Tujh Mein Hai Rab Dikhta - SahAn OS

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Posted: 2 years ago
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*Inspired by Rab Ne Bana Di Jodi - quote modified for male.

Brar Mansion

He had been devastated. He was not perfect as he claimed to be. He was not Daarji’s golden boy who was perfect. He had made the same mistake twice. Twice? How could he! He had misjudged that gold digger Seerat to be his dream girl who to impress him would recycle Sahiba’s dialogues, and thought Sahiba to be a conniving opportunist because she didn’t accept his demeaning taunts.

He would soon come to know the truth in a very harsh manner about Kiara as well. Harmandir Saheb’s priests had requested Sahiba to come and help renovate some of the rooms in Mata Ganga Ji Niwas along with the Teja Singh Samundri Hall. This was a huge honor, and Akaal Singh Brar was brimming with happiness that his granddaughter in law was asked by the granthis from the Golden Temple itself. They had seen her work from the news clippings and heard first hand accounts from the granthis of Shri Manji Saheb. Daarji had asked him to deliver to Sahiba an important piece of artwork in her room which she had missed to bring with her. She was currently at Harmandir Saheb completing the requested artwork.

While rummaging through her room, he came across intrinsic jewelry designs. They were beautiful no doubt, yet somehow these designs called out to him in terms of familiarity. They were dated January 2023 on the paper. He took a snap of the pics, hoping that perhaps Veer could speak to Sahiba to get permission to use them in a future collection.

En Route to Amritsar

His phone chimed while he had covered half the distance between Ludhiana and Amritsar. Kiara sent him the designs he had requested for the new collection. Excitedly when he opened the texts, he was left shocked! Seeing the earlier designs Kiara had sent him, made him think he saw similar designs somewhere. They seemed so like the designs he had snapped in Sahiba’s room. Wait, were they similar or were they the same? He hurriedly checked the ones he had snapped and compared with the text that Kira had sent. The were the exact same designs along with the exact same date of January 2023. So now, there was no doubt left that Kiara had plagiarized. The greater question at hand now was this her first time, or had she been doing this all along? If so, the company, the brand he had worked so hard to build could face lawsuits from the original designer. No, he had to get to the bottom of this matter. He relayed his concerns to his trusted detective firm who could snoop and gather evidence. If Kiara was muddying the waters, then he would have to move her out to clear the mess. Now, he had made the same mistake thrice. He was indeed a poor judge of character as he was led to believe that Kiara had a natural talent for jewelry designing; whereas in reality she was just a masquerading fraudster.

Just strategizing all of this, helped him cover the distance to Amritsar.

Harminder Sahib Complex

He parked his car nearby, and gave Sahiba a call letting her know where to find him. Sahiba soon came by, holding a rolled up stack of papers. It had been a few days since he had seen her. He didn’t dare say he missed her presence. But he did long to hear her gentle chuckle when she played chess with his Dad, or her exuberant laughter with his younger cousins, or the respectful manner in which she addressed the elders of the family despite them giving her so many taunts, or the unadulterated love she had for his grandparents. Him, she ignored and had always maintained a safe distance despite what he thought, wanted and behaved. He himself had been confused until yesterday when he began to see clarity.

Sahiba politely thanked him for bringing her art pieces, and shocked him to the core with what she had to share next. She offered him freedom from this forced sham of a marriage. She would relocate to Amritsar, and stay at the Gurudwara doing seva and sell her crafts and artwork online. He could simply tell the press that she met with an accident and couldn’t survive. She asked for nothing in lieu of this agreement. He could sense the desperation in her to break free from him. Before he could say something, one of the sevaks came to call Sahiba. She left him reeling from the shock he has just experienced. He sat down as his legs went numb and could give out any moment.

He spent all afternoon thinking over what she said. He dipped his hands and washed his face with water from the sacred pond. He had erred, he had admitted to himself and God. But could he rectify all that has occurred? Hearing the ardas, he closed his eyes and prayed to the Ultimate Truth. When he opened his eyes, he saw her. It was then that he realized:

Insaan Ko Toh Main Chhod Bhi Doon… Par Rab Ko Kaise Chhoda Jata Hai? Main Jahan Bhi Bhaag Ke Jaaunga… Wahan Rab Honge Aur Jahan Rab Honge Wahan Woh Hogi

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Posted: 2 years ago
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This one is brilliant! Sooo good. I think my fav one out of all three of your works. I wish this was longer 🥺🥺🥺

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: ukyeongforever

This one is brilliant! Sooo good. I think my fav one out of all three of your works. I wish this was longer 🥺🥺🥺


Aww thank you so much! I knew that I had to write this one! I will add more OSes.

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Such beautiful symbolism! I love the last line especially, where he compares Rab to Sahiba.... Omnipresent, atleast in his eyes and heart. Like, she's that one special person that makes every place special, and now even when she's not there, her presence will linger.

I'd love to see a part 2 to this though! Maybe one where he admits to feeling this way to her....

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Such beautiful symbolism! I love the last line especially, where he compares Rab to Sahiba.... Omnipresent, atleast in his eyes and heart. Like, she's that one special person that makes every place special, and now even when she's not there, her presence will linger.

I'd love to see a part 2 to this though! Maybe one where he admits to feeling this way to her....

I have got too many ideas, 3 OSes in the pipeline lol! It’s just that I can’t play hooky with work! Half way writing one where we have an unusual Cupid :) and it’s not Veerat :)

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: averma4583

I have got too many ideas, 3 OSes in the pipeline lol! It’s just that I can’t play hooky with work! Half way writing one where we have an unusual Cupid :) and it’s not Veerat :)

I get you. Completely. I'M having ideas, and so far I haven't sat and watched one full episode yet!

But well, I visited the forum randomly because I loved the clips, then went back and watched a few scenes of Gaatchora, and now I feel like I might get into watching it on an irregular basis. Atleast until the confession's over.

As for writing, that'll have to wait till March for me, because I have exams in 15 days, but yeah, who knows, maybe that will happen too!

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Posted: 2 years ago
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This was absolutely terrific writing.

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Hayyeee!!! How could I miss this??? So glad I decided to find and read all your OS. I so so so wish to see something of this sort in the show as well. Makers should be getting inspiration from you!

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: ShivaShumbo

Hayyeee!!! How could I miss this??? So glad I decided to find and read all your OS. I so so so wish to see something of this sort in the show as well. Makers should be getting inspiration from you!


thank you so much! If I could bunk work, I’d have written atleast half a dozen OSes by now! Today a talli Sahiba and Angad OS popped in my head on the song Goriya chura na mera Jiya!

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: averma4583


thank you so much! If I could bunk work, I’d have written atleast half a dozen OSes by now! Today a talli Sahiba and Angad OS popped in my head on the song Goriya chura na mera Jiya!


Now you need to update ASAP because I can't wait!!! I am an impatient human being!

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