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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Res 😈😉

Un res most probably on Saturday, Saku dear. 🤗



Saku dearest 🤗🤗


I am really feeling terrible about the number of days it's taken for me to unres. Several commitments at work and home, and then the rush of inspiration for OS's which struck me last week, left me with rather less time than I would have liked. 😕

But here I am, to tell you how much I loved the chapter. Hope you will bear with my tardiness.

This chapter was a trilogy of 3 electrically charged, compulsive scenes, just filling me with such adrenaline, and an eagerness to have more of the story.

The first one...the confrontation between Pratula and Suvanna , over the fact that she claims to have brought him a prized weapon...the young prince of the vajras . ...our own gambolling lamb Lakshya 😕 So has Suvanna subsumed Ragini into her own self? Or is it the reverse, has she subsumed herself/ assumed control over Ragini's body? If they still exist as 2 physical beings with a shared consciousness, Suvanna able to sense what Ragu is thinking and influence her...where is Ragini now (physically I mean).

Pratula is in running, along with Shekar in the serial, for being the worst father in the universe. So much hatred and contempt . ...and the relationship between him and Suvanna is so dysfunctional. Suvanna too, I think, while she was earlier motivated by the desperate desire to earn her father's love and approval; now feels disdain and hatred for her father. It's a complicated, primeval emotion. She now seems to be driven by the desire to vindicate herself, an ego tussle almost, with her coldly contemptuous , horribly callous father.

So lucky is so much under her control, he even suits his wrist. Would have cut his throat had she asked. 😕🤢 So that is how he would become a weapon against Yuvraaj Sanskaar 😡🤢


The next amazing scene was between an injured Sanskaar and a concerned, quasi resentful Swara having a sort of heart versus mind, training versus instinct battle, was awesome !!! 👏👏


So Sanskaar cannot think of her impersonally as "the eye" anymore. 😊😉 She has a definite identity in his eyes...he cannot but help feel concern, affection, loyalty and a considerable attraction and involvement towards Swara. And she...she cannot but help feel pulled towards him, despite all of Mohan's training. Sanskaar himself wants her to leave, asks Agni to take her to the Naga camp. But Swara refuses to leave. 😊 She pretends to decline owing to her feeling that the arrangement is a ruse. 😆 But it's very clear she's declining because she wants to be by his side. 😉😳

So the Vajra city has closed its doors to them? By whose orders? How did Annapurna and Aryaman manage to stage that coup? Wonder how they brainwashed and influenced the loyal ministers of the governing council?

Sanskaar is hurt...and the bullet seems to have spread some kind of toxin that is affecting and curtailing his powers. Drat that Rishi Agarwal !!! Hunting elves . ...I hope he gets his just desserts!!

I loved that Swara recognizes all the tantalizing, soothing, beautiful dreams she had with the handsome green eyed stranger...whom she now knows to be the Yuvraaj Sanskaar. Who is the enigmatic S Maheshwari, who was so concerned and protective of her. Nice beginning to the Eye and the Oneiro opening up to each other and slowly coming together.

The last scene...I presume Swara could see/ sense that meeting between Rishi and that mysterious woman? There seems to be a plot between the two of them, a most conniving and machiavellian one. 🤢😡 Is this woman Annapurna? She seems to say that Rishi is a long term associate of hers, and removed a person from the scene, who threatened her position. So does that mean Shomi? Annapurna resented/ hated Shomi for some reason? Does Mohan know about this?

God how I hate Rishi. He, Pratula and Shekar of the serial. All are worthless dads . 😕🤢

Swara could see this conversation happening in her trance...but then someone sees or senses them? The one who remarks in the end. Trouble ahead, I guess. 😲

Waiting for the next chapter 😊🤗

Love you loads

Viji


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Posted: 8 years ago
Saku when will you be updating
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum



Saku dearest 🤗🤗


I am really feeling terrible about the number of days it's taken for me to unres. Several commitments at work and home, and then the rush of inspiration for OS's which struck me last week, left me with rather less time than I would have liked. 😕

But here I am, to tell you how much I loved the chapter. Hope you will bear with my tardiness.

This chapter was a trilogy of 3 electrically charged, compulsive scenes, just filling me with such adrenaline, and an eagerness to have more of the story.

The first one...the confrontation between Pratula and Suvanna , over the fact that she claims to have brought him a prized weapon...the young prince of the vajras . ...our own gambolling lamb Lakshya 😕 So has Suvanna subsumed Ragini into her own self? Or is it the reverse, has she subsumed herself/ assumed control over Ragini's body? If they still exist as 2 physical beings with a shared consciousness, Suvanna able to sense what Ragu is thinking and influence her...where is Ragini now (physically I mean).

Pratula is in running, along with Shekar in the serial, for being the worst father in the universe. So much hatred and contempt . ...and the relationship between him and Suvanna is so dysfunctional. Suvanna too, I think, while she was earlier motivated by the desperate desire to earn her father's love and approval; now feels disdain and hatred for her father. It's a complicated, primeval emotion. She now seems to be driven by the desire to vindicate herself, an ego tussle almost, with her coldly contemptuous , horribly callous father.

So lucky is so much under her control, he even suits his wrist. Would have cut his throat had she asked. 😕🤢 So that is how he would become a weapon against Yuvraaj Sanskaar 😡🤢


The next amazing scene was between an injured Sanskaar and a concerned, quasi resentful Swara having a sort of heart versus mind, training versus instinct battle, was awesome !!! 👏👏


So Sanskaar cannot think of her impersonally as "the eye" anymore. 😊😉 She has a definite identity in his eyes...he cannot but help feel concern, affection, loyalty and a considerable attraction and involvement towards Swara. And she...she cannot but help feel pulled towards him, despite all of Mohan's training. Sanskaar himself wants her to leave, asks Agni to take her to the Naga camp. But Swara refuses to leave. 😊 She pretends to decline owing to her feeling that the arrangement is a ruse. 😆 But it's very clear she's declining because she wants to be by his side. 😉😳

So the Vajra city has closed its doors to them? By whose orders? How did Annapurna and Aryaman manage to stage that coup? Wonder how they brainwashed and influenced the loyal ministers of the governing council?

Sanskaar is hurt...and the bullet seems to have spread some kind of toxin that is affecting and curtailing his powers. Drat that Rishi Agarwal !!! Hunting elves . ...I hope he gets his just desserts!!

I loved that Swara recognizes all the tantalizing, soothing, beautiful dreams she had with the handsome green eyed stranger...whom she now knows to be the Yuvraaj Sanskaar. Who is the enigmatic S Maheshwari, who was so concerned and protective of her. Nice beginning to the Eye and the Oneiro opening up to each other and slowly coming together.

The last scene...I presume Swara could see/ sense that meeting between Rishi and that mysterious woman? There seems to be a plot between the two of them, a most conniving and machiavellian one. 🤢😡 Is this woman Annapurna? She seems to say that Rishi is a long term associate of hers, and removed a person from the scene, who threatened her position. So does that mean Shomi? Annapurna resented/ hated Shomi for some reason? Does Mohan know about this?

God how I hate Rishi. He, Pratula and Shekar of the serial. All are worthless dads . 😕🤢

Swara could see this conversation happening in her trance...but then someone sees or senses them? The one who remarks in the end. Trouble ahead, I guess. 😲

Waiting for the next chapter 😊🤗

Love you loads

Viji


Viji my dearest 🤗🤗
In times like these when I'm away from home, with a dead computer and nothing but a mobile to manage my writing from plus a very very irksome network; comments as loving and motivating as yours work as elixir. I hate typing from phone but have no choice of the matter hance will apologise in advance for typos.
You know I originally had the idea of an elven trilogy where thus section would be a separate story to tell. You know the tale of the abandoned prince and the princess Lucky and Suvanna. I have merged it all into one and reduced them to a track running parallel to the eye and the Oneiro love saga. So yes, Pratula and Suvanna stand tall here don't they? I agree about the worst father thing, there is nothing annoying me more than the onscreen Shekar.
Suvanna hasn't still given up on getting her father's acceptance only her method has changed. She has it all planned out you'll see in the next chapters. But I am uncertain how successful those plans would be.

The next candidate for worst father cup Rishi is very much in cahoots with AP. you were right as usual in spotting the lady in the shadows. It means several things for one I'm feeling generous enough to admit that the earlier obstacle Rishi helped in getting rid of was indeed Swara's mom; who is Arya BTW Shomi is Ragini's mom here. 😊
After all we did know the man's love for Arya was far from genuine so this gives some insight to that aspect. Sanskar was shot with a lead bullet. The metal previously killed Kavita if you recall our earlier chapters.

Coming to SwaSan lot in the barren lands of Asanikshestra theit love is slow burning. The feelings take so long to properly etch themselves. Knowing how you're the master of romance in this ship the fact that you loved it is enough to send me packed and ready to moon and above.

Swara did get a vision of the conspiracy and although it was AP who closed the gates she and her brother haven't yet managed to convince the ministers. what she did was temporary and she did it under the misconception that Sanskar would die shortly after.

I have a new entry in the next. He won't be the big bad guy as it is the case with every new entry on the show. This one will reveal things we were desperately digging for.

Now when I reread this reply I feel with your sugary words you have made me high enough to spill mist of the beans. The rest with the last straws of control I keep to myself. If you're free do some between the line reading...There are treasures hidden among most innocent of lines. 😉

Loads of love ,
Saku
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: SwathyS

Saku when will you be updating

Before the end of this week Swathy dearest I'm terribly sorry for the long wait in between.
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Unres on page 16 Saku dear

Thanks Nita! The comment had been a mood fixer so to speak. Love you for that 🤗❤️
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Viji my dearest 🤗🤗
In times like these when I'm away from home, with a dead computer and nothing but a mobile to manage my writing from plus a very very irksome network; comments as loving and motivating as yours work as elixir. I hate typing from phone but have no choice of the matter hance will apologise in advance for typos.
You know I originally had the idea of an elven trilogy where thus section would be a separate story to tell. You know the tale of the abandoned prince and the princess Lucky and Suvanna. I have merged it all into one and reduced them to a track running parallel to the eye and the Oneiro love saga. So yes, Pratula and Suvanna stand tall here don't they? I agree about the worst father thing, there is nothing annoying me more than the onscreen Shekar.
Suvanna hasn't still given up on getting her father's acceptance only her method has changed. She has it all planned out you'll see in the next chapters. But I am uncertain how successful those plans would be.

The next candidate for worst father cup Rishi is very much in cahoots with AP. you were right as usual in spotting the lady in the shadows. It means several things for one I'm feeling generous enough to admit that the earlier obstacle Rishi helped in getting rid of was indeed Swara's mom; who is Arya BTW Shomi is Ragini's mom here. 😊
After all we did know the man's love for Arya was far from genuine so this gives some insight to that aspect. Sanskar was shot with a lead bullet. The metal previously killed Kavita if you recall our earlier chapters.

Coming to SwaSan lot in the barren lands of Asanikshestra theit love is slow burning. The feelings take so long to properly etch themselves. Knowing how you're the master of romance in this ship the fact that you loved it is enough to send me packed and ready to moon and above.

Swara did get a vision of the conspiracy and although it was AP who closed the gates she and her brother haven't yet managed to convince the ministers. what she did was temporary and she did it under the misconception that Sanskar would die shortly after.

I have a new entry in the next. He won't be the big bad guy as it is the case with every new entry on the show. This one will reveal things we were desperately digging for.

Now when I reread this reply I feel with your sugary words you have made me high enough to spill mist of the beans. The rest with the last straws of control I keep to myself. If you're free do some between the line reading...There are treasures hidden among most innocent of lines. 😉

Loads of love ,
Saku


Yikes ...I know, I meant Arya as Swara's mom. 😳😕 Fell into the track of calling her Shomi by force of habit.

I remember we have this discussion earlier, I was asking you about Annapurna having a dislike towards Arya...and now you've explained it. Will pester you for more details as to why she hated her. Arya didn't show any interest in Ram apart from their friendship...so I guess the fact that Ram and Arya were initially intended could not be the reason? Was it Mohan's affections? Did Annapurna have a fancy for Mohan before she was wed to Ram? Oh the possibilities. 😆 Or is it all down to power. ...Annapurna wanted absolute power over the realms and she felt Arya could stand in the way?

Let me know 😊

Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Res.. I am sorry I got one more unres pending

Unres:


Hi Saku,


I got more res pending and i can never get to it unless i club them as one for now..So i give the comment for Chapter 17 as an whole here..



I need not say it but i really loved Chapter 17... Each chapter later i am get more addicted to this story.. For once i wish i can get into your mind and read this story like now 😆..But i cant do that as i am normal human..So i wait patiently as i can for you to update chapter 18



Coming to part 1 of Chapter 17..So finally swara makes the connection and i am so happy about that..While i really love their bond formed without her realizing it the vajra prince she hates i am glad she finally knows him too😉... But ofcourse she would try to run away from him ..And not to him now, i get that too.. So Sanskar was hit..And you left it there cruel cliffhanger back then but now i read part 2 i am not grumble about that 😆



And regarding to Pratula and Suvanna their dynamics is really interesting and Lakshyaji is their captive now. I didnt see that coming indeed..Suvanna is indeed got more powerful ...




Now Part 2...So Pratula is scared of his own daughter that makes sense in his twisted mind and his fear came true..Lakshyaji is totally under her spell..Even to the extent of sliting his wrist..Ummm..That doenst spell like an nice twist for SwaSan ....But i loved it ..



And SwaSan scene was so amazing and beautiful that i got no words to express how much i liked it but girl you are really mysterious and now i am more confused about what will happen to everyone ..I hate Rishi ,Shekhar and Anyone who tries to harm Swara .and Sanskar.😡



Eagerly waiting to read Chapter 18 Saku..I know you are busy ..So take your time but just know i am super excited to read next chapter..


With Love

Nita



Hey Nita,
I need not say this again as to how much I love hearing from you. I do agree that Swara knowing who sanskaar really is, can be counted as a plus point. Her ignorance worked more as an opportunity for Sanskar to really see who she is. We can see how beneficial that has been so far.
As for Pratula he is a man of odd logics and beliefs isn't he? Even his father and sister fall prey for such dimwit whims. But there is no denying of Suvanna's power. As for her dynamic with Lakshya and what it means for SwaSan that is a tale of another chapter.
I'm still working on chapter 18 hopefully it won't have to be split into two and will cause less suffering relatively. I am very busy indeed, with university and homesickness coming to play it's worst...I even missed Diwali vacation can you imagine? But it feels nice to have readers as understanding as you are and I shall try to deliver what you hope from me.
THANKS a million once again and an extra hug from me!
Love,
Saku
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Posted: 8 years ago
@Viji,
You sly woman...😈 You're right sis it was not Ram's affections. I don't think Annapurna is much concerned about the king's heart after all. Now Mohan is a different story. There does seem to be an undercurrent of a mild crush gone wrong there...but the bull's eye would be power How and whys are out of bounds as for now but let me say just this. Devi Nanda was not the only person wanting to get the eye for herself...mm did I say too much? I hope not 😛
Meanwhile I missed out on your question about Ragini and Suvanna. The body currently at work is Ragini's while Suvanna is the mind controlling it. She has Ragini suppressed somewhere deep down much like how those spirits do in ghost movies.
Suvanna's body is somewhere out there, you'look know where in the next chapter.
Hint (cause I'm generous 😳) Did you ever wonder why Rishi Agrawal is very mutch alive... La la la...😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
Chapter 18 is updated I hope you enjoy reading it :-)
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Posted: 8 years ago
Res 😈

May not be first to unres 😕 But will be back soonest I can.


Lots of Love,

----Viji

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