FF: Last thing I expected - Mayur. Chapter28 Pg148

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debby

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Posted: 16 years ago

#581

Showers can be so interesting. 8) I loved the whole backdrop that you created... Mayank's irresistible appeal and Nupur falling deeper and deeper into the lure..

Neev and his toys made one hell of a scene. lol
Not that I can ever dislike anything that has potential to draw them closer.
I must tell you this - you are exceptionally skilled at characterization. You fit the right people in the right mould or perhaps the mould chooses the person - oh well, u know what I mean. I always see an insight abt the narrative that is akin to a sixth sense - whether it be the stern officer, or Mayank's naughty brain or Nupur's thumping heart. You will be a wonder at plays too.

There's lots I want to say but I feel unnaturally low ATM.. I just came on coz an update of urs is hard to overlook. So I will just go with Brilliant. :D

Loved this part as much as ever... thanks for updating soon and hope the next one comes up quick as well. Love u :)

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#582

Originally posted by: debby
Showers can be so interesting. 8) I loved the whole backdrop that you created... Mayank's irresistible appeal and Nupur falling deeper and deeper into the lure..

Neev and his toys made one hell of a scene. lol
Not that I can ever dislike anything that has potential to draw them closer.
I must tell you this - you are exceptionally skilled at characterization. You fit the right people in the right mould or perhaps the mould chooses the person - oh well, u know what I mean. I always see an insight abt the narrative that is akin to a sixth sense - whether it be the stern officer, or Mayank's naughty brain or Nupur's thumping heart. You will be a wonder at plays too.

There's lots I want to say but I feel unnaturally low ATM.. I just came on coz an update of urs is hard to overlook. So I will just go with Brilliant. :D

Loved this part as much as ever... thanks for updating soon and hope the next one comes up quick as well. Love u :)

thank you soo much for such an uplifting review....awww but why're u down? I hope this chap lifted ur spirits by some degree....i hope ur not down coz of the Khabar Nahi sequence...lol.... :x

And thank you soooo much abt the characterization bit...I simply try to adhere to their characteristics ;)

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#583

Originally posted by: zoya_me
hey awesome part
and that ministry lady reminded me of umbridge from hp

plzzzz continue soon

Thanks a ton! yup that kiran yadav is a caricature of umbridge :)

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#584

Originally posted by: ~*mishu*~
i love neev more n more w/ each chapter! he is a complete sweetheart!
loved how nupur told off the the evil lady😆
n omg the best part when mayur n neev talked abt the toy
that was rocking!
anyways continue soon

Thanks a bunch! I'll try to update soon!:D

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#585

Originally posted by: xOxMwahxOx
OUTSTANDING!!!!....

this just gets better and better!! can I ask how old you are???? and where your from??

anyway update soon....this is THE BESTTT ff i have ever read! I cant wait for the next part now!
x

Thank you soo much! I'm 23, originally from India, lived in London for sometime and now in S;pore :D...I'll try to update soon!

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#586

Originally posted by: aati1429
oh man.. what a part.. loved nupur's reply to DMP lady for chid care!!!

Also Neev, mayank and nupur talk about the toy...

it was a lovely part.. loved every bit of it....

hey update fast

Thanks a lottt! :D Glad you enjoyed it!

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#587

Originally posted by: utfracks
Kainath, i so love you for this update!🤗
Man, this was a real pleasant surprise..

okay, so lets get started..
NEEV IS A REAL DARLING! He's becoming my fav each day. lol, i adore him even more than mayur..*guilty look* (can't believe i said that..) but seriously, he's so innocent! So cute, lovable, adorable!

Woah, mayur seemed to have had a pretty heated discussion..it started off with the terrorist toy and ended on their past! lol...they always seem to bring it on each other come what may!

poor Neev, must have upsetted him to see his mummy and daddy argue like that!! hehe...but i liked the way..no srry...loved the way you showed their arguement...so realistic..

Neev really talks a lot ha!😆 you know what? But this DMP member seriously reminded me of that evil professor umbridge🤢 of harry potter..she and her toad like face..😆

I loved the way Nupur went and kissed mayank! woah, i'm sure a cheek peck wud have worked fyn...lol...😆 i wud have loved to know mayank's reaction had nupur not told him the truth! that wud be worth something!😆

And i just ADORED Mayank when he apologised to Nupur! That was soooooo sweeeet of him..and the way he patted her hand...it made me go awwwwwwwwwww...😍

And the donation q-a session b/w mayank and neev was sooo adorable and cute! i sooo looove neev and mayank! ofcourse, nupur too!

All in alll, awesome, superb, rocking, fantabulous and amazing update! i hope they're inspection will go well...can't bear to see neev with annie!!! Do update soon..looooooooved it once again!

Hey Rachna, thank u sooooooo much for the looong, lovely review! you're reviews always make my day :)
Neev - what can i say abt that little devil, probably the cutest character I've thought of ;)

And Mayank and Nupur - another 'guthi' which is extremely hard to solve - sometimes harsh, sometimes sober...lol..and ur right, their past always gets in the way! lol....glad you liked the argument :)

And yes, Neev is indeed a chatterbox - he's definitely going to open his mouth during verrrry uncomfortable situations in the future...lol ;)

And you're absolutely right - the DMP is a replica of Umbridge, I hate both of them...bloody old hags...haha...excuse my french :)

And Nups was tooo flustered that moment, she couldnt think straight, and of course her attraction towards Mayank made her kiss him on the lips :D

And Neev with Annie 🤢 who wants that? But.....stay tuned to find out more!

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debby

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Posted: 16 years ago

#588

Originally posted by: archieeps

thank you soo much for such an uplifting review....awww but why're u down? I hope this chap lifted ur spirits by some degree....i hope ur not down coz of the Khabar Nahi sequence...lol.... :x

And thank you soooo much abt the characterization bit...I simply try to adhere to their characteristics ;)

Ha ha.. no point crying over split milk.. as it is, Khabar nahi doesnt really suit MN now.. ;)
I am just low because of some random unexpected circumstances.. need to gear myself up. lol
Ur chapter sure helped! :)

And oh, u're always very welcome. :)

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archieeps

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Posted: 16 years ago

#589

@ Debby: Glad to know that :) Keep smiling!

xoxo

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Divya

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Posted: 16 years ago

#590

kainath..hmmm..am late again😔..this is bothering me..😆
I absolutely adored this update!!😊...especially the way they fought...a typical married couple..saying things sure to hurt the other... 😆 😆 ..u also kno exactly what wud hurt the other cos u kno n love each other so well😆 😆 Ironic but true.

I realised u were British cos ur writing is😊 (even b4 u mentioned it!)
B/w need I say Prof Umbridge in the form of Kiran irritated me as much as Umb..I mean, the clip board n all..ughh..felt like smashing her head with it.

Like I said the last time, I love it when they say/do things not entirely meaning to..this time it was the kiss on the lips... 😆 loved it..

Neev sure is an adorable kid😊 loved him yet again....

Surprise us with more romance... 😆 😆
gr8 going, pls keep updating..
luv
Divya