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CoffeeandInk

@CoffeeandInk

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Posted: 10 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: MKrayZee
This was beautiful. I've never read a third person POV on MaNan. very different, refreshing. Who would not want to be loved the way she loves him, and the way he loves her.

I'm so glad you are writing again.

Thanks!

I read a few fan fictions in third person, and because they describe things that protagonists are usually blind to, I've always wanted to try it once!

Bold - I've never really taken a break, as such. I only ever write when I feel like writing, or when sudden inspiration strikes. So I write kinda irregularly.

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CoffeeandInk

@CoffeeandInk

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Posted: 10 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: serenam
That was really beautiful! And, the way you've brought everything around, I could see it the other way as well i.e. from the perspective of a girl looking at / observing Manik.

Kudos! Hope you continue to write for a long time to come.

Love,
Serena

Thank you so much!

Bold - I actually considered writing that as well, but Manik has a complex personality, hard to understand. So if there was someone who liked Manik, she'd have been mostly starstruck. So I ditched that idea

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 10 years ago

#33

New concept.. Reading it in a third person's thoughts is fun sometimes and I thoroughly enjoyed it today..

Good writing keep it up.. 👏

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CoffeeandInk

@CoffeeandInk

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Posted: 10 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: Autumn_Hue
New concept.. Reading it in a third person's thoughts is fun sometimes and I thoroughly enjoyed it today..
Good writing keep it up.. 👏

Thanks a lot! I'm glad you liked reading it! :D

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-abz-

@-abz-

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Posted: 10 years ago

#35

beautiful !👏

actually being a girl I have a secret crush on Nandu !! She is that much adorable !!

This is really what others feel when this adorable child woman passes by along with her man of her life . I really love this one to the core !

Lovely !!

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Anu

@RomComFan

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Posted: 10 years ago

#36

Wow...I think this is the best one yet...loved the 3rd person POV and the observations are very sweet and realistic...completely makes sense how someone would fall for her, and your descriptions about her guy and BFF are amazing...seriously great, yet again...already excited for your next one.😊

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kaumudi sharma

@QueenOfHell

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Posted: 10 years ago

#37

all the three of them r so good but the third is just awesome

keep writing more dear 😊😊😊

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drnidsur

@drnidsur

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Posted: 10 years ago

#38

i just read all the three drabbles and have absolutely no words to say on how beautiful all the three were

each wriiten in a completely different way , esp the last one

ie seeing their relationship from another person's pov ...mindblowing

really your words and the way you express them, indeed they do not trangress even one bit of your feeling or the exact things in your minds .

osum ...

do keep writing many such ones whenever possible .

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A.Hajnal

@A.Hajnal

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#39

Riddhiii...!!!! 🤗

You did start to write OS...So gald and so happy I am...Dancing Ahhh, finally I will get to read the beauty of your words more often...😳

First one:- Aww...I love Manik's POV wale OS...Your words...There is always something so beautiful that does reflects his feeling, perfectly...

2nd one:- I did got Randhir wali feelings from the start. When I was reading it, the only thing in my mind was Sandhir's ride in Barish...The Samjhawana in BG and Randhir's realization of his love for her...That smile...God, I love that scene...I have fell out of SQ but that scene remains my most fav one...Randhir stole my breath...

And I HAVE read your OS that time, and still remembered the feel of it...That is how I knew...And plus, Manik is more of a Car person...He doesn't have a bike...😆

The 3rd one:- Wow, always expect from you to give something unexpected...A third person POV on MaNan...😲

That just shows how beautiful and so obviously in love they are that any outsiders can see it, come to love and respect it...

No matter how much and how many people fall in like/love with them, they will always know the half of the amazing person MaNan are...Only they know each other in the whole, the good, the bad, the best...That is why they are perfect, that is why they live in their own world, unaware of everything but them...

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Serena

@serenam

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Posted: 10 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: AzureLicht

Thank you so much!

Bold - I actually considered writing that as well, but Manik has a complex personality, hard to understand. So if there was someone who liked Manik, she'd have been mostly starstruck. So I ditched that idea

Totally agree that Manik is the more difficult character to decipher and that anyone admiring him from afar would be starstruck more than anything else.

However, if one were to assume that this third person doing the admiring is one with a certain level of observational skills, she / he would definitely be able to see the differences between Manik with Nandini Vs Manik sans Nandini despite being starstruck.

When Manik sans Nandini strides around the place as if he owns it (which, he technically does), there is a certain aura of power about him which makes him seem like a demi-god to mere mortals, a certain level of untouchability. On the other hand, when Nandini is in his vicinity, he becomes a normal 19 year old boy with his girl - very sweet, mischievous, very approachable.

Dunno if you'd agree with me, but I do think it can be done! What say? 🤔 ☺️ Would love to know your thoughts.

Love,

Serena