Wow!!
La douleur exquise indeed!! How apt!!!
I loved so many things about this piece of beautiful writing...
The nightmare - speaks volumes of his inner fear that he may lose her, that she would literally slip away.
The way you described his feelings, his frustration and his craving for her..lovely!! Totally empathising with Rudra...😆
Also loved her instant concern for him, overriding any other emotions and desires..very in keeping with Paro's character..
I like the way you wrote about his inner voice... I have tried it myself in one of my OSes..i love writing about a struggling-to-emerge, soft Rudra, battling with his other side..the hard, unforgiving one...this inner conflict has so much scope and i love the way writers seem to be exploring this..
These are my favorite parts from your OS.
And I hope that you wouldnt mind that I took the liberty of adding my vishesh tippanis in blue font...
Such a lovely start to a Sunday morning...loving it!!
Do let me know if you have written anything else previously, that i mightve missed..
And also please do write more in the future,,,it is a pleasure to read your work!!
Especially when the pre-cap reeks with sweeter-than-rainbow sugar kinda love... <3
so true!!! I wrote this over the weekend just to keep myself occupied. Of course I did watch the episodes of last week an indecent number of times. ...
As have the rest of us!!!
...And every writer here on the forum has given me the kind of happiness one would feel on shaking hands with Benedict Cumberbatch. Inspiration hit me, and hence I decided to pen down an OS, simply for the pleasure of it.
Oh we are all so sherlocked!!! This reference totally cracked me up!!!
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Did he even want to let her go?
No you dont Rudra..it's a lost cause...
Would they die if they looked away...? If they so much as blinked...?
oh, they would, wouldnt they? Such intensity!!!
But is enough, enough?
I loved this sentence...really conveys so much!👏
Was he to see and not have? To possess but never belong?
So I interpret this to mean that you are going to write another OS...in continuation of this one...where he will belong as well! 😉
It seemed to burn and sooth her at the same time. Almost like the man who had placed it there.
such a fitting description of her feelings and of her man..loved it!!
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PS: in case it was not clear, my likey lots and me reviewed extensively!!!
Edited by What_the - 11 years ago
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