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17.sonal

@17.sonal

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Areeba It ws Really very good...

Yuvraaj being a maniac perfect described...

And his obsession well depicted...

Kunj and Yuvi's Face off me.. I guess Twinkle is goin to b a victim...

Probably this will happen in TEI also...

Nyc thot...

Pls keep writing dear..

Looking frward to a new one

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Filmyarchu

@Filmyarchu

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

It's not at all shittiest piece 😆

Infact it was really beautiful ❤️

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Iansomer1

@Iansomer1

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

areeba stop saying this is a shittiest piece ok this was brilliant

All the while i was ok shits going ot hit the fan now
i thought kunj might get hurt for a minute it seemed cherry would

SUCH a thrilling story i loved ti

The pshyco yuvi u have nailed to the tee

him going k he is touching her so in tone with yuvi

Twinj scene at end was beautiful and so many feels

Over all whole confrontation with yuvi wa ssuperb.
hats of to ur skills.
this was brilliant

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Eshita

@tikit

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Wow areeba it was beautiful. Yuvi is so crazy that he can do anything bad boy. This scenario may be possible in future. This is not a shitty piece its amazing. Thanks for the pm. If u can can u continue this as to what happened with uv because he does stunts like this but is never caught.

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Duumps

@Duumps

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

This was thrilling not knowing what will happen from one moment to the next.

Loved it.

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Komal1298

@Komal1298

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Well done areeba.. but that was short one.. i wanted big one😊👏

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Anisha

@-Aniisha-

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Brilliant OS 👏
Loved reading it
Thanks for the PM

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kardooks

@kardooks

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Areeba seriously you are too harsh on yourself, this piece was really good, have to agree with Teddy it had you on the edge of your seat. It was really good I enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed reading all your writings.

Give yourself a pat on the back.😎

Well Done👍🏼

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Tranquility123

@Tranquility123

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

I LOVED YOUR DISCLAIMER 'shittest piece I've ever wrote" 🤣

Well I can tell you it was from shit dude! I cant stop laughing at how psycho Yuvi is. I can picture the maniac in my head shooting the gun around the house. Daddy Danger ka bhanja after all 🤣

This was a nice break from all the mature and giddy shots on Twinj, not that I mind those, but the confrontation between Yuvi an Twinj was awesome. Kunj, the calm an composed as always. I hate the involvement of guns though because the fear arises of the wrong person being shot, which happened. Glad Twinkle was ok though. At one point, I thought you'd go sadist and kill her off, hamari adhuri kahani and all, the end 😳 but you didnt so thank you 😆

DUDE WHEN YOU SHE SAID 'HAAT' ALL I COULD REMEMBER WAS THE TWINJ BEDROOM SOON WITH 'SUN', 'BOLO' AND THEN KUNJ CRACKS THE SIYAPPA JOKE AND SHE PUSHES HIM AWAY SAYING 'DUR HAAT' LIKE I CANT

This was a nice surprise btw. I love when this 'one shot likhne ka bhoot' takes over you 😎