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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: Sanya17
hi sakura when will u come back with a new story i am missing u n ur amazing n mindblowing stories so much
plz cm bck soon we all r waiting for ur return with a new story

I'll be posting shortly😊

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: foresight
Unres

firstly lots and lots and lots of 🤗 for writing this. i know i pestered you a bit there. but this first OS itself has been so worth it. thanks SO much for the dedication. love you Saku!

You know i always tell you that you have a way with the words and you always deliver on it. That first part between Sanskar and AP was really emotional and yet understated. In the sense that it said so much more without the uttering the words. The betrayal cutting through him so much that he cannot bear being there anymore. and he understands the guilt she had, but is angry and hurt so much that he makes it clear that she can live with her guilt he isn't going to stay back and maintain the relation to alleviate it in anyway. the harsh blow for the mother who chose wrongly and lost the one who probably cared the most for her even vs her own blood.

then the actual incident. i had imagined that laksh who be scared and he was. but you had show a selfish and sinister side to him. which was always there in your fic but he was always trying to hide and here it is out in the open. the way he chose himself without swara ...his supposed love coming into picture...and then the way he was going off to sleep as if nothing happened. he was he tried to fight the case and then the car surveillance should have made it clear, but this one took it to another level.

finally the mother wants to do the right thing and hardens herself to do it her way without allowing anyone to dissuade her. that might have probably been the first time she did something like that and the dilemma and her choice is beautifully shown and finally the mothers heart which yearns to see her son and hopefully help heal the one who deserved it.

waiting for the rest of your OS

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Hey Sapna 🤗🤗

No, no dear, you just inspired me to write it and indeed it was much needed to make Icarus complete in every sense so thanks a lot!

I wanted something deep yet subtle here, if you know what I mean, and I hope I had managed it. Yes, Sanskar was broken then and he did not hesitate in breaking Annapurna in turn, it was the roughest blow he could deliver and went to the exact target.

As for Lakshya I could not reveal what a monster he really was back in the SS, as I had to maintain the suspense till the very end. I hope this makes up for it.

I'm so glad it met with your expectations from the series. Thank you once more for the lovely words dear.

I will be posting another soon😊

love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: .FairyDust.
Eeeks!
Icarus Spinoff!
RES

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Saku! 🤗 So good to see you back and so soon!
And AHH Icarus Spin off! Icarus is my second favorite after the Winter series and I'm so happy you came up with this! ❤️
The quotes you've added are so lovely and perfect 👏. So the first one is mainly about Annapurna. I'm so glad you started with her as she's my favorite in Icarus, after SK of course ⭐️. I just loved her there! I liked the FBs you gave us of SK leaving her...and how you described her inner turmoil. And I even liked the Laksh part, surprisingly I could see where he is coming from, after all what else can we expect from him? 😊
And god I hate this DP so much, such a terribly selfish man.🥱 I'm glad Annapurna finally realized what he is and acted in time.
You did a great job in bringing out her emotions and perspective here Saku, I love this Annapurna!👏 I love her bond with Sanskaar ❤️👏
And oh oh you included the part where she calls Singh and asks him to get SK to Kolkata, To Swara, to his Peace! I'll never forget that conversation between Sanskaar and Annapurna at the end of Icarus as I was so in Awe with it! And I love how you started Calypso from where you ended Icarus, it makes it more perfect and poignant even ❤️

Great start Saku, looking forward to more!

And oh in answer to your reply to my comment in Frost Knight thread, I'm so happy you considered my little request regarding The Spring and the little prince Maheshwari! I hope we get it in the future, can't wait 😳

Lots of Love,
Yukthi.

Yukthi 🤗

Dear lord, what a lovely comment and such excitement! Thank you thank you so much😳

I wanted to start with Annapuran as she deserve this chance to explain more about herself. She was a very deep root back there, yet didn't get much space so I had to start with her.

I'm glad you understood Lakshya. I thought a lot about how best to put forth his POV, glad it worked.

And yeah, DP is vile here. It was good that at least Annapurna came to her senses.

Yes Icarus ends and Calypso begins, sounds poetical when you put it like that. Thank you so much dear!

Ah, about Frost Knight discussion, I am working on a spin off, it would take time, but I will surely post that in future.

love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#54

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Res 😈 😊

My patronus went to Mrs McGonaggal and transfigured from Kangaroo to Peregrine. 😉

Un--Res

Wow Saku...Such a psychologically powerful portrayal of Ragini--and of Lakshya and Swara, too.

You put that so wonderfully: Evil and hatred do not arrive abruptly. They grow out of the gradual dimming of the light, as the brightness and transparency of day give way to the dark hues of a stygian night.

Ragini knew very well what she was doing was a vile, despicable sin...and she still feels, that given an opportunity to go back and re examine the blatantly false evidence she gave, damning her own sister, she would do the same thing all over again.

The Ragini on the show is being shown as completely cuckoo in a sense---so delusional that she is practically paranoid schizophrenic. But the one here, has no such mental/ emotional disturbances. She is cold and clear about what she wants, even recognizes this evil, contemptible person she has turned into. But she still feels she has no choice, but to consign her sister to a literal hell on earth.

Those memories Ragini lets her mind revisit, in her darkened room, were so powerful. It showed how even as a child, that canker of jealousy and vindictive hate had clouded her intellect, her emotions again and again, until she lacked the will and the power to turn to the light, to goodness again.

First, when she feels her sitar recital has been upstaged by Swara's wonderful singing. When Swara garners all the accolades, Ragini was able to curtail her jealousy with difficulty by playing her sitar through the night, her fingers bloodied and cut by the intense negativity of her emotions. One is supposed to play with humility, with devotion, with a total suppression of one's ego. But for Ragini, her playing was directed towards the satisfaction of her ego. She played to get the praise and accolades, didn't she? Never thought of playing for the sheer love of music, for the sheer heart wrenching, soul enriching beauty of what music actually conveys. Sad...

And then, when she saw her Sister being the popular one with their friends, again the canker of jealousy reared its ugly head. She suppressed it with difficulty again, but she was no longer the same Ragini she was before.

Lakshya's affections being directed towards Swara was just the last straw for an already enfeebled conscience...The sad part about Ragini is, here, Lakshya never even gave her hopes by getting engaged to her prior to his "love" for Swara. He was Swara's friend first of all, and Ragini had only come to know him through that bond. Ragini developed a strong infatuation for him, which she deemed to be love.

I do not even want to dignify it by calling it true love, for she seems to be happy at the thought of having Lakshya in her power, caught in her grasp at last, when she gives the false testimony that would save him. She feels so satisfied at the thought that he would be bound to her for life, with this monstrous deceit she is going to unfold. 🤢 There is no way such a poisonous, covetous emotion can be termed love. Toxic love, perhaps!

And true to form, she had the fall coming for her as well, even before Sanskaar ripped apart the mask from both Lakshya's and her shenanigans. She realizes that Lakshya is a shallow, empty character. Ragini thought he was carrying the burden of guilt around. She felt fiercely protective and possessive, that he should not spend any more time pitying or being concerned about her sister's fate. But she realized it was hatred and vendetta he was carrying around, not any sense of remorse. Ugh! What a pair! They completely deserve each other!

The closing scene, Ragini's meeting with Swara was so profound in its delineation of Swara's frame of mind. She knows very well she didn't stab Vansh. But she is overpowered by the sheer hatred, the bitterness in Ragini's diatribe. Ragini played the "you are unwanted in our family" card maliciously well, didn't she? All those harsh words about how Swara always causes pain and discord wherever she goes---a hint at Shomi and Shekar's strained relationship, I guess. She played her cards well enough for a dejected and dispirited Swara to almost throw in the towel and accept guilt for a crime she never committed----Until her Knight in Shining Armor, SK flew in as Icarus did---with a much better set of functional wings!

I get now, what SK meant when he told Ragini that the Maheshwaris had got her as a bride, in a perfect imitation of what Annapurna was to Durga Prasad. A person who would blindly worship at the altar of their husband's supposed goodness, even at the cost of casting other relationships by the wayside, betraying the trust of other cherished bonds. But I do think he erred a bit there though. Annapurna made a bad choice, she betrayed the son of her heart. But I do not think she carried such darkness, such vile jealousy, a desire to hurt, in her mind as Ragini did.

Really loved it, Saku. Waiting for more!

Love,

---Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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Prabhleen Arora

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Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Super - Duper Amazing
Mind Blowing Update
Wow so this is what happened with Swara
I love Icarus but this Amazing
Post Next Part Super Soon
Thanks for the PM

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res 😈 😊
My patronus went to Mrs McGonaggal and transfigured from Kangaroo to Peregrine. 😉

That makes us sisters in another sense I guess, my patronus is a swan, both birds at least😉

Love your evil smile😳

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: 7APK
Super - Duper Amazing
Mind Blowing Update
Wow so this is what happened with Swara
I love Icarus but this Amazing
Post Next Part Super Soon
Thanks for the PM

Thank you very much😊

I'm so glad you found it amazing, I read your comment on Icarus too, but didn't have time to reply there. This will clear the doubts left in Icarus I hope once all the four parts are done. You're welcome about the PM, I will update again as soon as I can.😊

Sakura

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foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#59

beautiful put. i loved the way you portrayed all three of them in this one. the insights into this ragini, her insecurities, hatred love and fear of hatred, all amazingly portrayed. i saw some glimpses of the AP from the last chapter in her when she found the reality of laksh. AP's god too had feet of clay. it took her a while to realise that, wake up and do the right think, ragini isn't like that. she had reason to withhold the info until sanskar expertly wiggles it out of her tricking her, the only way it would have worked.

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#60

Dear Sakura,

Brilliant OS - you brought out Ragini's transformation so beautifully - it is so true - one does not become evil in an instant - there are numerous moments that over time gradually erode the goodness within oneself. And after sometime, there is no way of "knowing if the person who we think we are is at the core of our being. Are you a decent girl with the potential to someday become an evil monster, or are you an evil monster that thinks it's a decent girl?" (- Derek Landy, Death Bringer)

Ragini had drunk so deep of the poison that she cannot even feel a momentary pang of remorse, in fact she is sure that if asked she would do it all over again, without hesistation. And yet, she was taken aback when Swara asked "do you hate me so much?" And how ruthlessly she manipulated Swara. Superb backstory.👏

Nyna

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