FF: Last thing I expected - Mayur. Chapter28 Pg148 - Page 58

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Posted: 16 years ago
oh my god...u wnt believe......i m at work, and lots to do.............but wen i saw ur pm, just cudnt help it.
Wat an awesoem part...........once again all characters came to live.........and it was as if i cud see them all......both of them having their won ogling sessions was very sweet...........and ofcos the fight........well, it was necessary................
but the end, her concern and his ackowledgement...............woh....that was the best part............ i will desperately wait for u 2 update...........and see what happend wen DMP is at work............arent they like cupids....... :)
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Posted: 16 years ago
that evil wretched hag who the hell was she to be so rude ,
why didn't nupur just slap her
why didn't mayank throw her out of the house
n why the hell didn't neev smashed his terrorised toys over her wretched head........
sorry got over emotional ...
hey thanx 4 updating so soon kainnath , lov u loads 4 that ,,,,,
n pls pls put the flashback of 5 years ago's happenings soon
i am dieinmg to read what happened to mayank n nupur....
awsome update n ya mayank has always been the most unpredictable guy in this world
i so so lov him
n nups is great too sometimes better then mayu.............
pls update soon
lots of lov
dolly
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey kainath, i absolutely loveeeeeeeeeee you, wow you have updated so quick man. I just couldn't believe it, this time i had to pinch myself to believe it man.
Oh my gosh what a roller coaster update, i thoroughly enjoyed reading it man. It was indeed like a rocking ride with soooo many different emotional flavours, like anger, patience, tension, anxiety, love, care, respect, tolerance, you covered almost each and every emotion, yet dealt with each of them wiith so much subtlely and power, i don't know what to say, commendable effort man!
You have as always done justice to each and every small,minor emotion and feeling. You truly leave no leaf unturned man.
I got emotionally charged up with the fight and the argument they had, whoa that was some argument and fight man.
At times we just don't want to give in and accept we are wrong though we know we are and know that the other person is right, as it is a matter of our pride and ego. This is what i observed here as well, more so from the point of mayank, like his ego didn't allow him to give in. Though surprisingly he softened up later and chalo at least one thing good happened with the lochness monster coming over that mayur patched up man.
I loveeeeeeeeee the interaction between nupz, kiran the witch and neev, whoa that was awesome. Kiran is some lady but nupz had the perfect retorts ready all the time. It was sooo adorable the way neev was scared and was clutching Rosie so tight. i loved how he pretended he was sleeping when nupz came. I loveddddddddddd how he genuinely cared about nupz and loves her sooo much man.
Wow the most rocking part is when mayank comes and nupz goes and hugsssssssss and kisses him , wow. oh gosh so much loveeeeee hehe.
I so knew and was soo scared that neev would blow up mayur's secret hehe and he did. I lovedddddddddd how kiran said interesting. I know it must be a God damn torture for mayank and nupz, to deal with this lady moreover this was just a preliminary stage man.
What else is in store for mayur man?
But i loveeeeeeeeee mayank's throwing away of those toys and indirectly caring for nupz, i am sooo with nupz on this one man.
Amazing update, i loveddddddddddddddd it totally. I will just stop here. i just get a little carried away man, maybe not just hehe, alot. Looking forward to the next update sooo badly man, thank you so much. keep it up!
Edited by Senny - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
Wow, Kainath. With each part you write, and each part i read i dont know which one i liked better.. you said it took you 4 hours to write and u were stll iffy about it? WTH? from my side.. haha
I think at a point in the fight flashback i wanted to smack Mayank on the face.. i don't see why he wasn't reasoning with Nupur and all the hurtfull things he said to her, dispicable.
Nupur's names for the lady were hilarious.. loved rosies bit in it too.. haha Rawr
:P
i still cant get over Rosie.. haha
sooo sweet to see Mayank coming around near the end... really sweet..
do cont soon
xxSonia
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Posted: 16 years ago
omg...Absolutely amazing part... thank you a million times...

Beginning with the beginning...
I cant tell how many times i blushed and closed my eyes while reading the after shower descriptions. 😳 i actually had to take deep breaths to calm myself down..
both of them are soooo....i guess human, they ve the only person they ve ever loved right infront of them and that too half naked.. cant blame their dirty brains.. its just human 😉

mayank can be so brutal at times and so sweet and thoughtful at times... just love his character.. he is so complex.

nupur is such a sweetheart, even after his complete "jerk" kinda behavior, she was so worried for him and neev.. she completely forgot abt mayu's words.

the fight sequence in italics was so realistic... it was actually like looking at a married couple fight.

are they gona act all couplely from now since the "ministry official? is gona stay with them? their sweetheart, my love, missed you dialogues just cracked me up.

waiting for the next one, oh god this is so addictive.. i feel so embarrassed to ask you again and again? but when is the next part coming?
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Posted: 16 years ago
oh man.. what a part.. loved nupur's reply to DMP lady for chid care!!!

Also Neev, mayank and nupur talk about the toy...

it was a lovely part.. loved every bit of it....

hey update fast
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Posted: 16 years ago
lovelyyyyy...............plzzz pm da link also dr.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
OUTSTANDING!!!!....

this just gets better and better!! can I ask how old you are???? and where your from??

anyway update soon....this is THE BESTTT ff i have ever read! I cant wait for the next part now!
x
Posted: 16 years ago
i love neev more n more w/ each chapter! he is a complete sweetheart!
loved how nupur told off the the evil lady😆
n omg the best part when mayur n neev talked abt the toy
that was rocking!
anyways continue soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
hey awesome part
and that ministry lady reminded me of umbridge from hp
plzzzz continue soon
Edited by zoya_me - 16 years ago

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