SwaSan FF: Forced into Marrying your soulmate(Thread 2 Link on page 1)

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Vini224

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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Superb update Nita.

When Swara was on the phone,like Sanskar, I was also thinking is it Swara's boyfriend .

Hopefully one doesn't make an appearance later.

Oh how and why did they get married ?

Can't wait for your next update.

Your story is just too interesting.

Edited by Vini224 - 9 years ago

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Juanita

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Thanks for the Quick Res Sapna and Vini even before i send the PM ,

Edited by NitaReid - 9 years ago

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Res 😊 I will un res from lappie tomo Nita dear.

Un-Res

Nita, you were a chupa rustom all these days, darling! 😊 Hiding this talent for writing huh? 🤗

Don't feel all unsure about yourself, the prologue and Chap 1 have gone well.

I really liked Sanskaar's thought processes in this chapter---when he saw Swara taking the call, a guy's photo flashing on it (whom he couldn't see properly). He and Swara have got married under the most unusual of circumstances, know literally zilch about each other.

It was funny how he thought it might be her boyfriend, and that he might soon have his newly wedded wife ditch him on their wedding night, after having had his fiance literally leaving him at the shaadi mandap!

But despite that, he was concerned about Swara wanting to go somewhere that late at night---it was 3 am! And he realized that there was a genuine issue---when Swara told him about her sister's impending delivery, he never hesitated a moment before driving her to the hospital. Sanskaar seems to be a thorough gentleman, concerned and empathetic.

It was an example of the wonderful coincidences of this world, that Sanskaar knows Parineeta and Adarsh---Adarsh being his best friend. He has heard Parineeta speak about her younger sister 😊 but never realized this was the Swara he was forced by circumstances to marry.

I liked this deft touch--not at least there is some common ground, well wishers and family of Swara's, who are very well known to Sanskaar as well.

That scene of Sanskaar reassuring his best friend and his own new wife at the hospital, as they awaited the baby's arrival anxiously, was so nice. And that scene of Swara cuddling her tiny nephew, taking him close to Sanskaar too, was super cute!

Looking forward to Chap 2 and finding out exactly how SwaSan got married to each other.

Darling, also, I will be traveling March 3 to 10. Please continue sending me PMs, I shall update my comments as soon as I can. Do bear with some delays in this time period.

Loads of Love,

---Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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sujay kumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Nita it was awesome 👏
Really i loved it
Sanskar's monologue was very well written
Update soon please can't wait

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foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: NitaReid
Thanks for the Quick Res Sapna and Vini even before i send the PM ,

hahaha unres'd it as well

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Nita! I had no idea you were writing a SS! I will read and comment soon! Please bear with me 🤗

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Nita 🤗

I found the start interesting! Yayyy for SwaSan married and the intriguing question of why the other said yes to each other. Thank God Kro went with another crow and flew away at the start only- good riddance. Loved how Swara was wide awake and Sanskaar's attempts to avoid her came to nothing 😉.

Then we get Chapter 1- wow! Liked the way that convo played out! Sanskaar's immediate reaction to thinking she may have a boyfriend somehow came across as something that instinctively he didn't like the thought of, despite of course being totally oblivious to any conscious mind process in that direction. Also his internal monologue of wondering if she married him as he is rich and successful was not quite convincing him. Such have to be very subtly done and I think you managed that very well! And then the twist- wow! So Sanskaar's friend is married to Swara's sister- 👏. Liked how you connected Adarsh and Pari that way and the whole hospital sequence was actually a great ice breaker in the circumstances. The story of what happened to lead to the marriage will presumably unfold now and I look forward to it:)

Lots of love,

Shru x

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jess_27

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Heyy.. Thanks for the fast update and also for PM...

Nice update... I liked sanskar's concern for swara.. And he was on the move to help her even before she asked for help...

But the suspense is killing.. Why did both agree for marriage.. And what is with adarsh..

Waiting for next part.. Update soon..

Love

Jessica

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Sree

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Posted: 9 years ago

#88

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Oh My God!!! Is all I can say right now. Nita🤗 it's freaking good man. And you were worried about it😲

Hey where is the answer to at least one of the questions asked? I hoped you are not taking Sapna as an inspiration😉. One is my limit and it's already filled so please, please don't follow her 😆 Suspense huh... fine I'll wait for next update as I'm let with no other choice😆

Hey just one question, out of curiosity, did Adarsh and Pari ran away from home?

Swasan scenes were too good. I could understand the poor guys dilemma. He was very well seeing the next day headlines😆 I liked the way you said that his voice was already calming her down and he is drawn to hers. Now I guess things will be less awkward for them as he knows her from Pari and she can always ask her didi.

Love

Sree

Oh yes and for this line I should be throwing something at you😆

P,S - I am sorry if it was not upto the mark. All feedbacks and tomatoes are welcome.

Seriously man give yourself some credit. It's REALLY GOOD. TOO GOOD for anyone to believe that it's your First Attempt.⭐️🤗

Sapna no offense but I can't handle two suspense writers at the same time. 😆

Edited by Sree8410 - 9 years ago