Swasan FF : Zephyr vs Tempest ( Chapter 30; P-71) - Page 23

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Dear Dyuti,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">My boss and our boss (the one we both report to😆😆) are actually quite nice - it is just that sometimes work sometimes piles up (so when we have multiple audits going on, it is more or less the same data but different formats and analysis). Should ease off now, hopefully.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Now for the much delayed comments.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I loved the brother sister conversation, not that I did not like the SwaSan interaction. But brother and sisters are something else, I have a younger brother but then his reaction would be quite the same - that worry about the sister spilling over to anger and then settling down to labelling themselves a failure to protect their sisters. In this case with Sargam being the elder brother, all those feelings would be intensified. So Sanskaar does deserve a pat on his back, he indeed made Swara very happy. Now maybe they can concentrate on making each other happy in the other manner too😉😉</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">This update was a break - for all of us, at least did not worry so much, for things appeared to be looking up, as Swara and Sanskaar both seemed to relax a little on reaching civilisation. And I loved hearing Sanskaar's parents had a love story - quite a "fired" one right - no wonder Sunny boy is the way he is😆bright and fiery. And recounting his parents' story, Swara dreams of wanting one and Sunny replies quite correctly," her (their) story could be more magical if only she wants it." But then both are hesitant about the other, though they do make some progress, admitting to themselves about their feelings (that was a lovely line - was it her desire to wear them as her identity and not as a disguise?"Sanskaar is worried about her name being too long once they get married - okay he is quite gone😳</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Laksh is one Badass - but then he would not be where he is without the spies planted everywhere. So he has learnt about where Swara and Sanskaar and plans to come with guns blazing. Meanwhile our golden couple are slowly realising that the other is not as immune or disinclined as they assumed.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">One moment of shared bliss - they will need that memory when the storm hits them, right?</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I know it would be a happy ending (it will, right - I hate love stories with unhappy endings - I throw massive ugly tantrums, which are quite bad to see) but I am scared. Please do not hurt them much.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">love,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Nyna</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">PS - regarding emotional scenes, as long it is words, I can write but romantic action scenes😳I am very nervous (I took almost a week to write my first kissing scene, which was around three or four lines😆😆😆) gets easier as you write, so do not worry.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I have read your comment for FM - will get back to that, soon.</font>

Nynu dear,
My boss( actually head of department cum principal as I'm a lecturer in a med college ) is quite cool and we immensely like him, so I get where the defending comes from... Year ending is actually a bad time, you can't help it...

Regarding to bro-sis relationship... I've a younger Bro too, have kind of love hate relationship! 😆 Yesterday we were chatting, he called me 'mindless nutjob' for my newly found interest in English poetry! And we fight but when we're in truce, then have endless chats. 😊

Sunny is inspired by his parents in every sense. Ram and Sujata are anything but traditional. I don't know when I can show them, but they'll be very much positive and inspiring.

About Swasan, their journey is not going to be smooth but they are the couple here. Laksh or any other people don't have final say here. Swasan may suffer both emotionally and physically... but you can save your tantrums for any other sa distant writers. I myself cried for a long time while reading that chapter in Angel, where Gabriel had been falsely declared dead. So I'm a bit like you in this case.

I suck at writing dialogues, whe there normal or emotional. Only thing I'm a bit comfortable is metaphors... Emotional actions? I think my real action scenes have snail pace too. Writing first kiss? That was tough for me too! I took a whole day, kept daydreaming even at work( 😉 ) then struggled till 2 a.m and tada! How it turned out only you can judge.

Sincerely,
Dyuti

Hi friends and readers! Having mixed feelings while posting this chapter. Happy... because I'm a Senior member now! ( Finally!)... And sad as probably this is my last chapter for at least 15 days... Extremely sorry for that. And this is chapter 16 for you...


CHAPTER 16


Mrs Janvi Kothari was a chubby, short, lady in her late forties. " Bless you both!!!Nanna sampurna jivanadalli intaha ondu bahukantiya onderadu nodilladiddare!Nijavagiyu, nivu eradu sampurna prati arthadalli paraspara!Nanu eradu khacitavagi bahala muddada makkalu hoguva, tilisuva baguttene.".Her smile was warm and cordial... She looked genuinely happy after meeting the new guests, while arranging their tea in the porch...


"Really,cikkam'ma?Sanskar looked very pleased as he heard the Lady and instantly called her aunt'.


"The bestest!"Her smile got wider. She went inside, leaving Swasan in the porch to give them privacy.


"I'm liking Janvi aunty. She seems so nice na? What did she say ? You all speak in Kannada? I'm not getting any of it!"


"Ria ji, you should've learnt your hubby's mother tongue! Ek bharatiya adarsh patni ko yehi karna chahiye,hai na? OUCH!!" He pulled her leg only to get a whack on his head! "What was that?"


"Adarsh patni my foot! Tum sirf iske hi layak ho!"
She twisted her lips. " Fine! Don't tell me! You know what? I'm not talking to you!" She didn't bother to look at him, rather walked up to the paling crossing her arms across the chest.


Wearing a chuckle on his lip Sanskar tiptoed behind the angry dame, " Don't you want to know what did Aunty say?" He grinned as she pouted... He caged her in between his arms, placing his hands on the paling. Her breathing got heavier as he at, his best charming avatar purred near her earlobe, leaving her shivering a little.


"She said...she said... she had never seen such a gorgeous couple like us in her entire life... and we... We complete each other ...in every sense... She also told.. I mean she predicted... we're definitely going to have... very cute babies ! Got it wifey?"


She blushed so hard that her earlobe to toe turned in deepest crimson hue... "I think you're still not in a state to talk, even if you want to... Hai na Swara?" Sanskar shot his last killer smirk, then took mercy by sparing her from further teasing sessions and went back to the table... Well he didn't lie for the sake of teasing , Janvi Aunty really uttered those words... Cute babies!' He smiled again when the words played in his mind...




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EARLIER IN THE MORNING...


Ragini opened her eyes as someone had splashed water on her face...She blinked couple of times as harsh sunlight attempted to blind her vision.. She tightly pressed her lips as excruciating pain shot through her shoulder and thigh though the visage of her most cherished person before her eyes alleviated that ache upto a great extent... With his aid, she settled herself up from lying position.


And along the events before losing her senses flashed before her eyes... She became terrified to notice the ferocious look on Laksh's face... Did he find Swara's corpse? Was he aware of she being culpable? Of course he would be! Both men, who were also present that time barring Ragini, were ready to lay to their lives for that girl. Her blinded, possessive love for Laksh wiped out the aftermath of her hasty action.


" They escaped Ragini! That Oberoi has snatched my Swara away! I'LL NOT LEAVE HIM!" His eyes were red, veins throbbed on his temple. Ragini was puzzled. Just then she noticed neatly done dressings on her wounds along with medicines kept on the ground.

"Laksh,when did you get your sense back?" she asked him


"Only five minutes back Ragini! That anaesthetist has outsmarted us! DAMN!I'll have to search them. Let's move!" Laksh was still angry, he didn't want to waste any more time.


Ragini secretly hoped the caring touch turning to be coming from Laksh's side, but no! It had to be Swara! The epitome of goodness! She may hurt someone for self-defense, but couldn't leave that foe helplessly bleeding to death... even if that same person had attempted to murder her few minutes back! That means Snow White was saved by her Prince Charming from Evil Queen's poisonous apple, with a true love's kiss!


Ragini felt like she received the greatest humiliation one can get... The man for whom she could do anything didn't show an iota of concern for her. On the other hand the girl of his desire, whom Ragini loathed and still does from the core of her heart was the only reason her heart still kept beating... Her inner self mocked, " Again you lost to hher! She always does it! Leaves each and every person stunned with her abundant warm radiance, just like the sun... that's why they keep circling around her like planets... And you, Ragini are nothing but a distant black hole! " Today she learnt her lessons in hard way. No one is going to find his way to her deep, dark core... No amount of light can't do her any good.. So she decided to embrace her true self, be a perfect scary dark hole, ready to engulf everything that would come in her way...




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After dinner Sanskar wanted to have a warm shower before bedtime, a habit he had been missing since he had been wilfully abducted'. In the meantime Swara surfed through the TV channels and luckily found an Hindi action movie to keep herself occupied.


After 15 minutes or so Sanskar came out of shower room only to find their room empty. The TV was still on, but there was no sign of Swara. His guts were clenched with uneasiness. He called Swara using his ring, expecting she would answer her through her new pair of earstuds as original ones were damaged when she fell into waterfall. But no sound came from her side... He started panicking , hurriedly changed from bath towels to proper clothes and kept the Sig Pro 2009 in his pocket...


As soon he stepped his foot out of the room, a swooshing sound passed near his ear... Something sharp had missed his head by mere an inch, thanks to his sharp, leopard like reflex... Looking forward he could see a man across the corridor throwing another knife towards him... This time Sanskar ducked followed by somersaulting forward and shot the attacker twice with perfect accuracy... first shot pierced on his dominant arm where the next one hitter just above his knee... following the firing sound four more people came in running... Sanskar decided not to play defensive any more... Not wanting to be an easy target he planned to move from the narrow hallway.. His Sig Pro now fired to smash the light bulb, rendering the hallway almost dark barring the faint rays from the bedside lamp lit inside the room. Sanskar fired the first opponent who fell backward holding his chest, resulting the fellow attacker behind him to loose his balance.Using this momentary advantage he quickly crawled inside the room, switched off all the lights and took his position... He was worried about the few guests and hosts of the lodge, wishing badly that they would stay inside for their own safety... He pressed the SOS button of his watch , still knowing it would be too late if any aid became available at all...




The assailants marched in the room to finish their target only to find a pitch dark room... It was their bad luck their target had an undue advantage...


SSR was known for sensing and calculating the distance of any slightest sound or movement, coming from many years of shooting practice in blindfold. He closed his eye, let his other senses to reign himself... As soon as sound of first footstep reached his ears, his Sig Pro roared several times only to hear two people fell with a thud groaning in pain. The shots were meant to kill, either near heart or head. The last one followed the sound and fired but Sanskar was smart enough to move aside, fired again to finish the last man. He left a sigh, again called Swara but still no answer.


He moved to interrogate the knife thrower in corridor who was less injured, but stopped in his tracks to hear someone's footsteps from balcony. Stealthily he marched towards the balcony door when someone with tall,giant, muscular physique jumped on him.Sanskar yelped a bit in surprise, but composed himself pressing his Sig Pro across the latest attacker's front. He had almost pressed the trigger but froze.


"Hey Batman relax! It's your Robin!" The giant shrieked.


Sanskar dropped his gun, " AK! It's you!"


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Ayaz Khalid, aka AK had mixed feelings meeting his partner cum best friend after so many days. He was happy to see him alive before his eyes, and tensed as he looked shattered. He was not supposed to come to Mandya. But luckily he managed to finish his works at the last moment , caught this morning's flight to Bangalore, then travelled by road only to give Sanskar a surprise only to get surprised himself!


Near the front entrance of the lodge he found an elderly couple tied up and unconscious, after few minutes he heard gunshots, entered using the balcony and discovered Sanskar.


" Keep yourself composed Sunny! Don't be panicked !We've to find her!"He tried to calm devastated Sanskar.


"How I can remain calm, AK? Did you heard what that guy said?He said... I'm never going to see her again... nothing more than that... She's not answering the call even all she needs to do is tilting her head and touching her earlobe with shoulder!! I even don't know who had taken her! " Sanskar pulled his hair in frustration.


Ayaz sounded puzzled. "Who else would kidnap her other than Black wolves?"


"You don't know Ayaz! One among them is crazily obsessed for her. I'm afraid of he may ... force himself on her..."Sanskar closed his eyes in pain as he uttered those words.


"You've fallen for her, hai na Sanskar?"Ayaz said softly, keeping his one palm on Sanskar's shoulder, "Don't worry mate, we'll save her... At any cost! Let's contact our team."


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Swara opened her eyes to find herself lying on the ground. Yellow rays of fire torches illuminated the place, which seemed to be a cave. Getting startled she sat up from her lying possible. Though feeling dizzy, she could remember the events before losing consciousness.


She was about to pick the TV remote as commercials had started, when noise of metal dropping came from the balcony. Getting alert she picked a scalpel, opened the door a little bit to peek through. The moment her head leaned forward slightly through the gap, a hand sprang to spray something in front of her face...


"Slept well?"A grim, deep voice jeered, resulting Swara to turn... "Do you think that only Oberoi can make people faint? Black wolves today used the same trick on you! All thanks to Dr Sanskar Oberoi!" To her horror, there stood the person she wanted to see the least... Laksh..


Laksh looked at the the girl, whom he had fiercely wanted for himself, for whom he was ready to die, who was the only one he felt anything tender other than his dad... His heart got scorched to see that vermillion and sacred chain on her, that too from that Sanskar Oberoi!


He approached towards Swara, who got up and started to move backwards...
" Don't dare to come near me, Laksh! I'm warning you!" She attempted to threaten him in a trembling voice.


With a swift movement Laksh caught her arms. Swara struggled a lot to free herself which angered Laksh more. He twisted her arms behind her back, pressed her cheeks tightly with his free hand and shouted,
"RAGINI! RAGINI!!!BRING ROPES!"


"She's hurt! You brute!Don't make her move too much!"Swara shouted, only to see Ragini to enter limping, with ropes in her uninjured hand and unreadable expressions in her eyes.


"Not your concern!" Ragini replied curtly.


After a lot of struggle from Swara, Laksh tied her up...
" Wanted to keep you untied, but you're not doing any help..." Laksh spat, his voice became dangerous, " You yourself are responsible for your own condition, Swara!"

" Oh really Laksh?"Swara mocked, spewing venom, " As far as I recall, YOU with your bloody people kidnapped us! YOU mercilessly killed my Baba! YOU were the one who nearly strangle me!"


" Wow! How conveniently you forgot... that... I was also the one, who didn't care about himself when that animals attacked you!" He was sarcastic, with a hint of frustration.


Swara could hear Sanskar's voice, "Swara! Where are you?"She tilted her head and looked at Laksh with fire in her eyes.


" Why shouldn't I, Laksh? You did that only because you people needed a doctor!" she heard Sanskar telling someone in a low voice, " Trace Laksh's exact location! Now!"


" I need you... because I LOVE YOU! HOW DARE YOU MARRY HIM SWARA? HOW DARE YOU ?" He shouted, making Swara surprised and somehow disgusted.

"And I hate you, Laksh! YOU GOT IT?" Swara matched his rage, though she was the captive as she heard Sanskar's instructions in low voice, " Swara! Careful! Just keep him busy!"


"I don't care! I simply don't care! I don't care you loving that Oberoi! Nor I care that you're his wife now! Do you know why?" Laksh kept circling her like a hyena does to its prey. " Because your Sanskar is most probably dead at the moment... Even if not, he can't come in my way anymore. And that useless social norm can't stop me either from making you mine!" His heavily bruised face posed a devilish smirk.


Swara shivered, but gathered her courage, " You can't ever remove him, No matter how hard you try!" she smiled as she remembered something, "Because he has completed me... in every sense... I know he's alive!"


Sanskar pleaded, " Swara please! Don't push him too far!"


Laksh, however, deciphered Swara's words in a wrong way... He thought Sanskar and Swara had become man and wife breaking each and every barriers between them... He became blinded with fury... He unfolded a pocket knife while Ragini became astonished, and Swara's eyes hazel orbs filled with fear...


Kneeling down in front of her Laksh squeezed Swara's cheeks in am iron grip. She shrieked and closed her eyes in pain... Laksh touched the tip of the knife lightly on the crimson mark over her hair partition and hissed,


" You will suffer Swara! For this mistake.. no scratch it... for this crime of yours, You'll have to bear grave punishment!" Laksh ran down the sharp tip from her forehead to nose...then towards her rose petal like soft lips causing to bleed a little... Swara gasped as the knife continued to to move downwards across the chin and stopped just between two collar bones...


" No wedding chain or that red mark on your head is going to protect your marriage anymore... Keep waiting ...till death do you apart..." Laksh laughed crazily, pressing the knife more on her throat..


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*** Sig Pro 2009 is a semi automatic handgun manufactured in Switzerland.produced by Sig, Sauer and Sohn. It has 15 cartridges with 919 pandemonium bullet ; Firing range around 50 m. For this advantage Sanskar picked this one as Colt doesn't have many bullets in it.. and he was uncertain how many enemies were there?

Ohh my god what a happy dyuti do
Khub bhalo...
Awe sanskar and swara teasing session was chop cuteee...
Adarsh patni aww...and obvio they would have cutiee wale babies...
The attack was so well planned and dangerous...
At last swara kind of accepted in front of sanskar her love ( not exactly the in front PR the correct words ) but yet too cute)..
Will laksh harm swara oh nooo...
He is the character I have hated a lot not only in serial but also in this ff very aggressive and impulsive...
All in all beautiful

Originally posted by: kojagorimalik

Ohh my god what a happy dyuti do
Khub bhalo...
Awe sanskar and swara teasing session was chop cuteee...
Adarsh patni aww...and obvio they would have cutiee wale babies...
The attack was so well planned and dangerous...
At last swara kind of accepted in front of sanskar her love ( not exactly the in front PR the correct words ) but yet too cute)..
Will laksh harm swara oh nooo...
He is the character I have hated a lot not only in serial but also in this ff very aggressive and impulsive...
All in all beautiful

Do you know Baccha that we usually don't use the words " khub valo" usually? Urban people uses English or the word "Osadharon"... I usually talk in standard (promit) Bangla. But we've different versions of Bangla, few of them are almost impossible to understand!

I wanted to write a light Swasan scene at least for my own comfort as the chapter is dark and scary. Laksh in the serial was impulsive but in a stupid way, but here in a dangerous way... I usually like good villains as they add dimensions to a story...Just hate those one who spreads false rumours and questions on someone's character... In my opinion this is the worst track a serial can show.

Oh Swara just repeated Janvi's words, but Lucky got more and more angry.

Merry Christmas!

-Dyuti

U have updated chapter 16 and I'm still in chapter 6 😕. But never mind. I love to read like this 😆.

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

good..

Hi and Merry Christmas dear! 😊

Originally posted by: Nivijo

U have updated chapter 16 and I'm still in chapter 6 😕.But never mind. I love to read like this 😆.

This laksh ka bachcha. He is such a dumb ass. Can't he control his anger for a min also? But I loved sanskar's dialogue " agar meri mangetar ko kuch hua na to main tumhe nahi chodunga. I was reminded of sanskar strangling ragini in the serial during this scene. And swasan ka tashan, uff what can I say about that. Simply marvelous. Dont worry mr rathore soon you are going to care for someone more important than your mission😳. Update soon.

Love u loads

Nivi

Dear Nivi,

Oh take your time! I'm on break due to other commitments so hopefully you'll catch up...

And yes that scene was kind of inspired from Sanskar strangling Ragini.. That was an alternate take, so meant to remember that scene! When I was writing initial chapters, I used to watch Swasan scences a lot... Just to feel the magic... Plot was predecided, just some bits and pieces of detailing were added as I penned them down... I'm ensuring that you will hate Laksh more with the upcoming chapters... And about Swasan... well I don't want to give spoilers about them!

About updating, I'd rather tell... Read soon! 😉

Originally posted by: Nivijo

U have updated chapter 16 and I'm still in chapter 6 😕. But never mind. I love to read like this 😆.

This laksh ka bachcha. He is such a dumb ass. Can't he control his anger for a min also? But I loved sanskar's dialogue " agar meri mangetar ko kuch hua na to main tumhe nahi chodunga. I was reminded of sanskar strangling ragini in the serial during this scene. And swasan ka tashan, uff what can I say about that. Simply marvelous. Dont worry mr rathore soon you are going to care for someone more important than your mission 😳. Update soon.

Love u loads

Nivi

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Dear Dyuti,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I like Janvi Aunty very much, as does Sanskaar - and yes they will have the cutest kids possible,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">So both have almost confessed their feelings, right - Sanskaar is already dreaming of his kids and Swara blushes but does not object - good in a way, they need as many of tangible memories as they need.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Ragini - she is so lost, and now when she realises that Laksh will never look at her like he looks at Swara, she decides to surrender to the darkness - maybe when the moment of reckoning comes she might decide that consuming Laksh into her darkness would be a preferable alternate to letting Swara die. I would like that but you as the writer can decide (maybe Sanskaar finishing him off??)</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">So Sanskaar does get help in the guise of his best friend, and very timely too. Sanskaar could be a good soldier and fighter but then he is also a very worried man, which could cloud his judgement. Good that AK is with him. And Swara is no less a fighter, despite being trapped by Laksh, despite being aware of how crazy he is she is trying to ward him off.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Laksh is completely over the edge - and seeing that sindoor and mangalsutra and hearing Swara he is going berserk. I just hope Sanksaar is on time - but it should not be very far off, they only had a maximum of 15 minutes head start on them (the time it took Sanskaar to finish his shower) so the odds should be in their favour. Do update quickly.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Wishing you and your family a very merry Christmas and a Happy New Year</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">love,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Nyna</font>

Dearest Nyna,

This FF is a journey where Swasan will meet many characters... Janvi aunty has a small but poignant part in their love story, towards their realisation, igniting dreams and hopes...

Ragini is a dark but poor soul. She feels herself too insignificant and ignored, Swara's kind gesture left her more intimidated. Laksh's aloofness had broken her beyond repair... About Laksh's fate I thought of two scenarios in my mind... will choose one depending on how crisp and dark the FF turns out after I pen down the climax... Ragini's fate will be decided along with him. Raglak are going to be like two banks of river.. I'll describe more in some other chapter.

Ayaz / AK will be a guiding force for Sanskar in upcoming chapters. And Sanskar is not that far but Laksh is literally mad in jealousy... And Sanskar's weakness is in Lucky's hand. So it's not going to be easy.

I hope you and your family had enjoyed this day so far... Still, Merry Christmas!

With love,
Dyuti