SwaSan TS: Karna Parva---Day 17-- COMPLETED

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Vianna

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Viji :)

Annapurna stole the show! I loved the way you started this part. Beautiful description of how a house turns into a happy home or sad home depending on persons living within. Sujata's ramblings cracked me up! 😛

Coming back to Annapurna, I loved your portrayal of her. The way she tackled her husband's infidelity was really very well written. The emotions she went through. My God, she is one strong woman. That must have seriously taken some measure of courage on her part. She still held on to her love for him and even though he breached marriage vows she did not go ahead and confront him, even in private. Oh that really takes a lot of courage! This was a definite highlight for me. Lets not forget the way she threw Ragini and her Dadi out of the house 😆 Bulls-eye! Someone should have told the CVs to use their heads in this fashion!

The SwaSan vacation/honeymoon ❤️ I love a flirty and teasing Sanskaar. Damn cute!

In short, a pretty awesome end to an awesome TS. I am really looking forward to the parenting OS you are planning. 😊 Keep writing! :)

-V

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#122

Originally posted by: Meself
Tonight is the night! i will be here...come what may!! #AkhandPratigya(part one) !!🤣

😆 😆 Ok, shall be waiting. 😉

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soapbubble

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Oh, nice grand ending and Annapurna Maheshwari carries the day!!

DP was the Kunti here - demanding an unfair sacrifice and AP restoring him and the family to full honour.

And you describe her feelings perfectly! Isn't Shalini a regal woman? She's great to pin this backstory to.

Thank you!

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: soapbubble
Oh, nice grand ending and Annapurna Maheshwari carries the day!!
DP was the Kunti here - demanding an unfair sacrifice and AP restoring him and the family to full honour.

And you describe her feelings perfectly! Isn't Shalini a regal woman? She's great to pin this backstory to.

Thank you!

Hey Bubble...🤗 🤗

Thanks so very, very much. Yes, I wanted to show Annapurna refusing to continue her role as Gandhari, deciding it was time she stopped shutting her eyes to the truth. And she doesn't want to be Kunti either, demanding an unfair sacrifice from one son to protect the others.

Shalini really is an extremely regal woman, has an aura around her.

Very glad you liked this.

Cheers,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: bwvianna
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Viji :)

Annapurna stole the show! I loved the way you started this part. Beautiful description of how a house turns into a happy home or sad home depending on persons living within. Sujata's ramblings cracked me up! 😛

Coming back to Annapurna, I loved your portrayal of her. The way she tackled her husband's infidelity was really very well written. The emotions she went through. My God, she is one strong woman. That must have seriously taken some measure of courage on her part. She still held on to her love for him and even though he breached marriage vows she did not go ahead and confront him, even in private. Oh that really takes a lot of courage! This was a definite highlight for me. Lets not forget the way she threw Ragini and her Dadi out of the house 😆 Bulls-eye! Someone should have told the CVs to use their heads in this fashion!

The SwaSan vacation/honeymoon ❤️ I love a flirty and teasing Sanskaar. Damn cute!

In short, a pretty awesome end to an awesome TS. I am really looking forward to the parenting OS you are planning. 😊 Keep writing! :)

-V

Hey Vrinda...

Thanks a ton, dear. That means a lot. Am so very happy to hear that you liked this one.

That's true about a home isn't it...it can be constructed as spacious, grand and fabulous as you like. But in the end, whether the vibes in the home are pleasant, or unpleasant, depends on the people living within it.

I wanted to show Annapurna as possessing that inner core of steel, that strength of character. I think of her as a very courageous and resolute person, indeed. She decides to forgive her husband, but not forget. So she keeps an eye on him 😊, but she is truly so much in love with him, that she doesn't want to see him shamed before anyone, even herself.

I loved writing about the way she throws Dadi and Ragini out. 😆 Of course, Swara has a role to play here as well, convincing Dadi that there really is no escape route, she herself will support Annapurna to make sure of that. Am very happy you liked that bit.

Of all the comments I've got so far, you were the first to remark on my portrayal of Sujata. 🤗 I am so happy you did that, I had inserted that role to have a bit of a laugh at her antics, and it really made my day to hear that it'd cracked you up. 😊

And the SwaSan honeymoon... They need some couple time alone, na? High time, too!! I've been to Maui, its just such a magical place. Its the closest one can get to heaven while still being on Earth. 😊 And SwaSan being together there will make it even more heavenly for them...

Thanks again, V!

I need a chotu sa break to recover from the emotional intensity of this OS series. As I was mentioning in reply to another comment, I was feeling all emotional after I posted it. I know it sounds silly, 😳 but I had literally lived this story for the past 18 to 20 days and somehow felt all teary after completing it. What to do, when one falls so much in love with SwaSan, then one gets emotional about the fics one writes! 😆

But I will definitely try to write that parenting wala OS (anyway its a light hearted one) by this Friday/ Saturday.

Love,

----Viji

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isha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#126

hei
I was waiting for this since long.
i was thinking this part will b amazing but now I think saying that much will be less...very less...
it is indeed a masterpiece
beautifully sketched
the parallel drawn bw Mahabharata and swasan life is a treat to read
now waiting for your new works

a request for u if u HV tym then do write a os or ts for current scenario ie marriage and some lyght twists aid ur touch.

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khushi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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A truly amazing story! I have always loved the way you write.

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: ishanita
hei
I was waiting for this since long.
i was thinking this part will b amazing but now I think saying that much will be less...very less...
it is indeed a masterpiece
beautifully sketched
the parallel drawn bw Mahabharata and swasan life is a treat to read
now waiting for your new works

a request for u if u HV tym then do write a os or ts for current scenario ie marriage and some lyght twists aid ur touch.

Hey Ishanita...🤗 🤗

Thanks so very much for those wonderfully warm words.

I am seriously so happy that you loved this so much.

I am planning a light hearted OS, but might not be linked to the current track exactly. Let me sort the idea out in my head, and I might try to post it by Friday or Saturday.

Love,

----Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: khushi_shankar
A truly amazing story! I have always loved the way you write.

Thanks so very much. 🤗 Glad you liked it a lot.

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Mansi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#130

Viji it was just mind blowing

I had a kind of feeling that Annapurna will be aware of the truth

It was just so much magical

I love your grasp on the different characters of Mahabharata and the way you spin them and compare them to Maheshwari clan

I know Lakshya is the pampered child but seeing the reason from the point of DP and AP it is justified as they think he is the one who mended their relationship back

Ram is always sidelined but when you showed Annapurna giving him credit for her mended bond with Durga Prasad it was awesome

Annapurna's transformation from Gandhari to Kunti was just awesome

Ragini is a 🤬..let it be don't want to talk and discuss and spoil my mood

I mean I loved the name Ragini so much I was planning to name my brother's unborn child if girl as Ragini 🤢but now I just hate the name so much that I want my cousin brother to have a boy so I can name him Sanskar😳... Cause Swara I will name my daughter...🤣

Ok lots of bakwas back to the update

Swara giving Dadi and Ragini the ultimate dhamki was just awesome

Epilogue was so cute

Swasan on a honeymoon to Bali and Swara wants to go to Disneyland... Gosh she is such a kid

Loved the whole update

You are a fantastic writer

Write more such stories

I am a big fan of your writing skills...Gosh why I can't write like you and describe each character's emotion nicely...

Thanks for the pm