhishthir and Arjun who Karn was feeding were repelled by food. They had to coax them a lot to eat...comforting and reassuring them and each time they did this, their regret increased...todays experience was horrible for them but it had brought them even closer...

Hi guys...long time no see...sorry for dissapearing...ok so another cry cry brotherly chapter...next chap has their return to HP and also Dury will make up for Droupadi's dishonour...so read and review pls...and sorry again for going away...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Fantastic chapter😊
I am feel very sad for nakul😭
I loved how duryodhan and karna handled Nakul❤️
Karna,duryodhan and nakul conversation was nice
no need to say sorry😃
eagerly waiting to read the next chapter
Edited by Nonie12345 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Very nice story..

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