ff-thoda thoda pyaar(mayur) updated part 23- Pg140

Okay guys this is my first try with fiction..... It might not be that good, but plz mayur ke liye be darya dil and kind towards me😳 Though i wrote it with lot of confidence, par post karte hue mera confidence gayab hogaya😆 kissi ko mile mera confidence toh batana😛.
Guys this in this ff mayank and nupur remember their good times together, the blue ones are the present times and black is past tense.......kind of flash back. So here it is
Part1- Perfect imperfection

Mayank and Nupur walking out of the college campus''..

Nupur sees Mayank all perplexed and asks him: koi baat hai kya Mayank

Silence was all she got as an answer

Near the college gate Mayank stopped, and Nupur kept on moving''

Mayank: Nupur tum Samrat se zyada bat mat kiya karo

Nupur turns around and moves towards Mayank in her usual playfulness asks: Kyu Mayank??

Mayank moves towards her covering the distance between the two of them'''Kyuki mujhe pasand nai

Nupur this time looking into Mayank's eyes: Kyu Mayank?

 

Mayank had no answer '''..Nupur was looking into Mayank's eyes as if to find out what he felt for her'

Suddenly it started pouring'' Mayank realizes both of them were standing really close''.. he moves back and Nupur starts moving forward''..

Nupur starts moving towards her house''Mayank follows her silently

 

After sometime he couldnot bear Nupur's silence and the prick of his conscience together. He decides to apologise

"Nupur I am sorry"

 

Nupur doesnot respond, she is still lost in mayank's eyes, still trying to convince herself what she saw in mayank's eyes is love'''

A passing car blows the horn really loud and Nupur is pulled out of her imagination.

Mayank sees Nupur's house approaching ''

Mayank: Nupur kya tumne mujhe maaf kiya ??

Nupur: Bbye Mayank, kal milenge'

Mayank smiles and Nupur moves towards her house

 

Nupur enters her room, still thinking about why Mayank doesnot confess his feelings. She wants to but will wait till Mayank does''

Gujan(notices her) : Di tum toh buri tarah bheeg gayi ho.

Gunjan takes a towel out of her closet and starts drying nupur's hair

Nupur (half in thots): Gunjan pichle saal hum inhi dino mein mumbai aaye the. Haina?? Apna morena chod kar

Gunjan realizes her sister is upset: Haan di'.koi baat hui hai kya???

Nupur : Apne morena mein log kitne ache the dil ke saaf'''.jo unke dil mein hota tha wahi unke zaban pe''.

Gunjan tries to change the topic.

Gunjan: Di tumhe Mumbai mein apna pehla din yaad hai'''hum Dia aur Uday bhaiya se tab pehli baar miley the

Nupur smiles realizing Gunjan's attempt'..

Nupur : Aur who humme college le gaye the ''' College mein guste saath humne dekha''.

Gunjan: Sheena aur samrat stage pe the''

Nupur : Sheena ghutno pe baith ke samrat ko propose kar rahi thi

Gunjan: aur samrat

 

FB

Samrat : Sheena tum woh lucky girl ho jisse samrat ne apni girl friend banaya hai

Shammy hug

In the crowd Nupur Gunjan and an irritated Dia were standing''.Dia for some reason did not like Sheena.

 

Gunjan: Di tum jao ab change karke aao

Nupur nods n leaves

Mayank walking back to his house ponders upon his and nupur's first meeting

Mayank to himself: Uss din class mein late aayi thi'''Waise timely toh kabhi aayi nai Miss Nupur Bhushan''(Mayank smiles shyly)

Class mein ek hi seat khali thi''.. Sheena Samrat'Dia Annie''..Uday Benji''.Cj main'''Vatsala Gunjan '''Aur chako haan uske bagal wali seat khali thi'..

 

FB:

Nupur sees the seat empty and also sees Chako sitting weirdly. Mayank sees Deodhar sir approaching the class'''he notices chacko and Nupur too''Nupur slowly starts moving towards chako'' Mayank holds her hand and stops her midway. Signals her to sit in his place and leaves to sit with Chako'.. Chako's world starts shaking when he sees Mayank approaching him. Deodhar sir enters and class begins'..

 

Nupur comes out of the bathroom and sees Gunjan fast asleep''Nupur brushes Gunjan's forehead lightly and kisses her good night.

Nupur *thinking*: Cj ne us din mujhe notes aur timetable diya tha haan

 

Class ends Deodhar sir walks out, so does Mayank''.Nupur sees him and follows him.

Nupur: Excuse me'.

Mayank turns around

Nupur: Thank you tumne mere liye apni seat chodi'.Agar tum mere liye apni seat nahi chodte toh.

Mayank (interrupting Nupur): No problem

He starts walking again. Nupur: Excuse me''.

Mayank stops'.Nupur thank you apne mere liye apne friend ke bajaye uss ladke ke saath baithe

Mayank turns around and says: Mera yaaha dost koi nai hai '..so its okay

Cj enters: Haan bhai humme dost koun kahega (Mayank gives Cj a stern look and walks away) Yeh mayank sharma hai yaha ka topper'..

Nupur : Yeh hamesha se hi aisa hai kya?

Cj nods

Nupur: Bechara..

 

Nupur *smiles*: Akdu toh tum hamesha se the Mayank Sharma

Mayank Sharma jiske zyada dost nai'''..aur dosti ki ichcha bilkul nai''.baate kum kam zyada aur woh bhi bina galtiyon ke''.By god

 

Mayank still walking: Haan main akdu tha par tum toh''..Baton ki nagri ki rani thi''Jo gusse bhare mehel mein rehti thi''.Kaam Bandh aur baatein bahut zyada *smiles*

Nupur- perfectionist

Mayank- Imperfectionist by god!!!!

Both smile

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Index

Pm list- Pg 6 (updated)

Part 1 -Pg1( Perfect imperfection)

Part 2- Pg6 (Ragging)

Part 3- Pg 11 (Gadbad hui)

Part 4- Pg 15(love confusion cleared)

Part 5- Pg 20 (Thoda Thoda ikraar)

Part 6- Pg 21 (Something is amiss or something is perfect)

Part 7- Pg 28 (Kahi unkahi)

Part8 -Pg 35 ( Move on)

Part 9- Pg 44 (Odd events part 1)

Part 10- Pg 44 (Odd events part 2)

Part11- Pg 53(A big change)

Part12-Pg61

Part 13-Pg 70

Part 14-Pg 79

Part 15- Pg 86

part 16- pg 94

part 17- pg 103

part 18- pg 110 (20% tolerance)

Part 19- Pg 117 (thodi thodi friendship)

Part 20-Pg 124

Part 21- Pg 133

Part 22- Pg 139

Part 23- Pg 140

Character sketch an drecap- pg 70 and 79

Pm list new one- Pg 21(updated)

Edited by -madhvi- - 13 years ago

ok..u told me to write honestly...😆

Edited by falak01 - 14 years ago

very nice....plzz pm wen u update....

madhvi...it was'nt bad at all...good start....well done...keep up/...👏👏

Edited by shama420 - 14 years ago

AWESOME START!!

Serisously.. the FB's went perfectly with the present moments and it all flowed wonderfully.. really do cont soon : ) xxSonia

hey its awesome...do pm me whenever u update!

awesome start yaar........i loved the way u showed their  flashback and present scenes.........please continue soon......pm me😳

wow.. aacha hai... keep writing and PM me when you update the next part...

Awesome Start Madhvi!! Would be waiting to read the rest!! Edited by Kanika05 - 14 years ago

Edited by SanaSarwar - 14 years ago