Originally posted by: chotidesi
Niyoti, you're fabulous. Amazing. Wonderful. Fantastic. Phenomenal. I'm running out of positive adjectives. I want this to happen. I want him to realize her loss deeply, to feel it within every part of him- and then I want him to manaofy her and make her come back with him. Not by force, but of her own will.
This line: Paro was packing. With an unaccustomed nervous flutter of his heart he concluded that the trunks looked far too heavily stuffed for a short trip away.You've depicted his noticing that she doesn't seem like she's going to come back very well. The nervous flutter- the tightening of his heart- everything tells him that something is wrong, that she is planning on leaving him. And it hurts him, and you've shown that so, so well.I also really liked this line: The wide smiles that had earlier been bestowed freely had been replaced by cautious ones and for a man who had vowed to keep his distance he felt the loss far too keenly.He promised her he'd keep his distance, but I think he'll start living for her smiles and her laughter- This line just stuck out to me. She's so generous with her love right now, I want to see how it'll be when she's hurt by him, when she doesn't want to win him over- when he has to do that.Wonderful job, Niyoti- Every time, you set the standard higher.
Originally posted by: shreya_rc
Fantastic niyo !! I always knew u r the gem !! hihi.
by the way, dookhi kahani as a gift !😲yeh tho cheating !! waise main bhi yehi kiya thrice...so chal maaf kar diya , since this judaai is really very very needed to wash off rudra's akadh !
Originally posted by: prettypri
This is beautifully written...and I hope we get to see Rudra realise his feelings without Paro going away in the show!
Loved the way his thoughts went and the unsaid words that hung between them...reflected in his actions!👏
Originally posted by: shreya_rc
Fantastic niyo !! I always knew u r the gem !! hihi.
by the way, dookhi kahani as a gift !😲 yeh tho cheating !! waise main bhi yehi kiya thrice...so chal maaf kar diya , since this judaai is really very very needed to wash off rudra's akadh !
Originally posted by: zanayaforever
Rudra's pain was so tangible; now i am feeling a weight in my chest 🥺 ..
i was confused about d bold lines..may be u shud mention it in d beginning..
And pls niyo,don stop like dis,both going separate ways.. 😭 ..sequel chahiye abhi ke abhi..
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