Swasan FF : Zephyr vs Tempest ( Chapter 30; P-71)

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Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#211

Originally posted by: bhymi
Hi Dyuti
I really loved this update.u have wrote it perfectly dear.Sargam and shona good bro-sis jodi.
I always want a good bro/sis for swara and u have fulfilled my wish.Swasan moments was beautiful.I loved how swara hugged the bed, she is a child at heart.Laksh is becoming more danger.So someone was watching swara and sanskar hmmm .Waiting to see how swasan escape from the upcoming danger

Dear Gayu,

The both sibling pairs (Swara-Sargam and Vivek- Sanskar ) will be good... They'll care... SwaSan have fun filled, childish streaks to their characters in spite of being in serious professions... and Lucky! You'll want to kill him in neXT chapters. that I can say..

-Dyuti

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Posted: 8 years ago

#212

Originally posted by: iamreader

Nynu, Aww dear! 😳 You're going to read again! I should party for this reason only!🥳 Penning emotions comes to you naturally... want to know how you feel about this update ( I felt somewhere I got a bit off!)... And Nimmi read it too! 😃

Kisses (for this chapter only 😉 )
Dyuti

Dear Dyuti,

I am finally back for Chapter 14, which was Swara and Sanskaar all the way.

Poor Ragini, she is quite intelligent though she allows her intense love for Laksh to transform to an immense hatred for Swara and pushes Swara into the whirlpool. But in a way, in turned out to be for the best.

Sanskaar - he had to save her and the life saving technique also become a expression of their growing fondness to each other. Sanskaar's worry that she might die and her fear that she would not live - it was an instantaneous relief that ended in them kissing each other - in joy that she was alive. As you wrote, it was like parched earth that was finally blessed with the rain. 😳😳

But even the next scene, where that passion is replaced by a quite care and concern for each other, when they clean the cuts on each other - that was lovely, both intent on seeing to the other, their eyes letting their emotions show.

And then the brain takes over, maybe the oxygen supply should be kept limited and later both are convinced that the other regrets the kiss.

Quite nicely penned. And do not worry - you got the balance of emotions right - a good mix of love, passion, concern (the physical and emotional states) and finally their admission that the kiss did change their equation. It set their friendship on fire (there is a quote - "love is nothing but friendship set on fire).

Keep writing.

love,

Nyna

Edited by Nynaeve - 8 years ago

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Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#213

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Dyuti,

I am finally back for Chapter 14, which was Swara and Sanskaar all the way.

Poor Ragini, she is quite intelligent though she allows her intense love for Laksh to transform to an immense hatred for Swara and pushes Swara into the whirlpool. But in a way, in turned out to be for the best.

Sanskaar - he had to save her and the life saving technique also become a expression of their growing fondness to each other. Sanskaar's worry that she might die and her fear that she would not live - it was an instantaneousrelief that ended in them kissing each other - in joy that she was alive. As you wrote, it was like parched earth that was finally blessed with the rain.😳😳

But even the next scene, where that passion is replaced by a quite care and concern for each other, when they clean the cuts on each other - that was lovely, both intent on seeing to the other, their eyes letting their emotions show.

And then the brain takes over, maybe the oxygen supply should be kept limitedand later both are convinced that the other regrets the kiss.

Quite nicely penned. And do not worry - you got the balance of emotions right - a good mix of love, passion, concern (the physical and emotional states) and finally their admission that the kiss did change their equation. It set their friendship on fire (there is a quote - "love is nothing but friendship set on fire).

Keep writing.

love,
Nyna

Nyna dearest,

How I missed your analysis! Since Nita's kind of absent, you were my reliable critic... It's pity Ragini isn't mentioned in this FF much as the plot demands that. But she's very perceptive... Swara was relieved to see Sanskar not receiving Lucky's bullet...

You know this kiss was inspired from Harry Potter. To be precise.
Harry looked around; there was Ginny running toward him; she had a hard, blazing look in her face as she threw her arms around him. And without thinking, without planning it, without worrying about the fact that fifty people were watching, Harry kissed her.After several long moments " or it might have been half an hour " or possibly several sunlit days " they broke apart. The room had gone very quiet. Then several people wolf-whistled and there was an outbreak of nervous giggling. Harry looked over the top of Ginny's head to see Dean Thomas holding a shattered glass in his hand, and Romilda Vane looking as though she might throw something. Hermione was beaming, but Harry's eyes sought Ron. At last he found him, still clutching the Cup and wearing an expression appropriate to having been clubbed over the head. For a fraction of a second they looked at each other, then Ron gave a tiny jerk of the head that Harry understood to mean, Well " if you must.The creature in his chest roaring in triumph, he grinned down at Ginny and gestured wordlessly out of the portrait hole. A longwalk in the grounds seemed indicated, during which " if they had time " they might discuss the match.

I know the situations were different, and that was teenage love... but could relate to the overwhelming, don't care the world kind of emotions...

Our SwaSan is all about fiery love that kindied from friendship, right!

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Manisha Bhardwaj

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Posted: 8 years ago

#214

Originally posted by: iamreader

Veena dear,

How's life? Our SwaSan is the best... Missing them a lot 😭 well journey is still remaining...

Dyuti

Missing swasan badly...
Hate you rangeela for this..
And I am manisha not veena

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Manisha Bhardwaj

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Posted: 8 years ago

#215

Husband and wife...it's fake but I love it...

They are so sweet..

Oh god laksh is still behind them..

Hope he won't be able to get swara or sanskar..

Thanks

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Posted: 8 years ago

#216

Originally posted by: Rockingbhardwaj
Husband and wife...it's fake but I love it...

They are so sweet..

Oh god laksh is still behind them..

Hope he won't be able to get swara or sanskar..

Thanks

Sorry Manisha,
I'm extremely sorry to confuse your name... 😭 Never gonna be confused again! PAKKA! I hate Rangeela too! But I equally hate our CVS for losing their marbles... I miss my cutie pies so much! 😭

hope to give you more of hubby wifey moments... But you've to bear Laksh too, I'm afraid!

Once again sorry for the wrong name fiasco!

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Posted: 8 years ago

#217

Originally posted by: kritz4ever
Lovely update

Thanks yaar.. may I know your name?

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Posted: 8 years ago

#218

Originally posted by: iamreader

Thanks yaar.. may I know your name?

swetha n yours

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Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#219

Originally posted by: kritz4ever

swetha n yours

I'm Dyuti. 😊

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#220

Originally posted by: iamreader

Nyna dearest,

How I missed you girl! Your analysis and your stories! I can kill your Boss for making my poor Nynu working like hell.

Penning down romance is a Herculean task!... I envy you... It looks like romantic scenes and deep emotions are cakewalk for you...

Looking forward to your unres..

Love,
Dyuti

Dear Dyuti,

My boss and our boss (the one we both report to😆😆) are actually quite nice - it is just that sometimes work sometimes piles up (so when we have multiple audits going on, it is more or less the same data but different formats and analysis). Should ease off now, hopefully.

Now for the much delayed comments.

I loved the brother sister conversation, not that I did not like the SwaSan interaction. But brother and sisters are something else, I have a younger brother but then his reaction would be quite the same - that worry about the sister spilling over to anger and then settling down to labelling themselves a failure to protect their sisters. In this case with Sargam being the elder brother, all those feelings would be intensified. So Sanskaar does deserve a pat on his back, he indeed made Swara very happy. Now maybe they can concentrate on making each other happy in the other manner too😉😉

This update was a break - for all of us, at least did not worry so much, for things appeared to be looking up, as Swara and Sanskaar both seemed to relax a little on reaching civilisation. And I loved hearing Sanskaar's parents had a love story - quite a "fired" one right - no wonder Sunny boy is the way he is😆 bright and fiery. And recounting his parents' story, Swara dreams of wanting one and Sunny replies quite correctly," her (their) story could be more magical if only she wants it." But then both are hesitant about the other, though they do make some progress, admitting to themselves about their feelings (that was a lovely line - was it her desire to wear them as her identity and not as a disguise?" Sanskaar is worried about her name being too long once they get married - okay he is quite gone😳

Laksh is one Badass - but then he would not be where he is without the spies planted everywhere. So he has learnt about where Swara and Sanskaar and plans to come with guns blazing. Meanwhile our golden couple are slowly realising that the other is not as immune or disinclined as they assumed.

One moment of shared bliss - they will need that memory when the storm hits them, right?

I know it would be a happy ending (it will, right - I hate love stories with unhappy endings - I throw massive ugly tantrums, which are quite bad to see) but I am scared. Please do not hurt them much.

love,

Nyna

PS - regarding emotional scenes, as long it is words, I can write but romantic action scenes😳 I am very nervous (I took almost a week to write my first kissing scene, which was around three or four lines😆😆😆) gets easier as you write, so do not worry.

I have read your comment for FM - will get back to that, soon.

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