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maris

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Posted: 12 years ago

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It Hurts!!

Your words tonight hurt me so much!! Words can hurt more than anything else can,because sometimes they can last forever.

How can you say those words Ram? Kya main aisi aurat hun,ki meri soch bhi aisi neech hai? Kya hua aap ko? Seeing such jealousy and anger makes me afraid.. Afraid that such a man thinks so much of me.. Does this show another facet of your feelings for me? Is this how your love is getting expressed?

The way you shouted woke everyone and made them scramble here.. Faces reacting diffrently; concerned and questioning by some and knowing and smirking by some.. I wasnt able to face any of them..Just smiled and walked away..

Behind my smile is a hurting heart,walking away while falling apart.And now here Iam sitting on the lawn, mindless of the chill and the nocturnal insects inspecting me..

Words hurled at me lashing like a whip.. Your anger blinding your sense, clouding your sight..Your jealousiness betraying your agony and disbelief..

Cant you see that love permeating my body and lighting up my face..Take a look at me now.. Am just empty, feeling nothing, coz my heart is with you..

A ray of Hope!

I see the faint silhouette of you.. Walking straight and purposefully,towards me..The closer you come,the closer I can make out all those feelings dancing on your face..

Yes!! yess! YES! My heart in you skips a beat. Your remose and silence speaks more than those apologies.. A faint but different heart throbs and pulsates in me..Yours beating in mine..

No words are need.. I know! Your strong arms lead me back into the house. I feel safe and secure..

It hurts!

It does hurt...

This new feeling thats mutual,hurts.. Waiting for the day to say it out,least it eats me alive..

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Monamie

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Posted: 12 years ago

#62

lovely update Maris😳👍🏼

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Chitra RaviKiran

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Posted: 12 years ago

#63

loved it. its actually exactly how Priya would react

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Neenzoo

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Posted: 12 years ago

#64

Lovely thoughts...the only snag is I dont want the whole house to hear what Mr Kapoor said...that will really create a different impression in each of their minds..I hope they dont play it like that..

But love the way she goes and sits in the lawn...nature will clear her mind of any bad thoughts and will give her the clarity to understand why such a man whom she loves spoke like that...

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mem1

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Posted: 12 years ago

#65

most beautifully written, once again. Loved it. I agree with Neenzoo, in hoping that the whole family does not hear their argument, but other than that it is totally wonderful.

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maris

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Posted: 12 years ago

#66

Neenzoo

Lovely thoughts...the only snag is I dont want the whole house to hear what Mr Kapoor said...that will really create a different impression in each of their minds..I hope they dont play it like that..

But love the way she goes and sits in the lawn...nature will clear her mind of any bad thoughts and will give her the clarity to understand why such a man whom she loves spoke like that...

mem1

most beautifully written, once again. Loved it. I agree with Neenzoo, in hoping that the whole family does not hear their argument, but other than that it is totally wonderful.

Neenz and Mem,

Thanks for your comments..The thing is Raya were shouting beyond their senses..Its just natural that sound carries far..As it is Niharika and mama are always wondering and poking their noses into Raya's room and affairs, and hence need no excuse to assemble when such a fight was going on..

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avivakirk

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Posted: 12 years ago

#67

Maris👏

What a heart wrenching portrayal of Priya's pain...Jeans when ripped can be seen and mended but a heart's wound cannot be seen with the naked eye...It also rips and the raw pain sears till the balm of love is applied...Love is so complicated and when your loved one hurts you the pain is like a cruel stab...

Excellent portrayal of Priya's feelings 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Maris

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maris

@maris08

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Posted: 12 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: avivakirk
Maris👏
What a heart wrenching portrayal of Priya's pain...Jeans when ripped can be seen and mended but a heart's wound cannot be seen with the naked eye...It also rips and the raw pain sears till the balm of love is applied...Love is so complicated and when your loved one hurts you the pain is like a cruel stab...
Excellent portrayal of Priya's feelings 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Maris

Thanks Avi..

How succinctly you have said about Priya's feelings..Thats exactly what I wanted to convey..Priya hurts and the only balm that can soothe and relieve her pain is Ram-His words of contrite and action..Lets see..

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LalitaLahiri

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Posted: 12 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: maris08
It Hurts!!

Your words tonight hurt me so much!! Words can hurt more than anything else can,because sometimes they can last forever.

How can you say those words Ram? Kya main aisi aurat hun,ki meri soch bhi aisi neech hai? Kya hua aap ko? Seeing such jealousy and anger makes me afraid.. Afraid that such a man thinks so much of me.. Does this show another facet of your feelings for me? Is this how your love is getting expressed?

The way you shouted woke everyone and made them scramble here.. Faces reacting diffrently; concerned and questioning by some and knowing and smirking by some.. I wasnt able to face any of them..Just smiled and walked away..

Behind my smile is a hurting heart,walking away while falling apart.And now here Iam sitting on the lawn, mindless of the chill and the nocturnal insects inspecting me..

Words hurled at me lashing like a whip.. Your anger blinding your sense, clouding your sight..Your jealousiness betraying your agony and disbelief..

Cant you see that love permeating my body and lighting up my face..Take a look at me now.. Am just empty, feeling nothing, coz my heart is with you..

A ray of Hope!

I see the faint silhouette of you.. Walking straight and purposefully,towards me..The closer you come,the closer I can make out all those feelings dancing on your face..

Yes!! yess! YES! My heart in you skips a beat. Your remose and silence speaks more than those apologies.. A faint but different heart throbs and pulsates in me..Yours beating in mine..

No words are need.. I know! Your strong arms lead me back into the house. I feel safe and secure..

It hurts!

It does hurt...

This new feeling thats mutual,hurts.. Waiting for the day to say it out,least it eats me alive..

LOVED it. Absolutely correct that niharika and taklu would definitely be listening outside the door.

And I loved the part when Ram comes to the lawn and just holds out his hand and Priya allows him to lead her back to the house.

Very subtle and this is exactly the type of confession I want. I don't want them saying anything to each other.

When they go back to the house, I would like Ram to close the door and engulf Priya in a bear hug. Followed by a soft and long kiss on the forehead. And then he makes her lie down and they sleep, close to each other.

Consummation will happen a few days later or maybe in a week...they'll progress slowly. But I dont think they need to "confess" that they need to love each other.

Later, in fun, ok...when they force the other person to say it. But not required now.

I really liked the update. Serene.

Lalita

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maris

@maris08

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Posted: 12 years ago

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LOVED it. Absolutely correct that niharika and taklu would definitely be listening outside the door.

And I loved the part when Ram comes to the lawn and just holds out his hand and Priya allows him to lead her back to the house.

Very subtle and this is exactly the type of confession I want. I don't want them saying anything to each other.

When they go back to the house, I would like Ram to close the door and engulf Priya in a bear hug. Followed by a soft and long kiss on the forehead. And then he makes her lie down and they sleep, close to each other.

Consummation will happen a few days later or maybe in a week...they'll progress slowly. But I dont think they need to "confess" that they need to love each other.

Later, in fun, ok...when they force the other person to say it. But not required now.

I really liked the update. Serene.

Lalita

Thanks Laitha.. As much as possible I try to feel the emotions like how Priya will feel.. A mix of little bit of realism and liberty of writing always helps in getting across to readers..Priya's anger is momentary as love for Ram will prevail over it and help her in understanding him better..

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