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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: tikit

Wow areeba it was beautiful. Yuvi is so crazy that he can do anything bad boy. This scenario may be possible in future. This is not a shitty piece its amazing. Thanks for the pm. If u can can u continue this as to what happened with uv because he does stunts like this but is never caught.


Thank you so much!

I unfortunately would not be continuing this on over here because I don't think i'll be doing justice to the writing as I would want to. but means a lot for you to say that!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: Komal1298

Well done areeba.. but that was short one.. i wanted big one😊👏



Thank you! I really depends on what I can come up with but i'll try to write long ones in future
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: Duumps

This was thrilling not knowing what will happen from one moment to the next.

Loved it.



Thanks hun! Glad you enjoyed! 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: kardooks

Areeba seriously you are too harsh on yourself, this piece was really good, have to agree with Teddy it had you on the edge of your seat. It was really good I enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed reading all your writings.

Give yourself a pat on the back.😎
Well Done👍🏼



Thank you so much! You guys are just being too kind! 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: Tranquility123

I LOVED YOUR DISCLAIMER 'shittest piece I've ever wrote" 🤣


Well I can tell you it was from shit dude! I cant stop laughing at how psycho Yuvi is. I can picture the maniac in my head shooting the gun around the house. Daddy Danger ka bhanja after all 🤣

This was a nice break from all the mature and giddy shots on Twinj, not that I mind those, but the confrontation between Yuvi an Twinj was awesome. Kunj, the calm an composed as always. I hate the involvement of guns though because the fear arises of the wrong person being shot, which happened. Glad Twinkle was ok though. At one point, I thought you'd go sadist and kill her off, hamari adhuri kahani and all, the end 😳 but you didnt so thank you 😆

DUDE WHEN YOU SHE SAID 'HAAT' ALL I COULD REMEMBER WAS THE TWINJ BEDROOM SOON WITH 'SUN', 'BOLO' AND THEN KUNJ CRACKS THE SIYAPPA JOKE AND SHE PUSHES HIM AWAY SAYING 'DUR HAAT' LIKE I CANT

This was a nice surprise btw. I love when this 'one shot likhne ka bhoot' takes over you 😎


I had to put it there. I literally know I could've done so much better then what I put out.

Oh my God! I am totally in love with Yuvi's sassiness with Kunj at this point like the way he literally questions him and demands answers from him even in the show has me in fits because there scenes are so unbelievable.

LOL there is a lot of ways Anita is similar to Danger Daddy's clan. Take the easy and short route out of everything regardless of it being wrong. Even that chard, despite being morally righteous took wrong routes.

TBH, I actually did leave Twinkle in a hanging position. initially the bullet brushed past her next. My inspiration for that was from Reid's situtaion in Criminal Minds season 8 finale. I would've left Twinkle in comatose or something like that but then I remembered Teddy's fragile heart and gave Twinkle her life back. 😆


Don't even bring me back to "acha sun na!" like that phrase gives my heart so many feels!! It is no longer an ordinary phrase. My friend called me out from behind with 'sun na' and I was like OHMYGOSH FEELS GO BACK INSIDE!!

LOL, i have few more written and saved up in my laptop. Would post soon after refining them! Plus hriddey has requested a romantic One Shot so this Sunday, keep a look out!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: kingmessi

'Itni jaldi nahi chhord rahi mein tumhari jaan!' That is SUCH a Twinkle-like statement to make when she has just fought death! 😆


Loved the OS, you're a wonderful writer :D


LOL Twinkle is just perfect!

Thank you!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#37
Areeba this wasnt bad at all. it was awesome. loved it <3 pls write more :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38

unres
first off areeba i dont think anything you can ever write would be classified as shitty 😆😆 your writing is always sophisticated and amazing!! 😃
now onto the OS i honestly LOVED it!!
i really love how you play with the characters and the way you played with yuvi's character in this was mind blowing!!
yuvi's pagalpan was full on and just the way you carried out the OS was great, i was looking forward to what was happening next loll i was caught in the suspense!
awesome OS areeba! i always look fwd to your writings!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: --Natasha--

RESERVED😎

Havent read but you write amazing,so i wont agree that this is bad😃


See!This was not a shitty piece Areeba,you justified Kunj and Twinkle and Yuvraj so brilliantly.
I love the authority that Yuvraj thinks he has and demands answers from Kunj and Twinkle.
Both yelling for Twinkle was spot on.
Thrilling OS indeed.
Do write more for us❤️


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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
amazing os
loved it <3

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